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Definition Essay
October 1, 2020
Many residents of the state of Virginia would define the state to be full of lovers,
after all, that is the state motto. However, citizens of Virginia seem to forget another
adjective to describe their home state, strong. When one thinks about the word strong,
they associate it with arms or muscles, but when I say strong I mean the ability to
overcome obstacles or tragedies and come out united and together as one. Virginia has
seen many major events since it was established as a state back in 1776, from
tragedies to nation altering decisions. Virginia comes out more united and stronger than
Virginia earns the right to be classified as a strong state due to the history
associated with the state. Virginia was the first landing spot for European travelers in
their search for a new world. The newly displaced settlers made their new homes in
Jamestown, Virginia. In Jamestown, the settlers faced diseases, harsh winters, and
starvation. Hundreds died in this period and instead of giving up the colonists kept
fighting on to forge for a new and better future. In later years, Virginia would be the
battleground for many wars including the Revolutionary and Civil wars. According to
Legends of America, “Over 2,000 military events took place in the state of Virginia
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during that time frame, more than any other state.” Even with thousands of Virginia
citizens dead and the landscape burned or ruined by the bloodied war scenes, the
people of Virginia never gave up or were deterred, they were strong-willed and ready for
anything.
Virginia has faced tragedy numerous times in the past twenty years. These
tragedies, however, are different than the ones faced in Jamestown. These tragedies
have not only united the state of Virginia but also the entire nation felt the impacts of
these events. One of these tragedies happened on the day that changed the nation,
September 11, 2001. The Pentagon is located in Arlington, Virginia, and is the
military for our nation. On that September day, a hijacked plane crashed into the
Pentagon as well the Twin Towers and a field in Pennsylvania. Thousands of people
lost their lives that day and led to a unified nation working together to fight evil. Another
tragic event took place on April 16, 2007, when a young man began open fire at Virginia
Tech. Around 30 students and teachers lost their lives that day. Due to this shooting,
many colleges showed support for Virginia Tech and the Virginia community by making
signs, releasing balloons, and having candlelit services. Pennsylvania State, President
George Bush, and even Virginia Tech’s rival the University of Virginia paid their respect
to the fallen victims and their loved ones. This shows the strength and resilience of
Virginians have faced many challenges throughout their history and have proved
themselves to be able to bounce back even stronger and united. It is in the blood of
Virginians to be strong-willed and optimistic. Some may define these events as weak or
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not important, but it is our history. Other states have faced tragedies in their life too, but
through all types of horrific events, Virginians have shown their strength and have
earned the right to be labeled as strong. It is truly an honor to be a Virginian born and
raised.
General Reaction -- Read your classmate's piece quickly to Grace has a good example of why Virginia is strong. She
understand its ideas. Write a few sentences addressing your also used great examples of parasitism and how Virginia’s
first impressions about it. Is it well organized? citizens became strong through hardship. This essay was
Has it fulfilled the assignment of defining a word or term? very factual.
Was the essay entertaining? If not, what needs to be done to
it?
What is the main point? In other words: how is the The word strong is being defined as persevering through an
word/term being defined through the author’s perspective? event, but could have different reasoning through each
What is the dominant impression? What stands out the most essay.
about this word/concept?
Which parts of the paper detract from the purpose? A lot of facts are good, but make sure you have separate
What is unnecessary? Make sure the writing is concise and reasoning for each.
to the point. Take out any words, phrase, or ideas that are
repeated unnecessarily, which sound flowery, or which
“pad” rather than add to the definition.
Has the writer composed a strong intro. with a creative She has a good intro, but should add more to the thesis. She
attention grabber that makes the reader want to read more? has a strong conclusion.
Is the conclusion strong? Does it restate the thesis?
Has the author used appropriate elements to expand the She uses lots of facts and facts.
definition? For instance: personification, analogies, word
pictures, connotations, quotations, media use, etc.
Suggestions: Offer the writer at least two specific 1. Add more details to the meaning of your thesis
suggestions that might help him improve the essay. Think
of questions you had while reading: did it make sense?
Were you able to follow along? These may be questions 2. More transitions
that your classmate will want to answer in the next draft.
Please do not write, “It was good,” or something like that.
Please offer suggestions for improvement. Compliment: Well written facts, good hook, and has lot of
What compliment can you give this writer? potentional
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