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Speech Title: May Fifteen Edited/Revised Version Speech Editing Principle

May 15 of this year, I woke up May 15 of this year, I woke up with good Edit for clarity and continuity
with a happy heart. I thought to spirits and a blissful heart. Today was a
myself, “when I reach 50 years old, memorable day. My head was spinning
60 or beyond, I will look back to this from various things but one thing stood
day and smile.” Then, I paid out to me. I suddenly thought to myself,
attention to my college graduation “when I reach 50 years old, 60 or
picture, framed on a 4x6 decorative beyond, I will look back to this day and
wood edging emblazoned with smile.” I got out from my bed and walked
beautiful memories. I reached for it, to my closet but I came across a picture
and held it closely, and uttered, “10 frame that I recently placed on the top of
years, and I think you did a pretty my drawer. I paid attention to my college
good job!” I slowly put it back to the graduation picture, framed on a 4x6
side table, off to my working station decorative wood edging emblazoned
across my sliding window to fulfill with beautiful memories. I reminisced
one in my daily routine: journal about the times I had made friends and
writing. faced hardships or troubles. But in the
Then, I started: Dear journal, end, they were all worth it. I looked at the
“In my 10 years as a member of the picture fondly, reached for it, and held it
noblest profession in the universe, I closely, and uttered, “It has been 10
have encountered several years, and I think you did a pretty good
influential, inspiring and fabulous job!” I slowly put it back to the side table.
people. So, today, as a tribute, I’m I refreshed myself by doing my daily
going to write about them, starting rituals and went to my working station
off with my top three favorites”. across to fulfill one in my daily routine:
journal writing.
To begin with, I did not like my
first pick. She was someone who
It was few years ago when I found the Edit for continuity and clarity
would always, always disagree with
beauty in narrating significant events that
my ideas and decisions. I
occurred in my life. I opened up my
remember one time while I asked
journal, using my favorite pen and
her to sign my college admission
started writing:
papers, she was infuriated because
Dear journal, “In my 10 years as a
of my choice because I ticked Mass
member of the noblest profession in the
Communications as my priority. It
universe, I have encountered several
was a very long battle of verbal
influential and inspiring people. They
argument. As expected, I did not
were my mentors in life and they taught
win. Another, I came home from
me things I would never forget. So,
school sharing I would want to
today, as a tribute, I’m going to write
extract the tooth of my lab partner
about them, starting off with my top three
without an anesthesia because he’s
favorites”.
irresponsible and ridiculous.
Instead of letting me vent and
To start off, I did not always like my first Edit for continuity
giving me a back rub, she defended
pick. She was someone who would
the behavior of my lab partner
always, always disagree with my ideas
saying, “He must have a bad day.
and decisions. I remember one time
You have to understand.” Precisely,
while I asked her to sign my college
she’s a devil’s advocate.
admission papers, she was infuriated of
my choice because I ticked Mass
But, I have loved her. In fact, Communications as my first priority. It
I have been playing as a devil’s was a very long battle of verbal
advocate since college. I think argument. And as expected, I did not
it’s important to see a situation win. Another time was when I came
from different perspectives. In home from school sharing to her that I
that sense, I can think critically would want to extract the tooth of my lab
and make reasonable decisions. partner without an anesthesia because
In the academic context, I he’s so irresponsible and ridiculous. I
employ it as a strategy to make was so stressed at that time because he
my students be effective was not helping me do the work.
communicators, critical and However, instead of letting me vent and
creative thinkers, service-driven giving me a back rub, she unsurprisingly
citizens, and reflective life-long defended the behavior of my lab partner
learners through exposing them saying, “He must have a bad day. You
to several relevant activities. I have to understand.” After hearing her
learned this from her, from words, a realization dawned upon me. I
someone I know a devil’s could never win to her. Precisely, she’s a
advocate. devil’s advocate.
However, she left me. And
for once, it broke my heart. But I loved her. In fact, I have also been Edit for continuity and clarity
playing as a devil's advocate since
If United Kingdom has the
college. As a growing adult at that time, it
late Margaret Thatcher, and
was important for me to see a situation
China has Wu Yi, I have a friend,
from different perspectives. It helped me
too, an Iron Lady who is my
think critically and make reasonable
second choice. And, I’m lucky to
decisions. In doing my profession as a
have known her. Coined by
teacher, I used it as a strategy to make
Russian journalist Captain Yuri
my students be effective communicators,
Gavrilov in 1976, the iron
critical and creative thinkers, service-
metaphor is used to describe a
driven citizens and reflective life-long
lady who is “strong-willed”.
learners by exposing them to several
Strong-willed, that’s a perfect
relevant activities. I learned this from her,
word that describes my friend. I
from a devil's advocate who broke my
was in grade six back then when
heart and left me.
I witnessed the misery that
happened to her family. I knew
If United Kingdom has the late Margaret Edit for concision
how it felt though I was still
Thatcher, and China has Wu Yi, then I’m
younger. Their business went
very lucky that I had a chance to meet
bankrupt; her husband was
this person. My second choice was my
hospitalized fighting against
friend too. She's an Iron Lady, a very
death; and, she was falling
strong-willed lady. It’s a word that totally
downward spiral. But, she did not
defines my friend in every way. I was in
let go. She stood her ground,
sixth grade when I witnessed the misery
fought back, and turned every
that happened to her family. Their
tragedy into triumph. That’s why
business went bankrupt; her husband
she’s an Iron Lady to me.
was hospitalized; and she's near to
Being strong-willed and giving up and losing hope. Although I
turning tragedy into triumph are was still young, I could feel her sadness.
lessons which I learned from my But, she did not let go. She stood strong,
Iron Lady friend. Had I not fought back and turned every tragedy
applied these lessons to my into triumph. That's why I called her an
personal and professional life, I Iron Lady.
would have lost my sanity and
remained miserable. Turning tragedy into victory and being Edit for clarity
However, she left me. And strong-willed in the face of challenges
for the second time, it broke my are the valuable lessons I learned from
heart. my Iron Lady friend. If I hadn’t applied
Of course, we all have heard these lessons to my life, I would have
the story about a university lost any sense of sanity left in me and
professor who sought a remain miserable throughout my life.
Japanese master for
enlightenment about his However, she left me too unexpectedly. Edit for impact and beauty
questions on Zen. The master Her exit from my life was like putting oil
served the professor with tea, onto a blazing fire. I was already
poured the cup full, and kept on emotionally wounded yet more pain was
pouring. The professor suddenly inflicted to my heart. My soul became
said, “It is overflowing”. The tattered in pieces.
master replied, “You are like this Despite that, let’s move on to the third on Edit for clarity and concision
cup. I cannot show you Zen the list, she was my teacher whom I
unless you empty your cup.” called way back then as “master”. She
once told me a life-changing tale to help
me realize how stubborn and
I first learned this story unreceptive I was. My master taught me
from my third choice, i.e., my to be more open with a new point of view
teacher who I used to call and continue to seek inspirations from
master. That was supposed to other people who can become my new
be a life-changing tale for me masters. By making them my masters, I
because I was very stubborn must absorb what they are trying to
and unreceptive back then. teach me and filter them later. As quoted
But, my master taught me to from Bruce Lee "Absorb what is useful".
be more open with new Hopefully, after I have taken everything
perspectives and continue to in, I can bring out the best in me to be a
seek inspirations from other better educator. To be just like my
people who I can call masters, master and surpass her someday by
too, and to absorb and just becoming a better and creative person.
filter later. As Bruce Lee said, My goal is to reach that "zen point" in my
“Absorb what is useful.” life, where teaching and I are one,
Hopefully, after I have taken everything is intuitive and instinctive,
everything in, I will have where I can see beyond what my eyes
evolved into a better educator, tell me as what swordsman Miyamoto
just like my master and Musashi said.
ultimately, a better creative
person. I want to reach that I'm talking about a life-changing tale
“zen point”, where everything earlier and this is the tale. Of course, we Edit for continuity and clarity
is intuitive and instinctive, all have heard the story about a
where teaching and I are one university professor who sought a
(like the samurai and the Japanese master for enlightenment
sword are one), where I can about his questions on Zen. The master
see beyond what my eyes tell served the professor with tea, poured the
me as what swordsman cup full and kept on pouring. The
Miyamoto Musashi said. professor suddenly said, "It is
Yes, I am aware of the overflowing". The master replied, "You
dangers of having too many are like this cup. I cannot show you Zen
masters. But mixed martial unless you empty your cup".
arts taught us that we can
learn different fighting styles My teacher taught me this tale and it
from different masters, and touched my mind and heart. As I go on Edit for continuity and
eventually, evolve into a well- with my life, I am fully aware of the concision
rounded warrior. I guess the dangers of having too many masters.
secret lies in keeping an open But, like how mixed martial arts taught
mind. I learned that from my us, I realized that we can learn different
master. So, I just make sure fighting styles from different masters,
that when I meet other people and thus, mold us to become a well-
and listen to their stories, I go rounded warrior. I guess, the secret in
with an empty cup. this is keeping an open mind. Every time,
I meet people, I always tuck it on the
Nevertheless, she left me.
back of my mind and palm that I should
Again, it broke my heart.
listen deeply to their stories with an
Right after I signed on my empty cup. Yet once again, she
journal entry, I heard abandoned me and torture my heart. It
euphonious voices of these seemed like every person I meet would
three personalities fused into somehow leave me and keep me
one calling my name. It was hanging. But they always never forget to
my mom. She came in to my make an essential impact on me and for
room with two pieces of cake that, I’m always thankful to them and I
each shaped with letters P and would never exchange my memories
J enough to be carried by her with them for the world.
hands. The letters are initials
of my first name- Philippe Right after signing on my journal entry, I
John. Planted on the edge of heard mellifluous voices of these three Edit for concision, impact,
each cake were five tiny well-lit persons fused into one, calling my name. and beauty
candles. I stood from my post, It was my mom carrying two pieces of
grabbed the pieces from my cake shaped with the letters of P and J
mom’s shaky hands, and put that stands for the initials of my name.
them on my desk. Then, I There were five tiny well-lit candles on
hugged her. It was one of the each of the edge of the cake. I grabbed
tightest hugs I had given her. the cakes from her shaky hands and put
And, she told me, “You’re now them on my desk. Then, I hugged her
a decade young teacher. Way with all my strength. It was one of the
to go, my love, and I promise I tightest hugs I had given her. I did not
will not leave you anymore. want to let of her but I ended the hug
Never.” As online learning becomes morewith common
mixedand more and
emotions. Shemorewas resources
the pillar are converted to
digital form, some
I couldn’t thank her more. people have of my
suggested life,
that despite
public all the
libraries occurring
should be shut down and, in
their place, everyone
May 15 of this year, I woke up should be problems
given an iPad that
withshe anexperience
e-reader every day,
subscription.
with a happy heart. And, she would come to me and ease my
again. I Proponents
thought toof myself, burdens away. She was the hero that I
this idea state thatalways
it will save local cities and towns money because libraries
“when I reach 50 years old, 60 needed. She basked my life with
are expensive to maintain. They also believe
her comforting it will and
encourage
lovingmore people to read because
presence,
or beyond, I will look back to
this day they
againwon’t have toand
and again travel to a library to get a me
protecting book;fromthey the
can simply
crueltyclick
andon what they want
again.” to read and read it from wherever uneasiness
they are. of
They the
couldworld
also when
access I was
more materials because
immature and young. Growing up with
libraries won’t have to buy physical copies of books; they can simply rent out as many digital
copies as they need. her, she taught me how to become
independent and I promise to reciprocate
However, it would be a serious mistake to her for all the things
to replace shewith
libraries had tablets.
done forFirst, digital books
me. She looked at me with an adoring
and resources are associated withgaze less learning
and told and me morethat sheproblems than print resources. A
was happy
study done on tablet vs book reading found
that I’ve nowthat peoplea read
become 20-30%
teacher. Sheslower on tablets,
retain 20% less information, and understand
assured me10% less that
greatly of what
she they
wouldread compared to people
never
who read the same information inleave print.me anymore. staring too long at a screen has been
Additionally,
shown to cause numerous health problems, including blurred vision, dizziness, dry eyes,
I couldn't
headaches, and eye strain, at much higherthank her more.
instances No words
than reading candoes. People who
print
express my deepest gratitude to her. Edit for continuity, impact
use tablets and mobile devices excessively
May 15th ofalso thishave
year,a I higher
woke upincidence
with a ofand
more serious
beauty
health issues such as fibromyalgia, shoulder
joyful and thought
heart and back pain, carpal that
to myself tunnelI syndrome, and
will Inever
muscle strain. I know that whenever forgetmy
read from thise-reader
day in my forentire life. my eyes begin to
too long,
feel tired and my neck hurts. We should not add to these problems by giving people,
especially young people, more reasons to look at screens.

Second, it is incredibly narrow-minded to assume that the only service libraries offer is book
lending. Libraries have a multitude of benefits, and many are only available if the library has
a physical location. Some of these benefits include acting as a quiet study space, giving
people a way to converse with their neighbors, holding classes on a variety of topics,
providing jobs, answering patron questions, and keeping the community connected. One
neighborhood found that, after a local library instituted community events such as play
times for toddlers and parents, job fairs for teenagers, and meeting spaces for senior
citizens, over a third of residents reported feeling more connected to their community.
Similarly, a Pew survey conducted in 2015 found that nearly two-thirds of American adults
feel that closing their local library would have a major impact on their community. People
see libraries as a way to connect with others and get their questions answered, benefits
tablets can’t offer nearly as well or as easily.

While replacing libraries with tablets may seem like a simple solution, it would encourage
people to spend even more time looking at digital screens, despite the myriad issues
surrounding them. It would also end access to many of the benefits of libraries that people
have come to rely on. In many areas, libraries are such an important part of the community
network that they could never be replaced by a simple object.

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