Mikaelian !

Alexandria Mikaelian

Professor Batty

English 101

29 May 2019

Reflection

The essay I have revised is on college students struggling with depression. By utilizing

comments made by my professor I was able to revise aspects to better my essay. One of the

problems with my essay was that I did not clearly state a counterargument. By rereading my

essay, I noticed I had written a short idea of my counterargument within one of my paragraphs,

but it was not clearly noticeable. I ended up making a completely new paragraph stating my

counterargument which was the costs of getting programs for college students with depression.

Another area that needed improvement was that I did not clearly state a solution to the problem.

In order to make my idea more clear, I ended up revising my thesis statement clearly stating that

colleges should provide coping programs for students struggling with depression. Another

comment made was on my grammar. I reread my essay and had to adjust some sentences as they

were run ons. I also put commas in places that need be and there were a few spelling errors as

well. After revising my essay, I stepped aside to allow myself to refresh and come back to it.

After some time, I looked at my essay again and noticed there were a few more grammatical

errors. I then had a second pair of eyes, my father, look at my essay. After his approval I

determined it was ready to be sumbitted. Overall, rereading and revising my essay has increased

its overall strength and credibility.