Word Final Draft

by Alf onso Alcala

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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I love this essay, Alf onso! I am extremely happy to
have you in my class this year and am so proud that
you recognize the importance and power of your
own education. I wonder if you don't title this essay
something like "better lif e" and ref rame the essay

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just a little to allow f or showing some of the
experiences you describe with specif ic details and
sensory images. Make us imagine that we were there
when you brought home the two rather than showing
the glimpse of what happened that day. It may be
uncomf ortable f or you, but it will make f or a
powerf ul narrative and give you the chance to work
more f reely in the artistic media of creating a literary
essay. On a related note, do you read f or f un? You
should pick up Alexie's T he Absolutely T rue Diary of
a Part-T ime Indian. Your voice and style remind me
of Alexie's.

4 (let's work on these RDs)

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