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Yasmin, this is a great story about deciding to cut off someone who had once been a good

friend. You do a good job of explaining the message of your story, but I would say that in the end when

you mention that women sometimes do not support each other, I would say that people dont, as

this can be true of all genders. You have some great sensory details here, but I would like to see even

more, especially about the wedding. For example, what was the food she missed out on? What did the

bridesmaids dresses look like, etc.? Be sure to proofread carefully, especially for comma splices.

Holly Batty, Apr 3 at 11:47pm