Draft

1. INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH.
A. Hook
What the blue zone?

B. Thesis statement (topic sentence + the controlling idea)

In my humble opinion longevity could involve, marriage, careers and
overpopulation. (Thesis statement + the controlling idea)

2. BODY PARA GRAPH:

A. TOPIC SENTENCE 1: If people would live longer, they could do things that they
didn’t have time in the past. (topic sentence) For example, if they lived longer,
they would be able to get married as much as they can, they would receive a lot of
proposals. (supporting details)

B. TOPIC SENTENCE 2: If they have a longer life, they can study a lot of things
(topic sentence). For example, they would take advantages and put off a year or a
decade without any problem. They would go after what they really want, “passion “or
“inspiration”. They would be changing the routine of studying 5 years (supporting
details)

C. TOPIC SENTENCE 3: If they discovered life expectancy, it would generate

overpopulation (topic sentence). It apparently sounds good because they could make
a better world, they can donate things, rebuild continents like Africa, or eliminate
poverty (supporting details)

3. CONCLUSION:
In brief, the use of genetic manipulation with humans to increase life span is a
complete mystery.