Revision Paragraph 

I first started the revision by correcting all of the spelling errors within. 

There we a lot more than there should have been but I only had a single class 

period to write it. My sentences were also very redundant so I erased a few words 

from some sentences. Lastly there was a lot of filler in my essay because I was 

convinced that my teacher graded on length so I removed useless sentences. I 

have improved on my vocabulary since sophomore year.