CEL 2103 WRITING ACADEMIC TEXTS

SEMESTER 2, 2020/2021

CLASS MATERIAL WEEK 9

Developing Concluding Paragraph

The concluding paragraph closes the essay and the issue discussed. The aim is to convince
the reader that the essay has covered all the most important arguments about the issue and
that the evidence presented is the best position on the issue. The concluding paragraph
represents the final opportunity for the writer to affirm his or her opinion regarding the issue.

Activity 1
List the four components of a concluding paragraph of an argumentative essay in the space
provided.

1. ___________________________________________________________________

2. ___________________________________________________________________

3. ___________________________________________________________________

4. ___________________________________________________________________

Activity 2
Read the concluding paragraphs below and answer the questions.

Paragraph 1
Thesis statement: Social network eases communication and learning process.

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In conclusion, social network has greatly changed the way people interact with each
other and absorbed information. 2With the widespread use of social network, it is now easier
for people to communicate and attain knowledge. 3Although social network can be used to
cause a certain amount of harm, it does an equal amount of good. 4The outcome, as in any
other matters, depends on the users themselves. 5Thus, it is up to the users to have the
sense to wield the social network sensibly and with thought on the consequences it has on
themselves and others.

1. Which sentence restates the importance of the issue?

Sentence number: __________

2. Which sentence restates the thesis statement?

Sentence number: __________

3. Which sentence summarises the opposing view?

Sentence number: __________
4. What is the call for action that the author mentioned in the paragraph?

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Paragraph 2
Thesis statement: Childcare provides conducive learning environment for children and
allows members of a community to contribute to child development.

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Overall, having proper childcare facilities is seen as a crucial necessity in child
development. 2Childcare would provide not only an advantageous learning environment to
the young but also allow the sharing of skills by productive members within the community.
3
Although some parents may believe that such facility is not an essential and more of a
luxury, they fail to realise that childcare is more than just a place where their children can
develop their social skills. 4It can also provide employment opportunities for adults that have
relevant skill sets. 5If the society fails to meet the obligations in this area, the nation will be
sacrificing its present and future well-being merely in order to appease out-dated notions of
family life and to achieve short-term financial savings.

1. Which sentence restates the importance of the issue?

Sentence number: __________

2. Which sentence restates the thesis statement?

Sentence number: __________

3. Which sentence summarises the opposing view?

Sentence number: __________

4. What is the prediction made by the author in the paragraph?

______________________________________________________________________

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Paragraph 3
Thesis statement: Children of single parent can be just as developed emotionally and

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 socially as those with two parents.

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To summarise, whether it is a mother and a father, a single mother, or a single father,
children need guidance growing up. 2They will become a product of what they are taught
from a young age. 3Children of single parents are no exception; these children can mature
emotionally and socially. 4Although there are children raised in a single parent’s household
who faced some difficulties growing up, there are also those who manage to grow up normal
despite being raised by a single parent. 5Whichever the family structure is implied, children
must be raised in an environment that emphasises on respect and strong moral values that
can shape the children’s future.

1. Which sentence restates the importance of the issue?

Sentence number: __________

2. Which sentence restates the thesis statement?

Sentence number: __________

3. Which sentence summarises the opposing view?

Sentence number: __________

4. What is the suggestion made by the author in the paragraph?

______________________________________________________________________

______________________________________________________________________

Activity 3
Read the introductory paragraphs below and answer the following questions.

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Paragraph 1
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Throughout history, society has looked upon the male as the breadwinner, the one
expected to work and support the family; whereas, the mother has been viewed as the
nurturer, the one to stay home and raise the children. 2Throughout history, women wanted
more rights, power, and the ability to get higher paying jobs. 3Women were given this right so
they expressed this new found freedom by going to work outside of the home. 4As women
sought employment, their children were left to the care of babysitters and day care workers.
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Because society has redefined the role of a mother to be one who is an important element
in the workforce, the loss of the mother in the home has led to the decline of the family unit,
and thus, to society. 6This forfeiture has created a generation for whom social morals and
values are not as important as they once were. 7A large percentage of working mothers
disagree with the belief that their absence from home causes all the problems in the society
as there are many other external factors that may contribute to the behavioural problems in
children. 8Their views may be true; however, in order to return to a culture with better morals
and values, the importance of the role of stay at home mothers should be restored as they
hold the power to shape their children’s behaviour and mothers’ involvement in children’s
lives has proven to increase the children’s academic performance.

Which sentence discusses the importance of the issue?

Sentence number: __________

Which sentence is the thesis statement?

Sentence number: __________

Write the two components above as part of the concluding paragraph.

Overall, as redefined by society mother play an important part in workforce,

disappearance of mother in home has led to decrease of family unit and also the society.
This cause a generation with less social morals and values that before to be born. Stay at
home mother play an important role as they could shape their children’s attitude and
children’s academic performance will be better with mother participation in children’s lives.

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Paragraph 2
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An animal test is any scientific experiment or test in which a live animal is forced to undergo
something that is likely to cause them pain, suffering, distress or lasting harm. 2Animals used
in laboratories are deliberately harmed, not for their own good, and are usually killed at the
end of the experiment. 3In 2018, it is reported that 31% of animal experiments involved
moderate or severe suffering on the animals which raised the concern of animal advocates.
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Researchers believed that testing on animals is important as the test results are found to be
accurate due to the shared attributes that humans and animals have while allowing scientists
to develop new medications to cure illnesses in the world. 5This may be true to some extent;
nevertheless, with the advancement of technology in the 21 st century, conducting research
on animals is obsolete as alternative research on human cells and tissues (in vitro methods)
and advanced computer-modelling techniques (in silico models) are available on the market.

Which sentence discusses the importance of the issue?

Sentence number: __________

Which sentence is the thesis statement?

Sentence number: __________

Write the two components above as part of the concluding paragraph.

To summarise, according to reports from 2018,more than 30% of animal experiments

resulted in mild or serious distress for the animals, causing outrage among animal
advocates. However, research on human cells and tissues (in vitro method) and
sophisticated computer-modelling techniques (in silico models) can be use to replace animal
testing.