English 105

Feeder 1.2 Workshop

Writer Name:
Reader Name:

Read only your partner’s thesis.

1. Write the thesis in your own words: In “Heart of Gold” of Once Upon a Time the
scenes highlight the origins of Robin that focus on his change in morality that has
an effect on the theme of honor and helping the needy, which in “How Robin
and His Outlaws Lived in the Woods” only shows a general role of Robin within
his community.

2. Why does this thesis matter? In other words, so what? This thesis looks at
comparing the themes of both sources and analyzes the change in morality of
Robin Hood.

3. List the points you would need to see proved in order to support this thesis. How
each source shows their own theme and why it matters. The change of Robin in
each source and show that it does represent a lesson of honor and helping.

4. Is this thesis a statement that can be developed throughout the article? Why or
why not? With some changes to make the “so what?” more apparent and clear
this thesis statement can be developed as an argument throughout.

5. Is this thesis an argument or an observation? If it is the latter, make a few

suggestions here as to how the writer could make their thesis more
argumentative. The thesis has an argument but could use some modification to
show it clearly. Emphasize that the change(s) in Robin Hood creates a change in
theme/morality.

Next, read your partner’s entire outline twice. Make any necessary comments or suggestions
on the document of the outline. Then, answer the following:

6. How is the outline arranged? Does your partner put the two Robin Hood texts in
conversation with one another, or are they discussing each source separately?
The outline is arranged in a way that incorporates both texts within the topic
sentence and then provides details and focus points that can be used to support
the argument.
7. Does the outline cover all of the points you listed in #3? If not, which ones are
missing? Yes
8. List your partner’s topics here. What evidence will they use to support each
topic? Is this sufficient evidence? Why or why not?
 Scenes of Will Scarlet show change in Robin Hood.
o Summarize the interactions between Will and Robin. Explain the
turning point of Robin’s moral standards.
 The visual source emphasizes Robin’s connection to the community,
while the ballad does not.
o Changes of expression
o Specific interactions and dialogue
o The lacking depth of imagery in the ballad that hides how Robin
affect the community.
 The visual source includes the origins of Robin that shows a theme
throughout, while the ballad only shows him as an outlaw.
o The plot of the episode and how it shows the development and
progress of Robin.
o The plot of the ballad does not show relationships and only
describes what Robin does.
9. Is there a logical transition between ideas? If not, help your partner with some
suggestions of how they could rearrange their ideas. The transitions between
ideas and topics are logical, as it progresses from origin to actions and
connections to themes.

10. Does this outline prove the thesis? Why or why not? The outline covers many
points that can prove the thesis as long as they are tied back into the change of
Robin and the theme.

11. From the thesis and the outline, will this article present an argument that can be
discussed or is it more so a basic compare/contrast paper? Why or why not?
This article will present an argument that can be discussed, as it focuses on the
complexity of how Robin’s experiences and actions change him and create the
theme.
12. Write your partner a quick note with two compliments and one area for
improvement that you didn’t cover in the above questions.
The support for the topic sentences are clear and specific. You gave enough
detail to create body paragraphs that do well in analyzing and proving your
argument. The argument could be clearer so the reader can better understand
the points you are making and proving with the body paragraphs.