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1-She needs to continue…

2- Wednesday at 2PM, further, she also needs…

3-Importanly, it is imperative: contact Dr Singh at earliest in case of bruising or appearance of any

symptoms and Lisa take her medicine as prescribed.

4- Everyday, however,

5-Please ensure that there should be…

6- Diet, avoid sweets and ice-cream

7- Must or should

8- in Pt private hospital

9-Further, as she had lost her hair, eyebrows and eyelashes, now it’s of worth importance for you
being her grandparents to ensure her that these will grow back, therefore for the first week you
should provide Lisa with cap to keep her confident. In-addition, kindly inform principle, firstly that she
won’t be coming to school till next Monday, secondly, she may feel tired occasionally. Further, she
must be encourage to participate in art and craft activities.

Overall task fulfilment-B+

Relevant case notes selected.

Writer has transformed the case notes in his/her own words.

Task centred to the needs of reader.

Appropriateness of the language-B

Most important information is prioritised.

Case notes are well organised.

Sentences organisation is not clear in the last paragraph, rest is OK.

Tone was OK

Avoid use simple sentences.

Salutations used correctly.

Abbreviations and medical terms used accurately.

Comprehension of stimulus-B

The most relevant information clearly stated.

Main purpose is clearly understood.

Linguistic features-C

Try to show the range of tenses.

 Avoid common grammatical mistakes (prepositions, conjunctions etc.)

Limited use of mix of long and short sentences.

Work on punctuations.

Presentation-B

Paragraphing was OK.

Appropriate letter format used.