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Please waite back once you've been able to review them with your feedback. And then tell me next steps! Diana H. Fishbein, PhD. ‘Sele Rese Foul Deprmet fHunan Deeopent an Fay Sis Dirctor Progam for Narltal RewarchenAavery and Neardeeopmen ‘herman Ste Unvesty Univenty Pa PA 2 ‘Sidney Carson wr 26,209 Hiern, “Thankyou so mich for ating hs back o me. wil mk seo be lar on mesin the future, bu appreciate you taking he te ot of our schedule ihe Tho coment ae extremly Mtl ana wit prema my as moe cea, Al Ube ty exo tae whch can ao eas Feeundant ow work on a lng win game! an pra. “The nxt stops ince wg fina alt hs paper, poshly hing a presentation ten ndpendent esearch conference, an laing ajc out ‘oat ear lomeintonentene isk toward desieong tase wih you inthe tae es, Seyout ea you aed my tr inertia rd Tanyou rach you bl ev ened mah stl Ne es Se reeset psi ons ton att tetany one Say" ‘a Sidney Carlson shared a file with you Hi Denni! Attached is the finished background paper on the difficulties of aging out. Would you be able to look over it and send me your thoughts by March 3rd? Any criticism would be helpful. | want to make sure it is concise and clear. It is 16 pages of content and |I'm excited to know what you think. Thank you so much, Sidney I=) Sidney Carlson's Foster Care Papert his link only works for the direct recipients of this messageFstiben Dina <@vtS211@psuedv> ae eee 2 56> Foster Care Paper V1_DF doce Hi Sidney this is excellent! The amount of research and thought you put into this paper is quite evident. You will ‘soon bean expert on transitional foster care youth! [edited throughout and made some comments but you will notice that, toward the end, I petered out @ . Ifyou ould just finish by making sure that generalizations and global statements about this population are toned down, that ‘ill further improve the paper. added some comments to that effect which wil help to clarify what I'm suggesting. ‘The larger issue isthe organization of the paper. I don’t believe anything is missing, unclear or needs tobe rewritten But [think it's needs some restructuring. There are 3 developmental periods (childhood, adolescence and transition te adulthood), several domains of functioning (eg. behavioral and mental health, substance abuse, edveational performance, social competences, et), overall consequences, and implications Gr solutions. The problem is that the harrative goes back and forth al throughout the paper so that these topics are mentioned in several different places, and sometimes a bit muddled together. For example, sometimes in the same paragraph, you're referring to both children and adults r to mental health and education. T might sugges the following outine to increase coherence. ‘The subheadings don’t have tobe in this order ~ whatever you prefer ~ but you definitely need subheadings 1. The nature of foster care —a general overview about the system and how it is structured negative attributes TL, _Impacts of foster care on child development a, Brain and cognition Eaueational abilities, ¢. Behavioral and mental health 4, Social competencies IL, "Impact of FC on adolescent development «, Brain and cognition yluding its1 0. m1, Vv. v. Vi. Again, this is just a way to organize the paper. All the material is there so it's just a matter of consolidating simi “The nature of foster care ~ a general overview about the system and how its structured, including its negative attributes Impacts of foster care on child development ‘a Brain and cognition bb Educational abilities ¢. Behavioral and mental health 4, Social competencies Impact of FC on adolescent development ‘a Brain and cognition bb Educational abilities ©, Behavioral and mental health 4, Social competencies ‘Special issues for transitioning to adulthood (see what works best given the topics you covered ~ these are just off the top) ‘a Lack of medical and mental health care bb, Emancipation 6, Lack of preparation for autonomy and self sufficiency 4. Risks for mental health problems «, Circumstances that lead to risky behaviors 1 Ete. Implications for the ability to sueceed in life overall Possible solutions and/or need to attend to these issues (like what you have at the very end) topics in the same section so it’s not jumping around. I think the best way to do that is by developmental stage. Please tll me if this makes sense and whether you need additional guidance. Happy to help! ° eee ‘Te Pomsyvan Sie Uniersty Univesity Pak PA, 16802 itr, Nationa Prevecon Sine Conon to Inprove Lives sesame Label: Pge ser ems (0 dys Expres Th 23/2020 6409 Sidney Cason Fate Diana <2 @peuede> ¥ ‘This is super helpful. Thank you so much for your great ideas. | really appreciate your comment psyched fo make the changes that you recommend. have been tying o organize the paper and ‘eliminate repetition. o56> Het you know if | get into trouble withthe re-write. ‘Thanks again, Sidney