LTS NGOC BACH. @ ngocbach.com AA ES MAD pert etic)IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH MUC LUC SACH IELTS TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH Chin luge tam bai task 2. ‘Template chung cho ed dang task 2. Dang Opinion..... é ¥ Phan tich bai Salary (opinion huéng I phiin)-ver 1... Phan tich bai Salary-ver 2. Phan tich bai Salary-bai chifa cho Ver 2 ou es Phan tich bai Salary-ban final... 25 Phan tich bai Watching TV (opinion huéng hod todn)-vert . 27 Phan tich bai Watching TV-ver 2. DD Phan tich bai Watching TV-bin chita cho ver2. “31 Phan tich bai Watching TV-ban final... 33 Dang Discuss... 37 Dang Diseuss + Opinion (discuss both views) ee) Discuss opinion (discuss the advs and disadvs) Ver I sn 47 Discuss opinion (discuss the advs and disadvs) chtta cho Ver Von. Discuss opinion (discuss the advs and disadvs) ver 2 Discuss opinion (discuss the advs and disadvs) final. 53 Discuss opinion (advs outweight disadvs) ver 1. 35 Discuss opinion advs outweight disadvs) ver 2... 57 Discuss opinion (advs outweight disadvs) chita cho Ver 2.-ernrennnsnS9 Discuss opinion (advs outweight disadvs) final un 61 Dang Problems/Causes/Solutions cr 68 Dang causes/solutions (48 07/02/2015) phn dn 89 §evunnsnnsne 6 Dang 2-part question . 69IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH ‘Dang 2-part question (48 24/04/2014) phan din got On tip mge s6 dé thi kh6 . 8 06/12/2014 phan dan goi 'Bé 18/10/2014 phin dn agi y ‘Dé 25/04/2015 (task 1) dé bai Dp én dB 07/02/2015. Dip én dB 24/04/2014. ip fn d8 06/12/2014... ip in d8 18/10/2014 ip in dB 25/04/2015 (task 1). Collocation 1. Collocation 2.. Collocation 3.. Collocation 4 Collocation 5... Collocation 6 nnIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH ereeh gy Gor out) my be pet (ACADEMIC MODULE} -+ Tht pian: 40 pt ++ Shit hd xn 250 ep x 15~17 ou) ++ Tu chin i Hod thinh how (Task Achievement TA) C6 kk ii (Coherence and Cobesion ~CC) = dung tt wg pong pl (Lexical Resource -LR) = Sirdung aida vi ing le dang ng pip (Grammatical Range and Aseracy GRA)IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH CELERON Do you agree or disagree? | ‘To what extent do you agree or disagree? [OPINION] Daas the abvnags nd dads [os ie 8. What are the causes and suggest some solutions to the protem 9. Why is this the ease? Is ita positive or negative developmen?IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH Mo bai 2 «2 Than bail 9% Than bai2 5 # young people , students, a group of people do unpaid work > \o volunteer, free ime > spare time being required > be obliged,be forced, being given the added responsibility of working 2) 2 huemg tra “+ Hung 1: Hodn toin khong ding ¥ + Hung 2: Bong mot phin4 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. [Ean TRA LOT THEO TONG WONN TORN HONGEONG] Mbit: iti hi hn upd work fr eenges”, NEu quan di bn Bg dog v0 ida “rouiingorcing young pope Thin b Dre ra mguyén nin 1- Gb ih gs di my Bh le cho dn they ate ateady busy wih school work, hey aud beallowed to ejoy being young + they have many yar of work he othe when they fis hei stds. hia bi 2: Dora nguyen whi 2~ Gi thik eso did ny Kg eb ip cho x $reg young poopeto work ges asi the values of fee sce + the een ssem of volta is bet, this tea would be imposible to ene Beta: quand cab kb “resiring (rin) yours people odo" ing ch clin teen vx gi Many soig pele wk an a volun ss, nds only be beetle than ic indslandsossy awk Hower, do nape at we ld ‘here fae angst dune wore Mt yong people oe ted under eng prem white lon ‘ingen he st espns of waning ir puree Sch sss ‘naniingea line oy and chr expect he toto do ame {ndcrmrevison op of ending ees everyday, When yous poe Jo Tine tine ald ccenrge he ojo wb ence 0 ‘pundit ig spr ater lee scabs They ave my eta Work ‘endothe hy sis ‘testi [dont elit nity hashing on or elging ung peolta do apd wiki old petit es ast the {Rives cee andar ea ace 2 up of epl So stig est ‘her wl Dong scan oly ead ersten sent ou pl ho ‘rl ol hatte wee beng wad prets who woul a wana betel ‘ow oa ts hilo, Crt nba faced over and sis Incontinence 1 work ar ee a lp hrs bain ny pinion we shld kes ompone litho quits MOAN TOAN KHONG DONG ¥* ‘Wrineny Sine (tsi)IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. Intreductlon: some people pu forward this argument but sare that ‘unpaid werk most be compulsory for enagers. Paragraph 2: benoit fr teenagers andthe cenit [1] tesnages learn ‘ne sills and gain new experenes [2] ts goo fr theiresume when they start wokniversy [3] community has jobs dane fe which ther is no money salle, Paragraph 3 unpaid work should be voluntary, not compulsory] tenagers hhyes tof heer [2] young people also need sme ree ime = give examples of why. ‘Conclusion: rope introduction unpaid work hat beefs, but should na be cxnpliory fr all teenagers. ‘Satchmo bere tnt aon ey pe od ay ing Spe i moe {Tpramve ine fe h inden» apy» we adam ne oe Jt ema rn i oats em ys st a TT ‘torsos pl me se ese ema ey abn a ae SES eee name nh a ey cin th tl wg ae be ge {gre ‘irate dl athena st a gu “DONE ¥ MOT ANS ‘ei ge 1516 II WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. sn estes trat epee ‘Sag manic peat “Hon toan ding § (Ahing ding §)” Diéivéi quan diem Mo bi ++ Paraphrase eu cia dba 41 donot agree that. /f completely disagres!agree with his idea. 2 Thin bai I: Tete ate some reasons variety of reasons why... (va nguyén nhin 1) Thin bi 2: Apat fom the practical benefits disadvantages ‘expeessd above, I befieve tat..(dva nguyén hn 2) aKéh In conclusion, I believe that...(¢ ne Ii quan dim ea ban).IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH (PLATE quan dim : “Ding j hing ding j) mét pha” Me bits + Paraphrase ciiu cia dé bai +While accept tat this may suit many people, believe that While I saree withthe idea of, do belive that. 2.7hdn bl I: On the one band 4.Thin bi 2: On the ther hand. 4.Két lugn In conclusion, itis certunly true that... but thi is by no means18 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACHIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration, Do you agree or disagree ? — wsON NT Your opinion, I partly agree with this ides. (On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why you should choose a high- paying job. Fi of life. Being offered a high pay allow employers to meet human’s basic needs, tly, wage plays an integral part to guarantee your current quality buy a convenient house and even go on luxurious holidays in summer vacation. Secondly, one of the best motivation is competitve salary. For example, your boss offer a Mercedes car as a perk if you can attract | million tourists in only cone week. Will you get challenge? Being an ambitious employer, you will try hard and enhance the level of job performance, compe On the other hand, employers may minimize the happiness of individuals and face health matters. Well-paid jobs mean long working hours and lots of deadlines coming up. This brings officers to have no free time with their friends and especially family. In my experience, doctors always get married very late because they donot have spare time to have a wide circle of acquaintances and date their girlfriends. Employers with high pay must suffer much mental poblems than ones with low pay. A recent research studied that 70% of IT programmers who work for about from 10 to 16 hours everyday get a high risk of headache and heart attack. In conclusion, although I accept that a competitive salary can be beneficial for the staff, it can harm to their happiness and health Written by Minh Hing (lép 14/2014)20 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACHIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. ANSWER: VERSION 2: A Lot of job seekers always select the career only based on salary level. In my opinion, I partly agree with this idea (On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why people should choose a high- paying job. Firstly, wage plays an integral part to guarantee the current quality of life Being offered a high pay allow employers to meet human’s basic needs, buy a ‘convenient house and even go on luxurious holidays in summer vacation. Secondly, ‘one of the best motivation is competitve salary. For example, the boss offer a “Mercedes caras a perk if his employers can attract 1 million tourists in only one week. ‘This rewarding perk will encourage them to try hard and enhance the level of job performance. (On the other hand, job seeke§ have different reasons but salary to choose a job. Some people always prefer to follow their favorite job. In my experience, despite not being received a lot of money, artists still spend most of their time staying in their room and creating their own masterpieces. Last but not least, contributing to the society is, another reason to consider a work. This could bring a much more civilized society. For instance, Mr Kutta D: constructed 24 bridges and 6 schools for disabled children instead of working for Denmark embassy. ‘men, who have lived in Vietnam for about 20 years, has In conclusion, although I accept that a competitive salary can be beneficial for the staff, I disagree withthe idea that itis the most considerable reason to select a job. Written by Mink Hiing (lép 4/2014)WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH,IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH : Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. ANSWER: BAI CHUA & CHAM DIEM CHO VERSION 2 ‘A lot of job seckers always selet thei career only based on salary level. In my opinion, I partly agree with this idea (On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why people should choose a high- paying job. FISWBWwage plays an integral part to guarante the curent quality of lite Being offered a high pay allows employers to meet human’s basic needs, buy a convenient house and even go on luxurious holidays in fsummer vacation. 88 one ofthe best motivations is Heompativecompetitive salary. For example, the boss offer a Mercedes car as a per if his employers can attract I million tourists in only one week. This ewarding perk will encourage them to try hard and enhance the level of job performance On he ter hand, jb seaesseskrs have sen reasons but salary to choose a. | ‘Some people always prefer to follow their favorite job. In my experience, despite not being receivinged a lot of money, artists stil spend most oftheir me staying in their | room and ereating their own masterpieces. Last but not least, contributing to the society is another reason to consider a workjob, This could bring a much more civilized society. For instance, Mr Kurt a Danish menman, who have has lived in Vietnam for about 20 years, has constructed 24 bridges and 6 schools for disabled children instead of working for fiGDenmark Danish embessyEmbassy. | In conclusion, whilel accept that a competitive salary can be beneficial for the staff, 1 disagree with the idea that itis the most considerable reason to select a job. ‘Written by Minh Hing (lép 14/2014) Corrected by Ngoc Bach 23IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. Grade Task Response Tar phn Into néu quan di 6 | -tnmy opinion, 1 partly agree with this ide” ‘trong khi két luin lai vidt: *Tisagree withthe idea that reason t select a jab the most considerable They ean be seen a different opinions. Cohesion and = YE ah Coe VT eo 7 7 | eh 2 eluent paraphrase al npn gon ope cin db a 67 | Si neu dave gun diém enn dng 1 ph, Tn bit mnbi kd dum du bing {elu topic sentence. C525 Wb {ta cho topic sentence vice ny dae gi thich dy di Vocabulary Word choice: ‘4 work (a job isnot a synonym here Ifyou ask —"What ‘work do you do? Its ok)) Spellin ‘compatitve / competitive seokes / seekers rors with word endings Grammar Seca mason 7 | theboss offers «Danish meoman, who have has Passive: despite nt ting recivinged alot of money, ‘LBi v6i mao tir (a, an, the) > See (BH highlights in essay. Overall 63 | Make sure that you have the same opinion in the introduction a in the conclusion. ——— 24IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ANSWER: FINAL VERSION BY NGOC BACH tise tat sone eke Set tice son yee ie eet tht hs my sit many pop, bleve that thers basic on mae impr sas er any Se On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why people should choose a high- paying job. One reason is that a wage plays an integral part in guaranteeing, an acceptable standard of living, Being offered a high salary allows employees to mect their basie needs, buy a comfortable house and pethaps even go on luxury holidays. Furthermore, one of the best motivation i a competitive salary. For example, the head of @ company may offer a pay rise to a new employee who is able to achieve a sales target during the yea. This rewarding perk will encourage the new sales Staff to try hard and enhance the level of job performance. On the other hand, job seekers have diferent reasons apart from salary to choose @ {job]Fistly, job satisfaction i extremely important when people choose thie career. IF 1 person adores the outdoor life, he will not be happy being a stockbroker or a nancier, no mater that the salaries for both jobs are extremely high. Secondly, contributing to the community is another reason to consider a job. This could bring ahout a much more civilized society. For instance, Mr Kurt a Danishman, who has lived in Vietnam for about 20 yeas, has constructed 6 schools and other facilities for disabled children instead of working forthe Danish Embassy. in conclusion, it is certainly true that money can be an important factor for many ople when choosing prospective employment, but this is by no means the key ‘consideration for everybody in making a carer decision. 87 words) Written byNgoe Bach wIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS Grade Task Response 50-85 ~ Bi wilt irc cE bai mbt ech dy di. DE bi hoi quan diém ef nhén ein ngudi vide. Cée§ nay 48 dye te li mot ech ey the inthe introduction and throughout the essay. (The examiner band descriptor shoot tates that a band 7.09.0 essay "presents a lea position throughout the response") > dip ing di. ~ Céic eum tit in dm 6 phin Introduction vi Conclusion la snhimg cum tt rit tt khi theo hucmg ding ¥ (khéng dng ¥) sot phi “party” F “In paragraph 2, thio un vind “why a high salary is important when choosing job”. you gave 2 reasons (having «good standacd of living/motvation) and you explained each one filly, You also used an example to support one of these Points In paragraph 3, thio lun vind “two other factors which you consider to be extremely important: job satsteton and {he contribution that the work may make towards society. ‘Youagain explained each fully and provided another relevant supporting example. Cohesion and Coherence 35-90 The examiner is looking for evidenes of good planing and ‘organisation of my ideas and I provided lots of evidence. Lira 5 0 diy: mdi khd Khéng dua qué iu idea vio, didu ny cho ‘hep nau vid discuss each one flly and to use examples Cie edu ddu duge bi eye mit eéch logic va ef topic sentence néu duge central idea in each paragraph Bai viét dst dyng duge cde TRANSITION WORDS nur “One reason is tha Furthermore/One the one hand, on the ‘other hand Firstly, secondly/ For example/ For instance/another reason = Diing edu du kign, mgnh dé quan bébé sung thdng tin > ‘ing tin két ni ita ee cs = Ding dg ti chi dinh “This link cic edu v6i nhau mt efeh nhuain nhuyén trong dogn vin > xem phin gach chin Vocabulary a0 some good topie Vocabulary, including: may suit many ‘people/plays an integral partigo on luxurious holidaysthis rewarding perk/the outdoors lifela stockbroker or a Financier vi ding ding va chinhxée tong ba 190 The range of grammar should eetainly satis the examiner examples of (Crt) conditional sentence, a (zero) conditional sentence, relative and adverb clauses and a range cof verb tenses, a variety of sentence structures 26IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH (1705/2014) Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at ‘home. Do you agree or disagree? ANSWER: VERSION 1 It is true that students can obtain an plenty of knowledge and skill through watching television, While the traditional studying method more and more has been improved, I completely agree that teachers and parents should use television as an official channel for an advance education system, There are different reasons for this tendancy between childrens in school. Firstly, watching television in moderation can help develop interest and inspire further reading book by giving a deep engagement on academic topics. For example, the lively colour video of tree growth from a seed to mature body is the clear illustrate why students remember this lesson, Secondly, television viewing brings specific topic to bemore closer to class. For instance, when age appropriate, introducing of concepts which are complex and intellectually such as prime or violence through particular channel ean shape a children’s enjoyable as well as make them more committed in class Using television also has various benefits for students at home, One benefit is that educational televison puts kids in touch with cultures from around the wortd in the way strongly engaging. Educational programs like Discovery, History ‘Channel might expose students to peoples and places they would not encounter in daily life otherwise. Ifa person has not enough conditionals to go to Australia for seeing the Kangaroo, he or she will discover by some short film. Furthermore, television provides a reason for families to spend time together. While this help children relax after stressful hours by funny programs, parents not only understanding their kid’s characteristic but also can use that as a springboard for deeper study. In conclusion, while it is clearly to saw the efficient impact of watching television for student, advance curriculum system should bring educational channels to encourage the children’s interest in studying in school and at home. Written by Digu Hing (lop 17/2015)28 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH.IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH "Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?” ANSWER: VERSION 2 Its true that students can broadentheir knowledge and skill through watching television. I completely agree that teachers and parents should use television inside and outside school frequently for an improved education system. ‘There are different advantages ofwatching televisionfor children in school. Firstly, moderation curriculum on television can develop student's inspire further reading academic topics. For example, the lively video of tree rowthtfrom a seed to mature body is clear and more attractive to illustrate of biology lessonthan described papers only. Secondly, when age appropriate, introducing of complex concepts such as prime or violence through particular channel can motivateyoungster teenager's enjoyable.It is extremely hard to imagine how terrible “The 11-9 terrorize” is in the USA when the history teacher just only talked information without images or videos. ‘Apart from the practical benefits expressed above, believe that using television also brings its outweighed benefits for childrens at home. The television deserves to beconsidered as the unl source of information withvarious scientific channels. If personwants to travel but does not have enough money, he or she can enjoy travelingby watching the national geography short-film, Furthermore, entertainment programs giving an opportunity for families to co- operate therapeutic activities togetherafter pressured working. While watching ‘the Walt Disneycartoon movie, parents can understand their children's characteristiesand use that as a springboard for deeper study by raising some ‘questions relating the fim, Boo = gre In conclusion, believe that students can derive many benefits from watching television forleaming, As a result, educational program on televion should be put into advance curriculum regularly to encourage the children’s interest in studying in school and at home, Written by Digu Hing (lp 7/2015) 2930 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACHIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH (17/05/2014)"Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?" ANSWER: BAL CHUA & CHAM DIEM CHO VERSION 2 It is true that students can broadentheir knowledge and skill through watching television. I completely agree that teachers and parents should use television inside and outside school frequently for an improved education system. ‘There are different advantages ofwatching televisionfor children in school. Firstly, moderation curriculum on television can develop student's inspire further reading academic topics. For example, the lively video of tree ‘erowthfrom a seed to mature body is clear and more attractive to illustrate ofa | biology lessonthan described papers only. Secondly, when age appropriate, introducing ef-complex concepts such as prime or violence through particular channel can motivateyoungster teenager's enjoymentable.t is extremely hard to imagine how terrible “The 41-99-1lterrorizeterorism” is in the USA when the history teacher justonly talkedaivesinformation without images oF videos Apart from the practical benefits expressed above, I believe that using television also brings its outweighed benefits for childrens at home. The television | deserves to beconsidered as the unlimited source of information withvarious scientific channels. If' personwants to travel but does not have enough money, he or she can enjoy travelinghy watching the national geography short-ilm. Furthermore, entertainment programs giving-give an opportunity for families to co-operate in therapeutic activities togetherafter pressured _atworking. While ‘watching the Walt Disneycartoon movie, parents can understand theie children’s characteristiesand use that as a springboard for deeper study by raising some questions relating to the film, | In conclusion,| believe that students can derive many benefits from watching television forleaming. As a result, educational programs on television should be | put into advance curriculum regularly to encourage the children’s interest in studying in school and at home. Written by Digu Hing (lip 17/2015) Corrected by Ngoc BachIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. Grade Task Response + “moderation curriculum on television ean develop student's inspire frther reading academic topics.” => rt eh higu > phai iu “developing student's inspiration’ / “encouraging further reading” / “moderating a eurtieulum’ 2 ++ Cau két lun cha paraphrase duge cau thi 2 phi intro + "Secondly, when age appropriate, introducing, of complex concepts such as prime or violence through swhen the history teacher just only talked-gives information without images or videos.” > ¥ nay kh6ng 16 ring va tring ¥ véi doan trén -> thay bling ¥ méi Cohesion and Coherence ‘Bigm cho tiéu eh mach lac va kétn6i bj anh hung dodogn vin, tir vung nbiéu ché rit kh6 higu do sai trong cich chon tir vung vi ng php dé dign dat ‘Vocabulary 65 prime or violence (what do you mean by ‘prime”?). Xem thém cdc 181 6 trén Grammar 65 Errors with articles (a, an, the).Xem thém ede Ti 6 tra 32IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH "Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?" ANSWER: FINAL VERSION BY NGOC BACH Essay Plan: Introduction: true that most children ean broaden their knowledge by watching TV. I completely agree that they should watch TV regularly. Paragraph 2: TV in school [1] more interesting and engaging for children than books alone ~ example biology: tree [2] learn soft skills — examples presentations/confidence. Paragraph 3: TV at home [1] great source of information - news, culture as well as entertainment [2] whole family can enjoy programmes together, chat about them and share common interests. Conclusion: encourage children to watch TV regularly at home and at school. ‘Amended Essay [band 9] It is true that most students can broaden their knowledge and skills through watching television. I completely agree that they should watch TV regularly. ‘There are different advantages for children who regularly watch television in school. Firstly, interesting programs on television can help young people to draw inspiration and easily access a world of knowledge. For example, a lively and engaging video of a tree reaching maturity from a seed is clearer and simpler to understand than school textbooks alone to illustrate a biology lesson. Secondly, youngsters can not only enlarge their knowledge but also develop their soft skills through watching some kinds of TV shows. They may learn from watching others about how to give a good presentation or to gain confidence in a crowd Apart from the practical benefits of TV in the classroom, I believe that using {clevision also has benefits for children at home. The television is an unlimited source of information with various channels about news, culture, science ot 3IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. nature. For example, if a young person wants to travel but cannot afford the fare, he or she may enjoy the journey by watching the National Geographic short-films. Furthermore, some programs provide an opportunity to narrow the generationgap between family members. For instance, while watching a documentary together, parents can share the enjoyment of a programme about the environment or an important historical event with their children, and take this oceasion to chat with them about the issues In conclusion, I believe that television should be encouraged in and out of the study environment as a method of education to murture essential skills for youngsters 272 words ‘Written by Ngoc Bach 34IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. ras inspiration; [expression] this is what takes places when you see or hear ‘something that makes you fel erative and gives you exciting new ideas Example: Some children who want to become actors draw inspiration from ‘watching famous film stars in popular movies. ¥ engaging: [adjective] interesting ina way that attracts your attention. Example: She has avery attractive and engaging personality. ¥ eaching maturity: [expression] becoming fully grown or develope. Example: This tee will be 20 metres tall when reaching maturity. soft shils: [noun] persona qualities that enable you to communicate well with other people. Example: To apply for ths ob, you must have soft skills suchas team work, ‘enthusiasm and willingness to earn. gain confidence: [expression] the feeling that you can tus the abilities or good Example: He started 0 gain confidenee in his own English language abilities after be passed the exam, generation gap: {noun} a lack of communication ora difference of atitudes between ‘one generation and another, for example between parents and chien, Example: There isa generation gap in the choice of music in my country ~ many ‘young people prefer rock, while clasical music is more popular among older people. nurture: [verb] care and protect somebody or something while they are growing. Example: Children nurtured by loving parents will almost certainly have a happy childhood, 35IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS: Grade Task | 9.0 | + You chose to take a strong postion on this topie and you Response argued very effectively + In paragraph 2, you dealt with the advantages of children ‘watching TV in schools. You made two points and you Supported them both with reasons and examples. | ++ Paragraph 3 dealt withthe benefits of children watching ‘TV at home. You gave reasons to support your view that, children benefit from watching news and entertainment programmes. Cohesion | 9.0 | + I looked for all the usual evidence of good organisation and and planning, 1 liked the division of your paragraphs — one Coherence to deal withthe benefits of TV in schools and one to deal with the advantages of watching TV at home. This was a simple, clear and intelligent way to approach this task. + The fopi sentences indicated precisely the entra idea in each paragraph. I then looked for links between your Sentences, Of course, you used FirstlySecondly in paragraph 2 to identify your two arguments. for the examiner. In the rest of the essay, you developed your points and introduced new arguments with good links such as: For example/FurthermoreFor instance. These are clear, uncomplicated and effective. : Vocabulary | 9.0 | topic vocabulary: draw inspiration and easly accessa | tree reaching maturity from a seedidevelop their soft skill/narrow the generation gap/nurture essential skills. Grammar | 9.0 | As the essay is completely free of grammatical errors, T | have to congratulate you on the high standard that you have achieved. The job of marking this section is now easy for the examiner. ‘The range of grammar has to be satisfactoryIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. POA + Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. + What are the benefits and drawbacks? * Discuss both WS Huéng gidi: Phin than bai than 2 khd + Dang 1: body 1: advantages. body 2: disadvantages +Dang 2: body 1: benefits. body 2: drawbacks + Dang 3: body I: view 1. body 2: view 2 3738 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH + Introduction 1 NGi wd opie paraphrase cl cba bai) + Gis tig ng quan dif 6 et advantages (advantages) (91) hohe beats (drawtacs) (92) + Thin att: néuidesW& iro 1 (advantagetoeneis) + Thin bit2: ndvides NS 92 (issvantagestravbacks) + Conclusion ‘he ides a tha i 1 v8 2 (chi praphrat). aus Ty i king nda quan diém ban thin bit pin no rng bi vi db ‘ir khong yer eb Some people believe that studying at university or college is the est route to.a successful career, while others believe that itis better to get a job straight after school, Discuss both views.IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH |CAC BUOC SUY NGHI LAM BAL | Diy a bai vb chi “Education”. Cbu hi cia #8 bai yéu clu dua ‘quan dm v8 vin 68 “ge di be hoe cao dng la con dung tt she <4 sau my vie i tt, in KI lim in "> Thi in 2 «quan dim > mii quan diém du 6 ¥ ing 2. Nah sum bi Nai idea: ++ Hee da hee or cao dng 6 dim gi tt cho vie kid vig tir ? “Bi tim ngaye6 di git? ‘Neh mit sb god vocabulary” thay cho keywords cia 4 i + studying at university or college: continue their education/study, academic qualifications university graduates, higher education “+a successful career: beter job opportunities, car higher salaries ‘+ get ajob straight afte sehool: work straight after school, start caring money as soon as possible Monat (Gin 1:6 gc sab nip sa iy vin nip a ey hn a (Gn 2:05 2 que i ac § ding shina ic gum dando cd) Dion iNew wing ih ca igerlp eA hye ‘asp cacti, “eter eppertatis ihesalae, hej market very competitive Tata 2: New whi fh cha vif ain “eco epee. in expense il, ‘etpremcionsstledown eon id sho, ave ay ido a. 52 phn bh papell) 3940 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. ‘rating tis th yong fen woke hr ey gh po agg ‘Serr Mary peor a ting wy ety ae cr ete [Stvayis punts tc crews ee wing shel ‘is a i yee ty ale a ky sing © ‘Suc drs shen Fee nl pie ts po ith oly os Nah say oe ta can ten Parmer ‘Sars mee ore spn, net pew wha ‘ex nha open eth pn once ose fe ‘Shsty et oro pt gona a hy pod nd ‘ay pvp (neuer wing oh ater eso tt ie oye eth, ng poole eset ony pnb ty ath gk el il me {Sathya carmen en ht ie ven iy Says pr oh mesa fing et {ay npgon iy tee hc my big stat an ce lina ect nie che son ‘ncn ts a aah king rela ening ie okey oe gen ts ate tek o po rating nnn ng es pe at eo Seed dy wmeig one ering mt“ paring fm ‘shy steko on re acest tm i gly thin ng ae ene itp; mec crete abo Stier yun when yo sng Sly rate gi ‘sesame in” teen muy ne ey 0 pe or wa “ape en ‘omy rewire ‘athe nde tec yr om cide of yop "ee {ili er ao eae nolan et ee te nap fo on ta onthe esting nt cage at ‘Steyn oa om seg cr she ig "hy uel iher seo th nc he co eine aly igh ad SEERA ise ws rz yn ak nine vey styl ~ eoIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH Ssh ea ari nl i i tn mk ‘Serchlite oe ing + shape ah pp cy ce ary dre ti are Fae htc rca lt te hy + fled semen in gh uly Sc ghee ‘somo ha ‘ome hse ea (nig pi ogg it hin ‘Sorin tetcio git een tenga ew Sheesamecors enh Sanh ot eae eon ee ~ t i n rnente oh 5 tne an sie nom eh ch as est Saosin ys mean so he en ein hat ds a ring rig poe tt ig tet ‘Sree bass wt eae sae in hei tei ys me eo Tetsu oc ‘while there are beneitst.. there are als good reasons why tight be beneficial to / Many people suppose that, whores others elev that. ‘On the one hand, the option to .isatratveforsoveral reasons / benef n some ways ‘On theother hand, hare are some reasons why Inconclsion it seems evident that both ews ews nc th ra are advantageous hel own ways"TS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACHIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BAC re: ny PNany Exon + Discuss both views and give your opinion + Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? + Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and Phin thin bi thin 2 khé twong ding v6i cau hoi dé bai, Diém khic bigt quan tong so véi dang Discuss Ii & diy phil thé higm quan ddim bin than vio trong bai B44 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. BAI CHUNG Mo bai + Diu tién gi hig chi ea 2 bi mt eich ngin gpm Ching eich paraphrase ie cia dba) “+ Cth 28 cp Ada ch2 quan diém vi ua ra quan idm cia ban. Thin bit ++Néu quan diém 1 1 Neu quan did 2 (Eh hig 8 ring Ban dng 6 quan dim nay) Késtuin ‘im tc 2 quan diém v9 kine a bam Some people believe that studying at university or college the best route to a successful career, while others believe that itis better to get a job straight after school, Discuss both views and give your opinionIELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH CAC BUGC SUY NGHI LAM BAL |LDiy i bi vehi 8 “Education”. CBu hi cba 8 bi yu chu dara «quan diém vé vind “tie die hoe eae dng i con ung tt nt 48 sauniy 6 vige lim tt, ¥en Kc lim gn "> Thao ign cd 2 (quan dig i dive ra quan dig cia ban 2.Ngh iden vA quy&t doh xem ban ing vit idea no, Ody 52 ing vt quan dé di li ti + Di im ngy 6 diém gh tt? +Hoe dai ne or ao ding eb dd tt cho vig kid vig tm? 3.NeNT mit s “good vocabulary” thay cho keywords cia db + studying at university or college : continue theie education/study, academic qualifications, university graduates, higher education “+a successful career: better job opportunites, atm higher salaries + get job straight afterschool: work straight ater school, start earning money 88 soon as possible (in Gi igh se se itp be sinh gp pi va San (wee hs a ‘Cine 2 quo in ob ing eng a 5 quan in ning hing Thin bi Néw nh le ich a i ip ge “ther cpp higher sles, theo mike vey capt du bis2: Nu hong ii cs im ing 6 gan ty) + sar euing ons, “hea npn pin exper, kan ils, +t promenade, hve Fy ‘ets quan dca bn ing ie di i 45IELTS WRITING TASK 2 BY NGOC BACH. ‘ging i ug let wer fi i tia i op pet cei yt) ‘ingen pune ec ee cre Led ang Sean tesinmatae nee iy ry py a (Scat Fs nl pr ya pons no qn rch vt mom ceo ey icy eta a ‘Stone on wos eh ie te ‘isco tray ges ape espa eer ii eee noenae re eer Lh i isn str gai bid i ‘oye races ec tom py net el Sane aca eee ica a (Sipe act euy sy ops na etna oto et ‘jem cay st ey og rp ee nt alas att or ct ‘Sihumane nero cn uatan a tears sped MPL. LM bai: + Paraphrase cau cia d8 bi + While... Lwould argue that...(nda quan diém et bam tng hd kin nay) 2.Thin bai T: On the one hand.. 4. Thin bai 2 (Rhi néu hiém ting hi): ‘On the other hand, Lbelleve that 4. Két ug In conclusion, although both (view 1) and (view 2) are advantageous intheir own ways, itseems to me tha itis beter to