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5. Then you should note sentences or paragraphs that seem out of order, incompletely
explained, or otherwise in need of revision.
In the first Supporting paragraph there are phrases and quotations that could be restated to
achieve a clear understanding instead of just pup op with a quotation and then a
For example, when the writer says:
"no one can succeed in making me write a Latin verse or learn any Greek except the
alphabet.” Said in Childhood. If it was a child’s playful nature cause the dislike of learning,
there’s nothing to discuss.”
The last two sentences stated like the following could work better:
“Paul Addison points out the more profound source: “ the rootedness of his affections
and principles in the nobly-led, many-tiered, property-owning society he had been brought up in.”