Kevin Risiglione

Professor Batty

English 101

30 May 2019

Fixing the Errors of My Ways

Originally when writing this essay, I thought that I’d discuss how a student goes from

high school to college and the challenge time management becomes in college. I took my

instructors advise to remove this section based off the fact that it does nothing for my essay. It

doesn’t support my thesis and frankly it takes up space. Previously, I had used one and done

athletes in my counter argument. Looking back at it now I wonder how I even managed that,

that’s probably why my instructor was also confused. I readjusted my use of one and done

athletes, they are still important as they are students and they are a current phenomenon in sports

and academics. I compared the urgency of need between these students versus students that work

and or have children and families for which they need to provide. I used the fact that colleges use

student athletes to generate revenue while not using enough of those resources to improve the

education of the young men and women that brought that money in. I explained that this has

been going on for years and that its time to consider the implications of shorting athletes on an

education and what is to happen when they are no longer able to perform at that level. I also

looked into “the zone” as my instructor had previously suggested to me. It helped in my solution

for students finding needing help in class.