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Peer Review
1 The writer uses a lot of strong vocabularies. The story is pretty solid and
interesting too.
Yes, it describes every detail about the scene, the mood of the surrounding,
Naming
A field in his boarding school. It is the main location for the whole story.
Detailing
Field- the biggest field ever in the district which can occupied 2 rugby field, 2
dodge ball court and 1 full size soccer court yet not even a single pitch was
used on that sport day. About 5 meters outside the racetrack, there are 4
Shabbaz- has a big, strapping, tanned body and brown eyes with spectacles
Comparing
5 Paragraph 5. The writer describes every scene of the race without any flaw.
6 Paragraph 3. The writer should describes the scene of having meal with
Shabbaz
7
The writer uses dialogue in first paragraph. His conversation with his coach.
The writer uses dialogue in 3rd paragraph. His conversation with the teacher.
The writer should put dialogue in 3rd paragraph. He can put some dialogues
8 He describes that the loss of the competition is the lowest point in his life.
10 Yes. He starts to build the following of the story well. For improvement, I
think he just need to cut the sentence If I was not destined.United States
11 It is a good ending but it lacks of life significance. Not too neatly, fair
enough.
12 Yes
13 My first race