Ms. Reisch Class 2 10/26/2016 A_Long Walk To Water Essay Salva and Nya are going through aot to survive to get water and get there needs. Linda Sue Park wrote a book called "A Long Walk To Water” about Salva and Nya, who are two eleven year old kids struggling to meet and their needs. They live in a dangerous land where war and tribal conflict created a dangerous situation. They are both in different time periods, but they both have hard lives. Nya and Salva survived difficult situations by finding clean water, building relationships with other and being brave. Nya sister went through a lot to find clean water to help them survive. Nydsbother got sick from the dirty water then his uncle was a doctor and he went to him and got better but the 2 nurse say to boil the water before you drink it. "Thank you for bringing the water." The man. ee ee smiled “what your name?" 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"Marial was the same age as Salva.” Salva made 2 gerd relationship with Maral on the way to survive, "Unele” He ered out, and the man's arms. Salva ~ @vidU(e has a relationship with his uncle. Salva brave because he had too be brave when uncle die. Nya and Salva are brave on the way of surviving. Salva is brave because when his uncle die he was brave to keep going. " Marial was gone. Uncle was gone too, murdered by those Nuer man right before Salva eyes." Salva brave because Marial die and uncle but he kept going to get to safety, Salva is brave because he keeps going when he love someone but he kept going. "..Nya sat on the floor. She reach out and took her sister hand." Nya was brave to still have hope but she know that her sister have to go to the medicine to get better. That how Salva and Nya survive.Nya and Salva survived difficult situations by finding clean water, building relationship with other and being brave. This topic is important because "On The Way To Long Walk To Water" Nya and Salva went through these factors in difficult situations. Nya and Salva survived a lot difficult situation on the way of surviving and the factor he uses are finding clean water, building relationships with other and being brave. Linda Sue Park wrote the book "A Long Walk To Water” and Salva and Nya struggling to meet there needs and they did meet there needs. 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