PERFORMANCE TASK NO.

Form groups with 2-3 members. In 5-10 sentences, evaluate the paragraph based on the
properties we discussed in class. Use the guide questions provided in writing your evaluation.
On the second part of this worksheet, rewrite the paragraphs correctly.

GUIDE QUESTIONS:

ORGANIZATION
✔ Is it well-organized?

✔ Is there a clear thesis statement?

✔ Is it pleasing in the eyes?

COHERENCE AND COHESION
✔ Is it coherent? Is it cohesive?

✔ How are the ideas arranged?

✔ What signal devices are used?

LANGUAGE USED
✔ Is the language used formal or informal?

✔ Does it use concrete, concise, and familiar language?

MECHANICS
✔ Are there any errors in the paragraph?

✔ Do these errors affect your understanding of the topic

Your Evaluation:

The paragraph contains repetition and some unncesarry ideas. It also has wrong spellings
and unclear thesis statement. There also puntuations that are used incorrectly. Although the
paragraph is coherent, there are two ideas that are messy and it doesn't compliment each
other. The language used is informal, however, all familiar. There are errors in paragraph that
will confuse the reader of which is really the main idea of it.

Improved Paragraph:
 I hate wet and rainy days.

It rained a lot in 1816. A lot, like everyday. The weather in Europe was abnormally wet. So
people were stucked inside and bored. If I was Mary Shelley, I might decide to write a book
too. Mary Shelley decided to write a book because it was awful outside. She said that she
"passed the summer of 1816 in the environs of Geneva... we occasionally amused ourselves
with German stories of ghosts... these tales excited us in a playful desire of imitation." I can
totally see her point, you know? I guess I would write a novel if there was nothing else to do.
Afterall, it was the only thing you could do without TV or anything.

Your Evaluation:
The paragraph is well organized and pleasing in the eyes. It used clear and right punctuation
marks needed and it has a clear thesis statement. The paragraph is cohesive and contains
only one idea. Although there is one sentence that could be placed in other part, the ideas in
this paragraph are well arranged. It does not hinder the reader to fully understand the thesis
statement. This paragraph used a formal language. All words are concrete and concise. There
are some terms that are only used for that kind of topic. There are no error in this paragraph.
And this paragraph is written well that I can understand it easier.

Improved Paragraph:
Establishing rural financial systems involves identifying which financial systems are
appropriate for the region in question. Low population density and difficult-to-reach remote
areas in many countries translate into high transaction costs for financial institutions
contemplating an entry into these areas. Limited economic opportunities in many rural areas
result in small transactions, further increasing overall transaction costs. Rural financial
systems offer particular challenges that do not seem to affect countrywide systems.