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VÍ DỤ
TOPIC
Đề thi 14/01/2016
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by
tourists but not local people.
QUESTION
Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more
local people to visit these places?

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 DÀN BÀI CHUNG
• Mở bài
+ Nói về topic (paraphrase lại câu của đề bài)
+ Chỉ nêu chung chung là có nguyên nhân gây ra hiện tượng này và có
một số cách để giải quyết nó (không cần đưa cụ thể là nguyên nhân gì
và giải pháp gì)
• Thân bài 1: Giải thích các “reasons”
• Thân bài 2: Giải thích “solutions”
• Kết luận
Nhắc lại nhấn mạnh có các nguyên nhân gây ra hiện tượng này và các
cách để giải quyết nó (chú ý paraphrase). Chỉ cần viết ngắn gọn, đơn
giản.

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 DÀN BÀI
Mở bài:
+ Viết lại câu của đề bài bằng cách paraphrase các từ khóa của bài
+ Trả lời các câu hỏi của đề bài: Đề bài “Nguyên nhân của hiện tượng ?” và “Gợi ý các cách giải quyết
để thay đổi các quan điểm tiêu cực này”
Thân bài 1: Nêu những nguyên nhân giải thích tại sao bảo tàng và địa điểm lịch sử được ưa thích bởi khách
du lịch hơn dân địa phương
+ museums are too familiar to nearby inhabitants
+ entrance tickets at some historical sites are expensive for the local inhabitants to afford
Thân bài 2: Nêu các cách giải quyết cho các nguyên nhân nêu trên để thu hút nhiều khách địa phương hơn
đến các địa điểm này
+ museums ought to be invested in more by the authorities to refresh the exhibits
+ historical relics need to be free for all the local people
Kết luận: nhắc lại ý nêu ra ở câu thứ 2 phần mở bài

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 MỞ BÀI
CÂU CHỦ ĐỀ CỦA ĐỀ BÀI:
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by
tourists but not local people.

CÂU VIẾT LẠI:

It is true that tourists from many parts of the world pay
more visits to museums and historical places than local
inhabitants
 MỞ BÀI
PHẦN CÂU HỎI CỦA ĐỀ BÀI:
Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local
people to visit these places?

CÂU THỨ 2 PHẦN MỞ BÀI :

There are many reasons for this, but this situation should be
addressed by attracting locals in some practical ways.
 MỞ BÀI

ĐỀ BÀI:
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but
not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract
more local people to visit these places?

MỞ BÀI:
It is true that tourists from many parts of the world pay more visits to
museums and historical places than local inhabitants. There are many
reasons for this, but this situation should be addressed by attracting
locals in some practical ways.
Thân bài 1: Nêu những nguyên nhân giải thích tại sao bảo tàng và địa điểm lịch sử được ưa thích bởi khách
du lịch hơn dân địa phương
+ museums are too familiar to nearby inhabitants
+ entrance tickets at some historical sites are expensive for the local inhabitants to afford

There are two main reasons why museums and historical sites are
preferred more by tourists than by local residents. One reason is that
museums are too familiar to the locals. If museums do not change
anything, there will be nothing new for the locals to discover. Like
eating the same dish every single day, they feel bored with visiting
the same places. Furthermore, entrance tickets at some historical
sites are expensive for the local inhabitants to afford. For example, in
Dien Bien, a province in northwestern Vietnam, it is rather hard for
the residents to make ends meet, let alone to spend money on visiting
some famous historical attractions there.
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Thân bài 2: Nêu các cách giải quyết cho các nguyên nhân nêu trên để thu hút nhiều khách địa
phương hơn đến các địa điểm này
+ museums ought to be invested in more by the authorities to refresh the exhibits
+ historical relics need to be free for all the local people

The government should take some measures/steps to tackle this

issue effectively. Firstly, museums ought to be invested in more
by the authorities to refresh the exhibits. The fresher the
exhibitions are, the more local residents will be interested in them.
Secondly, historical relics need to be free for all the local people.
Without worrying about additional expenditures, residents will pay
more to visit historical sites in order to broaden their knowledge
about their home towns.

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MỞ BÀI
There are many reasons for this, but this situation should be addressed
by attracting locals in some practical ways.

KẾT LUẬN:
In conclusion, there are some known reasons for this trend. However,
something should be done by the authorities to attract more visitors from
the local areas.
(14/01/2016) Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is
this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

It is true that tourists from many parts of the world pay more visits to museums and historical
places than local inhabitants. There are many reasons for this, but this situation should be
addressed by attractinglocals in some practical ways.
There are two main reasons why museums and historical sites are preferred more by tourists than
by local residents. One reason is that museums are too familiar to the locals. If museums do not
change anything, there will be nothing new for the locals to discover. Like eating the same dish
every single day, they feel bored with visiting the same places. Furthermore, entrance tickets at
some historical sites are expensive for the local inhabitants to afford. For example, in Dien Bien,
a province in northwestern Vietnam, it is rather hard for the residents to make ends meet, let
alone to spend money on visiting some famous historical attractions there.
The government should take some measures/steps to tackle this issue effectively. Firstly,
museums ought to be invested in more by the authorities to refresh the exhibits . The fresher the
exhibitions are, the more local residents will be interested in them. Secondly, historical relics
need to be free for all the local people. Without worrying about additional expenditures, residents
will pay more to visit historical sites in order to broaden their knowledge about their home
towns.
In conclusion, there are some known reasons for this trend. However, something should be done
by the authorities to attract more visitors from the local areas
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 IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS
We could consider it a ‘2-question essay’ or a ‘problem-solution essay’. In practical terms, it makes no
difference. You did the correct thing – you used one paragraph to answer each question.
You put forward two clear and strong reasons why more locals do not visit museums and historical sites.
You explained both of these and used a great example [Dien Bien]. In paragraph 3, you suggested
solutions for both of these problems in turn. I cannot think of any better or clearer arguments than those
which you used, Bach.This was the other part of your essay. The techniques that you used showed that
you had planned and organised your answer carefully.
Again, there is nothing that I would change: the paragraph structure [as we have already noted] is logical
and the topic sentences indicate perfectly the main idea in each paragraph. Your arguments are
signposted clearly for the examiner: you used One reason/Furthermore in paragraph 2 and
Firstly/Secondly in paragraph 3.
As you developed your explanations, the sentences linked perfectly with each other, using varied sentence
structures and natural, fluent language.
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