Professional Documents
Culture Documents
1. Attendance
2. HW due today:
i. Be sure it has
1. Intro with lead-in, bridge, thesis
2. 3-6 body paragraphs with topic sentences, details, & concluding sentences (which
remind of point for comparing—better or worse?)
3. Organization with 1-1 correspondence as discussed
4. Conclusion which summarizes first and then concluding remarks
4. Compare/Contrast Essays
a. Just like with the paragraphs, there are 2 ways to organize these:
i. Subject by Subject
6. Boy Start
7. Boy School Each a paragraph of its own
8. Boy Lunch
9. Boy After School
i. One way that a boy’s and girl’s days differ is in the way they start.
c. 1-1 Correspondence—make sure you mention each category of comparison for each subject
d. Transitions—be sure you use these to indicate the beginning of a new point of comparison (see above)
and when you switch subjects
e. Concluding Sentences—these should be included in each body paragraph in the end to remind us of the
point or idea
i. Looking at these differences in the ways boys’ and girls’ days start shows us just how different
the daily lives of each are.
*Where should this conclusion sentence go? Write one for body 2—how can you avoid being repetitive but
still conclude and remind us of the idea?
f. Intro—this should have a lead-in with one of our options, a bridge and the thesis
i. What does the conclusion do? How could it be improved because I would say it is too short?
b. Look at paragraphs 2-3 vs paragraphs 4-5—is this subject by subject or point by point?
d. Do you think immigrants should try to be truly bi-cultural, meaning loyal to their home culture and
fluent in their new culture? Or, should immigrants try to leave their home culture (and language)
behind and try to become as American as possible? Is the same true for us as we leave the home and
become independent? Should we be loyal to the agricultural, educational, and moral values from
where we come from?
6. Fragments = an incomplete sentence—one that does not contain a subject, a verb, or both and does not
express a complete thought
a. No Verb—The people over there with footballs on their heads. (what about them?)
b. No Subject—Are my favorite things in the whole world, except for kittens. (what are?)
d. Not a complete thought—Although I did come to every class. (what happened as a result of that?)
e. Common Way it Happens—a fragment is right after the complete sentence it should be attached to
i. This term, there are several classes that I like. Writing 90 and Math 60.
ii. To fix this, just connect the sentences, sometimes as an appositive phrase
1. This term, there are several classes that I like, Writing 90 and Math 60.
f. Another common way (-ing fragments)—remember that an –ing has to have a helping verb in front of
it to be acting as a verb in a sentence.
2. Often, you can combine these by adding the –ing phrase to the previous sentence as an
appositive phrase or adding a subject and/or verb
a. I decided to steal from my mom. The result being she threw me out of the
house.
b. To fix it, change “being” to a form that is appropriate
i. I decided to steal from my mom. The result was that she threw me out of
the house.
g. Fragments with relative pronouns (386)—these seem to have subjects and verbs but don’t express a
complete thought—remember that a relative clause is a dependent clause and so needs to be connected
to an independent clause
i. The most important thing that she said in class yesterday—what are we missing? Why?
ii. The most important thing that she said in class yesterday was that we need to bring three copies
of our papers.—subjects and verbs?