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Abby Edwards

Mrs. Jackie Burr, Instructor

English 2010, Section 3

28 April 2021

Learning Log - Unit 3

Day 1: March 24, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Cover The Basics - Writing Sentences

1. Myka sang, and it surprised her mother.

2. Myka was singing, and it surprised her mother.
3. It surprised her mother when Myka sang.
4. Myka sang in her car, and it surprised her mother.
5. The way Myka sang, quite the opposite of her opera-singer sister, surprised her
mother.
6. Myka, surprising her mother, sang.
7. Myka surprised her mother by singing.
8. Myka’s mother was surprised when she sang.
9. Myka sang, in the middle of the night, and it surprised her mother.
10. By singing, Myka surprised her mother.
11. “ Non-hibakusha employers developed a prejudice against the survivors as word
got around that they were prone to all sorts of ailments, an that even those like
Nakamura-san, who were not cruelly maimed and had not developed any serious
overt symptoms were unreliable workers, since most of them seemed to suffer, as
she did, from the mysterious but real malaise that came to be known as one kind
of lasting, A-bomb sickness: a nagging weakness and weariness, dizziness now
and then, digestive troubles, all aggravated by a feeling of oppression, a sense of
doom, for it was said that unspeakable diseases might at any time plant nasty
flowers in the bodies of their victims, and even in those of their descendants.” -
John Hershey

Day 2: April 5, 2021

BYU Style Academy: More Clauses (Adverbial Clauses)

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1. Geopolitical conflicts between nations will always be with us, but this doesn’t
mean we need to be afraid of each other.
2. We don’t need to be afraid of each other, even though geopolitical conflicts
between nations will always be with us.
3. While geopolitical conflicts between national will always be with us, this doesn’t
mean we need to be afraid of each other.
4. As long as Lise could remember, even before her family moved into the small
cottage in the Austrian countryside with the little windmill out in the front yard,
her family had to listen to the radio in secret, after the curtains were
drawn and the doors locked tight.

Day 3: April 7, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Manipulating Sentence Parts for Effect

1. Snowden, putting his own preferences above everything else, self-indulgently

short-cirucited the democratic structures of accountability.
2. Snowden self-indulgently short-circuited the democratic structures of
accountability, effectively putting his own preferences above everything else.
3. By putting his own preferences above everything else, Snowden self-indulgently
short-circuited the democratic structures of accountability.
4. From feedlots to slaughterhouses, and eventually, hamburger grinders,
pathogens from infected cattle are spread. In the slaughterhouse, the shedding of
the animal’s hide provides the highest risk of contaminating the meat, followed
closely by the dangerous removal of the digestive system. The hides are then
pulled from the animal by a machine, before being cleaned, during which process,
chunks of first and manure may fall from the hide to land on the meat. The
contents of the digestive system may spill everywhere it not removed carefully, so
workers are cautious as they pull the intestines and stomach from the animal
carcass by hand. Unfortunately, speed overrules caution on a production line,
which makes the task of removing the guts much more difficult. For reference, a
single worker at a “gut table” may eviscerate sixty cattle an hour. It takes a fair
amount of skill to perform the job, as you can imagine. I spoke with a former IBP
“gutter”, who informed me that it took him six months to learn how to pull out
the stomach and tie off the intestines without spillage. His best work was gutting
200 consecutive cattle without spilling anything. Contrary to the former “gutter”,
inexperienced gutters spill very often. The hourly spillage rate at the gut table
runs high, sometimes even at 20 percent; stomach contents splatter one out of
five carcasses. This IBP slaughterhouse is in Lexington, Nebraska, one of many
across the nation.
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Day 4: April 12, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Sentence Combining

1. People who become highly creative and productive learn to acknowledge,

embrace, explore, and learn from their failures.
2. While in Paris, I realized I could no longer see my feet, so I made an appointment
with an eye doctor; he ran some tests and quickly sent me off to buy some glasses.
Looking back, I’d like to blame my choice of frames on the fact that I couldn’t see
them clearly; that they were forced upon me. Neither excuse is true. I chose the
frames on my own free will, thinking they made me look smart and international.
The dark plastic-encased rectangular lenses were not much larger than my eyes.
There was something vaguely familiar about them, but I couldn’t quite put my
finger on it.

Day 5: April 14, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Participles

1. The girl, giving into the pain emanating from her foot, rested on her
crutches, nudging toward the side of car in hopes of leaning up against it.

Day 6: April 19, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Appositives

1. An appositive is renaming or providing new information to a noun or noun

phrase that it is next to.
2. Type I - Identify and Rename (an individual)
3. Type II - Explain or give examples (for previous information)
4. Type III - Define (insert the definition as an appositive)
5. Type IV - Summarize (reviews a key term you’ve already given)
6. Drew Gilpin Faust, a historian and the first woman to serve as president of
Harvard University, recently testified before the United States Congress to
encourage the government to fund more science research.
7. The word cow contains a dipthong - a vowel sound that
8. Built in 1893 by the Los Angeles and Salt Lake Railroad Company, Saltair, which
sits on the southern shore of the Great Salt Lake in Utah, was once called the
Coney Island of the West, designed by a famous Utah architect of German
descent -- Richard Kletting.
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Day 7: April 21, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Absolutes

1. One student, his clothes soaked from the rainstorm outside, came stumbling
through the door in the middle of the exam.
2. An absolute looks like a noun phrase, but it’s missing the be verb so it functions
as a clause instead.
3. The rowdy pack of paparazzi, their cameras snapping like crazy, stepped
over themselves trying to get a shot of the just-married celebrities.
4. Cameras snapping like crazy, the rowdy pack of paparazzi stepped over
themselves trying to get a shot of the just-married celebrities.
5. The rowdy pack of paparazzi stepped over themselves trying to get a shot of the
just-married celebrities, their cameras snapping like crazy.
6. The mild morning sun was peeking over the mountains, spilling out on the crowd
below, including the politicians lined up on the sidewalk and the protestors
cornered three block away, the conditions for the opening ceremony could not
have been more ideal.
7. The state’s leading microbiologist -- casting her notes aside -- took the witness
stand.
8. My mother frowned, accentuating the growing wrinkle lines that were sprouting
beside the corners of her mouth.
9. The graduating class of 2014 -- oozing with ambition and a new sense of zeal --
went boldly into the labor market to find work.

Day 8: April 26, 2021

BYU Style Academy: Active Sentences

1. The university needs to investigate how students use laptops in their classes.
2. No slow starts, find the actors in the sentence and begin the clause with the
actors, give actors actions by avoiding nominalizations.
3. The chemist’s analysis of the neurotransmitter serotonin have helped
pharmaceutical companies develop drugs for depression.
4. Wearing bicycling shorts while shopping can cause stares from other shoppers.
5. The dramatic plummeting of the student’s grade point average can be attributed
to their decision to stay home, eat tortilla chips, and play League of Legends on
the computer.

Day 9: April 28, 2021

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BYU Style Academy: Sentence Balance, Tropes, and Schemes

1. If-then, not-but, not only-but also, from-to, either-or, neither-nor.

2. “ Our worst enemies here are not the ignorant and simple, however cruel; our
worst enemies are intelligent and corrupt.” - Henry Graham Greene
3. The Founding Fathers were terrified of the sanctity of church merging with the
mess of state, so they created the Establishment clause to ensure that the two
would never meet, a collision that would ensure the downfall of democracy. If
these men trembled so terribly at the thought of religion in government, then why
did they insist on a Christian prayer to open sessions of Congress?
4. Better the dramatic mistakes of youth that cause what seem like endless parental
lectures than the wiseness of old age that simmers in the back of the mind to
prevent making the same youthful mistakes twice.