Genre Analysis Essay 2 by Elaine Briones Submission date: 09-Oct-2021 01:31PM (UTC-0500) Submission 1D: 1669571653 File name: Essay_2.docx (26.95) Word count: 1604 Character count: 101456 Briones 1 EI Briones Professor William Nolan ENGL 1301 6 October 2021 ‘The modem world has evolved in so many ways throughout the decades whether it’s diversity, better career options, and technology. Technology has made an impact with the world a commercial websites differ with one another by having different categories and display a variety of products for their consumers. Such commercial websites include Shein, CEE nt Amaon, The formcontent vary within the thre texts tht wil be discussed but the way itis formed is there are tabs depending on what you are shopping for, deals or promos being offered by the site forthe] products, anda shopping cart forte items being purchased. The content that is presented in these commercial websites are the images for the products being sold, the reviews left on the product by customers who bought it, and different varieties of the product like the colors or sizes. ‘The community that is involved with the websites all have the main goal to sell their items from thei websites; the way they use it is by have deals on their sites to tempt customers tha they can get fice shipping if they buy over orders with certain prices, have clearance deals, r have discountlcoupons fr products during certain occasions. The community rules are regulated rules for every commercial website which are “Be helpful, ‘others, and no sexual content, infringing content, and illegal activity.” In order to keep the websites up and going, it must follow the regulations in order to continue with its business.— ‘The first text that will be discussed is the fashion website, Shein. Shein is a Chinese ‘company that was founded by founder Chris Xu in 2008 and is an online shopping website that sells woman fst fashion and delivers purchased items right toa customer's door. SI in consists of women clothing like tops, bottoms. dresses lingerie, jewelry and even collaboration wth designers. This company doesn’t have in person stored but in. 2020, they had made about $10 billion in revenue; during this time, the pandemic broke out which made their sales g0 up higher since everyone was in quarantined (hitps:/vww.vox.com/the-goods/22573682/shein-future-of- {ast-fashion-explained), Shein also made a generous amount of money because of how cheap their clothing is, which tempts customers to bundle more because of good pricing. The way that Shein grabs the attention of their customers is that on their website, they provide a big red box with flashing yellow lettered text “SHEIN 70% OFF”, along with litle text in the bottom “10% Oft'on orders $29, 15% Off on orders $694, 20% Off on oners $169+, CODE: 13SHEINPS' SShein does that in order to catch the person's eye and to give interest that anything they order, they can get a percentage off on whatever item they buy, which convinces customers to make a purchase. ‘The second text is the website Wish, Wish was founded by founder, Peter Szulezewski and Danny Zhang in 2010. This website sells various items including clothing, jewelry. makeup, shoes, phone products, home appliances and toys. The website grabs their customer tention by distributing cheap prices that anyone would think “This is too good to be true”. Wish makes about $1 billion for their annual revenue and although the produets they sell is cheap, it doesn’t gain as much money as customers think it would. Wish is also known to sell products that areBriones 3 unrelated with the products that are displayed on their website, which would leave customers unsatisfied with their purchases and give ther reviews on what they received. An example of an unsatisfied customer was a man purchasing Adidas Yezy’s that seemed to be the right item in the picture that was provided but received a duplicate of "Yeezy’s” that was nothing compared to how the picture looked. The Yeezy’s thatthe customer received looked like slippers to wear at the house rather than looking lke an actual going out shoe. When looking at Wish's website it is shown thatthe dono provide anf SKU number for ther procter unique entity) and the reason they do not provide itis because the company believes their products will show up on customers personalized browsing feed depending on what customer has more interest in rather than having to search for items and get results. (biips://merchantfag wish convhelen- uus/articles/217290307-Why-o-m) yduets-not-show-up-in-seareh-), Another observation that ‘was made is that Wish only sell tein, products to those who have made a customer's account withthe shopping website, The reason they only ello these with an account i the sume reason 4s the SKU number, is that Wish isn't a search-based website andl is meant to show personalized items depending on the customer's liking, as well as what they" ve shopped for or the items that are searched. Soin order t be able to track down what the consumer likes, they need an account so the data stays kept inthe account. The third text is ond the first online shopping website that was created (Cttps://blog.miva comthe-history-of-ccommerce-how-did-it-all-begin), named Amazon. Amazon was founded by Jeff Bezos back in 1994 and began to grow fast with their business by esining 190,000 consumers with Amszon accounts in 1996 budsoon managed to expand their consumers to | million accounts in 1997. (hitps://www britannica comtopic/Amazoncom) . The items that Amazon sell isa wide spectrum and can range from anything. from iPhone" ioBriones 4 Nike's clothing, and even unicorn poop in a can. They also include a Whole Foods Market and a pharmacy in their website to shop for food and prescription drugs and the reason they added a pharmacy to their website is to help their customers get the medication they need if they do or a don’t have insurance. (]tips//press.aboutamazon_com/news-release/news-release ddetails/introdueing-amazon-pharmacy-prescription-medieations- delivered. ~tent= cE 264809 9CWe 20 designed %20Amazon%20Pharmacy%20t0,%2C%20Vi .ceS¢20President4%2C%20Amazon%20Pharmacy%20.) As for the Whole Foods, they included it into their website as a way to attract customers to get Amazon Prime by giving discounts to the food they oS slave convbuisiness/2021/06/Wwhy-amazon-bought-whole-foods- groceries. online himl¥:~:text=Online% 20grocery%20shopping%20has%20been for%20discounts%200n% 2Otheir%20eroceries.) Amazon gets all their inventory from US retailers as well as thind-pary o sellers; they buy products straight from manufacturers (hiips/AWwi ws) commlarticlesamazon= -up-data-from-its-own-sellers-to-launch-competing-produets-11587650015). The company also provides on their website “Amazon Prime” which is « premium that gives you benefits such as fast and fire shipping, free books and offersdeals that aren't offered to those without Amazon Prime. ‘There are a few things the three websites have in common when it comes to running their ‘website and how categorized their items are (&I-FerctON TRE SAME Way. Onc common thing tht Shin and Wish av is tha thy gist rom Chines compas Dds ARON touts to jst about anyone pial aris with heir pros but arent as dere asBriones § me Amazon. Amazon includes their pharmacy and Whole Foods as mentioned earlier, but Wish doesn’t sll food or medications. Another differ they have’ that whenever the eviews are compared with each other, they are all in different numbers. For example, arcen sik dress is searched on all the three websites, stating with Wish it only has 99 reviews and compared to Shein and Amazon, Shein has 5712 reviews meanwhile Amazon has 922 reviews. The reason being why Wish doesn’t have high reviews for her products is because they don't have as mc, investors as Shein and Amazon do, Amazon is a gigantic company ThaCTrve Pany connections from brands and investors, that they are able to provide a great variety to their consumers compared to Wish, Another reason why Wish also doesn’t have as many reviews compared to Sein and Amazon is becnuse they only cater tcustomers that created an account with them the reviews that are left on the products being sold are let by customers who are associated with Wish, {ues jal websites all have one main goal in mind for their business and that is 10 satisfy their consumers with the products they are marketing. Although they have differences with how many people shop their website, how much they sell, who has more connections with other investors or companies, they have made it easier to shop in a click of a few buttons without the hassle of shopping in an in-person store where you may not find what you're looking for. It saves the tip and saves up time to shop online,Briones 6 Work Cited Amazon Green Silk Dress: hitps://www.amazon com/ZAFUL-Womens-Spaghetti-Straps- ‘Stain/dp/B0821DYIMPiref=sr_1_25_sspachild=1.&keywords= spons&epse=1despLa=ZWSjenlWwdGVKUXVhbGImaWV yPUEZQIe3SFcORV BNNIZEImVuY355 cHRIZEIkPUEWNDkyMzEzM IZQWEVXRUw4R2FGSiZIbmN yeXBOZWRBZEIKPUEWNTK4 MDM3Szd YRTZPQOpE ViklxIndpZGdldEShbWU9e3BIX Rm! mEjdGlvbjl jbGljaLJIZGlyZWN, OJmRvTm90TG9nQ2xp¥2s9dHTIZ0== Shein Green Silk Dress: htips://us shein com Solid-Drawstring-Side-Cami-Dress-p-2759697-cat- 1727.html?scici=Search~~EditScarch~~1~~green_20silk 20dress~~~~0 Wish Green Silk Dress: hitps://www_wish.com/product/womens-fashion-solid-color-sleeveless- spaghetti-strap-cowl-neck-slip-casual-dross- Se478c77ee99 a3ae8be74427hide login_modal=truegshare=mobileweb Miva, “The History of Ecommerce: How did it all begin?” Miva, 26 October 26 2011 bups://blo sniva.com/the-history-of-ecommerce-how-did-it-all-begin Neuyen, Terry “Shein the future of fast fashion. Is that a good thing?” Vor, 10 August 2021 huips//www.vox.convthe-goods/22573682/shein-future-of-fast-fashion-explained Kozma, Leila, “Why is Online Retailer SHEIN So Suspiciously Cheap” Distractify,10 June 2020 hups/iwww distractify.com/p/shein-why-so-cheap Hake, Mark R, “Wish Stock Is Cheap, But It's Not a Bargain”, Investor Place, 18 June 2021 bhips://investorplace.cony202 |/06/wish- stock-not-worth-more-than- 12-86-or-16-percent-more- without-fef-or-ebitda-profits/Briones 7 “Why do my products not show up in search?", Wish Merchants Help Center, 7 October 2021 bhups:/merchantfag.wish.convhc/en-us/articles/217299307-Why-do-my-products-not-show-up- in-search- Mattioli, Dana, “Amazon Scooped Up Data From Its Own Sellers to Launch Competing, Products” The Wall Street Journal, 23 April 2020 ups:/www.wsj.com/articlevamazon-scooy lata-from-its-own-sellers-{0-launeh- competing. produets-11587650015 Introducing Amazon Pharmacy: Prescription Medications Delivered, Amazon, 17 November 2020 https//press aboutamazon.com/news-releases/news-release-details/introducing-amazon- ppharmacy-prescription-medications- delivered: ~tent=%E280%9CWe%20designed%20Amazon%20Pharmacy %20t0,%2C%20Vi .co%20Presidem'%2C% 20 Amazon%20Pharmacy%20 Stevenson, Seth, “It’s Finally Clear Why Amazon Bought Whole Foods” Slate, 28 June 2021 0their%20groceriesGenre Analysis Essay 2 ‘ORIGINALITY REPORT 5. 2% 2x 5x SIMILARITY INDEX INTERNET SOURCES PUBLICATIONS, STUDENT PAPERS PRIMARY SOURCES: judiciary.house.gov 2— Internet Source Submitted to International School of Stuttgart 1 % Student Paper 5 Submitted to Rossmoyne Senior High School 1 % udent Paper Submitted to Allen County Community 1 % College Student Paper Submitted to Grand Valley State University 1 % Student Paper g Exclude quotes On Exclude matches <3 words Exclude bibliography OnGenre Analysis Essay 2 GRADEMARK REPORT FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS Instructor PAGE Qu Focus on task QM Qu This section of your essay does not appear to be strongly focused on the task. Reread the assignment and then revise your writing so that each section of your essay works to effectively respond to all parts of the task. Additional Comment assignment was for the essay to compare and contrast that means the majority of the essay accomplishes that with analysis (2/3) you gave me a single paragraph doing that, need way more effort Comment 1 need a better title Problem in Parallel Form: Coordinate ideas should be expressed in parallel form. All expressions that are similar in content and function should be expressed similarly. Missing ","QM PAGE 2 Missing comma: Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), itis a great help to your reader to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like "because," "while" or “although,” as in the following example: "While everyone was fighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing. Article Error You may need to remove this article. Cap. Error Capitalization Simp. Thesis too simple: A good thesis should not state something that is obviously true, When your thesis is too easy to prove, your essay can become repetitive and you may feel that you do not have enough to write about. A complex thesis, on the other hand, requires you to convince your reader that your argument is logical and will reveal ideas that cannot be easily anticipated. A worthwhile thesis will always outline an argument with which a reader can readily disagree. Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks. Wrong Form You may have used the wrong form of this word. Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks. Possessive Review the rules for possessive nouns. Confused You have used either an imprecise word or an incorrect word. Verb This verb may be incorrect. Proofread the sentence to make sure you have used the correct form of the verb. Wrong Article You may have used the wrong article or pronoun. Proofread the sentence to make sure that the article or pronoun agrees with the word it describes. " Review the rules for using punctuation marks. Missing PossessivePAGE 4 Qu Qu QM Qu PAGES Qu Quotation/Punctuation Format Only ? and ! are included before the quotation marks when followed by citations... ellipses and commas are to REMOVED COMPLETELY, while periods are to be moved to AFTER the citation, Ex) ...becomes a knight of infinite resignation" (Kierkegaard147). Del. Delete Awk. Awkward: The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting Run-on Run-on sentence: The sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or semicolon. Paragraph Organization Disorganized: the ideas here jump around without rhyme or reason. Ask yourself: what would be the main idea of this paragraph? Here's a clue: making something your first sentence does not make it the actual main idea of the paragraph if you then veer off and jump to other topics... EVERY SENTENCE IN THE PARAGRAPH SHOULD BE DEFINING THIS ONE SAME MAIN IDEA, DESCRIBING IT, EXPLAINING IT, PRESENTING EVIDENCE FOR IT, ETC. Analysis or Exploration Required These statements reveal what is already obvious to the audience. Analysis of the facts is required here- what is revealed that people do not normally recognize? Is there a pattern? Does this pattern reveal something new and interesting? What assumptions are exposed? What are the unforeseen impacts? What's at stake? Why is this important? What can we learn from this? Are there problems involved here? Can we combine this information with other factors you've brought up? How does this fit into your thesis’ argument? Verb This verb may be incorrect. Proofread the sentence to make sure you have used the correct form of the verb. Wrong Article You may have used the wrong article or pronoun. Proofread the sentence to make sure that the article or pronoun agrees with the word it describes. S/V This subject and verb may not agree. Proofread the sentence to make sure the subject agrees with the verb. Confused You have used either an imprecise word or an incorrect word.Qu Conclusion Needs Work Weak conclusion: This conclusion needs a lot more effort: it seems rushed, like a couple sentences slapped together to get it over with or a mere restatement of the essay without anything new. The conclusion should tie together any loose ends and suggest the implications of the line of thought explored thus far and possibly further avenues of future research PAGE PAGE 7RUBRIC: COMPARE CONTRAST GENRE 14/20 CONTR. IDEA (20%) 15/20 ABOVE AVERAGE (20) AVERAGE as) BELOW AVERAGE (10) EVIDENCE (20%) Text presents a revelatory controlling idea that guides the text, supported with the use of relevant sub-claims that further the author's purpose/ intended meaning of the text Text presents a controlling idea, though it may not be revelatory or clear and is somewhat supported with sub-claims, though some may seem tangential. Text presents ideas, but the ideas do not further the author's purpose. Text does not present a controlling idea, nor does the text present sub-claims that are connected to the claim. Author has simply reported information. 15/20 ABOVE AVERAGE (2) AVERAGE a5) BELOW AVERAGE (10) DESCRIPTION (20%) Text presents evidence in a logical manner and has been chosen based on relevance to the controlling idea and ability to further the controlling idea/author's, purpose. Text presents evidence for the controlling idea, though not all the selected evidence furthers the author's purpose or it is unclear how the evidence works to do so. Some tangents present Text either does not present any evidence for the controlling idea or the evidence does not further the author's purpose and is tangential. 15/20 ABOVE AVERAGE (20) AVERAGE as) BELOW AVERAGE (10) COMP/CONTR (20%) Text presents a clear understanding of the concept of compare and contrast. Text also presents evidence that demonstrates this understanding. Text presents an understanding of the concept of compare and contrast, although itis clear that that the author stumbles to fully comprehend. Text presents some evidence to demonstrate the understanding. Text presents a clear lack of understanding the concept of compare and contrast and presents evidence to demonstrate such. 10/20 ABOVE AVERAGE (20) AVERAGE as) Text presents a clear understanding of the compare and contrast genre of an essay and the intended audience. Text clearly understands his/her purpose and uses the genre as such. Text seems confused about the purpose of the compare and contrast genre of an essay, though the purpose is accomplished. Evidence of a misunderstanding of audience and how the genre works for the author's purpose.BELOW AVERAGE (19) GRAM/MECH (20%) Text does not present a clear understanding of the intention of the compare and contrast genre of an essay, including the conventions required of the audience and purpose of the genre. 15/20 ABOVE AVERAGE (20) AVERAGE as) BELOW AVERAGE (10) Style and grammar are mostly appropriate for the assigned genre and audience. Text appears to have benefitted from proofreading and editing. The essay is organized around the controlling idea, and transitions are used to guide the audience. Style and grammar are somewhat appropriate for the assigned genre and audience. Text appears to have not benefitted from proofreading and editing. The somewhat organized around the controlling idea, and transitions are used to guide the audience, although some confusion persists. Style and grammar are mostly inappropriate for the assigned genre and audience. Text appears not to have been proofread or edited. The essay is not organized around the controlling idea, and transitions are not used to guide the audience.