S Nurse moder tesay secon c sovtce Conon /Nte Evasion A good essay should have the following criteria to help make your writing more interesting. Brief. Introduction Feelings Adjectives/ Interesting Closure Moral. Adverbs Expressions Value «Brief Introduction Readers gain their first impression of an essay from this section, so an effective introduction is vital to introduce the characters and the setting. This includes the main character's age, personality, what they were doing and where they are at the star of the story. Main ini i character & ubble map relationship Address Personality Hobby / Hobbies 124Main character & Relationship Age Address Hobby/Hobbies . (*If possible , link to the story) Personality ("If possible, link fo the story) UPER Model Rssays section C ~ Sentence Ganstucin / Note Expansion Siti is my best friend. Siti is my bosom friend. Siti is my classmate. Sit is my neighbour and classmate. Siti is my cousin and bosom friend. She is twelve years old. She is the same age as me. She is older than me. She is younger than me. She ves near my house. She lives in Kota Bharu. She lives in Taman Murni. ‘She lives at No.23, Jalan Murni. She lives in a wooden house. She studies at SK Taman Murni. She studies in Year 6 Red, SK Taman Murni. Her hobby is reading. Her hobbies are reading and gardening. She likes outdoor activities such as swimming, camping and jungle trekking. She likes indoor activities such as reading, sewing and cooking. Sheis ahelpful person. (gif, boy, man, woman) = hardworking/brave/responsible/ She has a heart of gold and always helps others who are in need. She is a stubborn girl who refuses to listen to her parents’ advice. ee ee friendly/polite/kind/generous/helpfulA.Time ‘UPSR Model Essays Soction C - Sontonce Consinicton / Note Expansion Time is @ particular moment or hour for something. Use time to show when the ident or event took place. Twas six o'clock in the morning. Tt was two o'clock in the afternoon. Ttwas ten o'clock at night. One day / One fine day / One Friday, Ttwas a sunny (windy / hot / cloudy / rainy, stormy) day. | morning/ afternoon/ evening ‘One morning / One Monday morning Early in the morning / At the crack of dawn One night / On Monday night At night / At midnight Tiwas a dark (warm / quiet / cold / windy) night. One weekend / Last week / Last weekend / During the weekend During the holidays / During the school holidays / It was a public holiday Ttwas Teacher's Day, Itwas Mother's Day / It was Father's Day. Itwas National Day. It was Sports Day. kRead the instructions carefully and check the word limit. Study the picture/ pictures in the sequence given fo get a general idea of the story clearly. Pay attention to the situation presented in the picture/pictures. Observe who the main characters are and give names if they are not provided. Use the words given to help you construct an interesting story. Expand on the words by writing in supporting details about the picture/ pictures. Try to convey your ideas through a variety of sentence structures. My mother is a housewife. (simple sentence) ‘My mother and father are concerned about our studies. (compound sentence) My mother who is a housewife is always busy with the housework, (complex sentence] Use linking words like ‘Finally’, ‘Then’, ‘So’, ‘Next’, ‘Therefore’ , etc when necessary fo show coherence to sustain the interest of the reader. He took abath. Then, he had his breakfast. Next, he walked to school, Use adjectives and adverbs to make your story more interesting. % The gif scored wellin the exam. The diligent gil scored well in the exam. (adjective) ‘= He called the police to report about the incident. He called the police immediately to report about the incident. (adverb) ‘Add new words {words which are not in the examination text) to express ideas. © Everyone was amazed by his outstanding performance. End your story well with a good closure / great ending. Do not forget fo check your essay for grammar, spelling and punctuation mistakes.i rt scram nee ten 5 Nurse modes nesays-cronne ven to hel Write a story based on the pictures below. You may use the words given fo help you Write your answer in the space provided. Write your story between 80 to 100 words. ~ saw ~ house - fre - called — fire brigade ~ arrived ~ firefighters - put out - climbed ~ save - lady ~ managed - partly destroyed - grateful - rescued ~ praisedLUPSR Model Besays- Comma BS Essay: Example of a) | One day, David "were Bane home after school. Suddenly “she saw a | house on fire. He quickly "call the fire brigade. After “fiveteen minutes, the fire brigade arrived. The firefighters quid | spray water to “puted out the fire, One of the firefighters climbed the ladder to | sve a old man. Soon, the firefighters managed "put out the fire. Luckily, the house “only | partly destroyed. David was grateful that the old “men was rescued. Everyone | | prose ‘fo David "of "her quick action. He was happy he "'good deed done. | ( Examiner's Comments } Nicene teens | 0 wrong subject verb agreement ~ replace with was wrong pronoun = replace with he ‘| wrong tense = replace with called | "wrong spelling = replace with fifeen | & wrong tense = replace with sprayed ® wrong past tense word = replace with put wrong article | = replace with an "omission of -to omission of verb-to-be was "© wrong singular noun = replace with man "omit to, not needed | | ' wrong preposition | = replace with for ‘31 wrong possessive pronoun ~ replace with his “wrong structure, ~ replace with had done o good deed deed