Participant: Fernando

Score on Independent Writing 2/5

Score on Integrated Writing 2.5/5

INTEGRATED WRITING

To summarise, the passage talk about how the altruismis a very important part of the people’s
lives. They could be an important part like the mammals and the humans to. Because both can
sharing the food and gives donations of body organs to family members, and even to
strangers.

In addition, the people and so many species of animals, appear willing to sacrifice food. In
contrast, that the audio said what the animals only give the food or the space that he gets. For
example, the humans can’t pass their live single.

In conclusion, the altruistic try to demonstrate that with the sentinel behavior helps ensure the
survival of the other members of a big group.

Your writing response has plenty of mistakes. The most notorious are that some ideas weren’t
mentioned in the reading passage or the lecture. Also, it was difficult for me to understand
certain sentences. Your last sentence talks about humans being intelligent animals, I don’t
think that is a good conclusion sentence, you could have said something else. Overall, I could
understand what you were trying to say, but your response was a little short as well.

INDEPENDENT WRITING
I am agree with the people who want independence…

…but any person can give you reprocessing…

As a result of your formation from a little kid and you grow up like a man.

Finally, if I can independence from my parents, I will do it as soon as possible.

…that he is an adult or growing…

If any person think is an adult or a growing…

Second, adults have more responsibilities than the youngest people…

…with a good job and objectives…

…you should learn to do the homeworks of your new house.

Finally, I am agree with the idea to be a person independence.

Your essay has plenty of mistakes as well, but I was able to understand the general idea. Your
ideas al clear, but you don’t use the correct words for what you are trying to say, example
homework vs chores. Try to practice some structural sentences because you are getting
confused with the use of tenses.