Context: Today, students have been given a mini-lesson on how to incorporate a direct quote

into their writing and what the difference is between that and paraphrasing. They learned how to
introduce a quote and how to give commentary, along with proper MLA formatting. Last week,
they were given an assignment to draft an essay about what diversity means to them. They were
required to use at least one direct quote and one paraphrase in the essay.

Revision

1. Read through your draft about what diversity means to you.

2. Find one place where you included a direct quote, and one place where you paraphrased.
Highlight each.
3. Write the original versions of the quote and paraphrasing below. Then, revise and
improve them based on what you have learned in class about introducing quotes and
providing commentary. Tell me why it is better.
Quote / Paraphrase 1:

Revised:

Why is this better?

Quote / Paraphrase 2:

Revised:

Why is this better?