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Struggles That Undocumented Latinx Students Face in Education Revised Essay Reflection
Struggles That Undocumented Latinx Students Face in Education Revised Essay Reflection
Damaris Alvarado
Professor Batty
English 101
13 December 2019
There were many improvements that I had to make in this essay. Starting with the title
that I chose, which was a bit misleading. The title that I originally chose was “Undocumented
Latinx Students” and that title does not really specify what I was talking about throughout the
essay. I then changed it to “Struggles That Undocumented Latinx Students Face in Education”. I
wanted to focus on how in k-12 education there aren’t any counselors designated to inform or
guide undocumented students. This was difficult because I could only find about one or two
studies or credible sources that focused on that problem. This led me to also focus and dedicate
This was why I also received a comment that mentioned that I am spending way too
much time talking about DACA. In my revision, I tried to avoid spending a lot of time talking
about DACA, so I decided to keep looking up articles and databases some sources that would
help me back up my point, but I just found myself in the same loophole of not necessarily
finding credible evidence that will support my ideas. The evidence that I did find accurate
mentioned DACA many times. I also had to be more direct with my thesis in terms of what I am
in my introductory paragraph, while also stating points of why I think my point is valid in order
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to answer the “So what?” question that I was also told I needed to go a bit more in-depth. I also
added the counterargument in my thesis to acknowledge it. Overall revising my essay was
extremely helpful because revisiting it after a while, I found myself reading through some
paragraphs that did not make sense to me. I did not have much experience with creating a works
cited page and after receiving the feedback I realized that my sources were not alphabetized,