Fast food and its consequences

Nowadays, it's common to see in Newspapers, magazines and Tv shows a lot of news about Commented [TLS1]: DO NOT USE CONTRACTIONS
fast food and how people are eating in a bad way.

In general, fast food means a quick and cheap meal with no healthy ingredients and this
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The negative fast food consequences are related with healthy problems, for example, high Commented [TLS3]: HEALTH
numbers of cardiac diseases because of a lot of fat and sugar that is in this kind of food.

Fast food is a temporary solution for people who can't do their own food or can't buy a food Commented [TLS4]: DO NOT USE CONTRACTIONS
full of good ingredients. But, a temporary solution comes with a bad future for our body - Commented [TLS5]: DO NOT USE CONTRACTIONS
and, maybe, (IT) will bring healthy problems without solution. Commented [TLS6]: FOOD IS UNCOUNTABLE
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Because of this, (IT) is important do not give up of our healthy: if you don't have much time OF A SENTENCE, PREFER “HOWEVER”, FOR EXAMPLE
to prepare your own food, try to prepare some good meals and put on freezer (you can Commented [TLS8]: HEALTH
remove and eat during the week): this is a way to not eat fast food all days. Commented [TLS9]: TO
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Also, you have to change other bad habits in your life: do more exercise, don't smoke and
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don't drink a lot. It's important look for a doctor and do body exams every year.
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With good food and (A) better way(s) of life, you can remove a lot of of bad consequences Commented [TLS13]: DO NOT USE CONTRACTIONS
of fast food.

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