WILLIAM
Criteria Number of points total Students points and
comments
Thesis and Argument 30 25 William, this is a good
{proper location of thesis, paper with a strong thesis and
sustained argument you clearly tie most
throughout paper, paper paragraphs back into one
does not meander from another. However, | would
thesis, paragraphs connect have liked to see more
back to thesis) connegtion between Standard
Oil and Amazon. Also, while
the thesis is not about
anti-trust per se | would have
liked to see you talk more
about anti-trust and why or
why not it connects to
Amazon,
Strength of argument 30 28 The paper uses good
{use of quotes, use of quotes especially ones from
sources, eto) Bazos and there is good
analysis of individual quotes.
Werk on connecting those
ideas back to the thesis of the
paper.
Organization 20 19 the organization is
(Location of paragraphs, generally strong. I would
flow, transitions between suggest you work on having
paragraphs) stronger topic sentences:
which will help to direct the
reader.
Editing (grammar, spelling, | 10 10 very nice job
proper insertion of quotes,
proper formatting, etc)
Citation (proper use of 10 10 good work.
endnotes, proper citation
style, paper formatting of
endnotes, citing when
needed, correct number of
sources)
Total 100 92