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Ashly Lopez
Professor Batty
English 101
4 June 2018
Ethnographic Reflection
This Ethnographic Essay is about explaining what Los Angeles means to us. And to me,
it means diversity. So my essay is about how much multiculturalism exists in this city. In my
original essay I did not include a counter-argument so that’s something that I fixed when
working on my revised essay. I stated that some people may not see diversity as something good
because of the amount of hate that exists and how people look down upon these cultures that
have immigrated from other countries to this one. Also, I deleted and added some new
paragraphs because some ideas got too repetitive. So I added new ideas that would back up my
thesis statement. In my original essay I had a quote but I didn’t really explain it that much so for
my revised essay I tried to. I also fixed the title of this essay because the original one didn’t make
sense. “La La Land of Diversity” gives the reader a sense that this essay is going to be about
statement again. In my original essay I didn’t have 4 full pages so with adding and deleting some
paragraphs my revised essay is six full pages. Some of my ideas of the movie didn’t connect to
how L.A shows diversity because those ideas were irrelevant. So I kept the ideas of how the film
expressed diversity and some of the flaws the film had. Lastly, I revised my sentences so they