Cruz-Ventura 1

Antonio Cruz-Ventura

Professor Batty

English 102

December 11, 2017

Reflection Essay 3

In the This Novel Essay, I did many things to try to revise it. The primary error that this Novel

essay had was that I didnt Have clear thesis, it was hard for the reader to read this essay because

there was no purpose to this argument so I decided to change by Adjusting some of my original

thoughts. I added a deeper meaning to what defines a monster. In my original essay, I lack to

explain what made this text monstrous. My thesis was a plot summary of the novel. I change it to

so it feels more like an argument. Some of may paragraphs cover multiple points. So I split them

up. Another problem that my essay had was that I needed to fix some MLA Problems, for

example, some grammar problems. I adjust my work cited page in my original essay my work

cited page was all over the place, it didnt look like a worksite page. I went back an organized it.

I also try to fix my argument by making it more clear to the reader. I change some of my

supporting points. I reorganized so of my Main ideas for my topic sentences, so they make

senses to the reader. My sources didnt make much sense to the reader so I rewrote some so they

could make sense to the audience. The point that I made of trauma was confusing to the

audience. I mainly fix thoughts that didnt make sense to the readers.