1al Quotation: “Many colleges do not ensure that students acquire [work readiness] skills. One survey of employers, for example, found that recent college graduates lack basic workplace proficiencies like adaptability, communication skills, and the ability to work in groups and solve complex problems. The National Association of Manufacturers reports that its members are most in need of employees with strong basic employability skills (such as timeliness and work ethic)” (Stone 6), Instrueto Paraphrase: Currently, colleges seem to be failing to prepare students for many of the social aspects of the workplace, For example, employers have indicated that they want—and aren't gotting—basic workplace skills, such as team work and communication skills, from their new college-educated employees. How has language How has structure changed? changed? Language is less The quote has been formal as the condensed from 3 sentences are being sentences to 2. The translated so that they second and third ‘can express the same sentence of the idea in different original quote have words. bboen portioned off and combined 10 “Seems” is qualified. create a more coherent sentence, 2 dashes gives greater urgency. How has meaning changed? ‘There isn’t any ‘mention of a survey oor The National Association of | Manufacturers, so in context ofa larger paper, this translated version might seem less reliable or official compared to the original quote, "*Modified from Suzanne Lane's [WAC 2014 Presentation HandoutOriginal Quotation: Despite Victor’s insistence on his perfect childhood, his reaction to this “remarkably secluded and domestic” home life (p. 51) is in fact conflicted. On the one hhand, he is “reluctant” to leave home for university, because there he will have to be “{his) ‘own protector”; on the other hand, he has often felt “cooped up” at home and has “longed to enter the world” (p. 51). This admission jars, especially when one compares it with Victor’s earlier statement that “gratitude” to his parents “assisted the development of filial, love” (p. 45). I want to argue, however, that it is this very gratitude which makes him feel “coped up” (Smith 319). How has language How has structure How has meaning changed? changed? changed? Group's Paraphrase: The quotes have been Changed from 4 1s lost some visual Smith claims that simplified and there sentences to 2. credibility because Victor's appreciation are not quotes being Changed it from there are no direct for his parents and his used. I's less formal Smith stating and __quotations, but the ‘deal childhood has because it's more saying “Iwant to meaning remains the caused him to develop condensed, argue” into a third same, asense of person argument, confinement. Victor's feeling of being ‘rapped is contrasted. ‘with 2 hesitation to ‘embark alone on his ‘own journey.