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Peer Letter #2
Much of the notes that I took on your essay are based on the qualities that I want for my own
essay and what I seek to improve on. For example, I noticed that there were multiple times that
you wrote in passive voice. I think you should try to cut these excessive words out, as it create a
stronger and concise paragraph. This is a problem for me, as its easier to write in passive voice.
But using passive voice in a critical research essay, such as the one we are working on, it
weakens your statements, thus weakening situated ethos appeal of being a credible writer. The
next point is usage of research. Were pretty much at the same point in our draft where were still
adding in our information and data. I think this is an important step in drafting as the research
really shapes the argument. Another important step you should look over is your transitions and