I have edited many parts and am included the updated version as the writer did not

properly include the right information as to how the questionnaire was administered.
The METHODS section was changed. Please pay close attention to it, especially
PARTICIPANTS, APPARATUS, and PROCEDURE.

WHAT I NEED FROM THE WRITER:

• My results was NOT included in the data! This needs to be completely redone. I
have added my data set to the chart at the end but did not add the Totals, Mean or
Standard Deviation.
To be clear, my data set is the following:
Amount Given is 4
Liberal/Conservative is 5
Compassion is 64
It is on the last line in the chart already.
• Where is the rest of the calculations!? Please refer to the student example again at
the very end of the paper.
• For the RESULTS, the Amount Given was not discussed in the findings or
compared.
• WHERE IS THE DISCUSSION? This needs to be added as it is vitally important.
• There is a lot of oddly structured sentences in the introduction I am reading. Can
this be cleaned up please
◦ Also, in the introduction it is suppose to be written in past tense and in third
person which some parts are not. I had cleaned it up but can this be doubled
checked.
• In the introduction based on the articles you provided, you are suppose to
hypothesize (in general terms) the likely outcome of your experiment. In the
introduction it should be stated as “It is hypothesized that (example: depth
judgements made by elderly individuals are less accurate than those made by
young individuals). PLEASE CHECK THE LABROTORY WRITE UP.