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provide superlative guidance to script writers, novelists,
playwrights, and anyone who works with dialogue.
Dr. Linda Seger, acclaimed for her books Making a Good Script
Great and Creating Unforgettable Characters, has consulted How to Write
Great Dialogue
“Linda Seger’s skill as a writer and teacher are on full display in her latest
work, cowritten with John Rainey. This is a powerful resource for writers
in any genre, at any level of their craft, whether they’re just starting out
or are seasoned professionals. Their insights into what makes for com-
pelling dialogue are spot on.” —Susan Wiggs, bestselling novelist
“While story details from movies I’ve watched can flatten and fade, great
lines of dialogue remain grooved in my mind for years. What makes
great dialogue so memorable? Seger and Rainey have astutely analyzed
its essential qualities, and they suggest invaluable techniques for grap-
pling with the elusive art of making people sound like people.”
—Robin Swicord, Oscar nominated and WGA nominated screenwriter
“Is there any aspect of writing not affected by dialogue? Apparently not,
according to this terrific new book. You Talkin’ to Me? analyzes how, why,
and when people talk, showing how dialogue informs character, plot,
subtext, and backstory. It’s so complete I was (pardon the joke) ren-
dered speechless.” —Treva Silverman, Emmy Award winning sitcom
writer, WGA Award winner
“Everybody knows great dialogue when they hear it, but if you want to
write it you’re gonna need this book. Yeah.” —Ellen Sandler, author,
The TV Writer’s Workbook; co-executive producer, Everybody Loves
Raymond
“Find your writing voice by tuning your writer’s ear. Listen up. You Talkin’
to Me? is talking to you.” —John L. Geiger, coauthor, Creativity and
Copyright
“Indispensable . . . this a great companion to any filmmaker, and also a
great read.” —Dave Watson, author, Walkabout Undone
“Discover dialogue as the art form it truly is. This book will inspire you
to be intentional with the words your characters speak and to craft dia-
logue with great care, becoming a better storyteller as a result.”
—Tom Farr, writer, teacher, Huntsville, TX
“A bible of writing for the screen . . . any writer of any genre will find it
invaluable.”—Doreen Orion, author, Queen of the Road
Many thanks from Linda and John to our readers: Chuck Benson,
Page Clements, Devorah Cutler-Rubenstein. Debra Engle, Janice
Day, Glen Gatenby, Jean Maye, Anna-Maria Petricelli, Matthew
Purifoy, Lindsay Smith, Pamela Jaye Smith, Claire Elizabeth
Terry, Kathie Yoneda;
And to: Dan Laudo, owner of Script City, who sent us many
a script quickly as needed; Sue Terry and Matthew Purifoy, our
researchers; Katie Gardner, Linda’s dear assistant, who sat by
Linda’s side and laughed with her, corrected her sentences, and
let Linda and John know when they were on track and when they
were way off base; Riley Quinonez who filled in when Katie was
on vacation; Cindy Ahlgrim who is helping to market the book;
Peter Le Var, Linda’s husband, who has supported both of us and
who bought the champagne!
And thank you to all the anonymous writers who allowed us
to play with their scenes to get across the point in the chapter.
CO N TEN TS
FO REWORD BY MARK L. S M IT H
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Sorkin, who turn the spoken word into an art form of its own, but
for the most part, dialogue has one key necessity: to sound the
way real people speak. There are other valuable elements as well,
but whether it’s a Western filled with a mixed array of languages,
a postapocalyptic drama about a dying man and a young orphan,
or a sci-fi gangster flick, the characters need to come across as
authentic to the world and story they inhabit.
My earliest scripts were filled with colorful dialogue com-
ing out of every character’s mouth. I’d write the lines and smile
proudly . . . I couldn’t wait for others to read it and see how clev-
erly I could turn a phrase. Then I’d continue the process I men-
tioned earlier and send the finished product off to John, who
would usually return it with something like, “Stop trying to be
clever. People don’t talk like that.”
That was my first lesson in understanding the responsibility of
dialogue. It isn’t there just to sound good. Dialogue’s obligation
is to express character and move the story forward in the most
interesting way possible. It might come in a flourish of words or
in a single syllable. It’s all dependent on story and character. Mad
Max rarely speaks, while Deadpool rarely shuts up. Both are great
heroes. Hannibal Lecter has lines that will be repeated for gen-
erations. No Country for Old Men’s Anton Chigurh likely doesn’t
have a single line of dialogue you remember, but he’s still just as
fascinating a villain.
Dialogue exists to support the story and characters, not to
restrict them. If every character speaks in quick-witted bursts, all
your characters will begin to sound alike. At the same time, if all
your characters speak in simple and straight expositional terms,
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they run the risk of being boring. If one of your characters asks
another, “What color is the sky?”, don’t have the response be
“Blue.” That’s what the cameras are for. Have them answer, “Don’t
be a jerk, you know what color it is,” or “The same as it was before
you left,” or “Nothing like it was at home.” — whatever helps fur-
ther define them, their relationships, and the story you’re offering
to the audience.
Dialogue gives the audience a glimpse into the souls of the
characters. It not only helps us understand who they are, but also
what we’re supposed to be feeling as we watch their story unfold.
It can scare us, make us laugh, make us cry. That’s all up to the
writer. It just has to be believed.
Everything above I was first taught by Linda and John. Their
lessons are the ones I carry with me into every script I write.
That’s why I can’t imagine a better pair to author this book.
— Mark L. Smith
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INT RODU CTION
Linda:
I had long wanted to write a book on dialogue. I knew this was a book
I couldn’t write by myself because I’m not a screenwriter; I’m a script
consultant. I put this idea in the back of my mind for over ten years,
waiting for the right co-author to magically appear.
I had heard of John for many years but didn’t meet him until 2014
when we were both working on the same script — he as the screen-
writer and I as the script consultant. The producer and John came
to Colorado to work with me for eight days. I wondered how John
would respond to me, since he was also a respected and knowledge-
able script consultant. What I discovered was a terrific, creative rela-
tionship based partly on a shared vocabulary and partly on long years
of experience working with scripts. We both had master’s degrees in
drama. We both had professional experiences in drama, including act-
ing, teaching, and directing. We eventually learned that we were also
both pianists — which meant that we not only had a sense of rhythm
and tone and style, but when we took breaks, we could play piano
duets. After all, good writing is like music, and it’s supposed to be
fun as well. After working on several scripts together where I was the
script consultant and John was hired as the screenwriter, I asked John
if he would like to co-write this book. He gave me a hearty, “Yes!”
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John:
Although I’m not a book writer, per se, I was elated and humbled
to be asked by Linda to co-write a book on dialogue with her.
After all, she was this famous writer of screenwriting books and a
notable script consultant who virtually single-handedly invented
the profession, which has since become a flourishing cottage
industry. As we worked together on this book (quite compatibly,
I might add), we became close friends as well as professional col-
leagues, and not just because we could both play piano. I continue
to be honored to have my name associated with the great teacher,
lecturer, mentor, and writer that is Dr. Linda Seger.
Both of us:
Dialogue is dialogue, no matter where you may find it. In this
book, you will read many examples of dialogue, some of which
come from classic films and novels, some from television, and
some from plays. In all cases, we tried to find the best examples
of the point we’re making, so some examples are old (Yes, there’s
even a touch of Shakespeare!) and some examples are new (Amy
Sherman-Palladino, who created The Marvelous Mrs. Maisel;
Shonda Rhimes, who created Grey’s Anatomy; George R. R.
Martin, who created the world of Game of Thrones). If the writer
of the dialogue isn’t credited, John made that bit of dialogue up.
In this book, we will explain all the techniques to build the
skills necessary to write great dialogue. It doesn’t matter if you’re
a screenwriter, a playwright, a novelist, or a nonfiction writer who
might need to tell a story with dialogue to illustrate a point. Even
poets use dialogue — poets like Robert Browning, who wrote the
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INTRODUCTION
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CH AP TE R 1
Defining Great
Dialogue
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and an alien who doesn’t speak the native language, such as in the
movie Arrival. It could be between a person and a responsive dog
who barks, growls, whines, howls, whimpers, huffs, yelps, or yips.
It might even be between two animals, like in the film Babe.
It can include any interchange of human sounds, such as
responsive “oohs” and “aahs” between two lovers, or grunts and
groans between two prehistoric people. Some characters create
their own special primitive language. In Quest for Fire, Rae Dawn
Chong out-grunts the Neanderthals and shares her fire-mak-
ing skill. Even without conversation as we generally think of it,
there is still interaction through vocalizations in those films that
lends a sense of communication and shows the nature of the
relationships.
But dialogue can also be used for individual expression, as in
a monologue (a monologue being a long speech by a single char-
acter either to another character or to themselves). People talk
to themselves. Sometimes, characters scold themselves, as if two
internal parts are talking to each other. Andy Serkis as Gollum
in The Lord of the Rings series found himself creating two voices
for one character. Characters compliment themselves in mir-
rors or kick themselves in private for some public faux pas. Al
Swearengen in Deadwood carries on one-way conversations with
a Comanche chief ’s severed, rotting head in a wooden box on a
shelf. Tom Hanks talks to a volleyball in Cast Away.
Characters talk to gods and angels, fairies and trees, nonre-
sponsive deer and crows, gnus and boxing kangaroos. Writers
have to write the phrases and critter sounds, even if the mythical
beings and descendants of passengers on Noah’s Ark don’t seem
to care what is being said.
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C A N YOU L EA R N TO W R I T E GR E AT DIALO G U E ?
There are many who say that dialogue can’t be taught. We don’t
believe that. It’s true that it helps to have an excellent ear for
how people talk. Dialogue uses the same elements that we find
in music — sound, rhythm, dynamics, themes, and countermel-
odies or counterpoints — as well as language tools — grammar,
punctuation, and syntax. If you can walk, you can learn to dance.
If you can talk and listen, you can learn to write dialogue. If you
can write a letter, you can learn to write a novel or a screenplay.
It’s a craft that can be developed and, as with any craft, you can get
better and better. Art evolves with the perfection and eventually
the transcending of craft.
To write great dialogue, you must persevere and keep looking
for the right word or phrase, even if it takes ten or twenty drafts.
Great writers strive to make dialogue sound like casual conver-
sation. But no conversation in dramatic writing is casual to the
writer. Through constant honing, dialogue can become poetry
in the mouths of characters. Great dialogue writers like David
Mamet, Harold Pinter, Samuel Beckett, and Toni Morrison,
among others, work to minimalize dialogue while delivering the
essence of the character. In their cases, they subtract and hone
rather than add and expand: Less is more.
In the novel Beloved, Toni Morrison gets to the point real fast:
“Love is or it ain’t. Thin love ain’t love at all.”
Harold Pinter deliberately makes the actor stop and let the
words sink in for the audience. He is known for his pauses and
his silences and for saying a lot with very few words. It’s all in the
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subtext and how it’s delivered. In his play and movie Betrayal,
Jerry and Emma slow down the dialogue to allow time for the
emotions of the moment.
HOWARD
I don’t have to tell you things
are bad. Everybody knows things
are bad. It’s a depression.
Everybody’s out of work or scared
of losing their job. The dollar
buys a nickel’s worth. Banks are
going bust. Shopkeepers keep a
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Howard Beale has a lot to say. However, unlike with amateur chit-
chat, the “on and on” of great writers actually goes somewhere!
With careful crafting, these writers make sure the reader or viewer
will take the journey through their sea of character chatter.
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HOW D O YO U L E A R N TO DO I T ?
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BE REA DY TO ME E T T H E C H AR AC T E R
OF YO UR D RE A MS
And her upward lilt lifted the plane another thousand feet . . .
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character. She asked the woman how long she was staying in Los
Angeles and the woman replied, “One naaht.” She added proudly,
“And Aaah’m payin’ maah own way.” There were loads of subtex-
tual details there. If Linda were a screenwriter instead of a script
consultant, she would’ve milked the moment for all the character
information she could get.
By the third bourbon, this woman had started a conversation
about their sex life. Linda decided that it was too much informa-
tion and changed the direction of the conversation. However, if
John, the screenwriter, had been there, he would’ve allowed her
to continue and asked questions to get more: “And then what
happened?” “Wow! Fascinating!” “He actually did that?”
The actor Peter Sellers (no, he wasn’t at the airport greet-
ing Miss Scarlett!) said that once he finds the character’s voice,
every other aspect of the character falls into place for him. We, as
writers, can take that to heart because Mr. Sellers was a genius at
inventing characterization. So is Meryl Streep, who uses the same
approach. Joanne Woodward merely needed to find the right hat
for the character’s voice to take her over. Writers channel the spe-
cific character’s voice when writing dialogue. Actors then channel
it once again.
Good dialogue reveals character. Great dialogue reveals
a wealth of information about character. Layers and layers of
psychology, background, education, and life experience can be
revealed without ever describing it literally, all through the use
of specifically selected dialogue. The word “specific” is used often
in this book because if dialogue is nothing else, it’s specificity of
language according to the particular character’s voice.
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INSPECTOR CLOUSEAU
Do you have a rheum?
INSPECTOR CLOUSEAU
(Checks his translation book)
Zimmer.
INSPECTOR CLOUSEAU
That is what I have been saying,
you idiot. A rheum.
(Gesturing to the hotel dog)
Does your dog bite?
INSPECTOR CLOUSEAU
I thought you said your dog did
not bite!
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W HAT D O W E N E E D TO K NOW A B O U T
THE C HA RAC T E R ?
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It doesn’t matter how bad an actor you are. It’s still going to sound
pretty good.
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C AS E S T U DY
This first case study uses your own writing. Take a few pages of
dialogue from your project — whether a screenplay, novel, short
story, or play. Your project will travel with you throughout this
entire book. As you read each chapter, think about how the
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CH AP TE R 2
Revealing the
Character
The reader and audience usually meet a character for the first
time through description or by seeing the character appear on the
screen. These first impressions can tell us about the character’s
gender, age, race, social orientation, educational level, income
level, and even personality. These impressions will be further
reinforced or contradicted as soon as the character speaks. This is
the power and purpose of dialogue.
Dialogue can’t be separated from the character who is deliv-
ering the words. Each character has a distinct world. While
characters in one particular group may speak in a similar man-
ner, each will have a unique voice. It’s the writer’s job to cre-
ate authentic dialogue that reveals the dimensionality of each
individual character. Here are some of the many revelations that
dialogue shows.
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D I A LOG UE C AN R E V E A L AT T IT U DE S
Dialogue can reveal the way the character feels and thinks about a
topic. Characters have attitudes and opinions on subjects big and
small. Perhaps a character says:
What does this tell us? This person is a Red Sox fan? A native of
Boston? Or a disappointed Yankees fan? Maybe a critic in gen-
eral? This sentence begins to reveal the character and the attitude.
The dialogue that follows will clarify for us more about the char-
acter as the story unfolds.
Imagine a woman who says:
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D I A LOG UE HE L P S U S U N DE R STAND
C HA RAC T ER R E L AT I O NS H I P S
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D I A LOG UE T E L L S U S A B O U T C H AR ACT E R
BAC KG RO UN D AND U P B R I NGI NG
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Not only do we learn how he overcame his fear of heights, but this
line also implies that he grew up in a rural area that may not have
been as restrictive as an urban upbringing.
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“I’m off to the pub for a pint with the lads.” (British)
Or
“Weaall, ya’ll aughta know bah nayow thet ah aym the lawr
‘round heauh.” (West Virginia Appalachians. In case the
transliterated dialect is indecipherable, this translates to
“Well, you all know by now that I am the law around here.”)
Or
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