FINAL PROJECT/First Draft Peer Review Worksheet

Rephrase the thesis in 15 words of less:

Churchill’s judgment of the monarchy came from not only his great respect but also from
his dearest sympathies.

Identify the ONE outside source (1) and two other ACADEMIC sources (2&3) used for
this essay:

Author Title Primary/Secondary

1. Robert Blake- Churchill and the Monarchy

2. Geoffrey best- “Churchill a Study in Greatness”

3. Churchill- Great Contemporaries?

Identify three instances where this essay connects one source with another:

1. Compared two different monarchy’s using information from Robert Blakes text

2. Brought up the point of Churchill’s war mongering, could utilize this to compare to the
best text

3. Brought the articles about monarchy from the contemporaries into comparison with
Best and his opinion on Churchill and monarchy.

OVER

In your judgment, does this paper employ the use of “Lensing”, i.e. using an idea or
theory in one source as a way to get a better understanding of another source. If yes,
explain.

while at some points It does analyze the best text and use that as a lens to explain
Churchill’s admiration towards royalty, it could be incorporated more throughout the
entire paper. Using either Best or Blake’s writings as a lens will have to be done in each
paragraph to properly argue your topic.

Write `one paragraph about what you like about the first draft.

I thought it was structured well. Each paragraph flowed into the next with ease. I thought
the intro was attention grabbing and the conclusion did a good job of presenting a new
question to leave the reader thinking.

Write one paragraph on how it might be improved.

I think the paper could be improved by having the lens appear in all paragraphs to reiterate
and support the thesis. On top of this bringing yourself into the paper to support claims
with your own opinions or information could be helpful as well. I think seeing more info
and direct quotes from the best book would be good as well.