Gonzales 1

Wendy Gonzales

Professor Batty

English 101 T/Th

30 May 2019

Reflection on Revised Essay

The overview of essay one would be I go in many directions and do not really focus on

one solution. I had talked about many solutions and understood that my focus wasn’t clear for

the reader to understand. In essay one there were at least three solution, but I never really went in

depth about how they would serve their purpose and did not end the solution. In essay one I can

tell my solutions were great but messy as well as some sentences were written. Topic sentences

did not go in depth with what I wanted the reader to view. The paragraphs were unorganized and

did not have a smooth transition. In my revised essay I would say it is in a completely different

format in how I wrote the paper. I had a completely changed approach to the revised paper, I

wanted a guideline to closely focus on what the reader should see in the essay. The paper has

many smooth transitions from introducing background information and the quote itself. I

completely cut out the short paragraph’s and the paper feels a little more in depth and there is

longer paragraph. I spent more time trying to really understand what my point was and the

direction I wanted to go with my paper. The revised paper feels like a paper I have had more

practice on. I can truly say this paper is better than essay one in which was not fully developed

ideas and lack of practicing writing papers.