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Comments For Polished Text Essay
Comments For Polished Text Essay
Professor Ditch
English 113B
11 May 2020
First paragraph:
1) Switch dates.
Second paragraph:
1) Ahem…. Really?
2) Okay now connect this with an article from Pursuing happiness for further support.
Third paragraph:
1) Remember as I stated in class, analyze each character separately. Don’t go back and
Fourth paragraph:
1) Again, change the organization of the entire paper. Analyze them one at a time.
2) This would work if you had evidence. You need quotes from the article and novel.
3) Same here, there is no evidence.
Fifth paragraph:
2) All of this is too general. You need to thoroughly analyze the outside sources and