First Draft

(One topic)

To Whom It May Concern:

Introduction:​ My name is Wenda Thompson, and I am a student at John Marshall High School. I am writing to
discuss my concerns about the restrooms at my school. First, we often don’t have any toilet paper, most
bathrooms do not have soap, or a bar of soap for the entire restroom, and the doors don’t lock.

Body Paragraph 1:​ Toilet Paper

Body Paragraph 2: ​Soap

Body Paragraph 3: ​Locks for the doors

Conclusion: ​While there are many issues with John Marshall’s restrooms, those issues can be resolved by
-----.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Wenda Thompson
 Second Draft
(Three topics)

To Whom It May Concern:

Introduction: My name is Wenda Thompson, and I am a student at John Marshall High School. I am writing to
discuss my concerns about (three issues at the school or RPS). First, ----, second ---------, and finally -----------.

Issue 1

Issue 2

Issue 3

Conclusion: While there are many issues with John Marshall, those issues can be resolved by -----.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Wenda Thompson