Hi Alex,

You should add a little more text in the part of giving/ asking for personal news.

reason for writing, according to the model is placed in a separate paragraph.

I am organizing the party and buying food. I am buying the cards for each one and you can
bring your girlfriend too.

separate your ideas into paragraphs, the grammar I think is ok but try to organize your ideas in
separate sentences.

The text is ok for me, it has coherence and the grammar I think is fine.