Assignment M5 LA2

Sample 2

1 What is the issue of the discussion?

2 What is the writer’s position in question of the discussion?

1Some people say that children should always follow their parents’ advice;
others claim that this is not always right. 2I believe that children should follow
their parents’ advice when they are young, but they should become more
independent when they are older.

The issue of the discussion seems to be “the children’s obedience toward parents”
and the writer’s position in statement of discussion is an agreement of that but by giving
additional information in the last statement.
Sentence one in this section provides information about the two points of view of this
issue while the next sentence the writer states there is an exception for this issue.

Revision

Sentence 1 It is undeniable that parents plays an important role in our life.

Sentence 2 Some people think that children should always follow their parents’ advice.
Sentence 3 However, should the children follow their parents' advice all their life?

Sample 3

1Many people hold the belief that violent movies and computer games have
been the cause of increasing crime levels in many countries around the world
today. 2Even though there are increasing rates of crime amongst the youth of
today, I strongly disagree that television and games are at the root of this
problem.

The issue of the discussion seems to be “the increasing rate of crime is caused by
the violent movies and game” and the writer’s position in statement of discussion is to
give the disagreement of this issue.
Sentence one in this section provides information about the issue while the next
sentence the writer states there is an exception for this issue by giving a opening
statement that the root of the problem us not caused by violent movies and games.
Revision:
Sentence 1 Today, the level of crime that occurs in society continues to increase.
Sentence 2 Many people hold the belief that the crime occurred because of the effect of
violent movies and computer games
Sentence 3 Even though there are increasing rates of crime today, I strongly disagree that
television and games are at the root of this problem