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    Writing — Academic Sample Question 1 Writing Task 4 Cinema Attendance* his task, with mments, can wo sample response: scores and examine The graph below gives information about cinema on pages 43 and 44 attendance in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010. ‘You should spend about 20 minutes on this task a] ‘Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the ‘main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Cinema attendance by age group 100 90 £ 80 ne) 2s Be 6 £8 a ® Bg 40 52 3% a0 3 s 2 10 6+ 1990 1992 1994 1996 1998 2000 2002 2004 2006 2008 2010 Year 14-24 year olds - - - - 25-34 year olds’ —— 35-49 year olds 650+ year olds “This question appeared on ELT test proto 2010 Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 1 Cinoma Attendance - Response A Einst 3 think everd. baly sod eset] 040 bas been fo fhe cinema, — Ltkink more film it ahoat hue. 5. ung pple [ne it me soe dy pane can gy te iheend to wash. tin —la=3H's oe sicne. 1442. is up gntil 1196. Hea Ions de aan it's stezat line td dud. Bak iS ddr pin dean Mak begin 28 er ; 2 ; 7 z soit M2 00k 206 1s goal, But rondo H's undil own. 5 Hhiak this ages people have more park. thet. dont haye- mere: time len. whe aeo#t is _hewey thon 3 2 NY te 200) . Buf Jot fo aoe is wp quich hin thi oul le i taper ol e196 n> bul fo 4 fo cine, se fo ic tot fe much old pore. ogo This test taker attempts to summarise the data but the focus is lost in alot of irrelevant comment. tis difficult to extract the key features, no figures are given and the information is largely unclear. ‘Although some information can be discemed its not clearly organised land there is no clear progression in the response, so the message is difficult to follow. Some basic time markers and connectives, such as referencing and link words, are used but these are often ‘inaccurate or unhelpful The range of vocabulary relating to the task is very limited and this seriously distorts the message. Simple expressions are used repetitively and there are spelling errors in even basic words, indicating a lack of control Although there are some attempls at basic ‘sentence forms at the beginning of the response, there are few recognisable sentences in the remainder and the density of errors seriously distorts the meaning The attempt to present information relevant to the task and the use of basic linkers raise this script above Band 3. However, the limited linguistic range and weak control prevent it from reaching Band 4 Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 1 Cinoma Attendance - Response B Since ee “Sh of age 25 10 34 group has been higher than the one cot _age 99 42 44 “group but from 2006 he percermge ct 95 10.44 year elds people will decvease while the 5 tou ye er her all a ard get the ddest people scem_ro_ge ciocma tae ther the + the percentage of rhe af \as_been slightly going up by 18% tram toy 0 58% et n oY and Tt wi ep i) ine ees by zoly Overall it_ seems the younger _age peopl nore gotng_co_ cinema This response addresses the requirements of the task and selects relevant material to describe. Key features and an overviow are presented, although clearer highlighting, ‘more support and a more comprehensive ‘overview would be needed to reach a higher band. Information is well organised and there is a clear overall progression in the response. ‘There is some effective use of cohesive devices but only limited use of reference and substitution. The range of vocabulary is not wide, but itis adequate for the task. Control of word form and spelling is consistently good, although there are some clumsy noun phrases that indicate limited flexibly, The test taker attempts to use a mix of simple and complex sentences, but contro! | variable and grammatical errors or ‘omissions are quite intrusive at times. Figures are poorly integrated into sentences and indicate evident limitations. The weakness in grammatical range and control prevents this response from reaching Band 6. Writing — Academic Sample Question 2 Writing Task 1 Brick Manufacturing ‘You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. ‘Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the ‘main features and make comparisons where relovant. Wiite at least 180 words, Brick Manufacturing sand + water wire cutter bricks mould \ cooling deat kin kiln drying oven 48-72hts—<— — high ~<—_moderate 24 - 48 hrs 870°C - 1300 200°C - 980°C packaging “Clay: type of sticky earth that is used for making bricks, pots, ete. Three sample responses to this task, with scores and ‘examiner comments, can be found on pages 45-48. were TELS Sewea use a Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments Task 1 Brick Manufacturing ~ Response A __Briqws ave nmol shamed Legres colich ou _uxd wid & Ye slog, Ved Gad the hyge OL a vad Sor moxing Beier. asta My ceded wadaded veal gacts oh} daa and Yeo tem vo Ma salle ig Mow sand + slex at Siled in. The sand fexluxe loc lnsicxs. hikes Moot lhe solid io et senda, to. go Sheough usite enbkex Of maukdiiag,, Adis row Mors YhaResak Vhe lexieKrs Wen Ya Vgoxes Wegner gah Haic shoe , Yh Nes, con We pak io deo _deas MwPQaged Cor g 4-48 nous Wu Vempaduse ‘Ns coder Twduran 2OO'C ond WSC ia Mu Saati, Shwe Woh ems ao So Ya cool Yond ok cold Lrott dey “Shoe leak gaxd Of Ve mosadusi ng _ BEOR is “gucnagea ond cli vera “bo St KOK) ARSE hours) ‘Although the basie process is accurately described, this script fails to present an ‘overview and some of the key features are not adequately covered. The first sentence ‘may have been an attempt at an overview but it simply causes confusion and detracts from the answer. Despite this, the overall progression is clear and there is effective, though mechanical, use of linkers and sequencers. There are also examples of substitution and referencing, although sentences are not always wel inked ‘The vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task. Spelling is generally accurate ‘but there are inappropriate word choices, ‘omissions and errors in word form. ‘Some attempts at subordination and ‘complex nominalisations are made, but generally the structures are limited and there are frequent errors. Overall this is a good example of a Band 5 performance. Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments Task 1 Brick Manufacturing ~ Response B _Beor fin, Tem witing «(epoch Obat bricterrorafacteorng, The allowing oe fulous Boi menefacaning chrls sath choting gal quel ie Alege digger cinilr to etme age the cag. Th pati Wee Choe? belP 4 day, Fler whch ibis pat an metal gad + Lepar04 unmanhd ott Where it WC vxed bath Sand and. wae be mauled lote te Face the bate oF the brik. while it se sil ort, Mead to perFeetin tut the back, remoting the rough ges The _ City bite ae Hen put in a clyying Wen thie [clays From 29-46 how. Atkr - set drgiry fies the brick are Then Pat in Large Kine where it Ie Taled @ modiené wheat about Lod~ 410°C: The bree on firct pul 12 mats heat to aro cracking. BEbe «bout few mors re brite wipe cathes ore an he high 270- 1$00'C Peat, thie tc the “Final tote £pc4® Jar the brik. Just beat Ue the Coalirg thember hich 1s Ode 4 Vorme che! white the beicke will tay Fer Ghout 48-72 hours. The brite Ane then Leet, Far packaging wher, _the prick _Wlartere Caretutl, pact the bocke tn lame cs ns far dele The whole peouce If Jattly an _teay re becatwe fuse ae MD a on edhe 7 rm ating th eating proves? becourr te the ones ia (ro ban Boy and oberve L feing Cool deca oF the claus detent 1 “Crack t00rly because of the bring sand gnd Wake Mixhite fom the start IF this happed, the_procest hte te be Mepeate ogam bhich cam be Guile lengthy __ ‘This test taker uses an inappropriate format at times (e.g, the leter-style opening and personal comments) and this limits the ‘band for Task Achievement, The process itself is adequately described, although ‘some irtelevant information is included and there is no clear overview. Information is logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the response. A range of cohesive devices ‘is used appropriately, although there are ‘occasional errors in referencing and linking, and paragraphing would have helped convey a clearer description ofthe stages. ‘A.wide range of sophisticated lexis is used to convey meaning with precision, but there are also occasional flaws in word choice that lead to some slightly awkward expressions. ‘Awide range of structures is also used fluently with only occasional slight error and the majority of sentences are error-free. In spite ofthe high level of language proficiency, the flaws in format and ‘organisation limit the rating for this response to Band 7. Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 1 Brick Manufacturing — Response C Be Maar The pain oy ih Late one cmanachactd toe tea Laide, Soda can lee oubliaed sh in Ses cmos casbive stage. ee ee ee ae seil_in_astoin avid oitoy has tb be doy mm Sat ————_____—_ Than tea Lumps of clay ont placa ono matal god order fo tok up be suka minal onas which Joh Uatuale We mabal god pene eee ern) pk day, Dard ond usater ore added Sy robe a romesginous 0: eich soca in wroulds occu inks : ‘“ oo sent euler Tweie vss \aicls ore Han lag in ‘i eco east We and a wosienn of be Vous, sexeal downs ‘if cok Ne Aone. Te dried Lerch ape Lan bron tao se la. ancthor demgetaoe oven. Fest ove _Magk_ok 0. moderate tmpesohurt of Voske - WOT than 1o"C = \S0s'C. Ts Lines dove ise Nes \ Ta Vows 0 One tne teneke bose lee a Lowe rand ee tp _bvae Nee ko sike c This response fully satisfies the requirements of the task, All key features (of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. ‘An excellent overview is given at the beginning ofthe response and this skilfully incorporates part ofthe rubric, changing the grammatical function, to give a brief summary of the whole process. ‘The message is very easy to read with seamless cohesion that attracts no attention. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed, The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary land structures are used wit full flexibility land accuracy. Only rare minor ‘slips’ can bbe found and these do not detract from the high rating. This response is a good example of a Band 9 performance. Writing — Academic Sample Question 1 Writing Task 2 Upbringing ‘You should spend about 40 minutes on this task ‘Write about the following topic: Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagreo with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant ‘examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 2 Upbringing — Response A 1 Aege shut gene oboe elien broeghe he sion enous we. ot cur covenyotcens fed eccpting gue to ther ctoldeen sot peed elect te them the other aed, ctlduen —beocgee op by seal pu diy etree. that anenes— shay con da peace te deal ooh we yotlerss ak adits be they 1c thet they cold wp tametiong or evtrane 40 he bask cho, por curry cillees do ais. racy chess ewcept He im heir poses lth peneat oe a pacherwoney aver she 20 yee ed a werk 0 shy sedy oh money eA ther odele He alter hey mut be poets peclerly pe ‘The answer is underlength at 179 Words and loses marks for this. While itis obviously related to the topic, the introduction is confusing and the test taker’s position is dificult to identity. Ideas are limited and although the test taker attempts to support them with examples from experience, they remain unclear, ‘There is no overall progression in the response and the ideas are not coherently linked. Although cohesive devices are used, they assist only minimally in achieving coherence. The range of vocabulary is basic and contro is inadequate for the task. Language from the input material is used inappropriately and frequent errors in word choice and collocation cause severe problems for the reader. ‘Similarly, the range of structures is very limited, the density of grammatical and punctuation error is high and these features ‘cause some difficulty for the reader, ‘Attempts to use complex structures, ‘such as subordination, are rare and tend to be very inaccurate. There are several features of atypical Band 4 performance in this response, but because itis significantly underiength the rating is limited to Band 3.5. Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 2 Upbringing — Response B L.greniy suprt te idea about ciren he ove bro Lup in gales shat dower lave bnge amourte Of money are bever peared 40 dol ute shy priome of adult le than dition rouse wealiny parent Support it, bxauce of aha allow coon oo Childten who ave browge up in awiec wk do net rave “aug amouris og money are vice in a conan prupcladycal “values. Such ac the value of haclworkang , dich , they ate ucglio bein she condition where worey doosn cone oni They Wve 40 carn it work gor it. Opjore 40k, achild whe Comes yom A woolen geawily ie wiaA-to have wovey all hz dae “whenever say waned corething Ae Morey ie warily ye 4oAoM as acti everyiay ave Hit birt ___ Children who ave_ brought ut wafer that do vot wave large anounis o% novey are well-srinad 40 race adult, They are unl-ropures to Cee the pack Hiat the world is a ve Jougle Yaw. They welche ir para evry workavery. Wareh uct 40 gut Ae goorA ‘on she Able. They lave Hae advantano 40 522 she _roality cand erdbrace it,SOt anwie vind sat Hou t00 Y wore bw Gor Alele eubure_, their own crane , wir aula Gale. A chiA that came from a woaltny fawilu doocn’t alunye have sic vaniane Tic is becruce their ever ave ‘blndgtby, sve power oF moray shar sein pave’ hac . Ther ale havea Acodvaniage o% Arawily love lige. Cmmontly sian fprvente 2xpres, love by mone Arey. love Aviv children , 96 svoy Wouatins Hawn Cars , expensive Clowwet_;, raue_,bu trey are never \nowe when Have children noddc sem. The bacic necesst 10N ‘cn't_gulgiled in atic kind al impact 40 aclild Is at shou will grow yp And think frat money if verging thar ve source of Wappinesc «wore Twey Aone, care ctoosr ether people ,they only care ate meray, Te problem ic ib Row Won 40 iN ,they-ve beon Qaoiilecd al she Ame, sO cere howe ave woo Accovored she art only wore ha, - On te cov c¥iren te Mtge amount of eons wil swith Aho cence 0 fe woven, Ahoy Kow how 40 opt it art use it well ‘They ta how +9 tare adult hfe probleme beause they've been watching Sine yoy wore actild Bua wealt nu, eWild is wane 49 ues with Wimsolle 40 Kengo sigs Hat da a parry ‘The introduction is mainly copied from the rubric. However, when this is deducted from the word count, the response is not underiength, The arguments are generally \ell developed and there is a clear position, despite the lack of a conclusion. Better use of paragraphing would have allowed a clearer focus to some of the ‘supporting points and prevented the lapse into generalisation towards the end, Nevertheless, there is a generally clear progression with a good arrangement of ‘opposing arguments. Referencing is usually accurate and effective, but better use of linkers would have improved the cohesion. Vocabulary is sufficient and used with some flexibly. The choice is not always precise ‘but the test taker can evidently incorporate less commonfidiomatic phrases into the ‘argument and there is a good range that ‘is generally accurate. The repettion of language from the rubric, while integrated and nat therefore deducted from the rating, reveals a lack of ability to paraphrase. Regular errors detract from the use of a range of structures, although they do not impede communication. This is a generally good response to the task, but the weaknesses in organisation ‘and grammatical control limit the rating to Band 6.5, Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 2 Upbringing ~ Response do_agret. 4 the shatemant thet clnidven brought Up > peor Houmas ove beter prepared fe deal worn tre problems of adult We than ciniden lovought ap we ‘oy wraliny pacers Cinildten, o£ peor parents ove. prewebwrely exposed de the peblems of adult Me eg. cerermgmateeng Neary, Me swe on lon fan, weer Ener lusures for eseenbal thems These clade begn to gee the‘ malihos of Me in Are howe or Secal anvienment. There povants own stmiga\es Sere 9S an sample 4% thom 4 These clnidren are taught necassowy steils er surmwal 05 an adult fran a yam eaty age Morn Children eq work vi the weeleerds of Wodays be erirar collack some pectsh wnavey or ven Contrhate to Hraw faunles wncome. A gad afayygie ie se wang cidvern wslo accompa, “tree petvenls _fe set yoduce. at te They ave matewe a chveect Contniehon do shoe Runs db lor ov come tumhes ow Cnldven oF poor fi cleo are Inghly metal Jend_fe sot Ingh gaa to wpme Trai Staten” A relevant comple weuid be Mr Bil) GodesC founder dt Visieseft Gorperatin? He lad an mn povenshead pacleground ‘our he used Ws talent arc mebvahan _ to 8 up the _wonds Computer nsaibon —— Howour , trace. ave Some prblens Wat cnidetn Many of dhe Ciidrevy who are _* Woke ew Aai\ehinoee wll Wwotlang Moy feel cated They Men turn fe Crime MWS houses, 1s a Small yeu inne ap, dnidien vodl_wnpoveunshed are ae t dita) usr poblens of adult i kecawe Fownly ole wedi and shear mobwabes The topic is very well addressed and the position is clear throughout. Main ideas are presented and well supported, apart from some aver-generalisation in the penultimate paragraph. The rubric is copied in the opening paragraph, but when this is deducted from the overall word count the response is not underlength. ‘The ideas and information are very well ‘organised and paragraphing is used appropriately throughout. The answer can be read with ease due to the sophisticated hanaling of cohesive devices — only the lack fof an appropriate introduction and the minor error in the second use of ‘eg! mars this aspect of the response, ‘The writer uses a wide and very natural range of vocabulary with ful flexibility. There are many examples of appropriate modification, collocation and precise vocabulary choice. ‘Syntax is equally varied and sophisticated There are only occasional errors in an otherwise very accurate answer. Overall this performance is a good example of Band 8. Writing — Academic Sample Question 2 Writing Task 2 International Tourism ‘You should spend about 40 minutes on this task ‘Write about the folowing topic: International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant ‘examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. Two sample responses to this task, with scores and examiner comments, ca 3 found on pages 53-54, Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 2 International Tourism - Response A wang. places tthe same tine teat is camctina about tts cinpachion an teusl inbobitaonls ood tre enyitawe mb a the Finca army coveninies ld 5 it ov Be dive Abusiin cat tock ypc of Innes ont ble oe Ime eiey 5 Steoneilig de counts visited bp faueists ame plenty of pln plese people just cout pass because of ave ae : a rmtuc plates. They Like Lee om the Leadh of brain tin ote. Been the Fitts fast roux mare prong wadding hubtnlng tausamds of people There ont makelig rear ple ees te tock gud to hove pow But mtie dine bond. gexpleoftenr forget thot they aut 't the only lermgs 00 the ple met Home, fae qlege plang Some. por ile Tne le buddies or ger cata pasa = think agai nie rot uno! Do The input material is directly copied as an introduction to this response, Once this is deducted from the word count the response is underiength at 194 words and so loses marks. Nevertheless the topic is addressed and a relevant position is expressed, although there are patches (as in the third paragraph) where the development is unclear. Other ideas are more evidently relevant, but are ‘sometimes insufficiently developed. In spite of tis, ideas are clearly organised and there is an overall progression within the response. There is some effective use ‘of a range of cohesive devices, including referencing, but there is also some mechanical over-use of linkers in places, Paragraphs are sometimes rather to0 short ‘and inappropriate. ‘Arrange of vocabulary is attempted and this is adequate for a good response to the task. However, control is weak and there are frequent spelling errors that can cause some difficulties for the reader, thus keeping the rating down forthe lexical criterion. ‘The test taker uses a mix of simple and complex structures with frequent subordinate clauses, Control of complex. structures is variable, and although errors are noticeable they only rarely impede understanding of the message, Although there are some features of a higher band in this response, flaws in the task response and the use of vocabulary limit this rating to Band 5. Sample response Band score awarded and examiner comments ‘Task 2 International Tourism — Response 8 i i a et — “Thun so 001) Hig dnductry cm the wadien time aud Ts gency quite Yagil. haus had pop howel_cxeryrchee, 6 serous detadions exer gent, —Aropoets baa come ug tegansing ie beetls ond neat iangncts of thom in pincus and cots deca ‘nhebitants ad over met hansee, 3 —hutiece there otra eduauteges Gran disedeuheeps ofp inkematiqnel durlon. fogs trael be vast Rasen My 2 bavet Se betes ures. abides dt — Sevds and itatines obs Transtiing 3s rest sexu af Rortatsioneh acti, Thue has ony odsauteges, Tein dua. on; trends pat in. cuss ecemorsga the mste utsts BAe a cauatty cand sjened nenray there tie beter As toe couatrys be Thad ny, ere anos Acad tin re crashy aiid even he sibility of aie cues ra oad pe E ma see ud aad. sha ge Sl ma ge ad Aectrones isos ines. Tasism ake Ms 3 Mens neettary edunateges TE blogs ult and yeple nse. gl form il arcu th wed geht nce eh cute Lai cas dec and te loken mare, Tics 0 30d ofpirttl de cbescnsnn Ton _serns © have. soe csadiauteges deo Hesse, 3 belive the prs caused by Heo, amet o vet the self -esteam, An individual may find the social. contact mest gratifying and_thig waxes people come ou! of their shells be more extrovert. Purchasing something , at well an sgnowing dhas you © Arancially able to penchase something gNe mere sel congidenc. +0 _peapig Tne increase in peputority 40 go shopgi ton_mon_effects ch the society, Reaple may be exosrage fo go ithe nee businessen wid it yall) prove thy ecoromy.. ere job opportunities coil be created or people in these businesses Encouraged by the increase of popularity manufackners uit try to mene heir product so hat Ake consumers con have @ wide Yange Of products at competitive prices, The overall qatity ke product os wetl_a» ihe servicer provided by tha cales chap alll be ‘wpcued More job oppartuhiticn iil _be created in _ advertising 05 the wonufaClurers Ary 40 sell hein product Consumers

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