Paige

Potoski

Dufresne

11/10/21

Reflection on Writing Pieces

In my when I was young poem, I said, “It was usually goldfish or ritz cheese crackers, and

we’d enjoy the taste, salty and crunchy.” I like my use of sensory details and adjective shifting.

Before I read the King chapters and learned different tools to make my writing better, I

would’ve flipped the adjectives to before rather than after. Although that still sounds good,

switching the adjectives sometimes make it sound better and more put together. I also

would’ve skipped describing the food altogether and wouldn’t have used sensory details.

In my list memoir, I said, “Everything was spooky; the trees were spooky, the dark night

sky was spooky, and everyone we saw looked spooky.” Compared to my writing last year, I

grew a lot. I feel like this sentence shows my growth. I used the semi-colon which I didn’t learn

what it was and how to use it until recently. I also used repetition with spooky which makes the

sentence more interesting and the story better for the reader. Before, I would’ve put all of my

descriptions behind just one spooky, but that would made it a run on sentence and boring for

the reader, so I used what I learned from the King chapters and what I’ve learned in class to

improve this story

In my vignette “Outside,” I said, “The screeching of the cicadas that came out in August,

and when you heard them you knew you were free— freely exploring the earth which had

endless possibilities. And the smell, the earthly smell of what’s around you. The dirt, the cut

grass, the smell of living.” This is a good example of growth in my writing. I like how I used
sensory details instead of just describing what I see. It makes my vignette more interesting and

the reader can accurately envision and feel what it was actually like.