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Reflection Essay R 1
Reflection Essay R 1
Khatchig Nalbandian
Professor J. Beadle
English 115
December 7, 2017
The scariest moment is always just before you start, after that, things can only get
better (King). Ill admit this first semester was a roller coaster ride for me; trying to balance all
my classes with my work schedule, finding my place at CSUN, making new friends, and
essentially entering adulthood deemed to be quite overwhelming, but I was prepared to take on
the challenge. Out of all my classes, I was most excited for my English115 course. Although
writing was not my strong suit, I knew by taking this course I would learn new skills and
techniques that would only better my writing. Through the skills that I have acquired throughout
the semester, one can see quite a difference between my first essay Project Space, compared to
my second essay, Project Text. By comparing the introduction, the body paragraphs, and the
conclusion for both essays, I can truly say that I have grown as a writer and I owe it all to this
Looking at my introduction for both my essays, one can see obvious differences. In the
beginning of the semester, I had such a difficult time with starting my introduction and coming
up with a thesis statement. I always had the same problem, once I wrote the first sentence, my
mind would completely lose focus and I would essentially add in every piece of information I
would recall onto the paper. This caused my introduction to be unclear, unfocused, and
essentially be filled with unnecessary information. I began to address this problem throughout
the semester and one can see that my second essay is focused more on the topic at hand, whereas
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my first essay brings up multiple ideas without any analysis. Another problem I had with my
introduction was with the grabber. I found it so difficult to try and come up with an opening line
that would automatically captivate my readers, but I slowly became better at it, as the semester
went by. In Project Text, I chose to open my essay with a quote, not only did the quote relate to
the topic at hand, but it allowed readers to think before the essay even started. The quote added
curiosity to the essay and I thought it was a good way to grab their attention. The quote I used
was, Japan learned from the bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki that the tragedy wrought by
nuclear weapons must never be repeated and that humanity and nuclear weapons cannot coexist
(Ikeda). By using this quote, readers automatically knew that this essay had something to do with
nuclear weapons. Whereas, in my first essay, I began with a boring, general statement, which I
believed did not entice my readers at all. There is no stronger bond in the world then friendship,
and I have been able to see both the good and the bad which this bond brings upon people with
my own personal experiences (Nalbandian 1). Even though, I do not think that the opening
sentence was entirely bad, I still think it sounded too general and a little too clich. Other than
the opening sentence, I would sometimes find it difficult to write a thesis statement. Some people
believe the thesis is the most important part of the entire essay because everything you write
about from that point forward must somehow connect back to it. In Project Space, my thesis
statement was not worded in the best way; it did not reflect my argument at all, it was off topic
and was essentially just a brief summary of my entire introduction. Whereas, my thesis in Project
Text was much better: Even though its unfair to compare two movies with a 62-year gap in
between, the two Godzilla movies Gojira and Shin Godzilla drastically changed from one
another due to that time gap (Nalbandian 1). This thesis statement automatically prepared the
readers that I would be comparing two movies together and that I have already chosen a side
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between the two. This thesis statement was a lot more clearer and truly guided my readers
Aside from the introduction, English 115 taught me how to properly organize my ideas
into body paragraphs through an outline, so that all my information would not be all over the
place. The outline deemed to be quite useful because it allowed me to organize all my ideas,
arguments, and counter arguments, before even writing my essay, so all my points would be
organized into one coherent essay. The format of the outline was pretty simple, one would start
by writing their thesis statement and then in numerical order, one would write down their main
topics for each body paragraph. Under each main topic, one would then write their
evidence/support as well as the counterargument. By following the outline, I was able to stay
focused on the topic at hand throughout each paragraph. The only problem was that during my
first essay, Project Space, I never really focused on writing an outline, instead I just went straight
into the essay. This turned out to be a bad idea because my main points for each body paragraph
became very unclear. None of the body paragraphs focused on one specific idea, instead
everything was all mixed together. I did not even put in a proper counterargument and refutation
until the conclusion, but with the help of an outline, I was able to fix these problems with my
second essay, Project Text. Before I started my second essay, I took some time writing the
outline and this deemed to be quite beneficial. My second essay was a lot more organized and
each paragraph focused on one specific main point, unlike my first essay. My first body
paragraphs main point was, From the film Gojira (1954) to Shin Godzilla (2016) it can be
argued that the purpose of Godzillas creation has changed (Nalbandian 1). This topic sentence
clearly shows the reader what this paragraph will be about. I brought in specific evidence to
support this main idea and through my analysis I was able to connect it all back to the thesis,
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which was about the two Godzilla movies and how it has changed. My second paragraphs main
point was essentially focusing on my counterargument, At the same time, it can be argued that
Godzilla as a monster and as an idea hasnt changed drastically from Gojira to Shin Godzilla
(Nalbandian, 2). Unlike my first essay, Project Space which did not have a counter argument at
all. In my second essay, my counterargument was clearly shown in the essay by this paragraph.
In my third body paragraph, I brought in the refutation, which completely shut down the
counterargument, There is no doubt that both Gojira and Shin Godzilla share some similarities,
whether it be the setting, the plot, or the various characters. But after watching both movies one
can see that the differences between the two movies outweigh the similarities (Nalbandian, 3).
This paragraph clearly showed that although, there may have been similarities between the
movie, ultimately there were a lot more differences than anything else. My last body paragraph,
allowed me to give reasoning behind why I think there were so many differences between the
movies. I think this paragraph allowed readers to have more context and essentially understand
the essay a lot better. The paragraph began with, One other simple and agreeable reason that the
two Godzilla movies are different from one another is due to how many years of a difference
there is from when they were created (Nalbandian, 4). This closing body paragraph allowed me
to add in any left-out arguments that I had to offer. Each paragraph focused on one basic idea,
which allowed readers to stay focused. Each body paragraph had a lot of evidence, so I would be
able to actually support my thesis as well. I analyzed each piece of evidence and through that I
was able to clearly state my ideas and connect it back to the thesis which was to show how both
Godzilla movies have changed overtime. My second essay was a lot more organized and clearer
because of the outline and I owe it all to this class for teaching me this method. It allowed me to
construct a meaningful essay because all my ideas were organized into different paragraphs.
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Finally, the conclusion, I believe the conclusion is one of the most important parts of the
entire essay because it is essentially the so what factor. The conclusion not only is supposed to
summarize the essays main points, but also to show readers why this topic was important. In the
beginning of the semester, I thought, I wrote pretty well-thought-out conclusions, but I realized
soon after that, I actually needed to work on my conclusions a lot more. In my first essay, Project
text, instead of summarizing all the main points I had talked about throughout the essay, I
decided to add new arguments, as well as a counterargument, for example, Without my friends,
I wouldnt be the person I am today, there are so many goals I would not have reached without
them supporting me and pushing me each step of the way (Nalbandian, 4). This sentence
completely contradicted my entire essay and I soon realized that this is not how a conclusion
should be. After this essay, I learned through various class assignments and other essays that I
would need to change this way of writing and so I did. In my second essay, Project Text, my
conclusion was written much better. It properly closed my essay by recapping the thesis and
mentioning where I stand on the topic. After watching both Godzilla movies Gojira 1954 and
Shin Godzilla 2016 I strongly believe that the movies have drastically changed from one
another (Nalbandian, 5). This opening sentence for my Project Text conclusion I believe gave
the readers a proper summary of my thesis while at the same time telling them that I believe
I was quite hesitant to take this class at first because I knew I was not the best writer, but
I knew that by taking this class I could only get better at writing. So, I came in with an open
mind and I was ready to take this class head on. I am very grateful to have had the opportunity to
take this Freshman English Composition Course because I have learned about all new writing
skills and techniques that I will be able to use in all my future writing assignments. From my first
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essay Project Space, to my last Project Media, there have been drastic improvements every step
of the way. From the thesis, all the way to the conclusion my essay writing skills have shown
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