Hernandez 1

Crystal Hernandez

Professor Batty

English 101

29 May 2018

Reflection

In this essay I added more commentary in the first and third paragraphs to explain my

points better. I also fixed some run on sentences, some spelling, and some grammar issues that

were scattered in my essay. I fixed my MLA work cited page and the in text citations. I also

added on to my conclusion to try to make it stronger and related it back to my thesis statement.

Overall I kept the organization of the essay similar to the original just adding more sentences to

explain myself and taking away those that didn’t seem relative. I struggled with this essay the

most because I found it a bit difficult to put my thoughts into coherent sentences that conveyed

my thoughts, but in the end I believe I was able to fix that and get the essay more narrowed

down.