Style Academy Learning Log 3

March 17, 2020

“WRITING SENTENCES” - BYU Style Academy

Before: Myka sang. It surprised her mother.

After:
1) Myka sang, and it surprised her mother.
2) Her mother was surprised when Myka sang.
3) Myka’s singing surprised her mother.
4) Myka sang; it surprised her mother.
5) Myka surprised her mother with her singing.
6) Although it surprised her mother, Myka sang.
7) Myka’s mother was surprised with Myka’s singing.
8) Myka sang -- it surprised her mother.
9) Myka sang (it surprised her mother.)
10) Surprising her mother Myka sang.

Non-hibakusha employers developed a prejudice against the survivors as word got around that
they were prone to all sorts of ailments, and that even those, like Nakamura-san, who were not
curelly maimed and had not developed any serious overt symptoms were unreliable workers,
since most of them seemed to suffer, as she did, from the mysterious but real malaise that came
to be known as the one kind of lasting A-bomb sickness: a nagging weakness and weariness,
dizziness now and then, digestive troubles, all aggravated by a feeling of oppression, a sense of
doom, for it was said that unspeakable diseases might at any time plant nasty flowers in the
bodies of their victims, and even in those of their descendants.

March 19, 2020

“PHRASES AND CLAUSES” - Style Academy
Underline​ = phrase ​Independent​ ​Dependent
1) The fluffy puppy​ ran quickly​ to his owner ​across the yard,​ ​avoiding the mud​ ​while it
started to rain
2) Her frustrated mom​ yelled​ for her brother, ​telling him to go to his room​ ​while cleaning
the broken glass.
3) The patiently waiting teacher​ watched her class​ as the students ​noisily ran through the
room​ ​waiting for the ​end of school bell to ring.
“MORE CLAUSES” - Style Academy
Before:
Geopolitical conflicts between nations will always be with us. This doesn’t mean doesn’t
mean we need to be afraid of each other.
After:
● Geopolitical conflicts between nations will always be with us, however, this doesn’t
mean we need to be afraid of each other.
● Although geopolitical conflicts between nations will always be with us, this doesn’t mean
we need to be afraid of each other.
● We do not need to be afraid of each other, even though geopolitical conflicts between
nations will always be there.

March 23, 2020

“MANIPULATING SENTENCE PARTS” - Style Academy
Before:
● Snowden self-indulgently short-circuited the democratic structures of accountability.
He was putting his own preferences above everything else.
After:
● Putting his own preferences above everything else, Snowden self-indulgently
short-circuited the democratic structures of accountability.
● Snowden self-indulgently short-circuited the democratic structures of accountability,
putting his own preferences above everything else.
● Snowden, putting his own preferences above everything else, self-indulgently
short-circuited the democratice structures of accountability.
● Snowden put his own preferences above everything else, self-indulgently short-circuiting
the democratic structures of accountability.
March 25, 2020
“ UNDERSTANDING SENTENCE COMBINING” - Style Academy
Exercise 1:
People who become highly creative and productive learn to acknowledge, embrace, explore, and
learn from their failures.
Exercise 2:
1) In the late 1990s I could no longer see my feet; I made an appointment with a paris eye
doctor, who ran some tests, and then sent me to buy some glasses.
2) I’d like to blame my choices of frames on the fact that I couldn’t see them clearly.
3) I’d like to say they were forced upon me, but neither excuse is true.
4) I made the selection on my own free will; I chose them because I thought they made me
look smart and international.
5) The frames I chose were not much larger than my eyes; they were made of dark plastic
and had rectangular lenses.
6) There was something vaguely familiar about them, however I could not put my finer on
what it was.
 7) After picking the glasses up, I spent a great deal of time in front of the mirror; I pretended
to share intelligent comments regarding the state of Euro.
March 30, 2020
“PARTICIPLES AND PARTICIPIAL PHRASES” - Style Academy
● The girl, tired and hungry, rested on her crutches.
● Waiting for their father, the girls stood patiently in the road by the side of the car.
● Tugging at her dress the girl looked into the camera.
April 1, 2020
“WHAT 2020 WAS SUPPOSED TO BE” - Karsyn Short
Everyone was excited for the year 2020. Everyone said it was going to be a “party.” This
would be the year I graduated high school, enjoyed my last summer, and started college. 2020
was going to be a year to remember. I guess everyone will remember this year, but not for the
reasons we thought. The coronavirus, or COVID-19, has taken over the world -- literally.
Countries are shut down, all “non-essential” businesses are closed, citizens in every country are
quarantined to their houses, missionaries for The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints are
coming home, the economy is crashing, and people are dying.
It’s hard to believe that I am in the middle of my third week of online school and there is
a chance I won’t ever go back to school. That is my biggest fear -- not going back to school.
Something you would not expect to hear from a teenageer; I myself never thought I would say it,
but here we are. To think I won’t have a senior prom, walk the halls of Herriman High, or walk
across the stage to receive my diploma is terrifying. Everything I have been looking forward to,
has been taken by an invisible enemy.
Press Conferences, health officials, and even the President fill our minds with statistics
and what they call hope. Will life ever go back to normal?

April 14, 2020

“APPOSITIVES” - Style Academy
1) Drew Gilpin Faust, a historian and the first woman to serve as the president of Harvard
University, recently testified before the United States Congress to encourage the
government to fund more science research.
2) A diphthong is a vowel sound that kind of glides from one vowel sound to another, the
word “cow” contains a diphthong.
3) Saltair was once called the Coney Island of the West, built in 1893, on the southern
shore of the Great Salt Lake in Utah; Saltair was designed by Richard Kletting, a Utah
architect of German descent, and built by the Los Angeles and Salt Lake Railroad
Company.

April 16, 2020

“MY EMAIL TO THE GOVERNOR” - Karsyn Short
The Following is an email I sent to Governor Herbet on April 15th after his announcement to
close school for the rest of the year. I needed to release my frustrations and feelings. I wanted to
tell him what seniors all over the state are feeling.

My name is Karsyn Short, and I am a senior at Herriman High School. NO one quite understands
the pain associated with your recent announcement to cancel school as much as the graduation
class of 2020. We were upset to hear about the two week closure, heartbroken for the closure
through May 1st, and now disconsolate about the cancellation of our final month in high school.
For twelve years we have entered these school buildings ready and willing to learn. We have
built unbreakable relationships, surpassed the required work, and dreamed of the day we would
celebrate our hard earned efforts. We did nothing to have these dreams taken from us.

There are seniors who will never touch their high school home field again -- baseball, track and
field, tennis, soccer, golf, lacrosse, softball. Many skilled athletes have just lost their chance for a
college scholarship. Sterling Scholars will miss their banquet; dance teams their final recital.
Student body officers and class presidencies who have worked tirelessly, served their fellow
students for one last time, without even knowing it. Not to mention every other kid in the school
who impacted the lives of everyone they interacted with. Furthermore, the teachers who have
watched us grow and helped us to become the people that we are today, taught a lesson not
knowing those kids would never return.

There will be many who think this is a foolish thing to wish for. As teenagers we are stereotyed
as ungrateful, unmoativated, and “stupid.” However, as teenagers my school band together each
and every year to help those in need. I have met far more kind, loving, and genuine teenagers
than adults. Please remember your senior year and imagine what we are going through right now.
There will be no senior prom, no senior night, no yearbook signing, and maybe no graduation.
Our final months as kids are simply gone. I have not knowingly walked down the hallways, sat
in the auditorium, cheered for my school teams, ate lunch with my friends, and laughed with
classmates for the last time. Please hear our cries. There is nothing more we want right now than
to return to school. I stand up for the 800 seniors at my school alone, and beg you to give us the
chance. I know you cannot remove this virus, but take into consideration the Senior Class of
2020. I know this pandemic will end soon, so I beg you to hold the final cancellation and give us
the hope of returning to school.