AJNABEE

Written by

Bharat Pandey

Email id- bharat27may@gmail.com

Phone Number- 9850769453
METRO STATION/ DAY/ EXT-INT

Establish shot of metro station...ek ladki Shivani plateform

pe khadi hai..woh train ka wait kar rahi hai... apni wrist
watch mein time dekhti hai..aur display board ki taraf dekhti
hai...train aane ka time anounce ho raha hai..tabhi shivani
ka phone bajta hai...apne purse mein se phone nikalti
hai..dekhti hai Maa ka phone hai..

SHIVANI
Hello maa...

MOTHER (V.O.)
Shivani beta kaisi hai tu..

SHIVANI
Maa..abhi toh aadhe ghante pahle
phone kiya tha aapne..aadhe ghante
mein mujhe kya ho jayega...suno maa
mujhe late ho raha hai..train aane
waali hai..aaj ofice ka pahla din
hai...mai late nahi hona nahi
chaahti.. aur aap tention na lo mai
ek dam theek hoon.

MOTHER (V.O.)
Kaise tention nahi raheg beta...
Ajnabi shaher mein Ajanabi logo ke
beech main hai tu...aur har din
news mein tarh-tarah ki ghatnaaye
dekhti hoon..aur train mein toh
kitni chhedchhad hoti hai ladkiyon
ke saath..

SHIVANI
Maa..yeh metro train hai..mumbai me
travel karne ke liye sabse safe...
MOTHER
Beta..Humaare desh mein koi bhi
jagah safe nahi hai ladkiyon ke
liye...

Tabhi train ki awaz sunayi deti hai...Shivani phone cut karti

hai..she is in thought..uski aankhon ke saamne visuals aane
lagte hai...

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SECLUDED PLACE/ DAY/ EXT

Shivani ek secluded place se gujarti hai...ek jagah 3-4 ladke

baithe huye huye hai...ladke comment paas karte hai..
 2.

GUY 1
Aay..haay...itna saj dhaj ke subah-
subah kahaan chal di

GUY 2
Bhai akkha mumbai mein aisa itom na
milega..

Shiani unki baat sunke thoda darr jaati hai aur unko andekha
karte huye thoda sa aage nikalti hai...tabhi teesara ladka
aake uske saamne khada ho jaata hai..

GUY 3
Are madam..aap toh naraz ho
gayi..apno se aisi kya narazgi..

Peechhe se dono ladke hanste hai..

GUY 3 (CONT’D)
Hum ajnabi thode na hai..

Shivani usko ignore karke nikalti hai..camera shiani ke face

se back mein aata hai

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METRO STATION/ DAY/ EXT-INT

Black to black transition mein aate hai..train shivani ke

saamne aake rukti hai...shivani abhi bhi thought mein
hai...usse baar-baar apni maa ki kahi baat yaad aarahi hai..

MOTHER (V.O.)
Ajnabi shaher mein..ajnabi logon ke
beech main hai tu..news mein tarah-
tarah ki ghatnaye dekhti rahti hoon
News insert

News paper cutting

Tv news Anchor v/0

Train rukti hai...door open hota hai...train mein se kuchh

log neeche utarte hai..kuchh shivani ke peechhe hai..shivani
aage badhne wali hoti hai ruk jaati hai..uske maa ki voice
phir se sunayi deti hai..

MOTHER (V.O.)
Beta..humaare desh mein koi bhi
jagah safe nahi hai ladkiyon ke
liye...
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She is unconscious..tabhi peeche se awaz aati hai...aur wo

darri huyi si dheeme kadmon ke saath train mein chali jaati
hai...door close hota hai...aur train chali jaati hai..

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IN TRAIN/ DAY/ INT

Train dheere-dheere move ho rahi hai..Shivaani andar dekhti

hai..sabhi seat full hai, baithne ki koi jagah nahi hai..wo
ek kone mein jakar khadi ho jaati hai...wo har chehare ko
dhyaan se dekhti hai...she is lookin very scared....hum POV
se wahan baithe huye sabhi logon ko dekhte hai...Shivani ke
face par jaate hai..uske chehre par darr dikhayi de raha
hai...wahan baithe huye 3-4 ladke shivaani ki taraf hi dekh
rahe hai..shivaani unn sab ko dekhti hai Embarras feel kar
rahi hai...ladke abhi bhi Shivani ki taraf hi dekh rahe
hai..ajeeb si nazaron se ghoor rahe hai... we create drematic
and full build up...shivaani ekdam darri huyi hai..tabhi agla
stop aata hai...train rukti hai...train mein baithe aur log
baahar nikal jaate hai...train ka yeh compartment khali hai
sirf wahi chaar ladke baithe hai...Shivaani yeh dekh ke aur
bhi darr jaati hai...wo ladke abhi bhi shivaani ko hi ghoor
rahe hai..door close hota hai..train move karti hai..wo idhar
udhar dekhti hai..poora compartment khali dikh raha hai sirf
wahi 4 ladke dikhayi de rahe hai...woh ladke shivaani ki
taraf hi dekh rahe hai...chaaron ek saath uthte hai aur
shivaani ki taraf badhte hai..shivaani dekhti hai aur ahut
jyaada darr jati hai..ladke Shivaani ke chaaron taraf se gher
lete hai...more build up..

GUY 1
Madam...aap ne kya socha..yahan pe
cctv camera hai..itni sequrity hai
toh hum kuchh kar nahi sakte...hum
sab kuchh kar sakte hai..bcoz we
are men...hum roz hi karte
hai...kabhi iss shaher mein..kabhi
uss shaher mein...kabhi ghar mein
kabhi baahar...kabhi apne hote hai,
kabhi paraaye hote hai...kabhi
chalti huyi train mein kabhi bus
mein..bus mein toh sunaa hi
hoga..hum hi log the..hum kisi na
kisi roop mein har jagah aapko mil
jaayehge...

News flash damini kaand delhi

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Chaaron ladke zor-zor se hanste hai...ek ladke ka haanth

shivaani ki taraf badhta hai..shivaani bahut jyada darri huyi
hai...haanth uske kaandhe ki taraf badhta hai..shivaani ekdam
darr se cheekhne waali hoti hai..haanth uske kandhe par aata
hai...wo darr ke pecche train wall par chipki huyi hai..

GUY 1 (CONT’D)
Hello...hello..madam...aap meri
jagah pe baith jaiye.. Kab se aapse
yahi kah raha hoon...aap itna
ghabrayi huyi kyun hai...

Shivaani usko dekhti hai...we reveal she was in dream..wo

idhar udhar dekhti hai baaki ladke apni jagah par baithe huye
hai...ek ladka uske saamne hai..

GUY 1 (CONT’D)
Hello... hello..madam..r u okk.

Usko dekhti hai..uske muhh se kuchh awaz nahi nikal rahi

hai...haan mein sir hilaati hai..

GUY 1 (CONT’D)
Aap baith jao..

Shivaanijakar seat par baith jaati hai..samne 3 ladke aapas

mein baat kar rahe hai..

Train rukti hai...chaaron ladke neeche utar jaate

hai...shivaani idhar udhar dekhti hai aur kuchh sochti hai..

News anchor voice

News flashes
Train rukti hai...anounce ho raha hai..shivaani necche utarti
hai..idhar udhar dekhti hai...wo kuchh soch rahi
hai..plateform pe hi ek jagah khadi hai..

RAILWAYS GUY
May i help you mam...

Shiaani usko dekhti hai uske face pe halki smile aati hai...

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