MARKING SCHEMES This document was prepared for makers’ reference. It should not be regarded as a set of model answers Candidates and teachers who were not involved in the marking process are advised to interpret its content with care, Paper 1 (Reading) Part A (compulsory section) 10. IL 12. B ZEWASTE — [80] helping the community and protecting the environment (86) j) recycling is/was ~ costly / ineffectual / wastefil [87] ii) (they his opponents / its defenders said that it was unfair to rush to judgment because... + the recycling movement had just begun = they predicted it would flourish asthe industry matured any one reason = the public had not yet learned how to reeyele properly u ‘as the moder recycling movement had only begun afew years earlier, it's effectiveness would nt yet bbe apparent [22] ) F (57 i) NG (66) ii) F [68] wy TT [69] recyclable materials recycled waste [56] lower oil prices prices for these materials) A [2] recycling has been promoted as a goal / indoctrinated in students asa result, people have no idea of the costs and benefits (of recycling) [14] ’) carbon emission(s) [57] ii) recycle plasti(s) [57] iii) difference (48) iy) hot / heated water (24) ¥) coal-derived) (64) B (63) Cc (58) j) (Ahe writer thinks politicians support a zero waste policy because) politicians think / believe they are doing something good / saving tho earth /recyeling is a question of morality [9] i) D [7] A (32) (around) 34% 03) ii) 25% (83) iil) 12) 50% (and higher) [63] vy) 35% [50], 12si) Dsome (75) it) None (84) ii) Ball (79) 15.) medem/welllined landfills [47] ii) capture methane to generate electricity /! relatively litle environmental impact and can generate electricity [30] iii) modem incinerators (51) iv) release few(er) pollutants /! generating clean energy (57) 16. _ While recycling is supposed to protect / help / be good to the environment / reduce pollution / pollutants.. ~ reeyeling operations have their own 7 i the road) / produce (mare) pollaion J mene coe lke extra trucks on ution negative effets = composting facilites (around the country) have inpin amrone reason odors swarming as / defeating saul nh Pros comPlains about nauseting 09) 17, people / workers (in mining industries) may / will lose their jobs /reeycling (may / wil) affect /redu (workers) jobs / income / job opportunities / cause / poe haan rr ead reduction nthe need o manufacture new rods gy] nme (may / wid 18, paper, cardboard (and) aluminum (in soda cans) (al 19. DavidSieina «=F =] ChrisGoodall =D (62) Bill de Blasio B [66] Winston Porter A [53] 20. No, I don’t thinl 's a waste of time because... «it's useful / practical to recycle some materials (such as cardboard / paper / selected metals) ‘because more than 907 ofall greenhouse benefits comes from recycling these few materials line 77) - our landfills ave filling up and less garbage would be sent to landfills - itreduces the need to manufacture new products and we can conserve more resources (lines 71-72)» any one reaton (one potential gain from recycling is) reduced emissions of greenhouse gases (ines 74-75) - people will learn how to recycle properly / develop better recycling habits in the future (ine 10) - we have a moral obligation to recycle / reduce the rubbish we create (lin 41) 0 Yes, I think it is a waste of time because it’s not effective / i's costly / expensive... = it's cheaper to send garbage to landfills (ines 14-15) + trying to turn garbage into gold costs alot more than expected (ines 23-24) ~ to offset the carbon impact of one passenger's round-trip fight you'd have to recycle roughly 40,000 plastic bottles (nes 32-34) «the zero waste goal is very expensive with almost no rea environmental benefit (ines 6-57) = landfills / incinerators offer more / better benefits / advantages (line | 61) «when people recycle materials other than paper, cardboard and aluminum / some materials, only two-tenths of I percent of America’s carbon footprint is saved (lines 79-80) u ‘anyone reason 126a 2. 2B. ‘Yes, think itis a waste of time because it produces more pollution / harm to the environment, ~ by adding more carbon to the atmosphere if you rinse your recyclables (line 40) } + like extra trucks on the road / nauseating odors / swarming rat /defecating seagull) (ins 68.70) [~ "”% ay! " It depends, bee ! {one answer from ‘yes' and one from “no” above] { 09] ! © 76 ' | Part BI (easier section) ‘coming of age /! (about to) move into their /millenials’ prime (spending years) [36] {o sell more to (the) millennials // to improve company sales //t9 help / make a (big) difference to their business [57] 24 25, 26. 27 28, 29. 30. 31, 32, 33, 34, R [30] (as they get older, millennials they will have a) desire to settle down [44] |) (because it/a sharing economy) provides (access to) products without the burden of ownership /! ‘millennials want (access to) products without the burden of ownership /! because ownership isa burden (end they don’t want it)//to reduce the burden of ownership [17] i) (asthe) carfs)/car sharing [46] Cc (60) yt 46) i) F 38] i) 7 (6 4) compare prices in the store / shop online //get/ access product information / reviews / prices in the store/online [61] i) C [48] i) healthier fitter [14] ii) exercise(s) [70] iii) smoke [65] iv) _app(lcations) technology // data / internet! information bal v) sick //ill unhealthy [541 Clicking to buy 5 172) Love and marriage = 4 (83) Education Blank Dict and fitness 6 [x2] ‘Access, not ownership 3 [68] Housing 2 [83] ‘between 1980 and 2000 /) 1980-2000 // 1980 to 2000 Ba) i) (they have) high speed access to information (ftom around the world) [54] fi) _ live in more liberal / free / tolerant societies (than their predecessors could barely have imagined) [52] fii) (more likely to) live longer (than any other generation) [55] (better) nutrition and (mass) education [44] (average scores on intelligence tests have been rising for decades) 12758. 36. 31, 38. 39, 40. 4. 2, 4B. ') (wot enough) employment opportunities // unemployment // difficulty finding job ($7) ii) costofhousing [5] i) Any thee, in cost of education // education has become (0) expensive (that many students rack up heavy debts) (29) | Mer tow(er) lesser) smaller i a tee este a (more) difficult harder / worse! 50% [20] fi) midale(-jincome (richer) (35) B (56 better employment opportunities J more chances of falling in love Z_ more fun things to do (3) (young people) moving to /Tiving in (mega / global / better / international) cities (to date or mary constants yea to move) eras ees (5] > Bo aI ~ tobe feet (more) financially secure // taking more time to be financially secure ~ to study // spending more time in school 7 dy until their mid-208 tayToY i in ‘many young people now study until their mi i) [ - (nd put off having children until their 30s) tree, *| ~ _*0€stablish career // (itis) taking them longer to be established may | - want to put off having children until their 30 // want to form families later // or ‘more choice as to when to have children + fertility treatment allows for later childbirth (& despite improvements infertility treatment, the biological clock has not been reset to ‘accommodate modern working lives // path to adulthood has become longer and more complicated) A Rs) B Ro} 4) countries (around the world) [10] ( young people // millennials// Guest // urged countries) ii) (Countries / leaders / governments) not giving young people / next generation / not working herder to give young people. .a fair shot in life /a right to pursue a life (which all other generations were free to do) i (& to give young people an unfair shot / choice / opportunity) A [aay 128Part B2 (more difficult section) 4s. 46. 4. 48 49. 50. 51 i) iii) iv) ii) iit) (48) (75) (72) [58] child-centred society // adored from infancy (87) ; . (lived an raf relive peace know itl of worlwide confit global terrorism fe) (lived in an) era of relative prosperity strong economy //high economic boom periods (78) oy (they are the children of Baby Boomers) a in the 1960s /(and)1970s / people bom born between 1946-1964 parents in s 8 people bom ig the Baby Boomer gonetn he generation bom before the 19608 19708 [26] (1940s & 1950s) parents of Baby Boomers // (generation) before Baby Boomers // parents of children born between 1946. 1964 / people bor before 1940s / 1946 / WWII [6] (the emergence of) widespread (use of) bint control / growing availability of abortions (ha led to fewer babies beng ‘em people have a choice to have children / parents want children / to be parents / fewer unwanted babies were bom [47] ( birth control) (they) joined / adopted / agreed / accepted / supported / followed / approved (it/ pro-child movement // positive/ supportive [56] (joined the band wagon) ccommunity-minded// interested in ble to) serving / contributing tothe community / society (and its structures) [62] individualistic /self-oriented / narcissistic / less Uikely to care about others’ opinions [65] (© do not care selfish generation me) (¢0) follow / believe / support / obey (the rules / society's conventions) [61] (less likely to are about others’ opinions and to) flaunt / break /not follow / ignore / reject / oppose / challenge (the rules / society's conventions) [59] believe that they will be (both financially and socially) successful // (have) confident expectations // be more confident // may (indeed) live up to their confident expectations [9] ( be both financially and socially successful indeed live up to their confident expectations) unrealistically) (high) expectations of themselves / (high levels of) depression / anxiety /Joneiness / ‘mental illness //be depressed / anxious / lonely —(60] (leave exuberant confidence behind (and suffer depression, anxiety and loneliness) BS changing makeup ofthe (nuclear) family / the family structure has changed [50) take part / participate join /be involved in family discussions and decisions [32] peers i their peer /! equals friends 7) (* a peer-to-peer relationship) maae 1293. 3 SA 5s 56, 51 38. 8 0, Note. i) (the explosion of) tattoos and piercings. [37] ii) Twenge [52] i) workplace care employment paying des! working up the corporat ladder // working wth others (« workplace communication) iv) expect their Views to be valued (from the beginning) // expect advancement to be rapid [30] (« working up the corporate ladder) -v) education // expressing one's opinions / perspective / mind // growing up // asserting one’s autonomy (38) ( Seeking acceptance as equals from other generations /! learning) vi) Twenge [66] (® Windham) 4) Gigital) native(s) (in a society that is dominated by modern technology) [49] (= digital immigrant) i) Gitrefers to) people / children / millennials who did not live through the emergence of technology as adults (I people who have grown up with / using technology /! people born / brought up during the age of technology // they have been familiar with / exposed to technology from an early age [13] * they are more familiar with technology than the previous generation / millennial’s lives are dominated by technology) iil) culture / society / environment that is dominated by technology, the digital world / age of technology // society of modem techn: (& (present / modem) society // modem technology 1! the ted ‘multitasking is no longer considered a distraction / multi-tasking has become more (widely) accepted overtime // attitudes have changed from negative to positive, as multi-tasking was once seen as distractibility [11] (* from positive to negative /! from distractibility to multitasking) (A study by Prensky show that) millennials can stay / spend extended time in sharply focussed activity when playing video games [57] (€* because they can multitask (while playing video games)) (/ the world of technology // ology [19] thnology they use // earth // world) negative / described as distractibility // tosstrive for ambitious goals while learning to deal with / accept / work through disappointment and failure // balance ambitious goals with unrealistic goals // eam to work through sucess and farhue (#8 adults) / te want to succeed but also be prepared for failure / provide themselves with safety nets for failure {18} (* to lear through both success and failure // try to achieve ambitious goals and unrealistic goals) A [62] i) Z The sumame of the author iv) J Theyear ofthe publication [57] ) (Nei) Howe and/& (William) Strauss [57] ii) Twenge [65] t) B (80) mF (a4) E67 YA (62 YD D [89] Figures in square brackets represent the percentage of candidates awarded a point for the item. 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Germany, France 7. next to each other /! easy to communicate (with each other) 8 8 9. language 10. food 11, business links 12. banking 13, fashion design ‘Task 2 (13 marks) 14, 15. 16. 17, 18, 19, 20. 21. 2. 2. 24, 25. 26. 10/ten secondary (school) retired /! senior citizen (do some) research life experience(s) (to offer) knowledge of / know a lot about Hong Kong, ‘enthusiasm for / interest in / enthusiastic about / interested in (other countries”) cultures / cultures (from other countries) any lived / been living in Hong Kong / here for (at least) three years online June 30th // end of June ‘been (already) chosen represent al / different (political) parties 133 tm 65) 135) 5) (ay i 14 09) (5 (65) 4 ry (33) (48) (8) (60) (60 [54] 4) (60) (ol (6) (61 6s eacask (15 marks) started in lower) class (districts) 2. ag, witober on fp. wives gtlffiends not there / were in Europe //came alone to Argentina 50, _ witness the passion (ofa football game) 31. (beef) sandwiches won prizes // best ( beef) sandwiches in world 32, explains game / as you watch //leam from (a legendary ex-) player 33, capital (of Poland) 54, halfof the castle destroyed 435, _ walls taken down building material required 436, sold (mainly) clothes 37. artsand crafts 438, (they're) underground / under the square 39, new factory 40, communists !/ communist government // government in 1949 41, tosee communist architecture / ugly buildings // buildings now tourist attractions ‘Task 4(13 marks) 42, invited into home // made to feel welcome 43, heating on alltime 44, thermal / special winter underwear 45. he thought she needed to be grammatically perfect // she made grammar mistake 46. (at least) was trying to speak (the language) // she was trying her best //it was only a small error 47. because the train took too long / was too slow / stopped at 52 / many stations / arrived too late // the bus was quicker 48. got wrong lif / ended up on a difficult slope 49, had 10 ski down no way down except to ski down 0. fell down again and again /a lot) Sl, frightened ‘negative scared (so didn't ski again) // didn’t want to ski again 52. was giving a talk (about Hong Kong the next morning) 3. called Julia's cousin / farmer / someone nearby $4. he drove them in his tractor Nite Figures in square brackets represent the percentage of candidates awarded a point forthe item. ‘Points within this { Bracket can be in any order. 134 (49) (80] (23) (48) (23) 7 (91 [40] (6) (50) (26) 9) (57 (25) (26) [60] (28) 21 (55] [46] [58] 1 (5) (49) [43] (16) (47) 22)Part BI (easier section) ‘Task 5 (17 marks) ‘Task Completion = 13 marks te to markers: candidates mast place the information inthe correct section tobe awarded ¢ poi — referee Key facts about figures about Jade Islands S.la_ | How big sit 5 5.1b | How many people live there? x S.le_ | How long did it take to build? ” ‘Street design for family safety Pedestrianised strees// No roads or ears /no traffic no vehicle on the street level / 52a | Roads and rail inks underground , 38/6 (Roads and rail links underground’ may appear inthe ‘New and innovative transport solutions’ section) 5.26 | so children can play run around /in the strets/ outdoors ” New and innovative transport solutions 53a | Water taxi boats) (are convenient) 5 5.3b | Monorail (links east and west ends of islands) 5 Convenient location for travel to Hong Kong and overseas 4a | Car or bus to Central only 30 minutes s 5.4b_ | Train to airport only 20 minutes 5 Environmentally friendly home features and their benefits 55a | (All buildings use) solar panels and wind turbines / technologies 6/9 5.5b | so cheaper electricity / big savinys on electricity bills 69 3.5 | Green roofs and baleonies 619 5.54. | keep people / you /us/ buildings coo! in summer 619 = Tnfarmation rom page 3 of the Data File is from the tapescript 135‘ask 5: Language ~3 marks Marks Language Data file manipulation 3 Generally successful in adapting phrases rom the Data File to - sentences through: word formation cl ‘create grammatically correct, Own comet + tense changes, pronoun changes etc, ‘© Question formation generally accurate, ‘* Comprehensible throughout, © Spelling is accurate, Data file manipulation Generally successful in adapting phrases from the i tae changes, promo chert Bhrses om the Data File hough: word formation changes, ‘Own Language ‘+ Question formation may contain errors but they are clearly quest ‘+ Enrors do not generally affect comprehension. vee ‘Spelling is generally accurate, Data file manipulation Generally successful in isolating relevant phrases from the Data File forthe text. ‘Own Language Some attempt at question formation. + Simple phrases are generally accurate. ‘© Grammatical errors sometimes affect understanding, ‘© Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not. + Muhiple errors throughout, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding impossible. OR ‘+ Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘I’, possibly due to the candidate copying everything verbatim from the Data File. ‘Task 5: Appropriaey ~ 1 mark [Marks ‘Appropriacy 1 | Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and own language ‘©The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task. 0 | + “Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an appropriate text . : . jtten a text which is characterised by having copied chunks of the Data File Pen nae et ve de impression ote Weer on text wren fo the ek Key Appropriacy areas inelude (but are not limited to): + Itisa sales brochure, The purpose is therefore to inform and to promote, ‘The intended audience is prospective customers. 136Task 6 (19 marks) Task Completion = 10 marks DF page reference 6.1 | Subject line 62. | Youhave won the Home Viewing Day competition la Dates and times 63a | On 18th June 2 6.3b | Meet ouside the Marciffe Hotel (in Central) at 12 noon for bus (to the Jade Islands) 8 Buffet details and home viewing 64a | (Buffet lunch) at Yellow Dragon Restaurant 7 6.40 | 1.00pm i 6.4c | Wester and Chinese food buffet 7 6.44 | with (te glass of) wine 1 6c | Viewing in Show Home from 3,00~ 5.00 pm 1 6.4¢ | Drop off 6:15pm at Marliffe Hotel be back at Marcliffe Hotel at 6:15pm 8 4 The subject line may vary but generally there are three acceptable types. One that mentions: ‘The Jade Islands (Home Viewing Day) competition; Details ofthe Home Viewing Day; ot Winner ofthe Home Viewing Day competition 137-pask 6: Language ~ 5 marks Marks Is | Language Data File Manipulation Generally cre in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences through: ward formation changes, tense chan sales te igeS, Pronoun changes etc. «Arrange of accurate sentence structures with a ‘© Grammar mainly accurate with occasional cor ‘© Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct, rasp of simple and complex sentences. mmon errors that do not affect overall clarity. Data File Manipulation ‘Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create ‘grammatically correct sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes et. ‘(Own Language + Arange of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences. Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected. ‘© Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning. Data File Manipulation Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the requirements of his/her own text Own Language + Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use ‘more complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature. ‘+ Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning. + Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate. Data File Manipulation ‘Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken verbatim from the Data File Own Language + Short simple sentences are generally accurate, Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex. sentences. ‘+ Grammatical errors often affect meaning. ‘© Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly accurate. Data File Manipulation ; ; Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File. Own Language * Short simple sentences may be accurate. + Grammatical errors often alfect meaning. a ‘© Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty ‘Writing characterised by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File. ‘© Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding impossible. OR ‘© Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘1°, 138Task 6: Coherence and Organisation = 2 marks Marks ‘Coherence and Organisation = Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout «© Relations between main points and supporting points always clear. ‘© Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary. ‘> Overall coherence of text is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout ‘© The relations between main points and supporting points generally clear + Cohesive tes used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy, Task 6: Marks ‘© Overall coherence of text is weak. ‘© Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points. ‘© Cohesive tes used contribute little to the coherence of the text. OR ‘Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘1. Appropriacy = 2 marks Appropriacy 2 Register, one nnd style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and own language. ‘The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task. ‘Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of pans of Data File and through own language, ‘Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File, Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or syle in order to produce an appropriate text. ‘The candidate has written a text which is characterised by having copied chnnks of the Data File ‘maiscriminately. Docs not give the impression ofthe writer's own text written to fulfil the task Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to) {tis an email informing the customer s/he has won a competition ‘The writer is writing on behalf of DPP. ‘The intended audience is the winner of the competition, ‘The toe should be fendly (possibly congratulating the reads) and also informative and concise when relating the details of the viewing day. 139‘Task 7 (17 marks) ‘Task Completion = 8 marks DF page reference 7.1 | Acknowledge the email / complaint 9 Problems wlth construction Problem: noise from repair / maintenance naa | Pratt: role am ep ‘work on underground rail link (all day and ® 7.2 | Reason: flooding of underground rail link 4 7.26 | Action/Solution: work from 9am to 7pm Monday to Saturday (from 18 April) 4 Problems with beaches 73a | Problem: alot of litter on beaches 319 7.3b_ | Reason: litter washed into sea after rain ” 73¢_ | Action/Solution: increase numberof cleaners /20 more cleaners to collect rubbish 7 "© | every morning Reference to maintaining contact with the reader in the future / an attempt to enhance 7.4 | cordial relations withthe reader // an expression of hope thatthe reader is satisfied with the solutions *Tnformation from page 3 of the Data File is from the tapescript 140‘Task 7: Language = 5 marks ‘Marks Language Data File Manipulation Generily aaa adapting phrases from the Data File to cxeateyruanmadclly comet sentences through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc, ‘Own Language eA range of acurate sentence structures wih a grasp of simple and complex sentences, © Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity, + Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct. Data File Manipula Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically corect sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc Own Language ‘+ Arrange of accurate sentence structures wit some attempts to use more complex sentences, + Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clasity not affected. Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning. Data File Manipulation ‘Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences though more often errors occur due to filing to change the original texts to the requirements of hiséher own text. ‘Own Language ‘© Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use ‘more complex sentences. Structures used tend tobe repetitive in nature, * Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning. Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate. Data File Manipulation ‘Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken verbatim from the Data File. ‘Own Language + Short simple sentences are generally accurate, Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex sentences, ‘+ Grammatical errors often affect meaning + Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly accurate, Data File Manipulation _ ‘Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbetim from the Data File Own Language + Shor simple sentences may be accurate. + Grammatical enor often affect meaning * Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faut * Writing characterised by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File. Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding impossible. oR ‘+ Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘I’, M1Coherence and Organisation = 2 marks ‘Relations between main points and supporting points always clear. ‘+ Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary. | gent | | aa] ‘Coherence and Orgunisation | |g] Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughaut. 17 | © Overall coherence of text is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout, The relations between main points and supporting points generally clear. # Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy. a ]> Oven coherence oF eet weak {Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points. 1 Cakesive ies used contrib tet the coherence ofthe txt OR * Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘1° ‘Task 7: Appropriacy =2 marks Marks ‘Appropriacy 3 [Register tone and sie gsnealy appropriate through manipulation of pars of Data Fie and own guage. The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task. 7 | Register, tne and sive reasonably appropriate othe text through some manipulation of parts of Data File and through own language + Tone may be inconsistent due to pars being copied verbatim from the Data File. ‘| Lie or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an appropriate text. ‘© The candidate has written a text which is characterised by having copied chunks of the Data File indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer's own text writen to fulfl the task. Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to): ‘© Ttisa lemer written in response toa complaint email ‘© The writer is writing on behalf of DPP. ‘©The intended audience is Mr Hannibal Chiu, a representative ofthe Jade Islands Residents’ Concer Group. ‘©The tone should be apologetic for the problems but alco clear, concise and infarmative when relating, the reasons for the problems and the solutions. 142Part B2 (more difficult section) ‘Task 8 (22 marks) ‘Task Completion = 13 marks =) General features ~ | B.in_ | Keep key atractions of waterfall, lke and sailing ship but no castle ai 8.1» | Intine wit jungle theme, castle isnot 7 ale | (Engineering team say) all features practical 3 Lake 2a. | Make the lake an aquarium and (include) @ swimming poo! 6/7 £26 | Put swimming pool nex tothe aquarium 9 | ax. | Swimming poo and aquarium o be parted by lass wall) (swimmers can swim |g next tothe sea creatures) 824. | Have swimming poo! under the waterfall (to maximise excitement) 9 2 | Put iplines above swimming poo! (and in keeping with jungle theme) 6/7 Ship 8.3 _| Sailing ship should have restaurants but no shops as can’t fit both i Waterfall 4a | Abseil on sides ofthe waterfall (notin the waterfall) 7 4b | Reduce height of waterfall from 40 metres to 30 metres 3/8 tg Hie waters to bigh stay cause clouds to frm. Fhe waterfalls ot to 8 high, elouds wil not form 44. | Clouds could damage elecreity supply /cause power failure ES ‘Taformation from page 3 of the Data Files fom the tapescript 13|—3 | Data File Manipulation angunge = S marks res KO 7 Tanguage Dt aaa os Datcesful manipulation of phrases ftom the Data File to create ae rm Pak a et petatyome ence wn Language Orr wade range of aecurate sentence structures using Awe ge facut g own language, with an excellent grasp of «+ Geammor extremely accurate with very occasional slips. 2 spetiing and punctuation are mostly correct. pe | 7—| Data File Manipulation Date ally sucessfal in adapting phrases from the Data Fil o create tical ta File to create grammatically correct Srtences through some of: word formation changes, tense ch ono ‘Own Language anges, tense changes, pronoun changes et. 2 qrange of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences. Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity. Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct, Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically corect Sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes ere Own Language # A range of acurate sentence stucturs with some attempt se more complex sntenoes. + Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected. 2 spelling and punctuation are suficiently accurate to convey meaning. Data File Manipulation a atasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically corect Seatences though more often errors occur due to filing to change the original texts tothe requirements of his/her own text. ‘Own Language Simple sentences are generally accurately constricted. Occasional attempts are made 1 se snore complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature, «Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning. J Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate, T | Data File Manipulation Pain characterised by occasional temps o adapt language fom Data File or by chunks ken verbatim from the Data File, Own Language Osher sknple sentences are generally accurate, Only scattered attempts a longer more complex sentences. © Grammatical errors often affect meaning, «Spelling of simple words is correct, mare comple: accurate +x ones not, with basic punctuation mostly 0 | Data File Manipulation Writing characterised by being mos ‘Own Language + Short simple sentences may be accurate. © Grammatical errors often affect meaning 4: Spelling of simple words is correc, more complex Ones 0% ‘with basic punctuation often foul. OR 4+ Not enough evidence in candidate's work siya series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File to be able to award ‘1" 144‘Task 8: Coherence and Organisation = 2 marks Marks Coherence and Organ 2 ‘Overall coherence oftext ia very g00d Itis clearly om topic and congruent with the subject. Relations between main points and supporting points always clear. Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary. ‘Overall coherence of text is reasonable. It is generally on topic and congruent with the subject. Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear. Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy. ‘Overall coherence of text is weak. It is mostly off topic and not clearly congruent with the subject. ‘Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points. Cohesive ties used contribute little tothe coherence of the text, OR ‘+ Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘1’. Task 8: Appropriacy = 2 marks Marks “Appropriaey 2 ‘Register, tone and style generally appropriate to text through manipulation of parts of Data File and own language. ‘+ Consistently demonstrates audience awareness. ‘+ Register, tone and siyle reasonably appropriate to text through some manipulation of paris of Data File and through own language. ‘© The tone may be inconsistent. Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an appropriate text. Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to): Its an intemal document. ‘The intended audience isthe writer’s boss. ‘A relevant title is appropriate It is a workplace summary so should be concise and therefore not include much redundancy. It should not read like a recount ofa narrative or have too much ‘Ripple Wu said... “Mari Nakarmura says." Should be reasonably formal. inappropriate words and phrases from the Data Fle include: ‘awesome space, Brilliant; can you imagine...; drop the castle; Goshl; Great kid you not; Love itl; Love their concept; Since when...; when you think about it: Wow! 145(8 marks) ask sux Completion =9 marks —J DF page —_— reference Recent achievements ‘The biggest spenders of (three) biggest developers on green construction methods 10 ‘We have increased the amount spent on green hoi 1 buldng technologies Canes eda Rouse developments environmentally | yo ‘9.1¢ | Forest of Dreams housing estate won the Greenest (Housing) Development in 2016 10 Golden Flower Istand 9.22 | Splash of Gold Orchid found only on island 4 6 Golden Dragon Tail butterfly only species in South China to pollinate Splash of Gold Orchid 4 9.2¢ | 70°% will be maintained as designated nature park / protected area a4 9.24 | No vehicles allowed on island 38 9.2 | Well of vegetation between mall and nature park will prevent noise and light poltution 9.2f | so that butterflies are not disturbed 3° Information from page 3 of the Data File is from the tapescript 146‘Task 9: Language = § marks ‘Language i Data File Manipulation Successful manipulation of phrases from the Data Fie to create grammatically correct sentences ‘Achieved through a wide variety of changes made wo the original texts Own Language 4 Awide range of accurate sentence structures using own language, with an excellent grasp of more complex structures. Grammar extremely accurate with very occasional slips. ‘© Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct. Data File Manipulation ‘Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes ete Own Language ‘© Arrange of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences, ‘© Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity. 4 Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct. Data File Manipulation Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences, This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc Own Language '* A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences. * Grammatical errors oecur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected. 4 Spelling and punctuation are suficienty accurate to convey meaning. Data File Manipulation Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences though more often errors occur duc to failing to change the original texts to the requirements of his/her own text. ‘Own Language + Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed, Occasional attempts are made to use more complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature. ‘© Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning. ‘+ Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate Data File Manipulation Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken verbatim from the Data Fil. ‘Own Language Shor simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex sentences Grammatical errors often affect meaning. ‘+ Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly accurate, Data File Manipulation Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File, ‘Own Language + Shor simple sentences may be accurate, + Grammatical errors often affect meaning, Spline of simple words x correct, more complex oncs not, with basic punctuation often fay ‘+ Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘I’ 471g, coherence and Organisation =2 marks ts en (Coherence and Organisatio, {Overall coherence of text is very good. J Iris clearly on topic and congruent with subj nd con ject and giver Relations beteen main pine and suporing pote see ar sirong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary, ‘Overall coherence of text is reasonable, It s generally on topic and congruent with the subj ' ‘ e subject and given ttle. Relations between main points and supporting points generally clea, + Cohesive ties used generally enhance eoherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy. 4] + Overall coherence of text is weake ‘« It is mostly off topic. Not clearly congruent with the subject or given ttle + Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points, ‘© Cohesive ties used contribute litle to the echerence of the text OR + Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be abe to award ‘1° ppropriacy =2 marks ‘Appropriacy 3 [> Regs tone and style generally appropriate to text through manipulation of parts of Data File and own language. ‘© Consistently demonstrates audience awareness. 7 | © Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to text through some manipulation of parts of Data File and through own language. | © The tone may be inconsistent. D | Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an appropriate text, Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to): + Itisa document intended for the company webpage for the general public to read. ‘© The tone should be that of positive self-promotion highlighting the company's achievements 6 The ase af We are...” or ‘DPP igre...” or ‘We at DPP ate...’ are all acceptable approaches. 148Task 10 (13 marks) ‘Task Completion =7 marks Details of Event and Role 10.12 | Guest of honour at opening ceremony of the Golden Flower Adventure Mall 10.1b | First to swim in the Golden Flower Adventure Mall pool 10.1¢ | Event held on 24% December next year / 2018 Persuasive Details 10.2a | We know you are a keen swimmer 10.2 | We know you love snorkelling and diving and being close to marine life 10.2¢ | DPP will do all we ean to preserve coral in Australia // DPP has given money / supports | Save the Great Barrier Reef | 024 | Will give a sum of $100,000 to charity of your choice to Save long Kong Coral | I ‘Communities 149oo 0: Language = 3 marks cons] [Marks ata File Manipulation Asgeeg¢ Generally successful in adapting phy sentences through some of: word for (Own Language + Grammatical errors occur in more compl * Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning 1 | Data File Manipulation Writing characterised by occasional attempts to ads verbatim from the Data File. ™ vt anges fom Dts Flor by cha taken ‘Own Language ‘© Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scatt Shot sim ly scattered attempts at longer, more complex ‘+ Grammatical errors often affect meaning *+ Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly accurate 0 | Data File Manipulation Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File, ‘Own Language ‘© Short simple sentences may be accurate. ‘© Grammatical errors often affect meaning. ‘Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basie punctuation often faulty. OR ‘© Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’. ‘Task 10: Coherence and Organisation = 1 mark Marks ‘Coherence and Organisation 7 1] © Overall coherence of text is very good. ; + Relations between main points and supporting points always clear # Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary. 0 T+ Overall coherence of text is weak. ‘© Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points. Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence ofthe tex. OR ae ‘© Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award ‘I 150‘Task 10: Appropriacy = 2 marks Marks ‘Approprincy 2] Register, tone and sile generally appropriate to text through manipulation of pars of Data Fy ile and own language. Consistently demonstrates audience awareness, | [1 Te Register, tone and style reasonably ‘appropriate to text through some manipulation of parts | Data File and through own language. ¢ ‘+ The tone may be inconsistent. DT Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an appropriate text. Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to): It is a etter of invitation written to a celebrity who is not a personal acquaintance of the writer. The tone shouldbe polite and persuasive ‘but should not presume that Ms Tse has already accepted or accept. «The issue of the possibility of Ms Tse giving her fees to charity is particularly delicate as the writer does not know whether Ms Tse would want to do so or not. It should therefore be presented as a suggestion. ¢ The lemer should end with some sort of polite request asking Ms Tse to let DPP know if she accepts the Is