Sears 1

Chrystian Sears

Professor Batty

English 28

13 December 2018

Narrative Reflection

The essay before revision was pretty good I made many adjustments to it. A

fellow classmate gave me plenty of notes and helped me revise this essay. For one, my

essay contained too many grammar errors. Many comma splices and words that were

used incorrectly as well. Analysing each sentence slowly with my classmate we corrected

and changed many of my sentence structures by wording them differently, take multiple

sentences out, and also combine a few as well. Taking notes from Professor Batty, I

applied more descriptions about what type of morning it was on my way to Mrs. White’s

office, what the students were doing, what was going at the time I was called to her

office.

My original essay did not have enough supportive information about what it took

to be successful and overcome the obstacle I was faced with. The Another common error

theme in my original essay was the misuse o my quotes. Instead of introducing them I

would start the sentences with them. The quote sandwich idea was key in developing this

essay.