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BY JULIE BOGART
The Writer’s Jungle
The Writer’s Jungle. Copyright © 2001 by Julie Bogart. Published by Brave Writer,
West Chester, Ohio 45069
"This is a terrific class for mothers who have looked at every curricu-
lum imaginable and have come away with their heads spinning and no
closer to an answer than when they began! This class has given me the
tools I need to help my children become better writers and for me to
relax with the process. I have been “given permission” by professionals to
concentrate on the process of writing rather than be uptight in grading
papers for grammatical and spelling errors. The writing that my children
have done while taking this class has improved and is something they are
excited about sharing with others. That, to me, is immeasurable.”
—Lisa McAfee
“This has been the first positive experience I've had with teaching
writing to my kids. It's practical, realistic, and encouraging. Not only is
the writing process clarified, the mother/child relationship is strength-
ened.”
—Margaret Colvin
“It’s not just the hands-on approach to writing but the hand-hold-
ing.”
—Jane Reimold
“Your courses have been very enlightening to me, this one especially,
as your approach to teaching writing is entirely different than anything
else I have ever experienced. I have gained an understanding of not only
how to approach the writing process, but an understanding of why tradi-
tional writing instruction doesn't work.”
—Ruth Anna Leiter
“There was something about having two teachers “out there” who
care about me and Joey; it was motivation for both of us beyond the
impersonal text or workbooks! I guess the feeling that you and Rachel
cared as much (more in fact!) about our relationships with our children
as you did about producing ANYTHING!”
—Mary Hunt
“Even though I have tried numerous curriculum that has had writing
assignments spelled out—they have never seemed to work. This worked
because it was an assignment that we (child and me) did together. By
that I mean that we were really on the same team because I was learning
too. It wasn't me stating “do the assignment” and then walking away.”
—Paula Horton
“The most valuable thing I learned is that it's okay to direct and pull
things out of the girls. I wasn't sure how much direction to give them,
but the more direction I gave, the more they began to think for them-
selves. The most valuable thing they learned is that they can write.”
—Kim Eldridge
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Julie Bogart
teach her for reading. She put the alphabet together in her own phoneti-
cally correct way and created words she could read back to us over and
over again (though no one else understood how her phonics worked).
The first time she wrote a story that I could read, she retold the legend
of “Atlanta and the Golden Apples.” We’d made a little book about that
story, and she wouldn’t put up with telling it to me while I jotted it
down. She had to take that pencil out of my hand and write it herself.
Her spellings eluded most other readers, yet I found myself able to track
the logic of her personal phonetic system. It was a powerful moment of
growth for her and joy for me. Her passion for writing was teaching her
to read!
Her passion for writing was
teaching her to read! A few months later, I began to study biblical Greek. During our
copywork (Chapter One) times, I copied Greek while the kids copied
passages in English. But this strange old alphabet fascinated Caitrin, so
she decided to learn it. Caitrin wrote the Greek alphabet out so many
times that I wondered if she knew it better than I did. Amazingly
enough, before she could read a single reader in English, she was sound-
ing out the Greek alphabet and using it to write each of our names. She
transliterated English words using Greek characters. She did this by
applying strict phonics.
This strategy worked wonderfully for Caitrin. Phonetic Greek was a
real breakthrough. She could see that the rules she understood could be
applied regularly and they’d produce words that could be read. We
resumed our attempts to read English on this basis, and quickly she froze
again. It was very discouraging.
Six months slid by. Caitrin turned nine. I continued to read to her,
and she continued to write. She would copy some English into a note-
book, but by and large, her writing was limited to phonetic English of
her own creation and her reading never took off. During all this time,
Caitrin taught herself how to play games on the computer, navigate the
Internet, and identify the Greek alphabet in all the surprising places it
exists. Her vocabulary expanded, and she memorized poetry. All without
reading.
One day, everything clicked into place. Caitrin asked for an email
address so that she could discuss “Skating with the Stars” with her
grandma. I wondered how she’d manage to both write real words and to
read the response. I shouldn’t have worried. After two weeks of emails,
while reading to Caitrin one morning, she took the book out of my hand
and instead, read it to me.
Mouth hanging open, I asked, “Can you read this?”
“Yeah. I think I just learned how to read.”
“How did that happen?”
“Well, I’ve been writing to Grandma. She sends me an email and I
have to sit there and figure out what she says. Dad said to just skip words
you don’t know and see if the whole thing makes sense once you read the
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other words. So I tried it. And it worked! I didn’t have to read every
word for you and no one watched me and I had time. I also had to write
back to her, so I had to see if my words were spelled right and stuff.”
Knock me over with a feather. The writing road to reading to be
sure, but wow did she take the long way home. The journey to reading
came through writing. And the writing was never about the correctness The journey to reading came
of the spelling, the accuracy of the grammar, the precision of the punctu- through writing. And the writ-
ation. It was about the expression of a self in quest of language and she ing was never about the cor-
happened to choose a pencil and paper to make it happen. rectness of the spelling, the
accuracy of the grammar, the
Lest you think that this was an ideal example of a journey from illit- precision of the punctuation. It
erate to literate, let me assure you I lost some sleep during those nine was all about the expression of
years. I didn’t know the end from the beginning. Caitrin is our fifth a self in quest of language and
child. She read the latest of any of them, yet started writing earlier than she happened to choose a pen-
cil and paper to make it hap-
the others too. I share her story here, now, because learning is like this. pen.
We can’t plan to have a child learn according to our schedules, but we
can affirm and encourage each stage of development. We can trust the
process and nurture it as we are given opportunity.
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family, but we have also added tools that make your life easier, if you so
choose. Let’s take a look at what those are. The Writer’s Jungle is the cor-
nerstone of the Brave Writer philosophy. It’s the piece that funds the
entire operation and makes it possible for me to offer all kinds of free
support online in the forums, through the blog and via email. This man-
ual gives you the philosophy of writing and coaching that you’ll use for
the rest of your children’s writing lives. Its content is not duplicated on
the website, though the first half of the book presents similar material to
what is offered in the Kidswrite Basic online course. I hope you’ll return
to The Writer’s Jungle often and that you’ll use the three-ring binder to
save your children’s work right with the chapters that give the exercises.
The binder also enables you to include issues of the Arrow, Boomerang
or Slingshot (to be described below) as you order and print them off.
We offer both public and private forums at bravewriter.com. The
Brave Writer Scratch Pad public forum gives Brave Writer families the
chance to chat about writing, homeschool, and the various Brave Writer
Lifestyle practices that have become a part of their lives. I also offer
feedback on writing, give advice and answer questions related to anything
language arts. The private forums are for classes, which I’ll explain in a
minute.
The Brave Writer blog provides a weekly Friday freewriting prompt,
articles that develop some aspect of writing, book reviews, movie reviews,
student writing contests, family photos taken at teatime and more. It’s
updated three to five times weekly. The blog is the place where I offer
you new ideas about writing and stimulate you to try new writing prac-
tices or prompts.
In addition to the blog and forums, there is another resource that has
revolutionized how families incorporate the Brave Writer philosophy into
their families. I’ve developed a free yahoo group list called the Brave
Writer Lifestyle that offers families a weekly routine to help them to
organize their days and weeks around practices like copywork, dictation,
nature study, movie viewing, teatime and poetry, Shakespeare and art
appreciation. The list functions as a calendar program which sends mes-
sages to remind you what to do each day. Additionally, once a week an
email is sent that helps you remember what step in the writing process to
take if you complete one writing project per month. You can find the list
at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/bravewritermoms/ On the Brave
Writer website you will find pages that correspond to the reminder
emails that give complete details about how to lead the Brave Writer
Lifestyle.
Classes
Brave Writer has expanded its online class offerings and will contin-
ue to do so as we add staff and writing coaches. We offer classes on the
quarter system–fall, winter, spring and summer sessions. Classes last
between three and six weeks in length. Families travel, have sick relatives
to attend to, give birth to new babies, hustle off to sports competitions
and more. By keeping the courses to a manageable length, you have a
much better chance of finding a course whose schedule fits your own.
Courses are taught online in private folders on the discussion forums
portion of the Brave Writer website. Students register with the forum
creating a password protected user ID. Only myself, the registered stu-
dents and the writing coach have access to the class folder. During those
three to six weeks, the coach posts assignments, exercises and reading
material pertaining to the course. The student checks in daily to read
new postings. All students participate at their convenience since the
forums are asynchronous (which means that the courses are not “live”
and don’t depend on participants being online at the same time). Some
of the courses are aimed at parents (conversations happen between coach
and mother or father with writing being posted by mom or dad) and
others are conducted directly between teen and coach (these are our
classes aimed at junior and senior high students specifically). Please read
the descriptions of each class carefully to understand how that particular
class is operated.
The current class offerings include:
• Kidswrite Basic (the foundational course for BW)
• Just So Stories (creating your own Just So Story following
Rudyard Kipling’s model)
• Kidswrite Intermediate (transitional class for junior and
senior high students to prepare them for academic writing)
• Expository Essay (high school course)
• SAT/ACT Timed Essay Course (high school course)
• Passion for Fiction (junior and senior high)
• Creative Writing (teen version and adult version)
• Write for Fun (one for kids and another for adults!)
• Write Your Own Greek Myth (New!)
• Kidswrite Basic Empowered (Two part course for kids who
suffer from language processing disorders)
• High School Poetry
More classes will be added as we design and staff them.
Chapter One of The Writer’s Jungle gives you an outline for how to
manage your language arts program in addition to writing. I like
Charlotte Mason’s approach to copywork and dictation. In that vein, I
have created three language arts subscription programs to help the har-
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focuses on the literature selected for the Slingshot itself. Each month,
Jon (my husband, MA American Literature, adjunct faculty at Xavier
University) leads a discussion based on the current month’s literature
selection. Students are not required to produce polished works of writing
but instead are engaged at the level of thoughtful critique and analysis of
the literature. This discussion group acts as a foundation for literary
analysis. Starting in the fall of 2006, we are adding a writing component
called The Slingshot Advanced for those students who wish to bring
their literary insights through the writing process to complete an essay of
literary analysis.
In order to evaluate your student’s writing skill level and to create a
year’s routine and program for your kids, we offer The Arrow and
Slingshot Evaluation and Planning Tools. These tools give you the
ability to think about your kids’ writing using the Brave Writer philoso-
phy to assess them and then to plan accordingly.
Help for High School is proving to be an excellent resource for high
school students. Instead of the usual drudgery that students associate
with academic writing, Help for High School is written to your teen using
examples from teen life while teaching writing principles. The opening
set of exercises focus first and foremost on powerful writing techniques as
well as developing rhetorical thinking skills. The second half of the book
introduces two essay formats: the exploratory essay and the argumenta-
tive expository essay. It’s available for purchase as a digital download so
that when you purchase it, it arrives instantly in your email inbox. You
print the chapters at home as you use them.
Literary Elements
Since its inception, Brave Writer has made one aspect of writing a
key priority that sets it apart from other writing curricula––our emphasis
on teaching literary elements. Good writing is not all grammar and orga-
nization, mechanics and structure. The best writing makes use of literary
techniques that enhance the quality of word choice, images, comparisons
and source material. These cannot only be appreciated in the writing of
great authors, but can be examined for the role they play in our own
writing.
Rather than stress structure in the early years, we emphasize a con-
scious appreciation of quality writing. The way Brave Writer conceives of
writing then looks something like this:
• Stimulate the imagination with quality works of literature
and non-fiction.
• Supply data that answers questions and whose answers pro-
voke new questions.
• Sustain engagement with the material over a period of time.
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You don’t have to know a thing about basketball to realize that the
Bruins made such short work of the Tigers, the game could hardly be
called a nail-biter. Rather than saying so directly, the writer entertains the
reader by making unexpected comparisons that thrust us into the bore-
dom he experienced watching the game.
Watching sweat dry is a great comparison since it’s a part of most
sports; however, sweating is the least interesting aspect of a sporting
event. What makes the analogy of C-Span and Baroque Painting sur-
prising is that it’s located in a context not usually associated with sports.
If the analogy is fresh (not used often) and accurately describes the expe-
rience, you get surprise and oftentimes, humor. For instance, one of my
students compared the string on a yo-yo to a lasso wielded by a midget!
These are the kinds of comparisons that wake up the writing and bring it
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More on revision
One of the most common questions I get via email is “What now?”
Moms are able to incorporate copywork, dictation, teatime, watching a
movie, reading poetry and freewriting into their routines. But when it Kids typically stumble upon
surprise in writing because they
comes to revision of one of those freewrites, panic sets in. Chapters 7-9 aren’t hung up on getting it all
of The Writer’s Jungle are devoted to this process. Unfortunately, I’ve right and dreary for educators.
noticed that the gentle hand-holding I’ve offered online goes from casual When they make you laugh or
swinging of our hands to a tightened grip as mothers think about how to cause you to pause, celebrate.
They’re on the right track.
revise their children’s writing. Freewriting is so pleasurable. Will they
now have to enter the rapids of critical analysis that brings about tears
and pain after so much cheerfulness? I understand the anxiety. I want to
relieve you of it.
You don’t have to change your tune and become “mean mommy” just
because it’s time to revise. There are two primary tricks I like to suggest
to moms who find themselves still a little shaky before embarking on the
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revision process. These will help you set up the conditions for a successful
revision experience.
First, when you shift from writing program to writing lifestyle, you’ll
encourage lots of freewriting and an even larger amount of meaningful
conversation. Conversation that benefits writing is the kind where mom
listens and kids talk. You’ll know you’re having one of those meaningful
conversations if you find yourself saying, “Is that so?” “Mmmm,” and
Freewriting is so pleasurable. “Tell me more.” Your child will race through the scenario explaining the
Will they now have to enter the experience with hands moving and arms flapping. These are good signs
rapids of critical analysis that that you’ve engaged her deeply about a topic. One-on-one time is a chal-
brings about tears and pain
after so much cheerfulness? I
lenge in most busy homeschooling households, but it’s critical to growth
understand the anxiety. I want in vocabulary that leads to good writing. And not everyone is adept at
to relieve you of it. drawing out more words from their kids, particularly if you have a shy or
non-verbal child. I’ve complied a list of ways to be with your kids one-
on-one to help you get in the habit of quality conversations in spite of
being the busy moms and dads that I know we all are.
...when you shift from writing • Rotate your children to the front seat of the car. Chat with
program to writing lifestyle, the front-seater.
you’ll encourage lots of
freewriting and an even larger • Go for walks with the dog and alternate who goes along.
amount of meaningful conver-
sation. • Stay up late or get up early with one of your kids on a regu-
lar basis.
• Involve one of them in making dinner and talk while chop
ping garlic.
• Fold laundry and chat.
• Sort clothes for the Goodwill with one child at a time.
One-on-one time is a challenge
in most busy homeschooling • Clip a newspaper or magazine article that would interest
households, but it’s critical to
growth in vocabulary that leads
one of your kids, leave it for him on his bed, and then dis
to good writing. cuss it later that day or week.
• Ask to listen to a favorite song or band’s music and discuss
lyrics.
• Play cards one-on-one.
• Treat your kids once in a while to café au lait at Barnes and
Noble. Browse books together. Converse.
• Work on the garden.
• Peel wallpaper.
• Paint walls.
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Always take a child along or involve a kid. When you give your
attention to any one of your children, words will follow. Be interested
and attentive to those words. Writing comes from collecting and express-
ing what we know in language. Meaningful conversations are the most
critical component to a writing program. Through them, you help your
child search for language that communicates the interior vision or experi-
ence or knowledge that creates writing. Don’t assume that a child who
has read and experienced has sufficiently internalized the information to
write about it. Conversation enables a child to sort through the vague
ideas and to dig back into the material to gain mastery over the contents.
Your interest, questions and reactions serve as fine-tuning instruments to
help your child clarify meaning and content.
If you feel short on questions that lead to good discussion, perhaps a
few of these will get you jumpstarted.
• What made you interested in _________?
Always take a child along or
• How did you find out that? involve a kid. When you give
your attention to any one of
• What’s an example? your children, words will follow.
• Who else likes _________?
• How does that experience/interest help you today?
• If you could tell someone else how to X, who would you tell
and why?
• What does that remind you of? Conversation enables a child to
sort through the vague ideas
• What else do you want to know about _________? and to dig back into the materi-
al to gain mastery over the con-
• How long do you think it would take to learn _________?
tents. Your interest, questions
• What is your plan for _________? and reactions serve as fine-tun-
ing instruments to help your
• Is there a book or movie that deals with this topic? Which child clarify meaning and con-
tent.
one?
• Who are the experts in this field?
• Who do you look up to?
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paper. As freewriting becomes enjoyable and not difficult, your child will
be ready to embark on the next phase of writing–revision. If your child
still experiences freewriting as challenging (finds it tough to write for five
minutes without stopping, is discouraged by the content he writes, hates
it), then it’s not time to move forward to revision. Rather, back off of
freewriting and go back to conversations and jotting down his thoughts
for him. These ideas make more sense if you read chapters 4-6. For those
kids who have been freewriting for a while without trauma, it’s time to
take one of those freewrites through the revision process. Here’s a short
program you can follow that will help you make the transition more
...freewriting transforms oral smoothly.
language into writing.
Eight-Week freewrite and revision
Pick a day of the week and freewrite once a week for eight weeks.
The Brave Writer Lifestyle schedule suggests Friday Freewrites (note
the alliterative powers of the “Fr”). Each time the child finishes a
freewrite, ask her if she’d like to read it to you. If she says no, thank her
for the freewrite and put it inside a manila envelope. Don’t read it. If she
says yes she’d like you to hear it, let her read it aloud to you. Don’t look
over her shoulder, or read it after she’s read it. Once you listen to the
freewrite, comment on what you liked. Find something to
compliment–the quality of the observations, the word choices, the
length, the insight or a great word combination, a telling description, a
surprising idea. Find at least one good thing to say about that freewrite.
If you truly can’t think of anything specific, comment on how thrilled
you are that she wrote the entire time and came up with so much to say.
Take the freewrite (without looking at it) and put it in the envelope.
Do this for eight weeks—freewrite on Friday and then put the fin-
ished freewrite in the envelope after your child decides whether or not to
read it to you. By the end of eight weeks, you will have eight freewrites
inside the envelope. On the ninth week, empty the envelope onto the
Once you listen to the kitchen table in front of the writing child. Compliment her on having
freewrite, comment on what written eight pieces of writing in only eight weeks! Then ask her to look
you liked. Find something to these freewrites over and pick one that particularly interested her. Let
compliment–the quality of the
observations, the word choices, your child know that she is going to revise and edit one of the
the length, the insight or a great freewrites—to expand it and turn it into a polished piece she can share
word combination, a telling with others.
description, a surprising idea. Explain–and this is key–what she will do with this freewrite because
Find at least one good thing to
say about that freewrite. sometimes just asking for a favorite can lead to a dead-end. Some kids
don’t want to revise their favorite freewrites because they like them the
way they are already written. What we are looking for isn’t a child’s
favorite freewrite necessarily, but the freewrite she would be most inter-
ested in revising. That means that the writer will likely choose a freewrite
that focuses on a topic that the child knows well but hasn’t yet explored
in enough depth. Once she has chosen a freewrite to revise, try the fol-
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order emerges. Throw away (literally ball them up and toss them in the
can) any sentences that don’t compel you to keep reading. Choose
between sentences that are similar in content. (Often in freewriting, a
writer will express an idea in a hurry and then will repeat the very same
idea with a slightly better word choice a little later in the same piece. It’s
as if the mind is warming up the idea and needs time to find higher
quality language to convey it.) So only keep the good sentence or com-
bine the good elements from two sentences to make a new whole.
Sometimes a poorly worded sentence contains the germ of an idea or
a fact that is critical to the whole even though you hate reading it. While
rearranging, don’t worry if you don’t like all the writing yet. Arrange first.
If you need to keep the poor writing in the piece as a place-holder until
you have rearranged, that’s fine. Once you’ve got an arrangement that
pleases you, rewrite the offending sentence on the spot, cut the new and
improved sentence out and replace the dud. Then reread the new whole
all together. Look for gaps in flow or information or missing steps.
Listen for clunky label words like “awesome,” “great,” “bad,” or “amaz-
ing.” Replace these with descriptions that show the reader what you want
him to conclude or feel rather than telling him.
Sometimes a poorly worded Usually after the “snip and pin,” gaps become obvious. This is where
sentence contains the germ of the principles of revision become critical. Revision (in Brave Writer phi-
an idea or a fact that is critical
to the whole even though you losophy) is giving new vision to the original piece of writing. We do this
hate reading it. While rearrang- using a practice called “Narrowing and Expansion” (Chapter 7). We nar-
ing, don’t worry if you don’t like row the focus to a specific part of the piece (to one small detail, one
all the writing yet. process, one unclear sentence, one vague image), and we then expand the
writing adding detail or mass to the original. While keeping that narrow
idea in mind, we then develop new sentences that dig a little deeper, that
clarify the matter, that enhance the reader’s experience. These sentences
can be written in freewrite style and added to the original using the same
“snip and pin” method. And as usual, revising can go on and on and on
and kids usually figure this out. So don’t overdo it. Together, pick perhaps
three critical points with expansion potential and focus on those.
Revision (in Brave Writer phi- You can always suggest your child rewrite the opening. It’s rare that
losophy) is giving new vision to anyone writes a good opening in a freewrite (the opening may be hiding
the original piece of writing.
in the middle of the freewrite, but it’s rarely at the beginning). Evaluate
the conclusion. It should be satisfying. It does not have to summarize.
Once you have rearranged the freewrite, once your child has expanded
three sections, has rewritten the opening and added a satisfying conclu-
sion, staple all of the strips of the original and the new additions onto
pieces of blank paper in the new correct order. Go back to the computer
and rearrange the originals on the computer to match the newly revised
piece. This will be easy to do as either you or your child can copy and
paste or drag the sentences to their new locations. Type in newly crafted
sentences.
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All that’s left at that point is to print and edit. Once your child has a
clean copy of the revised version of the original freewrite, you can move
on to Chapter 8 (Machete Mechanics) and mop-up the mistakes in
spelling, grammar and punctuation. Then you’ll make those changes on
the computer and print the final draft. Then enjoy!
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trust. Trust can only grow when any answer is acceptable, even if it’s one
that is not preferred. Eventually, when trust is built, she will want to hear
you and perhaps over time, will even take your suggestions as welcome.
Second, your positive feedback can’t be seen as “buttering up” before
delivering the “real feedback” which will then be critical. Be specific and
leave some space between affirmation and constructive critique. (Like
lunch or a couple of days.) Let the positive have its impact before offer-
ing critique.
Third, remember that your feedback makes an impact even when she
doesn’t take your advice. For instance, when a mom points out that the
word “amazing” wasn’t that specific, the daughter/writer may choose not
to make the change in this piece. However, you can bet that the next
time she writes the word “amazing” she’ll remember the discussion about
it and may at that time “self-edit” and choose a better word for the new
paper. Writing growth occurs over many pieces of writing, not all at once
in the current piece.
Fourth, not every piece of writing needs to be improved. You can ask
if this is one she wants to work on or if she is happy with it as is. If she
never wants to revise a paper, you can suggest the following. “Mary, let’s
collect four of your papers and pick one to revise. You choose.” Once she
has a piece to revise, share the revision principles with her. Tell her the
idea about snipping and pinning, ask her to consider writing a new open-
ing, explain to her the power of changing “label” words into detailed
descriptions. If you give her the principles of revision, she will be able to
take the first stab at improving her piece. Let her know that you would
love to hear her ideas for revision before you offer yours. Then say to her,
Not every piece of writing “If you need some ideas for how to revise, I can help. Just let me know.”
needs to be improved. You can By giving her some control over the whole process, she is helped to see
ask if this is one she wants to the value of revision and the value of a second pair of eyes.
work on or if she is happy with
it as is.
Finally, don’t worry if it appears that she is resistant to feedback for a
long time. It takes time to build trust between writer and editor. If she
senses that you are consistently on her side, that you affirm what works
well and that the feedback you offer is for her consideration, not as a
command, she will come to trust your input. If the feedback you give
that she takes results in a wonderful change that makes the writing
spring to life, she will be likely to ask for your input the next time, rather
than being suspicious of it. If you find you are in a long-term power
struggle, triangle in someone else. Take an online class with a writing
coach. Sometimes that third person does the trick in reversing a pattern
between you.
The purpose of the eight-week freewrite model is to remind you and
your child that not every piece of writing deserves to be or needs to be
rewritten. Some first drafts accomplish their purpose merely by having
been written. Others just aren’t good enough, interesting enough or
important enough to rewrite. Always give your writers room to reject
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You can write a longer poem if you need to, but three stanzas are plenty.
To keep the rhythm correct, slap your hand on your leg for every other
beat. That will mean that the first beat, no hand slap, but the second beat
will have a hand slap. This helps you to feel the rhythm and to “get it
right.”
Once you’ve written your poems, feel free to add illustrations that
illuminate the setting and look of your characters. A comic strip shape
allows you to include a pair of lines with one action, followed by the next
pair of lines and another picture. Share your final versions with friends.
Scrounged poetry
Some of you may have heard of “found poetry.” I’ve designed a vari-
ant version: “Scrounged Poetry.” Share these instructions with your chil-
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dren. Begin by collecting words from all the crazy places they exist. You’ll
want to cut out words from magazines, catalogs, brochures, copy them
from books, jot them down when you hear them in a movie. I personally
like to gather the majority from magazine ads and mail order clothing
catalogs. These work well because they are published in large fonts and
usually contain great words for colors and shapes. Be sure to choose verbs
as well as adjectives, articles and adverbs. And you’ll want a solid number
of nouns—mundane and unusual.
Glue these to small notecards (one word per card). Keep them
together. These notecard words are called word tickets (which comes
from the book Poem Crazy by Susan Wooldridge). Collect words over the
course of a week. Using your word tickets, let’s see what kind of poetry
we can write.
This project works best as a team effort with all the kids and mom
working together.
Choose several art prints or photographs or advertisements.
Pictures from catalogs/magazines, photography books and/or art
books work well. Clip the picture out if possible so you can hold the pic-
ture in your hand. If you have to leave it in a book, simply keep the pages
open so that what you look at is in as flat a format as possible (undis-
tracted by text or other pictures on the same page).
Bring your pictures to the table.
Look at the pictures for a little while silently (maybe five minutes).
Choose one. No criteria. Just choose the one you like best, or the one you
find most disturbing, or the one that pleases you, or makes you laugh or
repels you. (If it becomes difficult to work on one photo for everyone, let
each child choose a picture. That will mean working on multiple poems
and you may want to do them one at a time.)
Look at it intently.
Don’t consciously try to think of moods or words or ideas. Simply
enjoy noticing details. Say these outloud. Look in the corners, look at the
small items and big things, notice the lines, the edges, the shapes and
shadows, where the light falls. Ask your kids questions. What are the col-
ors? Can you name them? Ask yourself what is happening in the picture.
Is there a story? Is there an event? Who is looking at whom? What is the
sky doing? What is the sun doing? What mood is created in you as you
look at your picture? What memories are evoked?
Let each person hold the picture and have time to look at it without
any extra comments. When you’ve looked quietly at your painting or pic-
ture for five or more minutes, lay the photo down and then, spread the
words out on the table.
Immediately begin to arrange them in a variety of sequences. Free
your words from a specific order by moving them around. Don’t get
locked in. Just look for words that go with the picture and group these
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together in any order. Resist the temptation to think of new words. Use
the ones in your collection. Force them to fit the image in new ways.
You’ll use these words, images and ideas in your poem that is inspired by
the picture.
The following is a list of the kinds of words you’ll want to select to
help you write your poem.
• Mood (emotion the picture evokes–loneliness, anger, joy,
peace, confusion)
• Tone (the overall feel of the picture–uplifting, disturbing,
reflective)
• Color
• Setting
• Time
• Nice sounding words
• Names of things, people or places
• Associations (comparisons between what you see and what it
reminds you of or the other way around–starting with an idea
or image and finding how it relates to the picture). Your
poem may not have all of these, but having this list helps you
to gather a variety.
• Layer your poem with word choices and avoid adding too
many words that aren’t on your lists. Control your poem by
restricting the word sources. See if you can manage to fit
your words to the poem. It might mean rearranging your
words several times. Don’t get locked into one order in the
beginning. Deliberately move them around and read them
out in different arrangements to hear how they sound.
To help give your poem structure, I’ve set a few “rules” to free you to
create without worry that you’re “doing it wrong.” If you’re the kind of
writer that hates any rules of any kind, please ignore my advice and fol-
low the muse where she leads you.
• Keep your poem to less than twelve lines. It should be at
least four lines minimum. Write your verses in either pairs
(two lines per verse) or fours (four lines per verse).
• Don’t rhyme it.
• Don’t use punctuation or capitals.
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personality’s dream
hapless family of stars
a prayer
defies nature
rings of yellow
emits bright blue
easing pain
a foolproof formula
These are all words from my collection except for “of stars” and “of
yellow.” I added these selectively to help tie my word choices into the feel
of the painting. Create your poem as a family project so that everyone’s
contributions are valued and included. Or write your own individual
poems and share them with each other. Remember this process for times
when you hit writer’s block. You can hunt for words as a break from writ-
ing to help stimulate the writing process. Finding words in other places
is such a relief. It frees you to create.
Final notes
Brave Writer is always growing and changing. I love input. so please
let me know what helps you get the job done. I’ve taken suggestions for
courses, book titles, and resources from our community of Brave Writer
families. Please keep in touch.
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Preface vii
A Big Thanks To... xxxiii
Dedication xxxv
How to Use This Course xxxvii
Introduction xxxix
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If you take an online course from Brave Writer, the three-ring binder
gives you enough space to store your printed notes. You can print out and
store the instructor’s feedback right with your child’s work instead of in
little nooks and crannies in your house.
The notebook format allows this course to lie open on your kitchen
table when you teach writing. The Writer’s Jungle isn’t a book to be read
and shelved. It’s a resource to support you as you work with your kids.
Take out pages, rearrange them, highlight the exercises, jot notes in the
margins. Do what it takes to use the course and revisit it over and over
again. The biggest reason most of us don’t make progress in teaching
writing is that we don’t have a friend sitting by to help. I want this course
to be that friend. So keep it open.
Brave Writer. When I first set out to teach writing, I quickly real-
ized that the missing link in most programs is accessibility to the creator
of the manual. Who would help you to implement their exercises? Would
the author know how to teach your unique child? I resisted writing a
course because I was so tired of seeing writing programs sit unused on
the shelves of homeschooling families.
That’s when I realized that the Internet provided a way for me to
connect to my students. By teaching classes online, I’ve made myself
available to help mothers as they write with their kids. We’ve added
teachers every year to accommodate the increase in student volume. So
check out our offerings! Even if you can’t participate in the courses, the
website has a question and answer forum where you can write to me or
one of the other staff members about your writing problems. We’ll post
replies that will send you back on your writing way. (Or for private mat-
ters, you can always email me at julie@bravewriter.com)
I’m based in Cincinnati, Ohio, have spoken at CHEO, CHEK and
various homeschooling events. I’ve run workshops in other cities when
invited. I’m available on a limited basis for speaking engagements further
from home (especially the Bahamas, Hawaii, Rome, Paris and Bora,
Bora, Tahiti). Email me at: julie@bravewriter.com
Well, let’s get to it. Grab a chocolate bar and turn the page. (I prefer
Swiss chocolate, thanks).
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Introduction
never set out to write a writing curriculum. This whole shebang start-
I ed when a friend conned me into teaching a Sunday school class for
homeschooling moms desperate for help in writing. I hesitated. Just
because I worked in the field of writing and editing (wrote articles, I can’t do it. I can’t; I can’t; I
worked as an editor, helped struggling Doctorate of Ministry students can’t. It’s too hard. I need to
send him to school. Why am I
with their dissertations and had ghost written a few books) didn’t mean I even attempting this?
knew the first thing about the educational philosophy of teaching kids to
—Karla
write.
My kids were writing, but I had never used anyone’s writing manu-
als. I just taught them the way I’d learned to do my jobs. For one of
them, my style of teaching worked great. For the older one, I found
myself inventing new ideas on the fly—regularly—to keep his pen wet
and his pages full of words. He thought writing itself a cranky and irri-
tating process. Man-o-living, how many times,
or how many different ways can
So I showed up for that first class of fifteen and within an hour dis- we approach this material for
covered something that rocked me back on my heels. The principles I him to get it? I want to move
taught were brand new to the moms in the room. I wasn’t repeating onto the meat and we’re stuck
information from their various and sundry manuals. None of them had on the mechanics.
heard many of the ideas I suggested. In fact, it’s become common since —Martina
that day for mothers to tell me that what I teach has transformed how
they themselves write.
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Whenever I start a class, I like to find out what the trouble is.
Mothers eagerly tell me their writing woes. I include some of their com-
ments here. See if any of these moms speaks for you.
I have a fear of the written
word. Once thoughts are down “The hardest thing about teaching my kids to write is that they hate it.
on paper, they take on a life so I know they don't have to like all aspects of school, but they hate this
that I can then be held to what one like nothing else. It’s hard to teach because they dread it so. I
I say or compared with what don’t feel confident about it either so I also dread it somewhat. I never
I’ve said. Since I do not feel know what to have them write, what their level should be, how to
freedom myself, I, ironically, grade it... so many variables.”
“One of the greatest struggles I’ve encountered in teaching writing to
digress to legalism in my teach-
tried, she was disinterested and all I could get out of her would be
—Terry
short, brief sentences and paragraphs. Outside of a school assign-
ment, she would spend hours writing plays and stories on the comput-
In my best attempts to teach
doing it. I lack confidence and motivation to plow through yet another
tors’ I’m afraid I have squelched
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sentence, then the paragraph, and then the report followed by the
staring at a blank sheet of paper
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These sound like good principles. So why don’t they work? Why do
kids hate writing and mothers hate teaching it? Why is writing curricu-
lum the most popular topic at homeschooling conventions? Because the
Be warned, my children, against
anything more than these. educational approach to writing is built on myths. All six of the princi-
People never stop writing ples I shared above are just that: myths.
books. Too much studying will Instead of looking to teachers, let’s ask the pros for help. They offer
wear out your body. it in ways school can’t.
At my house...
Ecclesiastes 12:12
I have five kids. Three of them are old enough to write. But I’d be
The Pros who’ve helped me less than honest if I led you to believe that we haven’t struggled, too. One
On Writing Well, Writing to
of my home-educated angels came up with these really new complaints
Learn about writing: “Why do I have to write about that?” “Can’t I just write
—William Zinsser three lines?” “I can’t think of anything to say, Mom. I mean it.” And my
favorite “My hand is cramping up. My stomach kills. And I have a huge
Bird by Bird headache. Can’t you just write it for me?”
—Anne Lamott My daughter, who loves to write, made me cringe when I actually
tried to decode her spelling and punctuation. Between the two of them,
Writing Down the Bones
they used insipid words like “nice” and “good” when describing President
—Natalie Goldberg Lincoln; they wrote run-on sentences and made ‘d’s that looked like ‘b’s.
They drew tiny pictures of skateboards, suns and doodles along the edges
Writing with Power, Everyone of empty sheets of paper and worst of all, one of them threatened to
Can Write, Writing Without throw up if made to write even one more sentence.
Teachers I had to find out what was corking their otherwise prolific commen-
—Peter Elbow
tary on life and the things they learn. Certainly my kids have no trouble
communicating what they care about while I’m talking to a friend on the
The Allyn and Bacon Guide to phone. Hel-loooo! Suddenly the floodgates of self-expression are com-
Writing pletely unleashed. Words and sentences galore.
Simply put, however, they wouldn’t allow their energetic minds to be
Essays by Amy Tan, Eudora controlled by a hand, a pen and a piece of paper. (And a mother!)
Welty, Annie Dillard, Dorothy So what’s a mom to do? In my case, I examined my writing process. I
Sayers pulled out my books that teach writers how to write. And I got on with
teaching my kids to write the way I wanted to learn. We still have our
Home Education days when they don’t respond to my assignments with sunny disposi-
—Charlotte Mason tions, but when I take the time to teach them to write the way I want to
learn, we have satisfying writing experiences that leave me fulfilled as a
The Right to Write
mom, home educator and writer. I want that for you too. And I want it
—Jill Cameron for our kids.
make lots of progress with your kids. Other times, a machete is about all
that will get you through the tangled spots. But instead of telling you to
“go to the other side,” this course is about walking there with you hand-
You’ll be happy to know that
in-hand. my daughter wrote a beautiful
The Writer’s Jungle will teach you something about the nature of the piece today about when our
writer’s jungle—where the swamps are, how to perform rescue operations puppy died. It was so touching
I cried as I read it.
for kids who are knee deep in the quick sand of resistance, what the aca-
demic writing trails look like and how to travel through them. It will Thanks to you I’m able to see
her writing in a whole new
offer you an “X” marks-the-spot kind of reference so you’ll know when
light—the light of a 10-year-
you’ve arrived at the desired destination: a kid who writes freely and well old’s world. Thanks again!
for his age.
—Kerri
Jungles are unfriendly places. But they’re also beautiful, and wild, and
exhilarating. Maps are of little value to the gringo who visits them.
Visitors need guides, not maps. Guides know how to get along in the
jungle not just how to get through it.
Your writer’s jungle is also a wild place. But I promise you: it’s alive
and beautiful, too. It’s the landscape of your child’s mind and heart. Our
job is to stop and notice the sights along the way; to uncover the tiny iris
lost under the pile of bad punctuation.
It’s my hope that you’ll come to love your young writer and his par-
ticular jungle in a whole new way. By traveling together, I want to point
out the irises you’ve been missing. There’s a world of insight, creativity
and passion in your children that writing is meant to capture. By taking
some new trails, I hope to lead you to that secret place.
Pull on your boots. Let’s go. I’ve got a compass in hand. And you
don’t have to travel alone.
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Chapter 1
efore we get going with the nuts and bolts of how to send those
B pencils flying across the page, it’s time to get a little wet. No jungle
sits next to a babbling brook or splashing creek. Big rivers supply jungles
with the water they need. Really big rivers.
After I finished my college degree, I spent a summer in former Zaire
on the Congo River. I’ll never forget the first time I saw that big river.
We’d been in the main city, Kinshasa. Our little team traveled to the out- There is an art of reading, as
skirts of town for our first overnight stay in mud huts. The guide led us well as an art of thinking, and
from the main road to a maze of trails. We had to walk really fast to an art of writing.
keep up. Tall grasses were on either side of the single file path. I kept my —source unknown
head down, eyes forward.
Suddenly the trail turned and right in front of me a huge expanse of
water burst into view. Muddy, violent, pulsing currents separated our side
of the jungle from the other side in Congo. Over ten miles wide at its
widest, this river was powerful and big and luminescent. Hundreds of
tributaries feed into its 2,718 miles of water.
At four in the afternoon, a round, orange sun (larger than any sun I’d
ever seen) glinted on its surface. The jungle it supplied lined both banks.
Dense, wild, lush and overgrown. That’s when I got it. Only a river that
big could have furnished the jungles on either side.
When we think about The Writer’s Jungle, we’ve got to think about
what supplies it. For lots of kids, their writing world is little more than a
weed patch with a garden hose. But our goal is to grow a jungle—rich,
dense, lush. We have to be willing for tangles and unknowns in order to
get the rich variety of foliage and wild life. But for anything to grow, we
need water. Lots of it.
Where does the nourishment come from? Kids can’t write if they
have nothing to say, no models of quality writing to copy and little con-
tact with a great variety of writing styles. Give your kids a language-rich
environment where reading literature, poetry and the newspaper is an
ordinary occurrence, where movie viewing includes discussions, where
It works! What Julie said works! read-alouds are opportunities not just to follow the hungry plot line but a
So many times she has told us
to TALK with our kids about
chance to notice the skill and craft of a master writer. These experiences
what they are writing, taking do more to form writers than all the workbooks and writing programs
notes while we talk. We did that combined.
today! It works! Charlotte Mason, Laura Ingalls Wilder, Anne Lamott, Natalie
I was truly at a stand still with Goldberg, Ernest Hemingway, Ruth Beechik, C.S. Lewis, Peter Elbow,
Greg and his Mill Report. I felt Eudora Welty, Flannery O’Connor, William Zinsser—these are the men
there was a whole lot more he
could do with this piece but
and women who’ve influenced my writing the most. In their unique
wondered how to get him to do ways, they each talk about absorbing and noticing and copying the writ-
it? Then I remembered what she ing skills of masters.
had been saying—so I tried it! Here we go.
Next time you call your best friend and your ten-year-old son comes
up to tell you about the chapter he just read, stop talking to Mildred, put
your hand over the receiver (or better yet, hang up) and listen.
Manipulate your cheek muscles into a smile and say words like: “Wow,
you really liked that story!” and “I am impressed with how well you’re
telling it to me.”
A girl who can tell you the contents of Anne of Green Gables, a boy
who can teach you how to play Pokemon, a girl who repeats the whole
dialog she had with her Sunday school teacher—all are practicing narra-
tion—the most important pre-writing skill. The operative word here is
practicing.
Narration is a skill. Quality retelling doesn’t come naturally. Certainly
the inclination to narrate is natural. But you only have to attend one
Bible study to discover how few people possess the facility to explain
themselves in an orderly, presentable fashion.
Ever notice the typical description of a movie by a kid sixteen or
under? “Yeah, it was a really good movie. Yeah, I mean, it was, like cool.
Especially that funny part was so, well, uh, weird. Yeah, it was awesome;
you gotta rent that movie…” This little example is not narration. But you
knew that. Time to roll up our sleeves and punch the muster out of
Narrating is an art, like poetry-
insipid movie reviews! making or painting, because it
Ownership
There’s a distinction between real learning and repetition of informa-
tion. In our years of school, we were trained to believe that if we could
Example of oral narration:
cough up information on command, then we deserved good grades. It
Delacroix’s Christ on the Lake of
Gennessaret didn’t matter if two days later we couldn’t even re-take the test.
Narration, in its truest form, should have another name. In my home,
“Jesus is in the upper left corner.
There’s light shining around his I call it “ownership.” Narration reveals to me that my kids “own” the
head. Up above him is a boy material. Do they have the ability to retell not simply on exam day, not
looking out for waves. In the two minutes after they read the page and then write what they read into
lower right corner, there is an
a notebook, but can they, will they, do they retell the information
old man holding on tight to the
stern. throughout the weeks and months and years to come?
• Does my daughter relate what she learned on Tuesday to the play
she viewed on Sunday?
In the middle on the top, there
is a man that is taking off his
Musical Language
Really young children especially enjoy the sounds that words make. That buzzing noise means
something. You don’t get a
But it’s worth noting with older children as well.
buzzing-noise like that, just
…they saw a great, high, tall forest full of tree trunks all ‘sclusively buzzing and buzzing, without
speckled and sprottled and spottled, dotted and splashed and slashed its meaning something. If
and hatched and crosshatched with shadows. (Say that quickly aloud, there’s a buzzing-noise, some-
and you will see how very shadowy the forest must have been.) body’s making a buzzing-noise,
Kids love the use of homonyms and the way the words create a sing-
song feel as you read them. Notice it!
Good descriptions
Powerful descriptions are easy to highlight and greatly enhance your
child’s writing if learned as a skill. It’s not an exaggeration to say that
robust writing depends heavily on powerful associations between seem-
ingly unrelated experiences, objects and ideas.
What to look for in a description:
• Sentences that use like or as. (similes) “He’s as stiff as a board.”
• Direct comparisons. (metaphors) “The sun is a big orange in the
sky.”
• Appeals to the five senses. “His breath smelled like sour milk.”
• Use of concrete detail to create a mental picture. “The mountain
tops sparkled a dazzling white in the early morning dawn.”
• Powerful verbs (sprinted, glistened, sliced, cantered, retorted, cor-
nered…)
way. Look for clues that the author is using a description to give the
reader much needed information that pertains to the plot itself.
When we read House of Sixty Fathers the following passage struck me
Always grab the reader by the
as an example of how the author used description and the setting to rein- throat in the first paragraph,
force the key message of the story. sink your thumbs into his
Below in the bay the white dishpan drifted and twirled. Two duck-
windpipe in the second, and
lings swam in the dishpan, but one must have gone overboard with
hold him against the wall until
Tien Pao’s hard, blind shove. The little duckling was chasing the
the tag line.
dishpan, scrambling desperately to get out of the big river back into —Paul O’Neil
its little dishpan home.”
Meindert DeJong
This image reinforced the plot in which Tien Pao, a boy of about
seven, was violently separated from his parents by the same river currents
that swept the little duckling away from his siblings. We paused to notice
this detail before moving on.
Opening hook
My hands-down favorite opening hook in a children’s book is from
Charlotte’s Web. It begins, “Where’s Papa going with that ax?” Who could
stop reading after that? The reader is plunged immediately into a moral
dilemma involving a child and a father. Openings that grab your atten-
One mother, Renee, told me
tion usually start right in the middle of the story. Or they say something how her son knows good writ-
unexpected. ing when he hears it too.
“Harry Potter was a highly unusual boy in many ways. For one thing,
he hated the summer holidays more than any other time of year.”
“In our reading today at lunch,
one son stopped me in the mid-
tive organization. Identify these. These passionate writers will use won-
derful language to communicate in non-fiction just as well as fiction.
Be sure to look for elements of good writing as you read books for
Sources for copywork
yourself. One of my favorite places to enjoy good writing is in the
• Poetry anthologies lifestyle section of a newspaper. These writers can’t waste time luring you
• Novels into their articles. They either have you or they don’t. Command of lan-
• Newspapers guage, purpose and reader awareness all happens in a five minute read!
• Refrigerator magnets Movie and book reviews are also excellent models for descriptive/critical
• Religious or inspirational texts writing. And editorials help to fine tune your sense of what makes a
• Shakespeare
good argument. So get started yourself and pass on your learning to your
kids.
• Greeting cards
• Bumper stickers Copywork
• Famous quotations Copywork is the practice of choosing a selection from literature or a
• Song lyrics historical document and copying it over in your own handwriting.
• Hymns Copywork is soothing and enjoyable. Instead of requiring the student to
• Screenplays come up with new ideas and words, she can savor the words of other
• Foreign language passages writers. Choose sections of the Bible, good books (either novels or non-
• Mathematical principles fiction works) or poems that are well written. Ask your child to copy the
• Scientific experiments or def- selection over in his or her best handwriting.
initions Copywork counts for writing. Before your child can be expected to
• Historical documents produce from scratch, it’s just fine if he or she copies a master. These bits
• Field Guides and pieces of good books often become treasures to your children. Your
• Toy catalog descriptions kids will create books of beautiful and funny, wacky and meaningful
• Computer game rule books quotes that speak to them and remind them of good writing elements.
• Riddles Moms have a variety of ways to organize copywork. Some moms that
• Funny things family members
I know create a weekly routine such as the one below:
say Monday—Religious or inspirational text
Tuesday—Passage from a novel
Wednesday—Shakespeare
Thursday—Historical document
Friday—French
Other moms use a copywork jar. They type up passages for their
children, print them out, cut them up and put them in a jar. Each morn-
ing the child chooses one to copy.
At our house, we are less disciplined and yet it works well for us. I
allow the kids to choose their own copywork. Their selections have
ranged from the lengthy (long passages out of novels) to the brief (refrig-
erator magnets). They’ve copied lists of Lego sets that they want for
Christmas, song lyrics, poems, Shakespeare scenes, computer game
instructions, passages from novels, science facts, mathematical formulas,
historical speeches, statistics, world records and field guides.
My daughter handmade her first copy book. She made the paper for
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the cover from scratch and then sewed the book together. She wrote first
in pencil and then copied over in pen. This little tome is a priceless
record of her fourth grade year. Since then, my kids usually write on
notebook paper and put their work in clear page protectors. My oldest
uses a composition book.
There is no one way to do copywork. And because of my children,
I’ve begun to keep a notebook of interesting quotes from the books I
read. I sit right at the table with my kids and we all do copywork togeth-
er. We do copywork for approximately fifteen minutes a day. If they
haven’t finished the passage they began, we carry it over to the next day.
The point here is to make copywork a routine practice.
For younger students (4th to 6th), copywork can occur four to five
times a week. As they enter the older grades, copywork can work togeth-
er with dictation.
In our house, we’ve sometimes used the dictation passages as copy-
work for the older kids (5th to 7th). Familiarity breeds better results in
dictation.
I also discovered quite by accident that copywork can be done on the
computer. When my 12-year-old son asked to copy song lyrics by the
Newsboys on the computer, I raised an eyebrow. Isn’t copywork meant to
encourage penmanship? Noah convinced me, though, that he’d get all
the other benefits of copywork, but instead could practice typing. I let
him go, and seven pages later, he emerged from the computer room.
Typing is an even more critical skill than good handwriting in our com-
puter age so don’t forget to let your kids get lots of practice.
One of the hidden benefits of computerized copywork turned out to
be that our word processing program highlights all spelling and grammar
errors. Noah turned it into a game trying to avoid making the markings
come up!
Dictation
Dictate a paragraph, sentence
by sentence, for the child to
Much has been written about the value and use of dictation in lan- write. He should listen carefully
guage arts. Ruth Beechik and Charlotte Mason fans are all familiar with to your expression and decide
by that what kind of punctua-
the instructions to choose a passage from a book to dictate while the tion to use… Add interest to
child writes it out. This process aids the child in spelling, punctuation this work [dictation] by choos-
and conscientious handwriting. ing paragraphs from the child’s
All I want to add is that dictation is a discipline that most of us have favorite books. The child can
even help to choose the para-
never experienced in our years as students. Because of this, I think there’s graphs.
a tendency to leave it out when pressed with other subjects. Don’t make
—Ruth Beechik
the mistake of treating dictation as an option. If you must omit a subject You Can Teach Your
for the week, drop the grammar exercise book or the spelling pages in Child Successfully
order to make room for dictation. The fruit is far more substantial even
though it doesn’t look like it initially.
The French have used dictation consistently for decades. It begins
the day in many schools. By high school, students are required to do dic-
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tations from long passages with no prior acquaintance with the material.
When I was a university student in France, I was amazed at my fel-
low students’ discipline of beautiful note taking (almost verbatim with
Dictation practices in French
primary schools: colored pens and rulers), their ability to narrate faithfully what was
taught or read and their keen attention to spelling, punctuation and
1. Write one sentence for detail. I’m convinced that these strengths have their roots in years of dic-
your child omitting one
tation and written narration (explication du texte).
word.
We Americans laughed when we compared our notes to theirs—
2. Teach spelling by leaving
scribbles and gibberish on all angles of the paper—undecipherable to any
blanks for multiple words.
other person. But as the year progressed, I learned to do written narra-
3. Add sentences to the initial
tion and some dictation too. It was completely foreign to me, but I also
one but leave several more
words blank. discovered how helpful it was in teaching me to retain what I had read or
had been taught.
4. Dictate the entire passage
without any clues. Some of my friends here in Cincinnati are from France. They
allowed me to take some time to look at their kids’ dictation workbooks.
What follows is a week’s worth of dictation instruction using the same
passage (for children under 10) according to the French system.
1. Write one sentence for your child leaving a blank for one word.
Dictate the passage and allow your child to fill in the missing word.
The student learns how to listen for the missing word and reads along at
the same time. In France they use this system to isolate words that fit
into a spelling pattern. You can achieve the same kind of results by using
passages from read-aloud books. Simply select sentences that have words
that you’d like your child to learn.
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spell correctly 80%-90% of the words they use by the end of high school.
And it happens naturally. If your kids aren’t making gradual progress over
the years, get help.
What no spouse of a writer can
A Word about grammar
ever understand is that a writer
is working when the spouse is
staring out of the window. [and The other language arts arena that mothers obsess over is grammar
no mother can understand it instruction. Just for the record, grammar has very little to do with writ-
either… jb] ing. It has everything to do with understanding the science of language
and making sure that you use standard American English when you
write. I recommend hitting it three times over the life span of a student:
once in elementary school, once in junior high and once in high school.
Foreign language instruction will cover anything you miss and will do it
more effectively anyway. For a more detailed discussion, check out the
FAQs in the back of this course.
Mom’s assignment
Choose one of the language arts practices in this section and add it
to your weekly routine. You don’t have to try them all at once and then
get overwhelmed. Eliminate one workbook page and add one day of
copywork. Put the grammar book aside and do one day of dictation. Do
this for a few weeks before you add something new. (One thing I discov-
ered is that I enjoy copywork too. I bring my own books to the table and
copy out passages that I want to remember. So do it together and begin a
family routine).
As you grow more comfortable in these kinds of language arts rou-
tines, you can move ahead to the next phase of writing—learning to
communicate: saying what you actually mean and then meaning what
you say.
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Chapter 2
Communication Gear
The Role of Communication in the Art of Writing
et’s face it. Few of us like to write. Fewer still are any good at it. And
L almost no one wants to teach it. The reason? A crisis of confidence.
What is it about a blank page and ink pen that causes grown women and
innocent children alike to sweat, fidget and make excuses not to do it?
Most of us were not taught to write for pleasure, self-expression and
discovery. Instead we were handed inane topics that neither inspired us
nor related to topics we knew or cared about and then were told, write. A blank piece of paper is God’s
way of showing a writer how
We received training in areas that didn’t aid the actual writing process. In hard it is to be God.
fact, grammar, spelling, punctuation and various writing forms (like
—Joel Saltzman
essays, reports, research papers, and poetry) don’t teach the writer how to
generate clarity of thought on paper. They don’t inspire quirky insights or
flights of imagination. They don’t even teach a child how to get that I tell my son that it’s time for a
pencil moving, for crying out loud. writing assignment and give
The struggle happens even after the best instruction. The war of wits him a book of topic sugges-
is waged between the would-be writer and the implacable piece of paper tions. He picks one and quickly
writes a title and topic sentence.
(or computer screen for modern word slingers). What happens to our Then he sits and stares at the
kids as they face the empty page? Paralysis and daydreams, the answers page. Then he stares into space.
to yesterday’s math problems and decisions about capitals, efforts to He starts tapping his pencil on
make that weird cursive “r,” and questions about when to use commas. the paper as if this will enable
him to release his thoughts and
These are the sudden thoughts that crowd out the written words. Our put them into words.
kids cling to their pencils until they cut off their circulation.
The tapping ceases and he asks,
Ask your kids. As soon as you see that blank stare say, “Amelia, what “Do you want to hear what I
are you thinking right now?” have so far?”
Let’s start at the beginning and discover together what writing is —Pam
really all about. Maybe we can unravel some of its mysteries.
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aren’t any different from adults in this, are they? What we put them
ing your mind—sometimes it
sons. I’m convicted! My daughter has even told me that it hurts her
naked. It’s so crushing to have
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Phase One
describing a simple figure was
easy!
1. Begin by drawing several intersecting shapes on a white board or —Carrie
piece of line-free paper. They can be shapes such as a diamond without
the edges touching and two vertical lines running through it, or a circle
that has spokes that do not touch, or a ladder that is propped up by two
angular lines on the sides. Anything will work as long as it is simple (not
too busy) and yet not too easily described. (Don’t just draw a rectangle in
the middle of the paper.)
2. Look at this picture with your kids. Tell them to study it carefully.
Ask them what they see. Walk them slowly through each part of the
drawing. Ask them to describe what they see. As they speak, you should
draw exactly what they say so that they can begin to see the results of
their descriptions. For example, your daughter might say, “Draw a line on
the paper.”
As soon as she makes such a general statement, draw a line that is
totally different than the original picture. Perhaps she meant a straight
line in the middle but didn’t say so. You can begin then by drawing a
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curvy line along one edge. She will see instantly that she didn’t give you
enough detail. Feel free to prompt her with comments like, “Is it a
curved line or a straight one?” or “Does the shape of the drawing remind
Yesterday we played The
Communication Game. I
you of anything?” or “Can you tell me how many parts it has? How many
played with the three oldest 13, straight lines will I be drawing?”
12, and 9. They knew it was
Dan’s first writing assignment 3. Keep at this for ten minutes discussing ways to make the
from the Internet class. (So far description clearer. Here are things to suggest:
• Introductory comments: Teach them to describe the overall pic-
Dan loves this class because it
ture before they tell you a specific detail. “Before you start writing,
has included a game and a
desired result. “The line is six inches long and runs vertical on the
other school to do,” she argued.
parison without ‘like' or ‘as') and simile (using ‘like' or ‘as') to create
everyone excited and we began.
The girls started right off with a word picture. “The lines look like a ladder going up the middle of
the big picture using metaphors the page with three rungs about 3” long and 2” between them.” “Like
and similes. a baseball diamond,” or “looks like a pizza with one slice missing”
are examples of ways to describe shapes without relying exclusively
on measurements.
After hearing them, Dan gave
it a try too. I could tell their big
picture, figurative bent, sur-
prised him. As we played the After she finishes describing the picture, ask her to say it through
game I made sure to point out one last time in short form: “So you should have two vertical lines down
the benefits of Dan's specific the middle of the page with a large diamond shape intersecting it.” Of
details. I wanted them to see course this final overview can be longer, but the idea is not to repeat
that you need both the details
and the figurative language that every little detail, but rather to sum things up so that the person drawing
relates the drawing to some- can “see” it one last time.
thing we already know. I think
they really got it. We played for 4. Now, ask your student to compare your picture and the original
45 minutes and had a great to see how well he described it.
time.
Everyone got immunity from Phase Two: The Communication Game
spelling, even me!
1. This time, ask you son or daughter to draw several shapes onto a
—Barb
white board or large piece of paper behind your back. These shapes are
to intersect and can be curvy and/or lined. Keep it somewhat simple. My
daughter drew the shape of a sailboat on water for one of hers. My son
drew an abstract image that had a triangle and a circle in it. In both
cases, they were not complicated.
If you have two children of similar ages (both at writing ages—10
through 16) you can remain the teacher and have them play it with each
other. In that case, you can guide the process a little or even be the one
to create the drawing while allowing one of the children to describe it
while the other tries to draw it from the description. The choice is yours.
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2. The person who will be drawing must turn her back and not look
at the drawing. Let’s assume for these instructions that you will be the
one listening to the description. You’ll need to have a piece of paper in
We played the game today and
your lap and a pen. Your child will stand with his back to you facing his Malcolm (8) did well on both
drawing. It’s up to your child to describe for you the drawing he has stages. He was miffed when I
made in such a way that you reproduce exactly what is drawn on the drew his picture and it wasn't
exactly what he had drawn.
board. Here’s the catch: he cannot look at your drawing while you draw
it and you may not ask any questions or turn around to see what he or I think he missed the point that
he could do this again and
she has drawn.
come even closer to getting it
3. When your student believes she is finished, she can turn around to right.
see what you’ve drawn. You, the mom or dad, may not look at the origi- Ian (11) did well, but had a lit-
nal. When she sees where she has gone wrong by looking at your draw- tle difficulty describing a cer-
tain aspect of the drawing I had
ing, flip your paper over and let her try again (during this second made for him in Phase 1. He
attempt, she may not look at your paper again). Whenever she describes did what I thought he would
her drawing, she may not look at what you are drawing. She may look at do and said, “Mom, you aren't
your drawing only during the brief moments of “feedback” where she getting what I’m saying!” When
I told him that I was drawing it
examines what you have drawn to improve on her description precisely according to his
instructions and showed him
4. Allow her to describe what she sees repeatedly until you have suc-
what I meant he sheepishly
cessfully recreated what she originally drew or until she starts to yell at agreed with me.
you for your simplicity of mind that can’t follow her ‘perfect’ directions.
—Lisa
(Of course, don’t take it personally—this is just a learning experience—
three deep breaths and plunge ahead).
5. If your child is having a lot of difficulty with creating a good
description or the experience is paralyzing, you can switch places. You
create the drawing and do the describing while he attempts to draw what
you say. He’ll get the idea without so much pressure, and it will aid him
when he tries it again for you.
Most of us assume the reader knows more than she does. The
sions with my 11-year-old,
stands alone. In this exercise, for instance, most kids forget to give
descriptive detail, figurative
mond…”
to put us into a different medi-
um to relate the concepts. We
what follows.
tion and I think the main
points will be remembered.
• Details matter.
Kids need to say, “Draw a line that is parallel to the bottom edge of
—Donna
the paper,” or “The curved line looks like the base of a crescent
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moon on its side.” They might say that the straight lines look like a
ladder with half-inch spaces between each rail and that the rails are
one and one half inches in length and that there are three of them.
Most kids make assumptions and say things like, “Draw a line and
then another one above it.” That is insufficient and they will notice
We’ve played the game before,
the latter is the case, writing is the next step and will follow quite
cult—because we were not
naturally. The point is that writing improves when the writer revises
thinking what he was thinking!
stronger piece.
in your mind what I want you to
see.” It also surprised him how
tough it was to describe some- • Clear communication is the writer’s responsibility.
thing that he had created. The reader reads in isolation from the writer. That’s why in this exer-
cise, your child cannot see your paper while she is describing and
you may not ask questions. This is the critical difference between
—Myra
I gently reminded him that as the writer, it’s his job to know his audi-
communicate simple details was
the use of figurative language with Johannah and she instantly “got”
found how easily words, which
the drawing. That’s how Noah learned that it was his responsibility
were clear to us, could be inter-
The livelier the detail, the more tied to pictures and experiences, the
tive language was quickly
baseball diamond is far better than “draw lines that are at angles to
still comical!
One of the greatest lessons
each other.” As your child gets better at translating his own experi-
ences into his writing, he’ll use metaphor and analogy regularly.
learned was that of persevering
in our word choices until we
got it right. The biggest sur- Once you’ve finished this process, go over what worked first. Notice
prise—how much effort it takes
if there were introductory comments. Identify which details were most
to say something so that the
other person hears it as you useful to you. Remind her of successes in sequencing. Point out how well
intend. she used the “feedback” of looking at your paper to re-describe her pic-
—Sue ture. You can discuss weaknesses, but only as it helps. In other words, do
not say, “You didn't use enough detailed descriptions for me.”
Say it like this, “I would’ve seen your picture in my mind's eye even
better had you described it as a ladder.” You can ask now for new details
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as you look at the picture together. “Does this shape remind you of any-
thing?” “It reminds me of...”
The point here is to give information that supports their attempts at
We had a blast doing the com-
communicating rather than demeans or criticizes their efforts. Once munication game. I went first
you’ve had fun with this exercise, move on to the next chapter. to reduce the intimidation fac-
tor. We had a few pictures that
came out as intended, but most
were a bit off. Laughter
abounded. I guess that's what
you get with eight participants
(myself + 18,15,13,11,9,7,5—
5 only drew).
The need for careful choosing
of words wasn't missed by the
target sub-group. In fact, it was
understood long before we let
everyone have a try, but we
went through everyone anyway.
It was obvious that the late
describers learned from the ear-
lier describers. Perhaps this is a
benefit of having a large “class.”
—Ruth Anna
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Chapter 3
ve was lucky. She only had one lying snake to deal with. We home-
E schooling moms have many.
The “experts” claim to have the knowledge of good and bad writing.
Meet the serpents of our imaginations: authors of writing curricula, pro-
fessional educators, even other well-meaning mothers. We fear that they
all say essentially the same thing about us behind our backs. “You can’t
teach writing. I’ve seen your child’s work and it’s a joke. I wouldn’t line
the cat box with the stuff your kids put out.”
Ouch.
After you worry about how badly you’re missing the mark in teach- Even though I’ve tried numer-
ous curriculua that have writing
ing your kids to write, these same snakes beguile you with bewitching assignments spelled out—they
words: “Listen to me and I will show you the knowledge of good and bad never seemed to work. This
writing.” course worked because it was an
You lean closer. After all, writing is central to any good homeschool. assignment that we (child and
me) did together. By that I
And you aren’t secure in your ability to teach it. You listen more intently. mean that we were really on the
The first indication that you’re a mother who has attained the same team because I was learn-
knowledge of good writing is the curriculum you use, they say. There’s a ing too. It wasn’t me stating “do
workbook that only requires you to hand it to the child and like magic— the assignment” and then walk-
ing away.
good writing will leap from his hand to the page. For an additional swipe
of the credit card, the curriculum sellers will include the handy instruc- —Paula
tional video that takes you through the process of analyzing composition.
They also tell you that mothers who foster good writing learn the
educator’s mantra. “Tell Johnny to write daily. All good writers write
daily.”
Still, this is not enough. You knew it couldn’t be that easy. You swal-
low and get ready to bear up under the hardest proof yet.
Mothers, who have obtained the knowledge of good and bad writing,
warehouse thick notebooks of pages filled with words and more words:
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Good writing starts off the page. Talking is the precursor to effective
writing. Get your kids talking and talking well before expecting words on
paper.
Better strategy for improving
Then give them freedom. Take off the shackles of what good writing writing programs:
should be and get truly interested in how your child’s mind works. It’s
amazing to read what they think, and why. 1. Modify the assignments in
the curricula you already
We homeschooling mothers have a disadvantage. Though most of us
have or create your own.
don’t have any wish to teach in a traditional school setting, teachers have
this one leg up over us. They look at the writing samples of twenty to 2. Require less writing from
thirty kids of the same age group when they grade papers. After the first scratch. When you do, allow
for total freedom in the gen-
ten, they have a fairly good idea of what constitutes average writing for a
erative writing phase.
given grade level.
We have usually one child in one grade. And we have poor memories 3. Only take one writing pro-
of when we were that age. It’s hard to know if your child is hitting the ject through the entire writ-
ing process per month.
mark or is off by a mile. Here’s what Jane said about her ten-year-old
son:
Our matching emotional intensity seems to be a problem for us. He
gets annoyed and I’m then annoyed that he’s annoyed and so we spi-
ral downward. I want more confidence that I’m making reasonable
requests so I can ignore the fireworks.
I also worry that he’s not developing enough and that he’s not on
“grade level” with his skills. Handwriting is a struggle but his typing
isn’t too great either! He serialized two different works of “fiction” last
year, but finished neither. He has big ideas for a ten-year-old boy. He
has high standards, too—I get the sense he wants to write a big, All-
American novel—not a solid essay!
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chocolate brownie. What they often don’t do is help your children ask —George Orwell
themselves the right questions to elicit better responses. And they don’t
always expect the child to have the object right on hand.
The results are can be pretty stiff and often the mechanics overpower
the insights. What we want in this exercise is for the experiences and
observations to overwhelm the mechanics. I tell my online students that I
don’t care at all about spelling, sentences or punctuation at this stage of
the writing process. You need to tell your kids that too. (I’ve included
some samples of this exercise at the end of the chapter).
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Before you read the instructions, let’s look at two descriptive para-
graphs written by fourth graders. The first one is a typical fourth grade
paragraph describing a guitar using a few of the five senses. It fulfills the
By far the greatest thing is to
be a master of metaphor. It is requirements of descriptive paragraph form: topic sentence, a few sup-
the one thing that cannot be porting ones that report sensory detail, and a closing comment. As you
learned from others. It is a sign read it, ask yourself if the writing, insight or surprising observations of
of genius, for a good metaphor
the writer move you.
implies an intuitive perception
A typical fourth grade descriptive paragraph
of similarity among dissimilars.
hole in the middle. There are six strings. It feels heavy and light.
When I strum the strings, it makes sounds. I like the music it makes.
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When she described its looks, I then asked her how it smelled.
When she described how it sounded, I asked her to compare the sound
to another experience. We spent a full week working on this one para-
This is what metaphor is. It is
graph. not saying that an ant is like an
So did it move you? Did you connect with the writer? Do you feel elephant. Perhaps both are
you know a bit more about Johannah, not just my guitar? alive. No. Metaphor is saying
the ant is an elephant. Now,
The essence of good writing is that the writer makes contact with
logically speaking, I know there
the reader. The reader goes beyond relating to the item being described is a difference. If you put ele-
or explained. The reader gets to know the writer and feels grateful for phants and ants before me, I
the experience. believe that every time I will
correctly identify the elephant
When our kids write, we want them to go beyond a mere list of
and the ant.
objectives for writing. Instead, we want our children to show up on the
So metaphor must come from a
page. We want that unique take on guitars or BB guns or birthday par- very different place than that of
ties that is wholly their own. the logical, intelligent mind. It
The next exercise gives you a chance to get to know your child in a comes from a place that is very
new way. Together, you’ll examine a concrete object. Through multi- courageous, willing to step out
of our preconceived ways of
faceted questions, you’ll help to elicit insights and observations that go seeing things and open so large
beyond the surface. Sometimes this exercise takes a few days. Sometimes that it can see the oneness in an
the results aren’t that insightful. When kids are developing a new skill, ant and in an elephant.
don’t look for overwhelming success on the first pass. Instead, look for —Natalie Goldberg
one good word or fragment or description. Celebrate that. Build on that. Writing Down the Bones
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from a distance?
clean smell.
The inside smells like a bitter • Does the lighting affect the color?
• What happens if you look at the object out of doors?
and tart citrus fruit, it smells a
lot like the peel.
• Are there colors within the colors?
• Do you see hints of yellow next to the surface reds?
Taste -
The peel tasted like toothpaste
The inside tasted sour and bit- • Are there streaks or lines or smudges in the patches of color?
• Look at the contours or edges of the object. Is the edge of the
ter
Touch-
soft Look at different components of the object. Get right next to what
little dents you’re looking at. Pick it up if you need to. Examine it like a scientist.
• Are the parts large or small?
feels like a tongue
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Touch
Now that your object is in your hand, describe the textures. Finger The following is the descriptive
all the parts. Go beyond the words smooth and rough. paragraph that resulted from
• What does the texture remind you of? Sandpaper, glass, glue,
Hannah’s Keen Observation
that thing and feel it. Then compare and see if you were right. In
look at this orange I see a round
what ways are they the same? In what ways are they different?
marigold-colored fruit, about
the size of a tennis ball. The
• Can you think of other related experiences you’ve had?
dimpled peel looks like the sur-
face of a golf ball. The orange
Touch every part slowly and talk the entire time comparing and con- has a brown dent were it was
picked from the tree. The peel
trasting one part to another. Take the object and rub it against your fore- is thick and opaque, and doesn't
arm. Does this experience change the feelings you have about the tex- have a smell until you puncture
ture? What does it feel like? How about rubbing it against your cheek? the peel.
Against your neck? “When I peel the orange, a cit-
Smell
rusy, fresh, clean smell sprays
me. When I separate the fruit,
Set the object down. Close your eyes and smell it. Go slowly. Breathe acid from the orange stings if
in several times. Now imagine you are in this room for the first time and you have a cut finger or a hang-
nail. The underside of the peel
you smell that scent.
• What feelings does it conjure?
is white, unlike the orange out-
side. The inside of the orange
Sound
Listen to your object. If it doesn’t make any noise by its nature (per-
fume bottles don’t sing), clank it against something.
• What happens to a piece of fruit when it’s dropped on a table?
• What sound do you hear if you crush a piece of origami paper?
• Play the musical instrument. Listen to it. Describe the sounds by
comparing them to another experience. Close your eyes and think
for a few moments. Imagine hearing that music. Then think of a time
that you heard it before and the way it felt in your body to hear
those sounds. Is today different? Why?
• Does it have resonance (that buzzing that you feel inside with a
bass guitar, for instance)?
Try playing it correctly and incorrectly for different effects. For hot
chocolate, you might listen to yourself when you slurp it, sip it, gulp it,
drink it.
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Taste (For items that aren’t edible, you can skip this part.)
Lastly, taste your object. Lick it first. Then let the food rest on the
tip of your tongue. Then swallow. Now put a bite of it on the sides of
My comments to Claire are in
bold. Read them for an idea of your tongue. Then swallow. Compare the flavors. Taste the outer skin of
how to interact with the results the fruit. Then taste the seeds. Eat a big all-encompassing bite. Then eat
of a Keen Observation exercise small bites of each different part—the skin, the pulp, the seeds. Describe
that you intend to take through
the differences.
• Can you think of other flavors that are similar?
the writing process to comple-
tion.
• Is one part of the fruit bitter and one sweet?
• For the hot chocolate, taste the marshmallows that are soaked with
Claire, 13
chocolate then taste one that isn’t. Compare. Use lots of words to
Sound-
Writing Sample
not been sanded.
Great use of analogous think-
Claire’s (13) final descriptive paragraph based on her Keen ing.
Observation exercise (see margin on this page) follows.
Smell-
A Blow-Pop Very sweet like a combination
A Blow Pop is a hard sucker with gum in the middle. When I unwrap
of sweet cherries and honey.
my Blow Pop, it sounds like I’m handling a chip bag; it crinkles and
crunches. When I bite into the sucker it cracks loudly and my back
Here’s a good example of
teeth have hard sticky candy stuck to them. The blow pop is a violet
expanding on the word sweet.
red oval the size of a silver dollar. Like Saturn, it has a ring around
the middle. The color is not solid; it is translucent. If I hold it up to the
the stick does not smell any-
thing.
light, I can see the gum in the middle, but I can’t see through it. The
Blow Pop is mostly smooth but has some holes and jagged pieces, Taste-
which cut my tongue like wood that has not been sanded. It smells very sweet and is the flavor of
and tastes very sweet like a combination of sweet cherries and cherries.
honey. After I finish the hard candy, I chew the gum. The gum tastes
very sweet not like cherries, but bubble gum. After a while it starts to
stick taste sort of salty.
lose its flavor. The blow pop is supported through the middle on a the gum taste very sweet also,
five-inch long, thin white stick. The stick tastes salty, not nearly as but after a while it starts to lose
good as the Blow Pop. its taste.
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Dalissa began:
Hello all,
Margaret made the following comment about doing the Keen
Observation exercise with her son:
“In order to get these observations I had to cajole him, give hints and
starter ideas–challenge him.”
I have to concur and say I felt the same way while doing the exercise.
In fact, for the first ten minutes or so, I was also feeling very frustrated
because in my mind I could think of a dozen different ways to
describe what we were looking at, while my sons couldn’t get beyond
basic colors, etc. I finally decided that the exercise was supposed to
be fun and that if they couldn’t be more creative even with me asking
questions like what shade of brown? brown like dirt? what texture?
crusty like burnt toast? etc... then I would have to accept that as their
starting level of creativity. Therefore, I decided to throw off my own
expectations and be silly!
We got to the questions about how our object feels and I made them
rub the object (2 day old meat loaf) on their arms and then in their
hair. (Yes, I know that question wasn’t one of Julie’s but she said to
elaborate and I wanted to lighten the mood—which it did).
What did I learn? I learned to take baby steps and to lower my expec-
tations. I learned to bite my tongue and not offer my own wonderful
descriptions of meat loaf. I wanted them to gain confidence in their
own observations and feel that I valued what they had to say.
With that said, here are Eli’s observations of meat loaf:
Color
• the catsup: dark red, rich red on the part that doesn’t have a layer
on top, lightish red
• the meat loaf: brownish-black on the top and sides where it’s burnt
• when viewed up close it looks pumpkin orange, whitish-brown and
prune brown
• different shades of orange, red, brown, black and yellow.
• when viewed in the sunlight, it looks more pumpkin brown and the
catsup looks a richer red.
• when viewed from the bottom (through bottom of glass container)
looks like a square of all different colors
Texture
• the whole top is bumpy
• looks like a small version of mountains or hills
• bumpy edges
• the catsup could be like lava
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Touch
• where it was cut, it feels mushy and moist
• on the outside where it is uncut, it feels rough
• outside feels like a burger
• feels a little bit like cookie dough when squished between fingers
• feels soft and makes a path of grease when rubbed against arm
• feels wet and greasy where it was rubbed in hair
Smell
• makes me think of catsup
• makes me feel hungry
• makes me feel happy because I like it
• want to get to lunch fast
• makes me feel like going into kitchen to see what’s cooking, even
though I’d already know
Sound
• makes a light tick when spoonful dropped on table
• sounds like a light ball bouncing
• when chewed, sounds like a light click
• when chewed, sounds like swishing water around in mouth
Taste
• tasted juicy and tender when licked (licking meat loaf was funny,
too!)
• flavor goes away quickly
• one bite makes you want more, makes you want to eat it all.
• the top layer with catsup doesn’t taste good by itself
• burnt edges are hard and crunchy and hard to eat.
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• Dull metal with imprints in four places, pieces held together with
nails
• 2 diamond shapes on forehead
• 2 rectangular, vertical, narrow strips on cheeks
• Upside down it looks like a canoe
• It could be broken if dropped on concrete
• It cannot be torn apart, folded, cut with knife (unless electric),
• Cannot screw or unscrew it
• Can hang on a wall as decoration
• Can sit on a table face up
• Shiny and straight
• Dull color and curvy
• Hard but smooth
• I feel relaxed & comforted with my eyes closed
• Smells like the outdoors
• Sounds like someone knocking at the door
Simone was excited about the exercise because she understood the
assignment and wanted to work independently. There was resistance,
lots of body movement and, lack of concentration when we investigat-
ed the details together. Later she was very proud of the improved
descriptions.
—Cozy
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Chapter 4
e want our kids to write freely and well. We want to stay loose on
W the journey to a finished product and we want to arrive in one
piece—in other words, still speaking to each other as our kids leave for The Writing Compass
college! To get there, you’ll need a compass. All good writing has several North
components that make it good. They are not the ones you might think Good writing is purpose driven.
of—like spelling, or good grammar—or even the subtle ones—like how East
to start a paragraph with interest. Good writing has a distinct
voice that appeals to its audi-
There are four components that routinely show up in the classics. ence.
North: Good writing is purpose-driven. The reader knows where West
he’s being taken and enjoys the ride. The writer has a clearly defined Good writing reveals interesting
detail.
objective and a strategy for getting there. There is harmony between
writer and reader (even though there may be suspense or deliberate uses South
Good writing winds up with a
of irony to make the journey more interesting). The point is: journey flourish.
begun will result in a destination known to both reader and writer.
Clear enough in expository writing. But fiction also yields to this
principle. Even though a reader isn’t always certain of how a story will
turn out, he knows what problem has to be solved for the story to be
“over.” In that way, the reader makes an agreement with the author that
says, “I trust you to fix it by the end of your story.” If the author doesn’t
deliver, the reader is bugged.
East: Good writing has a distinct voice that appeals to its audience. Voice... is what most people
Voice is that slippery word that conjures up dialects, sarcasm and humor. have in their speech but lack in
Still, strong voice is something else. It’s the quality of confidence and their writing—namely, a sound
or texture—the sound of
authenticity that the writer brings to his material. The writer is aiming “them.”
for truth-telling as he knows it. The reader relaxes knowing that she can
—Peter Elbow
trust what she reads. Writing with Power
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Messes on paper
for his second pass.
“It helps me ‘cause I have to
keep my pencil going,” he said. There’s a kind of madness to writing, which is precisely why so many
of us fear it. On the one hand, we can be presented with a very clear
—Jane
assignment on a topic that we’re studying and feel utterly unable to
begin. Another time, however, the teacher is hopelessly vague about what
she wants, but you get a moment’s inspiration and off you go, pages of
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words and even some things to laugh about. What’s the difference?
We all know the feeling of being “tongue-tied” or “pencil-paralyzed”
as I call it. The longer you stare at the paper, the tighter your temples
The freewriting exercises are
become and the more annoyed you feel at not writing anything down. helping me have a better idea
Yet you have no trouble whipping out some lucid and friendly emails to where my kids really are in their
your girlfriends. When our kids feel this paralysis, I call it the “blank abilities to think, express them-
page, blank stare” syndrome. Hand your child a blank page, you’ll get selves, and use correct spelling,
punctuation etc.
back a blank stare.
There are two modalities in writing: creative and critical thinking (as In workbooks and canned exer-
cises, they can fake it because
discussed in Chapter 3). They are not happy crewmates. To be creative, they know what’s expected—
or to generate fresh thought, often negates our ability to be attentive to they know how to fill in the
or critical of the mechanical details. Yet for years, teachers have insisted blanks, but that's not the same
on perfection in the areas of spelling, grammar and punctuation as pre- thing as mastering a skill and
bending it to one’s own purpos-
requisites to becoming good writers. And for many of us, that felt like a es. I want them to work at
cruel curse as we approached the blank page. using language to communicate,
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Keep writing no matter what until the bell rings, and then stop.
nothing at all.
—Katherine Mansfield
Logan took the directions literally.
this is stupid and this is dumb
this is no fun
I want to quit this is stupid
I hate this
I hate this
I’m sick of it
I want to play with Gus
I want to shoot my gun
I want to go get on the computer
This later effort took ten minutes. I know. You see all those mistakes.
Hold on. Remember the definition of a successful freewrite is that your
son or daughter writes for the full time allotment. That’s it.
This freewrite is a big improvement. Look at all the things Logan
wants to do. He wants to hunt. He likes the idea of eating what he
hunts. He identifies what he’d like to eat (beef jerky). He mentions
Christmas and his dog. He has grandiose ideas about what a great day
would be like if he were left to decide for himself. And even his dog
would ski. How about that!
What does his mother (and the mother in all of us) see, though? The
mistakes. Lots of them. He can’t spell Colorado. He runs his sentences
together. He misuses punctuation marks. And there is no topic sentence
followed by those neat supporting ones. Ugh!
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Now I’m sorry, but this last one just cracks me up every time I read
it. Logan is quite a guy’s guy, isn’t he? Let’s look at what he knows.
Logan knows that bear fur put on a cut will stop the bleeding. He knows
what gauge his slug is. He identifies his dad’s and his brother’s guns by
name. And he aptly describes the impact of such guns on a grizzly’s
brain. Finally he notes that Gus is tired. This last detail may be the most
interesting. After all, just a few sentences ago, Gus killed a young grizzly
single-pawed.
I love this writing not for its form but for its life. Logan has an
active mind life. He didn’t know four days earlier that what was running
through his head had value. He didn’t realize that paper and pen could
tell his mother and me more things about him than if he had simply
written about Columbus.
Don’t jump ahead of me now. I’m not saying that Logan should
never write about Columbus or Pocahontas. On the contrary. I want
Logan, your kids and my kids to write about all subjects.
Here’s the twist. I want them to write about those subjects from their
own perspectives, with their insights beliefs and imaginations fully acces-
sible to them. They must not edit the most interesting part of anyone’s
writing: the expression of themselves (otherwise known in this course as
Just get it down on paper, and “writer’s voice”).
then we’ll see what to do about Logan made a breakthrough that his mother has the chance to use
it. for the future. She can nurture the bursts of imagination and capacity for
—Maxwell Perkins detail. She can show Logan that what he thinks has value and is worth
recording. She can support his messy attempts to codify and explain his
thought life as he scratches it out on paper. As she does, Logan will
begin to believe that writing is not so different from thinking or talking.
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Mom: Logan, I didn’t know that you wanted to repel off the side of a
mountain. Sounds like you’re thinking a lot about hunting and camp-
ing and cooking. I could almost taste the beef jerky.
Logan: Yeah, I can’t wait to go with Dad again.
Mom: I like the way you use so much detail, though you grossed me
out with the brain being shot “clean out” of the grizzly’s head. Yuck!
Logan: (He smiles) Yeah, and did you know that the last time I went
with Dad…
Logan might be launched into another tale about hunting grizzlies.
By providing feedback like this, you’re giving your writer the chance to
hear what impact his writing had on you, the reader. He doesn’t need to
know what impact it had on you, the educator, until much later. Writers
write for readers, not for teachers. Start out as a reader.
If you start this way, you’ll set yourself up to teach your child how to
fix what’s wrong and he won’t even notice. Here’s why. When your child
realizes that what he wrote down is interesting to you, creates an emo-
tional response, makes you call his dad at work to hear it, he’ll be inter-
ested in making it better. And we all know that punctuation makes writ-
ing readable. If your child sees that his punctuation improves the enjoy-
ment or communication of his piece, he’ll be much more responsive to
your comments. But let’s not go there yet. This chapter is about freedom
from mechanics—freedom to write!
One writing teacher that thinks outside the box is Peter Elbow. He’s
written several wonderful books. The one I like best is called Writing I praise loudly; I blame softly.
with Power. Every couple of pages I wrote things in the margins like, —Catherine the Great
“Hey! That’s what I do!” and “Wow. Glad to know what that’s called.”
He’s the champion of freewriting in the education world and has had an
uphill battle getting the attention of fellow academics.
The following quote is from a book called Everyone Can Write. (My
comments are in brackets).
Sometimes a teacher or peer [or mom] will take a special role and
function as an ally. The simplest definition of an ally reader is some-
one who cares more about the writer than about the writing—who
cares more about helping and being a friend than about improving the
writing. I think of an ally as someone who sees that I am good even
when I write something that reveals selfishness or meanness or limit-
ed vision [or lousy punctuation, grammar and spelling]. When an ally
reader notices these things in what I’ve written, he or she may point
them out—if I ask for critical feedback—but I can always feel the feed-
back as only a part or subset of caring for me and seeing my good-
ness. Ally readers are precious and should be cherished. To have one
ally is a lot; I’ve had long periods with none.
You are the long term, ultimately committed ally reader that your
child needs. You have the privilege of caring more about the person doing
the writing than about the words on the page. You are the one who
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watches the cool, smart, intelligent, and unique person you know as your
child unfold in writing. And you get to mirror back to your son or
daughter the pearl inside his or her soul... even when he or she writes
Ideas are presented [in great
works of art] not in isolation junk and fusses and fumes at your assignments.
and detachment, but in their To become an ally, we have to put down our guns. We have to join
totality of origin and relation- forces with the child. Though I know you haven’t seen yourself as the
ship; they are not abstractions, enemy in the task of writing, it’s important to see yourself from the per-
general propositions, philosoph-
ical generalizations; they are liv- spective your child has. Ask your child what it would look like to work
ing truths—truths, that is, together on a project. Ask him what he needs from you. I’ve found that
which have become clear by many moms can enter in to their children’s writing struggles more com-
long experience, and to which passionately if they take the time to freewrite alongside their kids. You
men stand, or have stood, in
personal relations. They are might want to try it too.
ideas, in other words, which Freewriting is a tool that will work for your kids for the rest of their
stand together, not in the order writing lives. It’s not a warm-up or a technique for getting past writer’s
of formal logic, but of the ‘logic block. It’s not an assignment to use once and then get back to real writ-
of free life.’
ing. Freewriting is real writing. It’s the means by which writers tap their
—Hamilton Wright
thoughts and imaginations without any of the usual pressures—the
Books and Culture
expectations of readers, editors or teachers. Those who make freewriting
a part of their private writing practices become better and better at find-
ing their own thoughts and translating them into written words.
Freewriting helps your kids to run roughshod over the obstacles that
prevent them from forward progress in writing. Instead of maneuvering
around the fears of misspellings and punctuation errors, freewriting gets
your child right onto the trail of useful words.
At this stage, your goal should be to reinforce that the ideas are more
Writing is an exploration. You important than the shape of the writing. This is the critical difference
start from nothing and you between the way educators teach writing and the way professional writ-
learn as you go. ers talk about writing. Form follows freedom, not the other way around.
—E. L. Doctorow After a few successful freewrites (success is defined as having filled
many lines on the paper with any words that come spilling out of your
child’s head), you can begin the process of gently leading your students
to better writing. Better writing is called revising and most people don’t
The faster I write the better my
output. If I’m going slow I’m in like it, at first.
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awhile. Don’t edit the results or correct it. Simply allow your child to
write and then read his writing with nothing but supportive feedback
from you (or no feedback). If you can’t think of anything positive to say, Natalie Goldberg’s rules for
simply say, “Thank you.” “Timed Writing.”
And by the way, we aren’t obligated to read everything our kids 1. Keep your hand moving.
write. For very stuck writers, it might be a good idea to give that control (Don’t pause to reread the line
over to your child. Ask him or her to freewrite once a week but allow you have just written. That’s
your son or daughter to decide whether or not to share the results with stalling and trying to get con-
trol of what you’re saying.)
you. Re-establishing trust and allowing writing to be a safe place to dis-
close oneself must be the first order of business. 2. Don’t cross out.
(That is editing as you write.
I recommend scheduling a weekly freewrite for eight weeks. Keep all Even if you write something
the writing together in a folder. At the end of two months, pull out all of you didn’t mean to write, leave
the freewrites and let your child look over his writing in the context of it.)
several works. If your child finds one that he is particularly fond of, he 3. Don’t worry about spelling,
may choose that one to edit and revise. However, if your son or daughter punctuation or grammar.
shows no interest in revising, keep freewriting. It takes awhile for kids (Don’t even care about staying
within the margins and lines on
who’ve learned to hate writing to believe that what they write is good, in the page.)
fact, good enough to be worth revision.
4. Lose control
Without further ado, here is the Freewriting exercise.
5. Don’t think. Don’t get logical.
Guide to Freewriting 6. Go for the jugular.
Freewriting works best when the student knows the topic for writ- (If something comes up in your
ing. Some kids do best being told to write about whatever they want. writing that is scary or naked,
dive right into it. It probably
Others need you to help them pick a topic. I often let kids freewrite a
has lots of energy.)
list first. I ask them to list everything they know lots about in a five-
—Writing Down the Bones
minute rapid fire session. Once we have that list, I let the student pick
one of the topics for the freewriting session (and depending on the child,
I usually would get the list one day and do the freewriting the next day).
I taught freewriting for the first
If the child runs out of things to say and there is still time left on the time to a group of fifteen
buzzer, tell your kids to feel free to change topics or shift gears mid-ses- homeschooling moms. As I
sion. The point is to make it easy to write. read the directions aloud, all of
the sudden, one of the women
For topic driven freewrites, remember to supply ample experience
shot her hand in the air.
with the subject (engage the five senses, read several different perspec-
“I can’t believe you said to ‘rub’
tives, use various media, and take notes). Allow your child to spend time our kids’ shoulders!” she
digesting and mulling over the content. Encourage him/her to talk about exclaimed. “My son asked me
the subject with several people. Once your student has a sense of owner- this morning if I would massage
ship of the subject for writing, it’s time to get some words on paper. his shoulders and neck before
writing and I told him, ‘No.
Here’s how. This is school and I’m not rub-
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drawings. Get it all down without worry about how it looks, what
timer for 6 minutes. Then they
• Keep writing no matter what until the bell rings, and then stop.
about. So I explained they could
write about anything, but they
(Mom: Don’t read the freewriting before you hear it. You’ll undoubt-
seen one or shot one, he decided
edly miss the brilliance for all the spelling and grammar errors.
on something else.) I again
Instead, when your child reads it to you, look for the continuity of
stressed to them to write down
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to the topic, choose the ones that are vague or poorly expressed.
Ask for more writing, but limit each timed writing session to one spe-
cific area. Take out a clean sheet of paper and free-write some
more about that specific area. Trebuchets are cool and very
Narrow the focus (how the cocoa looks) and expand the writing (set
neat. I’d like to have one. I also
the timer for another session of freewriting). This process can occur
want a fourwheeler. except four-
not to require too much writing in a day so that the words are fresh
don’t. Trebuchets are very good
and prolific. Don’t tire out your young writer and thereby crush his or
siege weapons during the mid-
Freewriting samples
could shoot really far. They
could even shoot me into the
As I’ve said, there’s no such thing as a “correct” freewrite. But to help air. I watched a show on tre-
you get a feel for what freewriting might look like, I’ve included some buchets and I learned a lot and
samples from my students of various ages and both genders. One thing I built my own out of legos. It
can shoot really far. Trebuchets
to note: boys tend to write about violence, guns, war, attacks, violent were the equivalent of the
video games, machine guns, and violence. Did I mention violence? I have atomic bomb during the middle
to overemphasize this point because so many mothers have come to me ages. I would like one in my
horrified that what was actually lurking in their precious boys’ minds backyard and then I could crush
the people I didn’t like with my
were thoughts of blowing up the world! brothers who I would shoot out
We mothers are extremely uncomfortable with these subjects. Boys of the trebuchet.
seem to know it and when they write, they feel reduced to uninteresting —Alan (12)
topics that I call “mother-pleasers.” Boys especially hate this restriction,
but they also can’t articulate it. We ask him to write about how autumn
makes him feel and the boy stares up at you with blank eyes and says,
“How should I know? Cold, I guess.” We’re stunned. But if we say
“What kind of bomb would you use to blow up the bad guy in Red Alert This freewrite is based on a car-
Two? Please describe that scenario in detail.” toon guy Nathan made up and
“Well, now you’re talkin’,” he thinks. likes to draw.
Our boys believe that what they really care, think and fantasize about the tiki man is a super hero and
is not acceptable to us. They become cut off from their real thoughts, started when he was on easter
opinions and beliefs. Then they claim they can't write. island looking at the tiki statues
and heard drums and was shot
I’ve found this to be entirely normal (though weird—I’m a girl and by a tiki man with a dart and
don’t get it). So don’t panic. Just know that boys are fascinated by stuff found out that he had tiki pow-
that explodes. ers and now fights crime. he has
Girls tend to write about relationships (no brainer, right?), horses, cool attacks like tikiarrow that
burns a hole in whoever it hits
nature and stories of puppies and kittens. How’s that for stereotyping? he also has a tiki shield that can
But I’ve seen it over and over. Your kids may be exceptions to these hop on and fly the shield can
“rules” but I thought I’d let you in on my observations from teaching repel bullets
hundreds of kids, just in case. —Nathan (10)
The examples included in this chapter have the original spelling and
punctuation—or lack of it. And in some cases, I’ve included mothers’
comments so you can see how the process unfolds in a typical home.
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Freewriting Samples
for it they come in packs of ten. the darts are easy to load all you do
The first time I participated in
is slip them in the holes, pump thirty times and fire it is realy good for
the Highland County Fair was
a nerf fight the darts are small and orang they fly pretty far this gun
September, 1998. The horse
Bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla “me not
classes in the 4-H show. We got
going to ryme
fourth place in each class. And I
had a good time at the fair.
—Marcella (11) That was the first day. The next day I encouraged him to write about soc-
cer, which he knows much more about. This is what we got:
It’s a handball in the goal are (area) Grace is goally Isra’s kicking the
penalty. Isra kicks the ball at Grace. Grace runs away.AAAAAHHHHH!
The next one was a word for word quote of something from a movie. I was
pretty discouraged by that point. Then we tried making a list of the things he
knows. It helped me to remember that he’s very interested in a new book he just
got, Disaster Science. He chose to write about tornadoes.
We read the book together, tried an experiment and checked the word in
World Book, which had some short videos and sound effects. This really helped
him. This is what he finally wrote:
Tornados are very dangerous. F-5 is biggest up to about half a mile
wide.
When over the water a tornado becomes a waterspout. A tornado in
the dessert becomes a dustdevil.
This morning Isra wrote this. The exciting thing is that he asked for more
time! You can imagine my surprise.
When a volcano erupps lava shoots out a hole at the top. It also
launchs huge boulders high into the sky. Clouds of ash up tp about
1000'F also come out of the hole at the top. Tornadoes are also graet
disasters. F (funnl) 5 being the largest up to half a mile wide has wind
speeds inside it up to 300 mph. A waterspout is when a tonado starts
over the water. A strong waterspout can only overturn a small boat.
Isra (10)
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Football
Football is one of the coolest sports on the planet! It's a sport where
you have more than one way to score you can also either run the ball
or pass the ball or punt it away!
Freewriting exercise
Football is a real fun sport because when you run the ball you can get
Trip to Marmon Valley Farm
tackled and when you pass the ball you have to get away from the
defenders, catch it and not let the defenders intersept it.
We went to Marmon Valley
Farm for a mother/daughter
One day I was playing a game vs my brother Zach and the last time I
weekend. They have only quar-
played him he killed me so he said “hey Luke I bet you cant beat me.”
ter horses. My horse was Zane.
But I knew I could beat him and after 1 quarter I was wining 14 to
He was chestnut with blaze. We
nothing! but then we had to stop playing because my mom had to use
went with mom, Emily and her
the compuder!
mom.... square dancing, horse
grooming....pulled burs out of
So now you know what football is. It's the best game ever and it's fun
mane and tail, horse back rid-
on the compuder and outside!
ing, crafts...rode some more.
Barn dance devotions, bed and
Luke (10) breakfast....had deer, cats, kit-
bunch of places in the World Book to look under, explaining how the
ed.....also llama, sheep, ram,
most, is that one explosive - 1 1/2 times more powerful than TNT, had
cows....learned to saddle west-
explode from a cloud of dust. If you ignite one part of it, it's a chain
lift yourself up out of the saddle
with knees and legs when hors-
reaction and it makes the whole cloud a fire ball. If it's in an enclosed es right shoulder is out.. .I liked
area, it will explode. Dust of sugar, and other things like that, even this....when you post it is 3
some metals are used. times smoother ...we rode in
Jack (10) the pouring rain, got soaked,
but had lots of fun....horse
I was so surprised with the last part, in which he was able to dictate stepped on my foot...horses
were Zane, Mia, Zack, Spur,
straight off the top of his head to me with such clarity, and ability to remem- Peanut Butter......Peanut Butter
ber. You were so right about having them write about what interests them. was old.....the 2 breeds they
have are Percherons and
—Lynda Quarter horses....really muddy
10 year olds. My first pass was a straddle, pike and my second pass
was a straddle, half turn. I was excited to be able to compete. There
was six groups and I was in the third group. My score was 10.2. I was
the highest score so far. Then a girl in the last group got a higher
score than me. It was a 10.5. So she got first place and I got second.
I went home with a silver medal. I was happy that I was in the top
three.
Emma (9)
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Running in soccer
Running is so fast just the world feels like it will start running to pass
someone up gives you encouragement when you run it feels like run-
ning from a predator especially when you run a race the wind howls in
your ears even though there isn't any I feel like running even when
I'm tired seeing people run reading their minds they have determina-
tion DO NOT fail! I don't know why but your feet just go when you
stretch it's as boring as an ice cream lid but you know it's for the good
working out it's so hard your muscles are like liquid when you are
hurting you walk like a flamingo and a wobbling animal mix yet when
you run you feel revived you have a pet skunk named goober you
have to run from everything bad just imagine everything you hate
behind you then just run away from it fast like anything I can't write it's
silly my dog runs faster without even really trying then my hand hurts
so when you run you can't feel like anything is holding you back”
Leanna (13)
Leanna’s final version based on the original freewrite
I feel sweat dripping down my temples. My eyes are half-blinded from
the sunscreen I’m using to protect me from the sun’s 108° heat. Half
of my mind is in dreamland right now, but fortunately the other half
just noticed that one of my teammates kicked the soccer ball up to
me, a forward. I’m sprinting up the field with the ball, I see the goal
and the goalie, but it seems like everything else is blocked out. I hear
wind rushing in my ears even though there isn’t any. I taste my chap-
stick that doesn’t seem to be working anymore. I hear shouts and
cheers from the sidelines and my teammates. I smell torn up grass
and body odor. I feel my feet pushing off from the hard ground, then I
whack the ball right past the goalie’s outstretched fingers.
SCOOOOORRRRRE! I’m grinning and I excitedly run back to the
halfway line. My team and I are hyped up and ready to face the gold
medal Norwegians!!!!
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Chapter 5
And one of the most obvious and overlooked resources for writing
are notes made from conversations about the topic. Whenever your kids
say something brilliant about any subject, take notes. Then plunk down
that piece of paper in front of your child when he or she writes.
Maps, reference books, charts, notecards and a cleared desk all help
writers who are stuck. The point is that most kids have trouble pulling
up the facts they need while paying attention to their subjective thoughts
about a topic. Throw in the need to write perfectly and you’ll have one
stuck writer!
As you read ahead, keep these images in mind: pregnant with inter-
nalized information or experience and well-supplied with materials that
help your child write.
forgot to assign it then, but you really need it for your portfolio.
that matters, students have to
Come on, Theo, can’t you just write a little something? The big
puzzle out what the instructor
Listen, I’ll call Karen and ask her. Just start writing something and I’ll
Branon’s term constitutes the
dictate to me. What do you mean you can’t think of anything to say?
by means of comments, oral
(Look of shock and dismay) I don’t want to reread the book myself,
and written, that represent the
write something!
writer’s intentions may initially
have been.” That agenda dis-
• Done with breakfast, Fitzwilliam? (In a cheery voice) Okay, let’s start
torts communication, when
with your daily journal entry. Write something that has happened
teachers, who alone know what
today. (Mother reads what’s written; her lips tighten) I am not inter-
Ideal Text they have in mind,
ested in what kind of Cheerios you ate for breakfast. Don’t goof off! I
display little interest in under-
ing pitch)
from it.
now. Sean will grab it and hit Fiona over the head. I know you don’t
Growing Up Writing
like baseball, but that’s the assignment in the book. Just try to
remember what it looks like and how it feels in your hand. What
does it smell like? (Reads first sentence: "I like baseball bats
because they are nice.") That’s not what I asked for. (Voice rattles
and eyes narrow menacingly)
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• The writing manual says to write about Christmas. You can write
about anything you want as long as it has to do with Christmas,
Eduardo. I don’t believe that you can’t think of anything to write. We
love Christmas. Just a few sentences will be enough for me. Let me
start it for you. (Pleading with insincerity) I’ll let you play Nintendo
Find a subject you care about
after lunch if you will just write this essay. (Carrot dangling ineffec-
and which you in your heart feel
the adjectives and change them into new ones. Then see if you can
seductive element in your style.
write new sentences that improve on Aesop’s. I know you are only —Kurt Vonnegut
in fifth grade, Millie, and that Aesop’s writing has withstood cen-
turies of scrutiny, but the curriculum wouldn’t ask you to do it if you
couldn’t. Just three little words. Pleeease.
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Lamott (author of Bird by Bird, a hilarious and helpful book about the
writing process) has helped me tremendously in this area. She tricks her-
self into writing by looking at a one-inch picture frame. She tells herself
I always do the first line well,
but have trouble doing the oth-
to write the smallest bit of information that describes an image to fit
ers. inside it. We can help our kids narrow the duty of their current project
—Moliére
by encouraging them to write about just one small thing. One detail at a
time and nothing more at that sitting.
Is it the way the silk worm prepares his cocoon? How about the taste
of corn pone that the southern soldiers ate during the Civil War? Don’t
feel guilty for going slowly. Keep the sessions short and productive. The
results may be meager in quantity. Don’t despair. Look for true involve-
ment in the writing process first. And that comes with smaller doses of
writing at each sitting.
“What if my child is supposed to write a state report? Do I really
have to have them write one tiny bit of information at a time? Won’t that
take forever?”
Yes. It’ll take forever. I’m not going to lie to you. Get used to it. One
small step at a time that encourages thorough investigation and attention
to detail is far superior to a bland, typical, schoolish report of regurgitat-
ed encyclopedia information.
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Allow your writers to write freely (badly) at first. Pack their mules
with their own comments and observations about the writing topic.
Limit the initial writing session to a bite-sized piece of the whole enchi-
We must learn to regard people
lada. Your kids will be lured into the realm of Alive Writing and will less in the light of what they do
escape the prison of writing perfectionism. or omit to do, and more in the
It’s not uncommon to take an entire month for one descriptive para- light of what they suffer.
graph when you first start out. Don’t work on the project every day. Do —Dietrich Bonhoeffer
something each week. My rule of thumb is one writing project per Letters and Papers from Prison
month that goes through all the steps in the writing process.
Inspector Mom
Most of us feel like we’re banging our heads against a wall when we
We need love and creative
start coaxing our children to write. We bellow, complain, guilt and imagination to do constructive
manipulate our kids. I know I have. But don’t do it. Repeat after me: all work.
writing problems are reasonable and can be fixed. —Paula Ollendorf
But I know you’ll forget this rule. Even after you shout, lose your
temper and wander off to the kitchen resigning yourself to a homeschool
without a writing course, you can still come back to look for the clues to
what the problem is. In fact, the best information you can share with
your kids is that their difficulties with writing are reasonable, under-
standable, and possible to overcome.
Writing is about telling the truth and the truth starts off the page.
When we assume a posture while writing (writing for an audience that
intimidates us, or imitating a style or are feeling too tired from a late
night movie but are pretending not to notice), we inhibit our most cre-
ative, truth-telling selves. When this occurs, there are two possible
results: the resistant writer won’t write (child stakes his flag at the
Author’s Alamo and has sworn to die there) or the compliant student
will produce a stiff, predictable and uninteresting work.
Either way is a loss for the budding author. The first student con-
firms to himself that he isn’t capable of writing. The second believes that
writing is boring and to be endured. She misses out on the learning
opportunity that her writing is meant to produce.
And here’s the biggest catch of all. There is no trick or reliable solu-
tion to the problem of writing from scratch. There are methods, exercis-
es, and the experiences of others to guide us. However, the real key to
breaking out of the trap is telling the truth. Pause, tell your child to close
his eyes and then allow him to reflect internally on what is in the way. As
he feels your care and attention, many times you’ll be handed the key
that will unlock his door.
A Learning experience
I’ve given you some “tricks” anyway, to help the average kid beat the
writer’s block rap. For most kids, most of the time, these ideas work. But
they are not the same as the discovery that comes from the individual
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child about how he or she best breaks free from those traps that block
writing. In my home, I came to this realization while working on this
chapter.
When I face the desolate
impossibility of writing five One morning I gave my twelve-year-old son a letter-writing assign-
hundred pages a sick sense of ment based on a novel we were reading. He responded enthusiastically
failure falls on me and I know I and launched into his first draft (a freewriting exercise). He was barreling
can never do it. This happens
along until ten minutes into it—he froze. I coaxed him, asked helpful
every time. Then gradually I
write one page and then anoth- questions, gently suggested a few things, prodded him a bit more insis-
er. One day's work is all I can tently (read: threatened to take away his computer games, unicycle and
permit myself to contemplate future down payment on his first house unless he got writing), clenched
and I eliminate the possibility of
my teeth and finally yelled at the poor kid, “What is your problem? You
ever finishing.
know this stuff. Why are you freezing up now?”
—John Steinbeck We ended in quite a conflict. And all I could think was “I thought I
had already solved these problems. I’m writing a book about how to solve
these problems. What’s wrong with him?” (Notice my ego! Ouch!)
I called my husband and vented my frustration all over him. I had to
confess that I was allowing Noah’s difficulties to say something about my
adequacy as a teacher.
I paced a bit in the other room, took a few deep breaths and started
over.
I’d left out the key ingredient to the exercise: Noah! And as
“Inspector Mom” it was my duty to look for the clues to see what had
gone wrong for him.
He had started well, but couldn’t finish. I asked him about it. Once
he realized that I wasn’t going to attack him with both fists and several
of my teeth, he could think clearly enough to tell me some things.
“I have all these pictures in my head—no words. And I want to tell
the story but I keep forgetting what exactly came next. And I don’t think
I could ever finish it today if I did.”
Wow. A very useful mouthful. When he finally let me read his writ-
ing, I saw for myself that he was trying to recount the story in the order
of events down to the smallest detail. That was not what I had asked for,
but it was what he’d interpreted the assignment to be. Suddenly the task
was too large and difficult and paralyzing.
When we identified the “demon” that had descended upon him, we
could “cast it out.” I told him about the one-inch picture frame and the
telephoto lens. I said this, “Close your eyes. Now tell me what you see.”
He described the sailing ship from the book.
“Now zoom in a little closer. What do you see now?”
“The mast and forecastle with a man in it,” he said. He kept zoom-
ing in and talking; I kept writing. After a little while, I read back what I
had written for him and asked him to take over.
He was more willing by then and my notetaking now got in the way.
When I told him his time was up, he said, “Let me just finish this one
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talk back and forth with a sibling who is going to write about the
show her how freewriting
same topic. Talk, talk, talk. Tell them to chat with their AOL Instant
should be. I wanted her to know
then write.
the dishes in the sink, walked
past the overfilled garbage, for-
• Watch out for pencil fatigue.
got about packing for our trip
Did your child already do dictation, italic handwriting and copywork
and rushed to the computer to
this morning? If so, perhaps she is just sick of the physical act of
type. When she saw her work,
writing.
there was a definite change of
heart. She was more interested
in finishing the paper than eat- • Shorten the writing session.
ing ramen noodles (this is a Reduce the amount needed for today. Narrow the focus and write
good sign!). about one aspect well. Stop after ten minutes. Make lists of words
I’ve noticed that Simone tends instead of complete sentences. Doodle pictures or graphs.
• Is this a dumb assignment?
to think about her feelings,
Does my kid need to write about this? Sometimes mothers assign a
takes a moment to summarize
topic so uninspiring or irrelevant that her children lose heart. Then
her thoughts and, then speaks—
the next assignment is even harder to get started. These are assign-
instead of letting her exact feel-
ments like letters they never send, imaginary stories about aliens,
ings/words flow onto the paper.
what they would buy with a million dollars and so on. Be sure there
The question and answer ses-
Wrinkle the page so that it’s obvious that it can’t be the final draft.
Make it abundantly clear that this draft won’t be the final product no
matter how well they write this version. The psychological help that
a lousy piece of paper is has repeatedly amazed me. Kids relax…
and then write.
• Send your child on a walk.
Sometimes moving straight from a math page or science experiment
into writing can create a feeling of loss. The left brain has been on
task and suddenly that right brain is expected to wake up and work.
Create a gap between subjects so your student has time to process
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what it is he/she is going to write about. Pick the topic or read the
assignment and then send him /her for a walk to ruminate before
writing. After ten minutes, bring your child back to the table to begin
the draft or to polish the final product—whatever stage the writing is
in at that point.
Gabrielle did not want to pur-
sue the topic of Queen
Elizabeth I. She seemed to have
Of course, there are lots of good books about how to deal with the lots of ideas of stories she want-
will and I won’t waste any more time here trying to help you. If your ed to write (and uninterested in
child’s will is in the way, then all the writing tricks in the world won’t doing the brainstorming exer-
help you. Lay writing aside while you get a handle on the more impor- cise), so I let her sit at the com-
puter and just start writing
tant part of your child’s education: his character. down what she had in her mind
Afterwards, we spent time nar-
rowing the topic. Since she
wanted to write about a girl
going on the Mayflower, we
discussed what aspect of that
adventure she’d want to focus
on. As a result, she chose to
focus on the challenges of the
journey there. She wanted her
main character to be a girl of
courage who overcame these
challenges.
Then we did some research on
the journey. She read four short
stories about the voyage of the
Mayflower—and in particular,
the conditions for children.
Afterwards, she brainstormed a
list of conditions that her main
character would have to over-
come. Then for the past two
days or so she has taken a few
of those conditions and did
freewriting on them.
—Kim
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Chapter 6
to narrow it before the real writing begins. Think of a funnel. The rim is
large and can fit lots of liquid into it, but the bottom nozzle emits a nar-
row stream into the container. In order to get the subject into a writing-
Jeremy and I discussed the idea
of a topic funnel and then I shaped container, a topic funnel needs to force the subject matter into a
asked him to suggest a topic narrower stream.
An Example
So let’s take one of the typical assignments that are so popular with
writing curricula and see what we can do with it.
“Write about your favorite sport.”
The first trick for any kid is to choose his favorite sport. For some
children, this will be immediately obvious, but what about the kids who
play five sports a year? Get a piece of paper and ask your child to write
his favorite sports across the top of the page.
soccer tennis rock climbing baseball swimming
These sports form the top of the funnel—the broad rim. Ask your
son to pick one. He needs to pick just one. If this is too difficult (can’t
decide between two), let him choose two sports and follow the next set
of steps on two separate sheets of paper—one for each choice. At the end
of the process, he’ll be able to see which one affords him more material
for his project. For our example, let’s choose:
rock climbing
Under rock climbing, ask your son to list all of the things about rock
climbing that he likes. This could take a bit of time, but let him go. If
he’s stuck, suggest things you’ve heard him say in the past. Let him talk
while you write and ask him to picture himself at the gym.
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Being alone
• blocking
• punching
This topic is also too big. It doesn’t prompt a question. Start the fun-
nel all over again with this as the head topic. This process doesn’t have to
take a lot of time. The important thing is that it must be done.
The feel of climbing without ropes
The desire to climb real boulders in the desert
The wall at the gym that he mastered that was too difficult for
college kids
Talk about these and choose one to turn into a real topic.
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Real Topics
A real topic in my book is one that asks a question that the writing
can answer. “Write about rock climbing” does not do that. Which topic
In your writing, be strong, defi-
under bouldering can be made into a question that the student’s writing
ant, forbearing. Have a point to
make and write to it. Dare to can answer? Let’s try the third one.
say what you want most to say, An easy way to begin is to make the idea into a statement first.
Bouldering at my indoor rock climbing gym is exciting because I
and say it as plainly as you can.
—Bill Stout
From the statement, a question can be created:
What is exciting about bouldering at my rock climbing gym?
Good news: your student already knows the answer! By setting forth
the idea before creating the question, your child has a better chance at
writing with confidence about the topic. From the question, it’s now pos-
sible to think about three or four subpoints that will help to explain why
bouldering is a great diversion for your son. He’ll have to explain what
bouldering is (for the reader), discuss what makes it difficult compared
with other kinds of climbing and show us how he succeeded where col-
lege kids failed and why.
If this assignment was meant to be a descriptive paragraph, he might
simply want to recount the experience of having mastered the wall from
his perspective. It would be clever to end with the comments or compli-
ments of the college kids he bested.
Now that your son has narrowed the scope of the topic and has a
personal experience tied to it, he will have much less trouble thinking of
things to write.
When you’re confronted with a subject that’s not tied to personal
experience and where the information is largely from book learning, the
process of narrowing the topic is even more critical. It simply isn’t possi-
ble or necessary to know everything about Napoleon. The writing in
response to a unit about Napoleon ought to highlight some key aspects
of his life or accomplishments, but it should not be exhaustive or ardu-
ous.
Instead, the real opportunity for the young writer is to make concrete
his impressions, opinions and connections with other people or subjects
that the study of Napoleon stimulates. So be choosy. Don’t require
length. Require your kids to be specific. Is it the battle at Waterloo that
piqued their interest? Are they interested in what became of Napoleon
after he lost that battle? Follow the funnel process in the same way as
described above and conclude with a statement that can be turned into a
question that the writing can answer.
What if it turns out that your kids only know a few facts about the
topic? If this is the case, don’t require writing. In fact, go directly to the
next section, do not pass Go and do not collect a report or essay.
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Topic Funnel If you’re writing a research paper that is meant to simply profile a
Track and Field religion, the best thing to do is to pick three categories to profile and do
The things I enjoy at track. a good job in each area.
Islam
• sprinting
• History of
• winning
• Religious practices/beliefs
• keeping up with someone
better than me
• meeting new people • Socio/political implications
• cool down I wouldn’t call a paper of this sort a research paper. I’d call it a profile
• competing or a report. A paper that demonstrates the student’s ability to reorganize
• timing yourself in practice information and to present it is not what constitutes a research paper. It
• beating an old record
is, however, an effective way to teach research and organizational skills
and needs to be exploited for those purposes.
• coming in first
Whenever you face an assignment that’s not arguing a point, help
• racing a friend your kids choose the arenas for research. It’s not necessary to write about
I chose competing. everything that’s in the library books about your particular state, religion
• What does it take to com- or country. Learn how to choose information that fits the categories
pete? (preparing)
you’ve selected to explore.
• What is it like in a competi- Don’t feel like a bad mother if your child decides not to include the
tion?
rainfall averages for South Dakota. Help him or her to decide what it is
—Domine
that ought to be included and then stick to those arenas. (Chapter 15—
The Dreaded Elementary Report).
If your student is in high school and has already completed a couple
of reports or profiles, it’s time to teach the research paper. I’m writing a
supplement called “Help for High School” (in 2002) which will teach the
Expository Essay as well as the Research Paper.
What follows is a quick reference guide for creating useful
topics/subjects for writing with kids between 4th and 8th grades. In
order to have anything to “funnel” you must first be sure to stimulate
internal possession of the information. Your kids need to own the mater-
ial they write about.
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Literature
When assigning a book report, be sure to give your child a view-
point. It helps if he or she acts as a reviewer rather than just another kid
doing the meaningless task of describing back to an adult the content of
the book.
At my house:
• Make a poster advertising the book with one well-written slogan to
recommend the book to others.
• Draw illustrations of key scenes with simple descriptions.
• Rewrite the ending to a story—either with a new ending or continue
the story for another short chapter.
• Using characters from the story, write another adventure that they
share.
Social Studies
When studying locations or periods of history, narrow the focus. Be
sure to carefully choose your topic so that it is not too large and cumber-
some.
At my house:
• Develop a good hook—a creative opening that engages the reader.
Use dialog, an anecdote or a quotation.
• Make use of graphic organizers like the ones mentioned in this
chapter.
• Identify one person that is memorable from that period of history
and write in that person’s viewpoint. Describe only one experience,
not all fifty that make up his/her life.
• Use illustrations, magazine photos and library books to supply visual
stimulation while the child writes. It’s easier to write when he or she
can see it. Usually historical periods and locations like states and
planets are too removed from a child’s experience to elicit good writ-
ing without the visual aids.
Science
When writing about animals, insects, chemical reactions and the
water system, be sure to have hands-on experiences with proper note-
taking. Use a science journal or tape player to record what the child sees
and experiences. These resources will help remind the child of what his
or her fresh thoughts, words and insights were at that moment.
At my house:
• Make a science journal and take it everywhere when investigating
nature. For younger students or the reluctant writer, take notes for
the child while he or she dictates his or her observations.
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Creative Writing
Most creative writing assignments make the mistake of being too
general. Parents and teachers are under the impression that this leaves
more room for creativity. Wrong! Be specific and provocative.
At my house:
• Use scenery photos for descriptions. Look for pictures that provoke
a response (like tornadoes, waterfalls, tidal waves, strange architec-
ture, double rainbows, jungles and so on).
• Draw on immediate experience for that poem or limerick. If you’re
studying the Civil War, incorporate it into the poem—bloodied men
on the battlefield...
• Ask a specific question that begs to be answered: Why would I want
to sip a cup of hot cocoa? Then make the cup of cocoa and write
while you sip!
• Do something unusual. Go walk in the rain storm, then ask your
child to write about why kids should be allowed to get soaked in the
rain.
Questions to ask your child
• About what or whom will I be writing?
• What fascinates me most about my topic?
• Will I report objectively or subjectively? (As news reporter or editori-
al writer)
• What new thing do I hope to convey to my reader?
• What burning question will my paper answer?
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freewrite yield interesting results that she’d like to expand? Did your son
find a topic in the topic funnel exercise that he knows lots about?
Once you’ve picked one of the assignments, the next step is to be
sure that you have a freewrite that goes with the topic. Take the Keen
Observation or the Topic Funnel products and freewrite about the sub-
ject using any information you gleaned through these writing exercises.
Then move on to the next chapter where you can finally get out your red
pens.
(The following pages have samples of Topic Funnels.)
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with it! We didn't totally ignore other school stuff, but my first priority
was to talk with my kids and not feel guilty about it!
(And what kind of oppressive, repressive system of education (or par-
enting) results in the teacher/mom feeling guilty for communicating?
My thinking really gets screwed up sometimes. Thanks, Julie, for help-
ing me remember not only what's more effective in the long run, but
what's good and right.)
And I had a BLAST! My kids are such neat, creative, smart people.
Of course not much of that comes out in the resultant writing since,
after all, they are just starting and who's good at something when they
first start, but now at least I've seen the inner workings of their minds
and know they have great, valuable insights and knowledge to share.
So now my job is to help them accurately express the unique per-
spectives God has gifted them with and to support them through the
sometimes difficult process of mining the gold in their minds.
The process got a bad start with Elizabeth last week. I wanted to go
forward with the funneling and editing assignments, but it just seemed
that we had no freewrites that were very salvageable, so I was deter-
mined to get a piece of writing out of her (using force if need be) on a
topic relevant and interesting enough to her that she’d have more
than two sentences to say about it. She loves the Little House
books—okay, perfect freewrite opportunity. So I talked with her about
what she could say about Laura's life, suggested that she could pre-
tend she was Laura's neighbor and could describe what life would
have been like in that time. I came up with several different angles.
Elizabeth didn't want to do any of those. She simply wanted to narrate
an episode from one of the books. Here's the part where I blush in
shame—I wouldn't let her do that! Oh, the pushing, poking, impossi-
ble-to-please mommy! Who will deliver poor children from the
bondage of a taskmaster who just won't let them be what they are?
I repented only a day later (after an awful freewrite experience in
which she produced only a sassy, negative, I'll-obey-the-letter-of-
mom's-law effort) and apologized to her for making her feel that what
she wanted to write was somehow not good enough and that she
needed to do it my way and write about what I thought was accept-
able instead of write about what was in her own mind.
Then we had a great discussion about why she likes the Little House
books, which adventures she thought were the best, how Laura is dif-
ferent from Mary and how Elizabeth sees herself more as a Laura. I
lounged on the bed, Elizabeth was sprawled out on the floor of her
room and we just plain gabbed for a long time. It was awesome. I was
so impressed with her ability to notice things in the books, to put
events and descriptions together and relate them to one another and
to her own life, so intrigued by the really unique perspective my
daughter has.
What it boiled down to in the end was that she loves to read about
Laura because Laura’s life illustrated experiences and feelings with
which she (Elizabeth) could identify and which are also somehow
important to her deep inside.
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After all that great talking, she felt she could write about why she likes
the books. Here's what she wrote:
She likes to do the things that I like to do.
I just love to be on hay stacks and slide down them, but sometimes
you get poked and bleed.
Thud. Not exactly world-class prose. But this slow-learning mama did-
n't forget the lesson of the day before—I praised her, sincerely, for
writing about what was in her and for that very specific detail about
the pokiness of hay. See, I knew that sentence had originated in a
memory or feeling or image that was dancing in her mind.
Her writing was a bad window to that image, but it was a start! I tried
to help her clear some of the dust off the window to her mind by talk-
ing more with her about her experiences and feelings related to play-
ing in the haystacks. Eventually she dictated this to me: (I didn't want
to dampen her enthusiasm by slowing her thoughts down to the
speed with which she can manipulate a pencil.)
When you slide down the haystacks, hay falls on your head and
dust gets in your eyes and nose. And sometimes hay falls in your
shoes and you have to sit down and dump your shoes out.
When you slide on haystacks, it's very slippery. Sometimes you just
sit down, and the hay falls from beneath you. When me and my
cousins play tag on the haystacks, the hay slips out from beneath
us when we're running, and we fall. When we're playing tag, we
sometimes jump from bale to bale. When we jump, dust spills out
from the hay. Sometimes we fall on our faces when we trip on the
strings on the bales. We also fall in the cracks between the
haystacks. Snow causes us to fall. With no gloves on, your hands
get cold.
There are a ton of images imbedded in that little piece of writing, still
buried under a layer of dust, but as she spoke, her eyes sparkled and
she smiled at the lively antics she could see in her mind's eye. I could
tell she was frustrated that her words didn't reflect the beauty or spe-
cialness she wanted to convey, but still somehow she seemed to be
willing to struggle with it, maybe partly because I was so interested in
her perceptions and partly because she felt that mystical exhilaration
that goes along with making concrete an invisible thing inside you. It's
not really good writing, but it was her writing.
Even after I'd written that stuff down for her, she wanted to talk about
the fun times she's had playing with her cousins on the haystacks at
Grandpa's farm. She was still caught up in her own vision, so I hand-
ed her the pencil and notebook and said, "Here, Elizabeth, write it
down." And I left.
Half an hour later, she handed me this:
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kay, okay. Enough freedom. You’re getting the D-T’s and need a
O quick fix. Get out your red pen, your reading glasses on the little
silver chain and a dictionary. Keep the Nitty Gritty Grammar reference
handy and attack that paper, right?
Well, no, not exactly… Sorry.
Revision is not about fixing all the mechanical problems. It’s not the
“copying over” stage of paper writing. Revision is giving new vision to
the slowly forming piece. It’s about rewriting and adding new bits of
writing to the original. It’s about attacking the bushy undergrowth with a
hatchet and planting some new seeds. No task into which a man puts
Revision narrows the focus of unclear passages and then expands the his heart is too bad. For the
lazy, all work is difficult. The
writing. The message and the meaning must all be evaluated for clarity, superior man finds pleasure in
depth and breadth. There are four general principles to consider when doing what is uncongenial.
revising a draft (freewrite). I list them in the next section. Then I follow —Elizabeth Foreman Lewis
them with five typical weaknesses found in the initial drafts of any paper. Young Fu of the Upper Yangtze
Finally, once the revisions are made, it’s time to choose what kind of
writing form best suits your paper.
A caveat: I had the hardest time writing this chapter. When I teach
this course online, I help the mothers select which aspects of the stu-
dent’s draft needs to be narrowed and expanded. I only choose one or
two things to work on at a time. As I read the draft, I keep the principles
and weaknesses that I spell out in this chapter in mind. But I never
expect any one child to fix every weakness.
By identifying the range of possible weaknesses in children’s writing,
I fear you’ll feel you must resolve every weakness and enhance every
point of your child’s work each time you evaluate a paper. Please don’t do
that. This list is a sort of glossary of what to look for in most student
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writing. Allow yourself to work on one thing at a time, and don’t feel the
need to fix every problem every time. Your children will thank you and
you’ll feel much less overwhelmed if you look at revising as a journey
The first draft is what you want
to say; the final draft, after
through several papers rather than a complete overhaul of each paper.
Polaroids
much editing and rewriting, is
how you want to say it.
When your kids freewrite, they grab and reach and snatch. They take
—Dick Graber
snapshots of ideas, they pull down bits of detail, they label entire
sequences of events with a single word. The goal of freewriting is to
move that pencil across the page as quickly as their little minds think up
thoughts. But those minds are much faster “thinkers” than “writers.” The
way your kids compensate for that gap is to leave out all the good stuff.
“Communication,” I recently Oh, sometimes they come up with terrific detail and quirks that make
told a class of writers, “is your their freewriting sing. (And the more they freewrite, the more this will
reason for being—not nourish-
happen naturally).
ment of ego, not praise of your
colleagues, not money, not love But by and large, what you see at the end of a freewrite is like an
of generations to come. You undeveloped Polaroid. All the material for a great picture is there, but it
write to communicate to the hasn’t emerged. Revision, then, is about finding the nuggets and digging
hearts and minds of others
them out. It’s about taking the raw materials and turning them into
what’s burning inside you—
And we edit to let the fire show goods. It’s like finding coal and cutting it into diamonds.
through the smoke.” Revision is not editing. Editing takes those revised ideas and rubs
—Arthur Plotnik them against your shirtsleeve to get the dirt off. Editing shines up the
The Elements of Editing final product. Editing is the last step—the mop up—and I talk about it
in Chapter 8—Machete Mechanics.
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“You felt uneasy before your piano recital. What did your body feel
like when you were ‘uneasy’?”
These kinds of questions help the writer to focus on what she’s actu- As far as revising or second
ally trying to communicate. drafts—well, imagine pulling
the same tooth twice. I wonder
You see, writing requires another duality: narrowing the focus while sometimes what the reasons are.
expanding the writing. By asking questions (like the ones above), your Two possibilities are on my
young writer narrows the focus for his next freewriting session. He takes mind, one is that he wants to
on a tiny part of the whole and gives his whole attention to it. Once he get done as quickly as possible
to get on with things he enjoys
narrows the focus of what he wants to say, he then expands that idea, more. The other is that he is a
word, thought, and experience in writing. Narrow—expand. Narrow the perfectionist who feels that he
focus—expand the writing. can't do it “right” and doesn’t
What follows are four areas that usually impact meaning. They will want to bother to try very hard
when he doesn’t think he will
help you to know what to look for to narrow and expand. achieve the great results he
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defend, or narrate? Once you decide which it is, follow the form. (Yes, I
know you think you don’t know what the writing forms are. See the end
of the chapter for explanations.) Usually there’s a logical sequence that’s
Coherence is not the goal of
needed for each form. That doesn’t mean that the writing must go in a raw writing, life is. Coherence
predictable, plodding manner. Instead, the writer simply needs to be con- is what you impose on raw
scious of what the key points are and that they are made in an orderly writing as you revise.
fashion. —Peter Elbow
there. Circle the sentence or word and let your child freewrite again
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about that issue specifically. Some kids need to talk first to discover why
it is that “radical” won’t cut it. Model what it means to unpack an experi-
ence in words.
Remember my mule trek to the mountains? Nine months pregnant
with all my supplies on the mule’s back? Now’s the time to unpack that
mule. Dig inside for the stuff that’s hidden under a heap of generalities.
• Unclear processes. Kids often write about how to do things. How
to bake a cake, how to play Red Alert Two, how to collect Beanie Babies,
how to find Grandpa’s house, how to defend the goal in soccer. If your
young writer is intimate with the topic (as I hope he or she is), it’s likely
that in her inexperience, she’ll leave out important details about how to
do the thing she knows or loves.
Writing directions is no easy task for kids. I know adults who don’t
Perfectionism is a mean, frozen
do a great job of explaining. I had a father-in-law who couldn’t teach me
form of idealism, while messes to tie a bowlin knot no matter how many times he showed it to me. He
are the artist’s true friend. knew that knot backwards and forwards, he could talk on and on about
What people somehow (inad- why it is a great knot to know. But he couldn’t make me see what was in
vertently, I’m sure) forgot to
mention when we were chil-
his head.
dren was that we need to make Type your child’s freewrite on the computer. Then print and cut out
messes in order to find out who each sentence. Give the sentences to your son or daughter and let your
we are and why we are here— child arrange them in the most logical order. (This works with any revis-
and, by extension, what we’re
supposed to write.
ing that needs reorganization and is a far better way to teach paragraph
construction than all those rigid models in the workbooks).
—Anne Lamott
Bird by Bird
As an adult, you can quickly see what’s missing in the instructions.
Your job, then, is to help your child walk through the steps in those
instructions to find the gaps. Beware of telling your child what the holes
are before you’ve affirmed how much he’s gotten right. The best way to
support his discovery of the gaps is to walk through the steps one by one.
Read the newly organized paragraph aloud while your child closes
his eyes to listen, imagining each point. Go slowly so that he or she is
actually picturing the process one step at a time. Many times your child
will see the gaps before you even have to say anything. If she doesn’t, you
can gently point out, “I think you might want to mention gluing the
perch to the birdhouse at this point. The reader doesn’t know how to
attach it from your directions. See?”
The following was written by one of my students, Randy (13). This
is his first freewrite on the topic of Paintball. As you read it, notice the
organization. This is a typical initial foray into writing about a topic the
student knows well but forgets that I, the reader, may not know anything
about. At this stage of the development, that’s perfectly acceptable. The
freewrite is the blueprint for where the writing eventually needs to go.
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Paintball
The first thing is dividing into teams. When starting you want to
choose a route that helps you move forward and gives you protec-
tion. You can always smell the plants that surround you when laying
on the ground.
Build on the good stuff. Find
one good sentence or phrase or
Sometimes where you lay can be wet and you can feel it, some-
word and build on it. A couple
times hard and it's uncomfortable, sometimes it's just perfect and
of quality sentences surrounded
comfortable. You're scared when moving around, and very cautious
by a bunch of mediocre ones is
you one.
growth toward the ultimate
goal—a confident, competent
When actually in a battle, you start to breathe hard, you can some- writer by the time your child
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your face. This sometimes fogs your mask and can get quite irritat-
ing. The materials you need are a mask, a paintball gun, preferably
—jb
Randy has all the elements for his final right here in this piece.
Notice that he includes the list of items needed for paintball (“The
materials you need are a mask, a paintball gun, preferable a semi-auto,
paintballs, and camo”). Notice that he includes interesting details (“you
can sometimes taste your salty sweat, you also smell your mask that cov-
ers your face”). These may not appear in the best order yet, but he cer-
tainly has some good stuff to work with. Randy’s objective is to tell me
how to play paintball. His organization is not yet clear, but the pieces
he’ll need for the final are all there. He also makes the assumption that
the reader is familiar with Paintball terminology. At this point, he’d need
to decide if he’s writing to an audience familiar with paintball or not. For
instance, I don’t know what “camo” is or a “semi-auto.”
The next step, then, is to highlight those areas that need develop-
ment, definition or clarification for the chosen reader.
• Mediocre reporting. Most kids write reports that resemble poorly
written encyclopedias. They tell the reader about soccer in general. “It’s a
fun sport that has defense and offense. Kids kick a ball toward the goal.
You can’t use your hands. It’s a lot of fun.” This example is typical of
what freewriting might yield. Moms throw up their hands. Boring! But that’s not what’s missing
Alas, however, the mom often comes along and makes it worse. She from this piece. The child is
tries to get her child to write about how to play soccer or what the rules missing—an MIA of writing
of the game are. But that’s not what’s missing from this piece. The child —jb
is missing—an MIA of writing. Here’s what to do:
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“‘This little piggy went to the market, this little piggy stayed home.’ I
snuggled up on the couch beside my mom, and she would begin a
story… As far back as I can remember my mother has always read
to us. Reading is a dominant pastime in our home. It is one of my
mom’s favorite hobbies.”
Typical weaknesses in children’s
writing.
Isn’t this lovely? The fact that it makes you want to keep reading Vague descriptions
proves that he is communicating with impact.
Unclear processes
• Awkward phrasing. Once you’ve reworked one key element at a
time that improves the meaning of a piece of writing (where you’ve spent Mediocre reporting
a week or two narrowing the focus and expanding the writing), you can Weak openings
tackle basic structural problems.
Remember Logan’s free-write from Chapter 4? Let’s look at one of Awkward phrasing
his sentences.
I want to go hunting a bear with my Dad and brother and my Gus.
There are very few changes here. The idea stays exactly the same.
These few improvements make a huge difference in how well it reads,
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up thinking about pleasant things like mini skirts, and Minnie Mouse
and being done in a jiffy…
My idea of a mini report is that it ought to be one page, one side—
An editor’s job is to shape the
expression of the author’s usually about four paragraphs long. One paragraph to get in, two to
thoughts, not the thoughts explain and one to get out. If your kids are older, two pages (front and
themselves... Sometimes the back) is reasonable, though not necessary.
author’s voice is an integral part
of a thought and must be pre- Journaling. I won’t go into it here, but journaling is the wellspring
served, even if it is loathsome to of my soul. It’s the source of all wisdom and insight into my very dra-
the editorial ear.
matic and complex life. It contains my deepest secrets, fears and longings.
—Arthur Plotnik Oh! Sorry. I didn’t mean to start journaling right here!
The Elements of Editing
Some kids love to journal. Others don’t. Don’t make a big deal about
it either way. For the ones who don’t like it—here’s what I do. I recom-
mend that those kids only write in a journal after a big, memory-filled
event (which means that sometimes entries are made every other year).
These are events like Fall Weekend with the youth group, a family vaca-
tion to the beach, a surprise birthday party, camping in the mountains
with Grandma, learning to drive a car, flying a remote controlled air-
plane, or dancing a waltz.
If you encourage journal writing when the event is worth preserving
for future enjoyment, journaling becomes a vehicle for self-expression. If
you require it every day and the most exciting moment of the week is
paying overdue fines at the library, then journaling becomes drudgery.
For your kids who write in diaries anyway, never require it. Let your
child develop his or her own sense of rhythm in keeping a journal.
There’s no need to interfere since they do it naturally. (For ideas about
journal topics, check Chapter 12.)
Mom’s Assignment
Here’s a recap of the steps to take for revising a freewrite.
• Read your child’s draft together.
• Underline or asterisk the parts that need expansion.
• Ask your child to freewrite for five minutes about one of the
vague or unclear sections in the original draft on one day.
Continue this way while interest stays high. I usually recommend
that a student only narrow and expand two to three parts per paper,
and that he do each of them on separate days.
• Type the newly written freewrites and the original into the com-
puter and then print it all out. Cut up the sentences or sections.
Lay them on the floor and rearrange them many times until satisfied
with the best order.
• Reorganize the paper on the computer (or rewrite a clean draft).
Then move onto the editing guide in the next chapter.
Take some time to notice that your child’s writing is moving along
from chaos to composure. It’s truly remarkable to see where a writing
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project starts and where it ends up. I save all drafts (the messy ones on
the wrinkled flyers) right through to the final, bound product. It makes
my kids feel really good to see that they’ve persevered through to a
meaningful end.
Samples
The following sample is a draft written by one of my students. I
include her original and then my comments so that you can get a feel for
how to make comments to your kids.
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“When I ride her I feel like I never want to get off. I like hearing the
clop of her hooves on the ground. I’m always proud riding her. While
I’m holding the rains, I feel her playing with the bit. I love cantering
in the open fields. When we are moving fast, you feel like you’re fly-
ing.”
You should avoid the “you” form in personal narrative. Always
tell me about your experience in the first person “When we are
moving fast, I feel like we are flying.”
“I also love the smell of horses. I think it is just fun being around Tikki
and the other horses.”
This is a lovely piece and only needs a bit of clean-up to be
complete. Great job!
Expansion exercise
As an example of how to expand the second draft of a freewrite, I
include Gabrielle’s (8) research that goes with her fictional diary in
Chapter 9—Adventuring Maid.
1. FOOD
The food aboard the MAYFLOWER is bad. Mainly the food is salt-
horse and hardtack. Salt-horse is salted meat of a kind, sometimes
horse. Hardtack is hard ship’s biscuit or bread. There was cheese
as well, but it had bugs in it, and it got moldy in time.
2. CONDITION OF SHIP
The MAYFLOWER is a cargo ship. It usually had wine aboard.
This is good for one reason, because the drippings of the wine
washed away the smell of garbage. But the MAYFLOWER was not
a passenger ship. And she carried thirty-four sailors and one hun-
dred and two passengers.
3. CLOTHES
The Puritans did not wear just plain white-and-black clothes—
those were just for Sunday. The women wore long woolen dresses
that were usually red, green, or blue. Girls always wore the same
as the mothers. The men and boys wore long-sleeved blue or
green shirts, leather or woolen jackets called doublets, and pants
called breeches. When boys were not yet six, they wore long
dresses.
4. SICKNESSES
There was ship’s fever aboard. Lots of the Pilgrims had it. The
sailors were always praying that the fever would go away. A ser-
vant of the doctor, Will Buttun, had it seriously. The doctor could
not do anything and Will died. But later a baby was borne, and he
was named Oceanus.
5. FRIENDLINESS TOWARDS EACH OTHER ON THE SHIP
You may think that the sailors and the Puritans would have gone
together like jolly and jingle, but they did not. The sailors were dis-
gusted at the Puritans because of their holy worship and prayers.
Once a sailor said he was tempted to throw half of them into the
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sea. The Puritans hated the sailors because of their manners and
bad language. But at the end of the journey, the sailors admired
the Puritans for their courage, and the Puritans were thankful that
the sailors got them safely to America.
6. ENTERTAINMENT ON THE SHIP
There was almost, as everyone knows, no entertainment aboard
the MAYFLOWER. If you enjoyed the sea, jump on deck. If you
liked the sailors (and you managed to slip away from your parents)
you might just go up and watch them. If you were like Isabelle, a
teenager helper, you would do mainly four things: (1) Help cook.
(2) Mend clothes. (3) Play with the little children. (4) Wet clothes
for people that are seasick. And like everyone else, you would
wonder about the free world, America.
7. WEATHER DURING THE MAYFLOWER
The weather (if it were a person), might have been agreeable
enough to pity the Puritans and send good, calm winds. But since
the weather is not a person, that cannot be it. The weather was
cold, crisp, and extra strong wind. It was good for the ship, but I
have not told the fourth thing: Bad Storms. They twirled and
swirled and bounced and pounced and shook and took and played
and swayed, and because of all this, it is simple enough to say
that that is the reason people got seasick. I feel (if I was childish
enough) I might say “GO AWAY, YOU WEATHER.”
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Chapter 8
Machete Mechanics
Editing Made Easy
our child hands you an otherwise brilliant paper but the punctua-
Y tion, grammar and spelling curl your hair (or straighten it). What do
you do? I have a couple of tricks for improving almost any piece of writ-
ing.
This is the editing phase of the writing process. In magazine termi-
nology, we call it copy editing. That means that the major rewriting is
done and all we’re looking for now is the stuff that makes it hard to
read—misspellings, typos, missing punctuation, last minute grammar
mistakes and so on. Editing is the mop-up. If your kids can find their
own errors, so much the better. The beautiful part of writing is
But once they’ve given editing their best shot, your job is to come in that you don’t have to get it
behind and find all the rest of their errors. Just mark the mistakes in red right the first time, unlike, say,
(or lime green—no need to perpetuate that red pen thing) so that when a brain surgeon.
your student copies over she’ll be copying everything correctly. —Robert Cromier
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ifiers). That’s right. You can cheat and sort out the mistakes with a refer-
ence book.
My favorite grammar reference books are especially easy to use with
This editing process was a roller
coaster ride for me. I reviewed kids. They’re called Nitty Gritty Grammar and More Nitty Gritty
the editing information with Grammar and are written by the Grammar Patrol: Edith Fine and Judith
Randy, gave him a list of what Josephson. These grammar sleuths use syndicated cartoons to illustrate
to look for, and set him loose. I
common grammar mistakes. Then they take the pains to explain in real
was perfectly prepared for him
to ‘not have everything right.’ life English what the grammar concept is all about. The headings make
He did all of the appropriate it very easy to find answers to any grammar question you face.
steps, then read his paper aloud Amazon.com and major bookstores carry them.
to me. I heard the improve-
ments he made, gave praise, and The Truth about me
discussed a couple of places he
might wish to clarify or expand.
Before we go any further, I need to let you know a few details about
my background. I’m not an English teacher. I don’t have a degree in
He worked through that dis-
course quite well, then we got to
English. And I’m not a grammarian.
the “type it in the computer” Ironically, I am an editor and freelance writer. I worked for three
phase. I decided to help him years as the senior editor of one publication, edited two books about
halfway through as we were in a worship, have ghost written four others, and worked with my husband as
time crunch. The intonation and
pauses he read were not reflect-
an editor of Doctor of Ministry dissertations for Talbot seminary stu-
ed in what was written. This dents. My articles have been published in several magazines as well,
was hard for me to see. I do including most recently Home Education Magazine. Currently, I’m a con-
expect more out of him. I had to tributing editor to Worship Leader magazine.
step back and listen to the
music of his heart. I’m going to
Though I didn’t study English in college, I did major in history
call it done for now. It is a map largely because it was a major that expected expository writing. I loved to
of where to go, on several levels. write essays. And I did well in that major for that reason. As I got older,
—Terry I discovered that my skills in writing could also earn me a little extra
money. That’s how I crossed over into editing. I’ve been a rabid self-
I liked this insightful look at taught writer and editor ever since.
Terry’s son, Randy. She sees that
The techniques and opinions I express in this chapter come from a
he’s getting in touch with his
writing voice, but she’s also sur- working knowledge of writing in the real world. There may be those who
prised that he’s not as far along take issue with my cavalier approach to grammar, punctuation and usage.
as she wanted him to be in the But I stand on my observations. Degrees in English aren’t necessary to
mechanics. If we can see each
teach writing to kids. I’m convinced that educated adults have enough
writing session as a record of
where our kids have been and know-how in the basics of written langauge to adequately instruct their
where they still need to go, we own children in writing. Most of the writing that any of us do in our
can let go of the worry that they adult lives will not be in the halls of academia anyway, but in the byways
should already have arrived. —jb
of life.
Additionally, I know that homeschooling mothers won’t master the
rules for grammar or English usage. They simply don’t have that kind of
time. And yet even without these skills, I firmly believe (and have wit-
nessed) that, by and large, mothers are capable of making the necessary
editorial changes their children’s papers need.
The attitude to keep is the one I embrace even in my paid work:
humility. Recognize your need for reference books, the Internet and
other readers when in doubt of a spelling, punctuation rule or grammar
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principle. And if you still feel woefully inadequate, take the time to learn
the rudimentary skills I discuss in the next section.
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better than too many. And of course, my mantra: when in doubt, check
the guidelines in a reference book. There are some rules that deserve to
be followed. If you regularly consult the little book, you’ll develop famil-
iarity with the typical uses of commas. And then you can pass this infor-
mation on to your kids.
That’s it. Simple? Yes it is.
"Help! I never learned this stuff myself."
There are some mothers who feel utterly inadequate to teach the
mechanics of writing. They can’t rely on their intuition for commas or
paragraphing. One of my friends in Los Angeles, for instance, grew up in
a bi-lingual home. She speaks English and Spanish fluently, but never
learned how to write or read very well in either. She couldn’t even write a
birthday card using periods, commas or capitals, so incomplete was her
sense of a sentence.
As she began to teach her children, naturally the subject of writing
terrified her! To educate herself, she took private tutoring lessons from
an English teacher. She became the student before becoming the teacher.
What a smart woman! When we are deficient in an area, there’s
nothing that says we can’t learn as adults.
Another friend of mine went to a small country school as a child
where the educational environment was sadly inadequate. She, too, felt
uncomfortable with basic punctuation and writing forms. Her strategy
has been to learn alongside her children, reading everything she can and
writing right along with them.
Both of these mothers come from backgrounds where the ordinary
course of education failed them. Most of us didn’t have that experience.
We may not be experts in the demands of academic writing, but we have
reasonable familiarity with the basics of punctuation and grammar. As
you teach your kids, as you use grammar references, as you write and read
more yourself, your own education in this area will grow and you’ll find
yourself much more comfortable with editing your children’s work for
mistakes.
Spelling
Good spelling is an attitude.
Years of memorizing words do
not add up to good spelling So what about spelling? Ahh. Those books and books of words. Yes,
unless a student cares. And stu- spelling is the difference: you are either from the backwaters of a bayou
dents who care are produced by
teachers who care.
or an esteemed college graduate. Spelling makes the biggest subliminal
impact on the reader of your entire piece.
—Ruth Beechik
A Strong Start in Language
There are two keys to growing as a speller. The first one is caring (as
Ruth Beechik says—see margin note). To care means that the writer will
do what it takes to get her spelling right. She must use a spell check, get
several people to read her drafts and begin to notice which words she
habitually misspells.
The second key is reading. The more writers read, the more their
spelling will improve. Yes, I see those hands. You read a ton and still can’t
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spell. There are many people just like you. That simply means you must
care more than others; you need a crutch to make up for your disability.
True for your kids too. Don’t be ashamed of it; just make up the differ-
Spelling mistakes I made in my
ence. (For a more complete discussion of spelling, see Chapter 1.) fourth grade diary (even though
Copywork and dictation (Chapter 1) are the tools of choice for I was a spelling bee champ).
teaching spelling. I don’t use spelling books to teach it. Instead, we spend • “atmit”—admit
time writing and copying over real words in their meaningful contexts.
• “realetors”—realtors
Can you use Spelling Power or ACSI spelling books? Sure. Just pay
• “earthqake”—earthquake
attention. See if you’re getting accurate spelling in your child’s writing. If
they ace the test but continue to misspell the words in their original • “jurked”—jerked
writing, then you need to spend more time in copywork. • “too”—to
During the editing phase, you’ll ask your child to look for his own Sometimes we forget that it
misspellings—any he can identify. Tell him to underline the misspelled takes years before we spell most
word and then to rewrite it correctly. He can either look the word up or words correctly most of the
time. —jb
ask you for the correct spelling. In either case, he ought to be the one to
rewrite it correctly.
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write in those periods and question marks), ask for the paper and then
you read it aloud to them obeying the punctuation as it is written. Be
sure to dramatically read a too-long sentence by sucking in huge drafts of
Because I want to make writing
a safe place for my kids, free air and hurrying through the words to get to the end of the sentence
from the fear of not measuring before running out of breath. This usually alerts a kid to what’s wrong.
up to some exacting, impossible The comma splice is also another sentence-wrecking culprit. A
standard, I’m working harder at comma splice is the attempt of the writer to string together two com-
consistently using dictation,
copywork, and narration to pass plete sentences because they seem related. Blow the whistle. Illegal pro-
on the needed language arts cedure!
abilities. Here’s an example:
"Getting the laundry done, making dinner and cleaning the bathroom
I am finding that it’s much bet-
are jobs that none of my kids likes to do, they always cry and whine
ter for us to talk about quota-
and complain."
tion marks or whatever using
someone else’s writing rather
than our own. Then, I’m These are two sentences illegally joined by a comma. At this point,
encouraging the transfer of
those skills into their own writ-
the writer has two choices. Either the sentences can be separated by a
ing before they write and not period:
"Getting the laundry done, making dinner and cleaning the bathroom
ripping apart what they’ve
are jobs that none of my kids likes to do. They always whine and
already written.
But I’m also seeing how badly complain."
they need help in spelling,
punctuation and those other Or a semi-colon can join them:
"Getting the laundry done, making dinner and cleaning the bathroom
things they hate the mention of!
are jobs that none of my kids likes to do; they always whine and com-
The increased writing they’re
plain."
doing has also given the kids a
grasp of why I want them to
learn that stuff—it sure makes
The job of a semi-colon is to join two complete sentences that are
writing easier to read and
understand! related. Be on the lookout for comma splices and run-on sentences.
When your child reads aloud to you, she may not notice them (since
—Rachel
most kids don’t read for punctuation very well when they are first learn-
ing to read aloud). Older kids should become increasingly aware of
watching for these kinds of errors, so remind them.
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will serve them for the rest of their writing lives (and they’ll fool every-
one into thinking they’re good at punctuation).
Here’s a quick reference for quotation marks and apostrophes (to
refresh your memories):
Quotes go around the things people say, discuss, ask, explain and so
on.
“Using quotes is so easy,” said Prunella.
The quotes go around the spoken words and the sentence is separat-
ed from “said Prunella” by a comma instead of a period. The closed quote
is behind the comma (outside of it).
“I’m astounded that some people don’t know how to use quotes!” she
exclaimed.
The exclamation point goes inside the quote in dialog. So does the
question mark when the spoken sentence is a question.
Quotes go around the spoken sentence like this when the sentence is
broken up by stating who is saying it:
“I am quotable,” shared Prunella shyly, “because I’m on TV.”
The commas set the speaker off from the speech. But remember that
the comma and the period go inside the closed quote mark.
Apostrophes pose some problems for novices. The basic rule for an
apostrophe is that you use it to replace missing letters (as in contractions)
and to indicate possession. The tricky part is to know how to coordinate
these with other punctuation.
• Apostrophes go inside quotation marks.
• Don’t forget the plural possessive. “The girls’ bathroom is next to the
gym.”
• An apostrophe with a quotation mark looks very muddled. Actually, it
just goes in layers.
Prunella says, “Don’t forget that mistakes of this kind are the kids’.”
This sentence is a good example because the period goes after the
apostrophe (since it’s part of the word) and before the quotation
mark.
That’s it! Use your grammar reference for better explanations and a
more in-depth look at how to use quotation marks and apostrophes. For
kids who become interested in the next layer of punctuation and gram-
mar, be sure to teach them. Grammar is not difficult if you think about it
as its own course of study. Don’t imagine that it will improve your child’s
ability to write, necessarily. A working knowledge of proper grammar
and usage will, however, support and enhance the writing your kids do.
But the skill called “understanding grammar” doesn’t do anything to help
kids think of ideas or to generate words on paper.
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Editing workout
Now that your kids have written a draft of a writing project and have
revised it by narrowing and expanding the ideas within it, it’s time for
the final clean-up.
1. Type or rewrite a clean copy. Sometimes there are so many scraps
I was not aware of how much of paper, arrows and asterisks on the original draft(s), it’s hard to even
my opinions are influenced by see the mistakes. If you start with a clean copy, finding the errors is
sheer sloppiness. I truly need to
much easier. For younger kids, I like to type the clean copy. Older kids
type up my children’s work so I
can see it for what it is. can type up their own. (If, by the way, you get in the habit of using the
computer, making changes in the drafts is much less annoying.)
—Rita
2. Create an editing guide that grows with your child. When you
send your child back to the freewrite to edit, it helps to create an editing
guide. It can be a very simple list written on a scratch piece of paper or
more elaborate (computer generated and printed out). The idea is to
identify the parts of grammar, punctuation and spelling that you know
your child can be responsible to check himself. Then give him that list so
that he is reminded of what to look for.
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• capitals
dren with material in their
lessons, and leave the handling of
• paragraph indentation
such material to themselves (with
Now choose three. Start with the three things that you want to see
improve over the next few months. Talk to your son or daughter about
them. Create dictation and copywork passages tailored to those needs.
My kids used workbook pages to learn about capitalization and dia-
log punctuation. After completing their lessons with flawless execution, I
gleefully assigned the creative writing task. Fifteen lines later, I was
appalled at the lack of capitals at the beginning of sentences and all the
errors in quotation marks. The only way out was through so I sent the
kids back to their own papers armed with red Flair markers and yelled,
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“Charge!” Their mission? To mark up their writing wherever they missed Mom’s as editors need to read
applying the rule they supposedly had learned the previous day. widely:
The amazing thing about kids is that they’re quick studies. No, I The special skill of the line edi-
don’t mean they’re quick to retain what they study. Rather, I mean that if tor is working with words. A
mastery of good syntax—how
it means more work for them, they learn almost anything quickly to get words are strung together
out of the extra work. well— can come in only two
By the second creative writing assignment, my daughter magically ways: by spending the first
remembered to capitalize her sentences fifty percent more often than the twenty-five years of one’s life in
a drawing room with E. B.
first freewriting exercise! Now a year later, she routinely remembers her White, Vladimir Nabokov,
caps as she writes. All these edits have taught her more than the work- Elizabeth Bowen, Gabriel
book pages did. Garcia Marquez, Saul Bellow,
The same is true for my son as he learns to care about spelling. He Eudora Welty, John Fowles,
Langston Hughes, Joyce Carol
doesn’t like looking up misspelled words or yelling to me in the other Oates, James Baldwin and John
room for the correct spelling. Updike—or by reading their
As your kids get older, the list of things they need to check on their works and those of other writers
own will get longer and your mop-up job will be shorter. Eventually, in whose choice of words and
word arrangements establishes
college, they can turn to a roommate for that final check on their writing our standards of literate com-
(the writer often misses the typos he creates since he’s too familiar with munication.
his written work). —Arthur Plotnik
Recap
The Elements of Editing
• Teach the big three: What makes a complete sentence, the main
punctuation marks (capitalization, end marks and quotation
marks/apostrophes) and how to use commas.
• Use a grammar reference for everything else.
• Teach your children to edit their own work first. Ask them to
look for the punctuation and spelling that they already know how to
execute. Give them a colored pen to mark what they need to fix/cor-
rect.
• You mop-up the remaining problems. Do this by making the cor-
rections on the draft without a big discussion.
• Child rewrites or types final draft with all mistakes corrected.
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Finding Readers
Publishing the Final Draft
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for relatives).
3. Draw an illustration to go with the paper. This is best for science
projects, fiction and history. Keep the final drawing and writing togeth-
er. Drawing is a nice change from writing and should substitute for
your writing program at that time. Post it in a visible location.
4. Get an audience. Read the paper to Dad, Grandma, a friend, your
homeschool group, or any other worthy choice. A student of mine
started a writing club where she and her friends read their writing to
each other once a month. Don’t forget the value of multiple readings.
Some kids really enjoy sharing their writing many times and ought to
be encouraged to do so. Calling Dad at work is often a nice change of
pace in the school day too.
5. Go out for ice cream—double scoops. In other words, read the
story, essay, report and then celebrate.
6. Very Important—Take a break from writing. Don’t do a new
assignment for another week. The break can be shorter for a short
paper (one that didn't need many of drafts). Still, the point is that it's
nice to enjoy “having written” before launching into a new paper.
Bottom Line:
Sharing writing means finding readers. Whether you find them in
It’s not writing—it’s having
your family or homeschool group, remember to share the finished prod-
written.
—source unknown ucts with readers.
It’s equally important for your kids to become readers as well. When
they hear the writing of kids their own ages, they’ll receive inspiration
that will bleed over into their own work. Literary clubs, homeschool co-
op classes, writing partners, online writing courses—think creatively of
ways to expose your kids to the writing of other children their ages.
Our local library has a teen poetry night where teens come together
to read their poetry. They either read a poem they love or their original
poetry. My kids attended and were so inspired by the poetry they heard
that night that they came home and wrote their own poems.
Interestingly enough, my 13 year-old’s first comment after hearing his
peers share their work was, “Wow. I didn’t know that I wrote such shal-
low poetry.” He went from writing “ditties” to thinking more deeply
about ideas like mortality, chance and suffering.
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Sharing writing has this kind of binary effect. Sharing what you
write is important and valuable to the writer. But just as important and
often overlooked in the homeschool is the value of reading writing by
If you steal from one author, it's
peers. This is another reason that writing classes (whether online or in a plagiarism; if you steal from
co-op) can be a big help in spurring your young writers onto better prod- many, its research.
ucts. We sometimes forget that most kids don’t spend their free time —Wilson Mizner
reading elementary school reports. But what a help it is to them.
I read somewhere that amateurs borrow from the greats whereas
geniuses steal their ideas from other experts. By reading widely (whether
novels by Newberry winners or science reports by peers) kids give them-
selves the opportunity to learn from other writers. They’ll pick up ideas
of how to structure their writing as well as develop a peculiar flair that is
uniquely blended from all the great writing they read.
Examples
A few of my students have found ways to share their writing with
others. I wanted to share these with you.
Two of my students (David R and David K) started a newspaper in
their free time. They printed multiple copies and sold them at our home-
school co-op for 25 cents an issue. The newspaper included cartoons,
articles and stories. And it sold out every time they ran it.
My daughter, Johannah (11), started a literary club that met monthly
at our house. She and five friends would read a novel during the month.
Then they met for a short writing activity, a craft and a snack related to
the story. They also kept booklets called “Golden Lines.” In these book-
lets, they recorded a favorite line from the novel of the month and then
shared the line and the reason for choosing it at their club meetings.
Gabrielle (8) found a very public place to share her writing—on tele-
vision! She wrote the following fictional journal entry during one of my
online writing courses and then submitted it for a competition. She was
selected to read her work on TV. Congratulations Gaby! (By the way,
Gabrielle is an exceptional writer for her age. Her mother often lets
Gaby dictate what she wants to write and then, together, they work on
the revisions. All of the work is Gaby’s but I wanted you paranoid moth-
ers to know that Gabrielle is an exception, not the rule, for age eight.
Still, if you have a prolific storyteller who shows interest in writing, be
sure to facilitate the process in any way you can.)
Gabrielle’s preliminary work for this writing product is in Chapter 7. The
final version follows.
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Adventuring Maid
by Gabrielle Linnell
I cannot express my feelings that I, Isabelle Sarah Holly, am on a ship
that is going to The New World—America! The Puritans have accept-
ed me. But let me tell you a little about myself.
My name, as you know, is Isabelle Sarah Holly. I will be twelve on
October 3rd. When I was ten, my parents died and I was sent away to
boarding school. My Aunt Katherine and Uncle Peter took me in dur-
ing the holidays, and often came to see me for tea on the weekends.
There is one thing I especially thank them for—they are Puritans.
Being Puritans meant that they were going to America and taking me
with them. I was astonished when Aunt Katherine told me the news,
and a bit afraid of leaving my teachers, my school and luxuries.
But leaving my teachers was just the beginning of my challenges.
Aboard the ship for the past weeks, I have faced many more. I will not
write full details about my weeks here. The most I can say is that it
does not look too hopeful. Four people already have come down with
“ship’s fever” as the doctor calls it.
Clothes and food are no burden to me, but the children have been
complaining because of their clothes being itchy, cold, and that the
colors were fading. We have been wearing the same set of clothing
for the past weeks, and they have been becoming more and more
uncomfortable. Because of that I cannot blame them.
And I cannot say the food is edible. Hardtack is very hard to bear.
“Hard” is the perfect word for hardtack, being ship’s bread or biscuit. If
we had a fire, maybe we could have salt-horse, which is salted
meat—at least that might be edible!
Mainly, my work here on the ship is helping the mothers, feeding the
children, and other little things. One night, all the parents asked me to
put the children to bed, so I did. After I tucked in the last child, I went
to my own little “bed.” It was made of soft sacks for a mattress, a
small pillow my teachers had sewn and given to me, and a blanket
that I had made with some of the dresses that were too small for me.
I also had a small window near my spot, and I looked through it.
After I prayed, I looked through the window again. All evening some-
thing had been in my head and night was my only time to take care of
it. It was this: Is it worth it to go through all these challenges and
changes, to leave my luxurious life in London, to go to the unknown?
But then, why did Aunt Katherine and Uncle Peter leave? Why did all
the Puritans leave? Why did they leave a chance for wealth and luxu-
ry? Why did they leave fashionable England and their homes in
Leyden? Most of all, why did they leave the Motherland, the place
where they grew up, the place that they love, the place that was
home? I went to bed thinking these questions. I thought of some
answers but none of them seemed good. Then, I fell asleep.
I woke up as the sun was rising. Have you ever seen it rise? I felt the
warmth through my fingers, and all through my body. I felt as if I was
the sun, always gold and warm, never cold. I felt as if I was the most
contented person on earth. But then it struck me. It was not a simple
answer, but it was the truest truth. These people came away not just
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vocabulary they haven’t internalized. And we’re most guilty of this ten-
dency when we read their writing and then compare it to textbooks and
encyclopedias. We wonder when our children will sound academic
Most children have real voice
instead of babyish. but then lose it. It is often just
So let me start here by relieving you. Stop worrying so much about plain loud: like screeching or
the academic sound of writing. Over time, your children will learn how banging a drum. It can be
annoying or wearing for others.
to handle language in writing just as they’ve learned how to move up lev-
“Shhh” is the response we often
els on computer games. They need time using their natural writing voices get to the power of real voice.
before they can be expected to breakthrough to a sophisticated use of But, in addition, much of what
language. (And frankly, I hope that they’ll always retain a sense of humor we say with real voice is difficult
for those around us to deal
and personality in their writing no matter how academic the environ-
with: anger, grief, self-pity, even
ment). love for the wrong people.
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4. Open the peanut butter jar then take the knife and dip it into the
peanut butter.
5. After your brother whines, “Quit it,” tickle him.
6. Take some peanut butter out and spread it on one side of one
Another Peanut Butter
9. After your mom leaves, give your brother a smirk, take a big bite of
JIF peanut butter.
your sandwich and really enjoy it. 4. Get peanut butter from the
market (this is just ground up
Eric achieved the goal of the assignment. You could actually follow peanuts and oil.)
his instructions and make a peanut butter sandwich. But he is also using 5. Dip knife into peanut butter
this assignment to entertain. and spread on one side of a
Not all writing requires entertainment as the chief goal, but just slice.
about all consumer writing depends on it. Even newspaper articles on the 6. Find jelly and spread on one
front page realize the need to engage the reader, not to simply inform side of the other slice.
him. 7. Put slices together with the
The point I want to make is that writers who allow themselves to peanut butter side and jelly side
together.
stay connected to their topics will create better writing. Kids who devel-
op the habit of expressing themselves in a genuine way in writing will 8. Take a bite.
have greater success in the long run. They’ll find ways to write about any 9. Grudgingly admit it tastes
topic because they’ll write from a base of confidence in how they com- o.k.
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your own writing without help. Until the child feels comfortable produc-
ing a writing element, he’s still in the training mode and shouldn’t be
expected to demonstrate the skill. Spend plenty of time identifying these
elements in other writing. Make the most of dictation assignments. You
can zero in on a passage that uses powerful verbs, or another that high-
lights sentence variety.
Add one element at a time. Don’t add another until that one is mas-
tered. This next section is written to your child. Xerox it off and hand it
to him or her.
1. Start in the Middle (or “good hook”)
Narratives especially benefit from the “start in the middle” technique.
Don’t begin a story with “Harriet Tubman was born on such and such a
date...” Start with “It was night. The North Star beckoned Harriet
onward. Would she find the safe house like she’d been promised?” We
begin in the middle of the most dramatic moment of Harriet’s life and
work our way backward to fill in with the details. Save the conclusion of
this cliffhanger for the conclusion of the paper, if possible.
In expository writing, the “Good Hook” principle has to do with
drawing the reader into the meat of the controversy or argument to stim-
ulate interest. Quotes, anecdotes that pull on the emotions and word pic-
tures have great value here. Don’t forget unusual facts.
2. Appeal to Known Experiences
Avoid writing for the “insider” (“When I olley-ed over the rail, slid
like ice and tail flipped...”—only a skater would know what is meant).
Instead, pull from experiences that are generally familiar to most readers
in order to make a comparison. When the audience is clearly the insider
group, then there is no problem using their “lingo.”
The Keen Observation exercise helps kids to bring their personal
experiences to bear on the topic or subject.
3. Include Figurative Language
The strategic use of similes (“like” or “as” comparisons), metaphors
(without “like” or “as”—direct comparisons) and personification enliven
any kind of writing. “Uncle Jack fit into the household like a hermit crab
in a seashell.” (George, Water Sky , 15) Comparisons are just as necessary
in expository writing.
4. Incorporate Powerful Verbs
Find verbs that thrust the reader into the experience. (Chapter 11)
Use the simple past for most writing. The only exception to this rule is
when writing about the contents of a story or novel. In that case describe
the events of the story in the present tense. Whenever possible, the read-
er should be thrust into the action. “Nadia flipped off the beam,” rather
than “Nadia did a flip off the beam.” Be on the alert for passive voice.
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point of view about a subject that you advance based on the support of
other sources: namely other authorities, studies, research and so on. Give
credit every time and don’t hesitate to throw your weight behind the
well-developed views of someone else’s expertise in a matter. Your job is
to integrate that expertise into your writing and to make them say what
you want to say. Therefore their point makes your point, get it?
10. Integrate Effective Transitions between Ideas
This is another “paragraph cohesion” element. In fact, this element
brings cohesion to the whole of the paper. Use transition words
(Additionally, First, Second, Finally, On the other hand) and use transi-
tion devices (new paragraph, sub-head, an illustration—example—that
moves the reader from one point to another).
Again, this is a sophisticated element. Though the words can be
inserted into an elementary paper, the ability to bring a flow to a paper
comes with time and practice. Don’t hurry the process, but continue to
experiment with it.
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Chapter 11
Dumb Assignments
Choosing Writing Assignments that Work
“Brittany does pretty well with creative writing if she gets to pick the
subject matter. She hates it when she is told what to write about. She
always thinks that it’s a pointless assignment, and since I cringe at my
own writing skills, I’m afraid that I am not much help!
When she had to write an advertisement for Vasco da Gama she
cried. But once I calmed her down and told her it didn't have to be
perfect I thought she did a pretty good job. She is too concerned with
it being perfect!”
—Kimberly
“My biggest frustrations in teaching writing to my children is their atti-
In literature class, the students
tude about anything I’ve assigned them to write. They give the bare
were given an assignment to
minimal amount of effort and they never proofread. They write just like
write a short story involving all
they talk and don't care about jazzing up the paper. I’ll assign them to
the important ingredients —
write in their journals and they will write five or six dead sentences.”
nobility, emotion, sex, religion,
and mystery.
Interestingly enough, though, last summer when I read them Mrs.
Frisby and the Rats of NIHM, they were so inspired that they each
A student wrote: “My God!”
began writing their own sequel to the book. It kept them busy for
cried the duchess, “I’m preg-
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Christmas or some other topic for ten minutes. Once he or she has
something concrete to look at, the freewrite may actually lead your stu-
dent to a narrower topic. Don’t be afraid of too narrow a topic. In many
There was some great info in
this curricula, don’t get me cases, the smaller the detail initially, the better.
wrong, but it still failed at the For example, your child might become absorbed in the memory of
same point all the other writing opening one stocking gift. Explored for all of its various impressions,
curricula had failed. The kids memories, comments and pleasures, it may yield more than enough raw
looked at their papers and
couldn’t write. It started with material for a sweet little piece about Christmas.
the “topic sentence and build to Think again about the power of the telephoto lens (Chapter 5). A
paragraph” model. It didn't try picture that includes the whole family, their “footwear to hat” outfits and
to assign topics, those had to be the entire mountain range in the background never gets the same
my idea (oh bliss).
amount of scrutiny or exclamation as the close-up photo of the new gig-
I tried pets, toys etc, but never
gling baby in her mother’s arms.
got beyond, “I like my dog.” or
“I have a dog named Beau.” 4. Beware of curricula that require too much generative writing per
The paragraphs were even bet-
ter. I truly couldn’t adapt the
week. I remember one mother sharing her week’s worth of writing
lessons—I sold it. (I have to say, assignments for her fourth grade son. He had written a letter to his
that after reading the examples grandmother, a book report, a descriptive paragraph, a journal entry and
given in the book, I figured a a haiku. She wondered if this seemed on target for his age. It wasn’t on
graduate of that program would
write romance novels or
target for my age! I was tired listening to her.
Hallmark greeting cards.) And I had my doubts about how well he did on any one of those
—Carrie
assignments. The goal should not be to produce versions of every type of
writing within a week or month. We have the length of our children’s
school careers to develop them as writers. It’s perfectly all right to spend
time writing and rewriting the same paper for several weeks, if need be.
Converting a dumb assignment
into a worthy one: The hardest part of writing is facing the blank page. To repeatedly
require that kind of writing from a child who is still learning the
The assignment to write about
toothpicks had a good mechanics of holding a pencil and making cursive letters that all slant the
premise—to help kids develop same way is too much. It feels like climbing to the top of a mountain to
their powers of observation. I look at the view only to be told that you don’t have time to look because
would redo this orally and
there is another peak that you need to scale right away.
explain that I’m looking for
descriptive words not just Stop. Enjoy what your daughter has written. Encourage her to play
brown, thin, pointed at both with the words, to fix it up, to add some colorful detail, to rearrange the
ends. sentences for greater impact. Then type it on the computer, put it in a
The curriculum writers were Kinko’s report folder and show it to her friends.
looking for similes, but that was Or Xerox it and send the original to Grandpa. Or suggest she illus-
beyond my son’s abilities at that
time. I would rather have given
trate her story and create a beautiful cover. The point is to savor writing
him a painting to look at to projects, not to crank them out like bills to be paid. Appreciate your stu-
describe orally. That would have dents’ writing before hustling them off to another assignment.
fulfilled the intent of the assign- Until high school, limit your students’ fresh, raw writing to no more
ment.
than one freewrite per week. One fully revised writing project per month
—Carol is completely reasonable for most kids throughout their school careers.
For term papers and reports, no more than one per semester (Chapter
15). If you have a fourth or fifth grader, one major report for the year is
plenty. Junior high kids can handle two reports if these reports are rele-
vant to them.
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and think at the same time (initially without criticizing what’s there), we
give them preparatory experiences of timed exam writing.
The research report on King 6. Beware of assignments that teach components of writing sepa-
David is the only one I attempt- rate from the whole. There is a place for studying the elements of a
ed—I knew it was too much. It
required my children to adjust paragraph, but to write one by carefully selecting a topic sentence and
their vocabulary, and while it then following it with contrived supporting sentences is one of the most
was broken up into daily irritating aspects of educator-generated writing projects and workbooks,
chunks, the subject was not in my opinion.
interesting to my kids. Also, we
only had the bible to get info on A mom asked me the other day how old her daughter should be
David, no library books. I wasn’t when she taught her how to write a paragraph. I laughed. What child
sure (lack of confidence) how to doesn’t write in paragraphs? They all do. They just don’t know when to
change this for my kids. I was indent.
so stressed-out thinking, “I'm a
failure! I haven’t taught my 3rd The worst thing we can do to our children is to make them believe
grader how to do research that suddenly they must change how they communicate to fit a form
reports! Woe is me!” called “the paragraph.” Rather we want to take the already lucid and
How I would adapt that now is developing thoughts and get them down on paper where we can sort
to start by asking my kids what them, rearrange them and then indent them. That’s paragraph writing.
they wanted to write about. It Forgive me as I rant, but let me give you one of my favorite illustra-
could have been any aspect of
the unit. We’d talk, then I’d let tions of this problem and why you must avoid it like—dare I be trite?—
them do free writing (if the idea the plague.
was to see how much they I used to meet with four women for breakfast to talk about home-
learned). We might even stop schooling. One week I asked them to each write descriptive paragraphs
right there. If we needed some-
thing to present to an audience so that they could experience the struggle kids go through to be creative
(which we did), I would let my and attentive to detail. One of my friends wrote a paragraph about
kids dictate to me and I would Farmer’s Market. She told me that she followed the standard paragraph
type it for them or let them form—you know the one: paragraphs are like cardboard boxes with a top,
record their thoughts on a tape
and go from there. Most impor- supporting sides and a bottom. This is how her paragraph started.
tantly, I think I’m gonna have “Farmer’s Market offers a plethora of sensory data.”
that list of questions handy so I
can determine if it is a dumb Say what? Does anyone want to keep reading?
assignment!
Her following sentence was terrific. It went something like this:
“As I walked by the fish mart, a pungent smell wafted toward me.”
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Here is the problem with those nifty paragraph grids that teach your
kids about how to structure their writing like cardboard boxes: they for-
get the reader. And the writing produced is about as tasty as cardboard
Converting a dumb writing
too, I might add. I’m all for organizing thought (you shall see how much assignment:
I’m for it as your kids get older and you have to teach essays and research
papers). However, I’m not for snuffing the life out of their writing in the The paper topic we decided on
was “Elephants and Their
process. Readers need to be lured forward and most traditional topic sen-
Usefulness to Man.” I followed
tences written by the book don’t cut it. the instructions, narrowed the
Start with life in writing. Go back later to show your kids how to topic, got books from the
organize it. At the paragraph level, much of the organization is intuitive library, and tried to get my son
(3rd grade) to tell me anything
anyway. There is a learned sense of what makes a paragraph. (And that
that he had learned.
sense takes about ten years to develop).
I then tried to help him orga-
I can assure you that a lot of paragraphing is based on the visual nize this into an outline for a
needs of the reader. As an editor, I break up long paragraphs simply to report. We didn’t get very far
make them shorter in the columns. Even now, I break up what I write as because I knew it was too hard
I feel my idea shift or as the length of the paragraph becomes irksome. for him. I did try to change the
topic to sharks since he had an
Instead of working so hard to write a correct paragraph—write. interest there, but we didn't get
Then take the words on the page and rearrange them into paragraphs— very far since the engine was
groups of sentences that hang together based on a common idea. running without gas by this
Lighten up. Your kids have a long time to get the organization thing. point.
They don’t have as much time to work on their love for writing. Love is I should have simply waited
fragile and can be killed in one or two bad assignments. The only escape until Noah was in 6th or 7th
grade to do the assignment, or I
is to make as many opportunities as possible for your kids to discover would have had him tell me
how good it feels to “wow” a reader. And those write-by-method para- what he learned from his
graph lessons just don’t do it, in my opinion! research orally. We could put
together an outline to put the
7. Don’t try to teach it all every time. Sometimes focus on the logic information in logical order (my
of the piece. At another time, look for the use of figurative language and work) and then written a one
page summary.
dialog. When you look for these, let the other stuff go. I know you won’t
want to, but you must. The temptation to homeschoolers is to never —Carol
allow for a mediocre result. We want every math problem solved correct-
ly or we send them back to do it again. I admire this about homeschool-
ing. It’s why so many of our kids are doing well.
In writing, though, some of this attentiveness kills the inclination to
write again. Knowing that they have achieved progress from the last
writing session needs to be enough. None of them will write to our com-
plete satisfaction while they are in our homes. None of my husband’s stu-
dents write to his total satisfaction and they are in college!
Back off. Focus on one to two things at a time and then move on.
Mom’s Assignment
Pull out one of those writing manuals. Or pull them all out. Find an
example of a dumb writing assignment in each one. See if you can con-
vert them into worthy assignments based on the principles in this chap-
ter.
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Recap
• Schedule one writing project per month that goes through all the
steps in the writing process.
• Choose assignments that are worthy of the child’s dedication and
interest. These ought to engage the child on the level of his percep-
tions, opinions, study, research or imagination.
• Make sure that the assignment is narrow in scope.
• Feel free to modify the assignments in any curricula to suit your
child and your goals for him or her.
• Abandon writing projects that grind to a halt or create bad associa-
tions with the writing process.
• Don’t bring every writing assignment through the entire process.
Sometimes it’s nice to just write a draft and not have to do anything
more to it. This principle is especially helpful when using writing as
an assessment tool.
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Chapter 12
ime to talk turkey about word selection. Neat, nice, good, and cool
T don’t cut it. Our kids use lack-luster terms because they’re self-cen-
tered. They honestly believe that what’s inside their heads telepathically
transfers to yours just because they strung some words together. They
prefer verbal shorthand to detail when talking with their street buddies.
(Honestly, so do we.) We don’t help them much either. We let them say,
“Star Wars Episode One was so cool. I mean, like, I really thought it was
neat.” Gee, now I know a lot more about that movie.
As usual with writing, the real work starts off the page. Listen to Writing should be architecture,
your kids talk at home. Encourage them to say what they mean when not interior decorating.
they’re the most excited about their thinking, opinions and observations. —Ernest Hemingway
When one of them says that the green beans taste “yucky,” develop their
vocabulary (since the possibility of vitamin gain is lost).
“Tell me precisely what is wrong with the beans,” you might say.
Keep after him until you hear something concrete. Otherwise, stuff him
with the beans!
Sometimes in the jungle, we are tempted to say, “Look at that inter-
esting bird.” We have no idea what kind it is or even how to classify it.
In writing, the objects of curiosity are words. Can you tell the difference
between words that fly and those that fall flat? The aim of this chapter is
to excite your child’s interest in language—to help you set up a “word
feeder” so that new and exotic words will come to feed in his or her jun-
gle.
We can brush-up on word selection skills best by playing word
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games. Following the games, I give you a guide for how to select what
kinds of words to use in writing and when.
The difference between the Our favorite word games
right word and the almost right My then fiancé, Jon, and I were standing in scorching heat waiting
word is the difference between
lightening and the lightening
for a taxi on the backside of the Atlas Mountains in Morocco. We had
bug. been together for days and were feeling tired and hot and very ready for
—Mark Twain
a trip out of the palm tree studded oasis. Still, the taxi didn’t come.
Irritably, I mentioned that I felt really hot. In fact, I said, I was swel-
tering.
Jon retorted that that was nothing. He was roasting.
Not to be outdone, I rebutted, “I’m basting.”
“Well, I’m broiling,” said he.
For the next half an hour we traded synonyms for various ways we
could be cooked in the heat. It became a serious challenge and enor-
mously fun. And it started us on a life-long quest to outdo each other
with puns and synonyms at any opportunity. (I did get the best of him,
in the end. Don’t you believe a word he says to the contrary!)
Perhaps I’ve just convinced you not to invite us to dinner. Still, the
spill over into our children’s lives has been significant.
From time to time we’ll deliberately trade words at the dinner table
related to a certain theme (like the heat or fishing or tools). As we begin
to use words in context to outdo each other, our kids have begun to join
in. They’re learning that language is playful, can be manipulated and is
funny. Words have power and hold the attention of the audience if they
are well controlled.
On and on we go with the fishing theme all the while increasing the
challenge of making words fit into unconventional contexts.
Kids may not be able to participate when they’re young, but they
really enjoy listening. In fact, one test of maturity around our house is
whether you get the jokes. As soon as they do, they feel as though
they’ve been admitted to the best of adult clubs.
And when they reel off their first good pun on the fly without help,
they’re swimmingly happy and buy in hook, line and sinker. (Sorry, I can’t
stop.)
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E—economy
N—novelty
When you want to improve word choices, look for words that fulfill
these principles. Start by teaching your older kids these terms. If they’re
younger than sixth grade, learn the words yourself and simply teach your
children the principles.
Precision: There is a difference between “white” and “ivory,” “old”
and”‘rustic,” and “a long time ago” and “colonial days.” Most kids rely on
the easiest way to say something and don’t care to search for a better
word. After a freewrite, go over the word choices and look for new
words.
When your son writes “pine tree,” ask him if he can name the kind.
Is it a spruce or noble fir?
Supply your kids with the right tools: Field guides for bird, flower
and tree identification, a thesaurus for innocuous words like “terrific,”
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Nice
Cool
Terrific
Neat
Wonderful
Bad
Kind of
Sort of
Lousy
Really
Actually
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Readers are fickle. They start in the middle, they skip to the end,
they allow their eyes to scan the paragraph looking for what will hook
them. To keep them with you, each sentence must sustain or increase the
Another common error of the
pace of the whole. When the writer uses unnecessary words, strings the student writer is to fish around
reader along in search of the best way to say it (instead of just saying it), for words that sound “academ-
the reader wears out. ic.” Here are some common
offenders:
Trust your instincts, Mom. When your mind wanders as you read,
you know the writing needs tightening. Don’t be afraid to make a note • utilize (use)
• numerous (many)
on the page that says, “Started to fall asleep here. Found myself thinking
• aforementioned (before)
about dinner here.” These comments are real. • implement (do)
Feedback that is meaningful to kids is the kind that is also precise, • sufficient (enough)
short and fresh. Say what you mean. “I’m not following that last thought. • individual (man or woman)
• attempt (try)
Can you rewrite it?” Or “Seems like you could tighten this up.” This is
• providing (if ).
meaningful feedback, especially to a latter day junior high school student
—William Zinsser
or teen.
Use the word in parenthesis
Novelty: To be novel is to say something that someone else hasn’t over the longer, more formal
said. That sounds more difficult than it is. It means picking words with a word.
fresh perspective. Your kids are already good at this. I find that children
say some of the most surprising things when making comparisons. They
often branch out into unknown territory since they are not as encum-
bered with the horde of cliches that bog down adults.
Joe (5) described bubblegum that popped in his face this way:
“Having gum stuck on my face is like a dog’s breath after it ate.”
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sets papers apart when he reads them. What is it that disposes him well
toward the writing when so often the contents are dreadfully predictable?
Two things did it. Humor ranked number two. If Jon smiled or chuckled
while reading the paper, the student’s mark went up. Command of the
language ranked number one.
PEN is the rubric for command of language. And humor, I dare say,
is one of the most sophisticated expressions of that skill. So to get a leg
up on the next academic hack, teach your kids to use precise, economic
and novel words. They won’t be sorry.
Teaching PEN
I don’t know if kids under fourth grade can adequately understand
the nuances of words like precision, economy and novelty. Remember,
this book is meant to help you help them. Instead of burdening them
with these words, try to communicate the concepts in words they can
understand. I talk about naming the item (identifying the bird or country
or person), saying it in as few words as possible, and trying to be original
or creative or fresh.
As your children get older, however, it will serve them well to have
an acronym that they can own and conjure up at a moment’s notice. To
use this acronym, your kids need to understand it. Start by noticing vio-
lators—words that aren’t precise, economic or novel. As you read, if you
come across a phrase that is bloated or vague or says something in a
roundabout fashion, stop and pick on it. Conversely, when someone gets
it right, give it the thumbs up.
Billboards, church bulletins (notorious offenders), neighborhood fly-
ers, and Christmas letters provide lots of opportunities to refine your
skills as an editor. It’s much more fun to pick apart someone else’s writ-
ing. And your kids will enjoy it too.
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two went unclaimed. The real prize, however, was the finished poem that
became much easier to write with those long lists of words in front of
them. Poetry is...
Johannah’s list: The best words in the best
shoes, soft sounds, prancing, quit, bars, leaping, dancing, hairbows, —Samuel Taylor Coleridge
leotards, obeying, first, second, third, fourth and fifth positions,
twirling, tourjete, splits, skirts, hair, push ups.”
The spontaneous overflow of
Johannah’s poem: powerful feelings.
These poems needed several drafts after freewriting those lists before
completion.
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What to do next
When your student has completed several freewrites—the original
draft plus several narrowed and expanded sections, converting worthless
Word Pairs exercise
words is the next step. Use a synonym finder, follow the acronym PEN
Ballerina: and examine weak word choices in light of those values. You might also
• Her fingers danced over the
try the following exercise sometime for fun.
keys of the piano.
Exercise
• Her pen tip-toed across the
paper.
• The wind choreographed the Word Pairs:
papyrus’s dance.
This exercise is meant to help writers use verbs and nouns in fresh
• The clouds flitted in the sky as
if performing on a stage. combinations. It comes from a great little book about writing called,
• Water bent over the waterfall Writing Down the Bones, by Natalie Goldberg. I’ve created my own exam-
in a never-ending curtsy. ples but have used her principles.
Painter: Verbs are very important in writing. They give sentences life. In fact,
• The wind brushed her hair. powerful verbs are the most important tool in the writer's handbag since
• Raindrops spattered like paint
they create the thread of the narrative.
on the ground.
Instructions:
• Lighting streaked across the
sky pulling thunder along after
it. • Take out a sheet of paper. Fold it in half lengthwise. On the left
• The rising sun was the artist side of the page, list ten nouns. Any ten.
Painting
painting the sky.
Airplane
Farmer:
Cantaloupe
• She harvested words from
Frogs
books.
Sweater
• Her flaming skirt cut a hole in
Curtains
the dim light.
Computer
•He milked the books for more
Lillies
knowledge.
Theater
Diamond
Gardener:
• The wind raked the ground.
• Now turn the paper over to the right column. Think of an occu-
• Trees sprinkled their leaves on
fifteen verbs on the right half of the page that go with that job.
• The rain planted drops of
water.
A Dancer:
Jumps
—Anne (14)
Sashays
Pirouettes
Rehearses
Slides
Bends
Arches
Twirls
Bows
Extends
Points
Glides
Reaches
Stretches
Flexes
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• Now open the page. You have nouns listed down on the left
side of your paper and verbs listed on the right. Join the verbs
with the nouns in new imaginative combinations (any noun
with any of the verbs). Finish the sentences and cast the verbs
in the past tense if you need to.
Word Pairs exercise
Take some time with this. It might make your logical mind crazy
thinking of word pairs that sound so unharmonious at first. But let your
Wood/Stone Worker:
artistic self play. Put words together and see what emerges.
• The clock’s nervous ticking
I’ve discovered in my classes that some students struggle with this chipped at the silence.
exercise. They’re so used to thinking of the literal meanings of the verbs • The river patiently sculpted
that they can’t branch out into new uses. the banks.
• The song’s eerie melody whit-
They write things like “Diamonds have points,” thinking that
tled away at the prince's hard
because they used a word from each list, they’ve fulfilled the expectations countenance.
of the exercise. Not so. • Mountain peaks chiseled the
that paintings don’t jump. Lilacs are incapable of slicing. These verbs
are working in new contexts which draws the reader into the experi-
ences.
3. If your child shows strain and just doesn’t get it, put off this exer-
cise for another year before trying again. Age is less the issue. This
exercise works more easily for kids who love language or show a nat-
ural bent toward creativity.
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Recap
Words are the paint of the writing picture. Without them, we have a
blank canvas. By spending some time enjoying words (instead of simply
copying them over, writing them in workbook blanks or straining to
think of them), we help our kids to become more comfortable producing
them in their writing. Take a week or two to enjoy some of these games
and the Word Pairs exercise. Don’t do any writing during those weeks.
Relax and step back from the march of writing assignments. The
investment in discovering the power of word choices will go a long way
in making your kids competent writers.
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reasons to learn the craft. Clever emails to friends, humorous family let-
ters, recording the anecdotes of your baby’s first year, describing the onset
of spring, writing your favorite memories in a scrapbook—these are all
We tried our hand at free writ-
opportunities to enjoy writing (instead of dreading it). ing today while we were waiting
Kids can write lyrics for songs, diary entries, secret treasure maps, for our food to come at a
short skits, radio dramas, descriptions in their photo albums, poems, and restaurant. We had talked a lot
letters. I used to write short stories and descriptions in a notebook that about your assignment before
we left and David decided to
had nothing to do with school. I enjoyed the sound of words and the write about Ancient Egypt. We
power of story telling. In college, I rewrote the words to popular songs have been studying Egypt in
for pleasure and for our sorority. history and David is fascinated
Photographs supposedly say a thousand words, but truly, the words with the subject. He spent 10
minutes writing the following:
preserve an experience in a way no photograph can. How many old pic-
tures have you seen and wondered, “Who is that? Why were they at our “King Tut wasn’t the best.
There were numerous
house? Was that Thanksgiving or Christmas?” Even a poorly written Pharaohs. There were 3 king-
journal entry will call up memories, images and conversations in a way doms. Most kings reigned for a
that a photo can’t. few years. The Egyptians
thought they were invincible
3. Writing for pay: Lots of people earn their living writing. Most of with their army. Thutmose con-
them aren’t novelists either. People write instructions for manuals, maga- quered many countries and got
rich. Cheops made the Great
zine articles, business reports, brochures and ad copy. Kids can write for Pyramids. Menes was the first
magazines (See Children’s Writer’s Market), Internet contests and schol- Pharaoh. They used hieroglyph-
arship applications. Some kids develop newsletters for their friends or ics. There were many Queen
neighborhoods. I have a couple of students who started a comic Pharaohs. Egypt was conquered
a lot. Ancient Egypt started
book/newspaper for their homeschooling friends. They charged 25 cents around 4000 B.C. and ended in
an issue. around 3 B.C. by the Romans.
4. Writing to give: What is a written work without an audience? It’s “There were many capitals
throughout the 30 dynasties
a lonely muse for the author’s solitary pleasure. Words do have power.
and the few periods. The
Writing as a gift to someone else is personal and defies duplication. Just Egyptians were first conquered
like painting a picture, writing a letter, poem, song, story, description of a by the Hyksos. There were
memory or thoughts can be an intimate way to share yourself with some- mastabas, tombs, obelisks, pyra-
mids, sphinxes, and many other
one you love.
monuments found throughout
My mother is known for some incredible encounters with bears. Her Egypt. The Delta was called
grandchildren crowd around her to hear the tales again and again. One “Lower Egypt,” and the rest
year, she compiled fourteen of the stories that she’d experienced while was “Upper Egypt.” They con-
sidered Egypt “The gift of the
hiking over the past ten years. She turned it into a book with photos and
Nile.” Without the Nile, most
gave it to two of her granddaughters for Christmas. It’s my daughter’s things in ancient Egypt would
favorite book. My mother preserved precious memories that will outlive not have happened.”
her for our family. I think he remembered a lot
I’ve written poems for friends, detailed letters about my life to my from history. Certainly more
dad, and songs for worship for our Women’s Bible Study. Writing is a than I did!
personal and powerful gift. —Nickie
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in spurts and usually every week. There have been a few significant peri-
ods of silence in my journal writing life, but mostly I have them dating
back to fourth grade.
“I love Scott Halstead. My friend
Anna does too. This is my first The best reason to keep a diary is because you want to… or need to.
diary. It was for my birthday... In my case, I have an inner drive that propels me to write out what I’m
Scott Halstead loves me. I love thinking and experiencing. Not all kids do. Encourage the ones who are
him. I sort of like Larry Cooke.
driven. The ones who aren’t (or don’t know that they might be) can par-
He’s sort of cute.”
ticipate at a more perfunctory level. There’s benefit to be gained in learn-
This is the first entry in my first
ing to make journal-writing a tool in the box.
diary when I was in fourth
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• Be sure to write the names of the cities and places you visit
and the dates and times. These get hazy after a couple of years.
• Don’t throw your journals away. As goofy as they seem to me
now (the ones from college especially—which have all my theologi-
Give my children a creative
cal meanderings), I have real documentation of how a girl like me
writing assignment and they’ll
thought and saw her world at the various ages and stages of life. As
go at it like a terrier at a bone.
a writer, these journals are resources for me in a way nothing else
They will write for 45 minutes
is. For kids who go on to write, their journals provide raw material
nonstop. Then we will listen
for stories, essays, novels and screenplays. Count on it.
attentively and laugh in all the
right places as each one reads
So do you require an entry every day? No. Do you require journals at his masterpiece.
all? Yes. For a little while. Keep a notebook journal with your kids. You’ll —Toni
be glad you did.
Some kids do well to have a writing prompt for journal writing.
Some don’t. For those who do, here are some journal starters:
1. Dialog journal: There are lots of kids who enjoy dialog journals.
These can be written between siblings or a parent and child. One dad
I know used to write a question on the homeschool white board
before bed each night. The kids would wake up and write in a note-
book their answers. Then Dad would read them when he got home.
Very motivating.
Sometimes moms and kids write to each other. The mom will write a
question at the top of a page in a shared journal. The child writes an
answer and then puts his own question at the top of the next page
and the mother answers it. And so it goes back and forth until interest
wanes.
2. Big event journals: For my reluctant writer, I only ask him to
record big events. Camp-outs, field trips, family vacations, birthdays,
Shakespeare Camp, Fall Weekend with his youth group…These are
experiences that are rich with detail and are events he enjoys reading
about again later.
3. Create topics for yourself. In the book, Trumpet of the Swan, the
main character writes in his journal each night and closes the entry
with a question to think about as he falls asleep. In kind of a reversal
of that idea, I suggest creating questions for journal entries that your
child will answer the next day.
By thinking of the question one day and writing the next, the writer
gives his mind (and subconscious) time to work on the answer. By the
time the writer comes back to his journal, writing will be much easier.
Here are a few ideas to get started.
• Describe your favorite nook in the house and why you like to be in
it.
• Write as many five letter words as you can think of. Then try to
make sentences out of them.
• Pick one game you love and tell a friend how to play it.
• Take a walk by yourself and listen. Come home and write about all
the sounds you heard. Compare them to other sounds you know.
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Growing a Writer
The Natural Stages of Growth in Writing
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tiny plant to flower. The life is in the seed. All a seed needs are the right
conditions for growth. The writing seed is in your child. All she needs
I was afraid of turning them off are the right conditions for growth.
of writing by finding their work
In this chapter, I take you on a tour of the landscape of the Writer’s
“not good enough.” I know
what good writing looks Jungle. Each phase can come quite naturally if you know what to look for
(sounds) like, but maybe I was and don’t inadvertently expect a child to either skip a stage or to go
hoping that knowledge would through it alone. There will be times of backtracking and some leaps for-
travel by osmosis into my chil-
ward. But by and large, these phases occur naturally in homes where
dren without my having to be
“the bad guy.” I kept looking for mothers are relaxed and have reasonable expectations. The bottom line is
the “perfect” curriculum that that modeling and encouragement are the most helpful tools for any
would teach them how to really writing program. I hope that understanding how the writing process
polish a paper. That great cur-
works will free you to enjoy the process rather than resenting it.
riculum could be their editor so
I wouldn’t have to be. But you The natural stages of writing don’t have to do with writing per se.
know what? There isn’t one. They have to do with the maturity of a child’s mind combined with his
A book can’t substitute for a verbal and scrawling skills. Instead of figuring out when to start teaching
living, breathing person who the paragraph, it’s much more helpful to identify how he writes… what
cares about them and wants to kind of scope and breadth he can communicate on paper.
see them do the best they can
do. Growing a writer
—Toni Before kids speak in fluent sentences, they do all kinds of funny
things to communicate. They groan, point, make gestures and say their
own versions of words. Johannah coined these two baby words—words
we still use today. “Dreadroom” instead of bedroom, and “mazazine”
instead of magazine. We thought these so cute we recorded them in her
baby book and continued to use them long after she’d learned the right
words in their place.
Because we know that our kids will eventually speak correctly, most
parents think speaking mistakes cute enough to write down for posterity.
Funny how we don’t have the same confidence about writing. I’ve never
heard a mother chuckle about a spelling peculiarity or a misuse of punc-
tuation.
Imagine seeing your best friend, Lisa Marie, at the homeschool co-
op and declaring, “Guess what? Emily Joy spelled ‘celebration’ as ‘sell-a-
bra-shun.’ Isn’t that adorable?”
I know you can’t imagine it. Yet that’s exactly the kind of attitude to
take. These aberrations will pass. Soon their written work will be the reg-
ular, standard, sometimes hard-to-comprehend spellings of English
instead of those wonderful childish inventions.
There are reasons why parents don’t worry about talking while they
worry a lot about writing. All of us learn to talk and use that skill for
basic communication every day of our lives. We don’t think much about
what to say or how to say it most of the time. The act of speaking is
almost instinctual once a person masters it.
But what if a child wants to use spoken language for a more special-
ized task like speech making, acting or debate? Then verbal communica-
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tion requires another level of skill and development. Children and adults
then learn certain spoken forms such as how to perform, how to argue or
how to give a speech. These forms are learned after a child knows how to
I need to make my children feel
speak naturally. that they have valuable things
We don’t encourage speech-making at the same time a child is figur- to say. I need to stop what I'm
ing out how to make a complete sentence come out of her mouth. We doing long enough to notice
and to listen to them, encourage
wait for a level of comfort and fluency before expecting spoken language
them and stop discouraging the
to be used for specialized purposes. things they like to do.
And there’s the key difference between writing and speaking.
I dislike Pokemon, N64, and
Educators have tricked us into believing that writing isn’t legitimate ‘NSYNC, but because they're
unless it’s clearly confined to known writing forms. They over-emphasize interested in these, maybe I
paragraphing, essay writing, letters and stories. Writing, by and large, need to give them a chance to
converse more with me on these
isn’t allowed the freedom to grow naturally like speech.
subjects. If they don’t know that
A writer doesn’t achieve true fluency in writing until he or she is their ideas and perspectives
between fifteen and twenty. For the first five to seven years (usually have value, writing will feel like
between 8 and 13-15), the child is learning the basics of how to get excruciating torture. That
describes the problem in my
thoughts on paper. There’s a queer kind of translation process that hap-
home! Aha! Did you hear that
pens in a child’s mind when she goes from thinking to writing. The ver- sound? That was me palming
bal fluency that she experiences doesn’t translate easily to limited tran- myself on the forehead!
scription skills. The learning curve is steep. She can think, but can she The change I need to make
spell, punctuate and hold onto thoughts long enough to get them down starts with changing the way I
on paper while her pencil slowly moves across the page? relate to them. I’m going to
stop and listen more. I’m going
So let’s review to listen for ideas, perspectives,
and insights even when I’m not
Our young writers will learn how to write much as they learned how generally interested. That's what
to speak correctly. At first, their mistakes will be cute (or so we ought to love does right?!
think of them). Then they’ll learn how to take the raw material of their —Evelyn
thinking and start to record it on paper in a totally disorganized mess.
Then one day, they’ll follow a train of thought and it will actually make
logical sense. (This skill is commonly known as paragraphing.) And so
on.
The main difference between writing and speaking is that we mostly
use writing for more concrete communication than speaking. We can talk
all day long and never encounter a person who will let us know that we
told the story out of order or made a grammar mistake. But when we
write, we are given no such grace. The reader does demand a certain
amount of fluency in the written word.
What’s the best way to learn how to take care of the reader’s need for
organization and clarity in writing? We imitate the speech-learning
process first. We start with easy communication—the kind that demands
almost no attention to form. And as the writing student grows, we intro-
duce bits of information that enhance the written communication so that
eventually, the natural writing voice is trained in how to present itself,
much like a speaker can be taught how to make a speech instead of just
talking.
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Jotting down what your kids tell you isn’t a short cut to writing. It is
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writing. You’re simply the transcriptionist. You give your child the ability
to write while he is still learning the mechanics of moving his pencil
across the page.
Today, my mom and I were
Older kids enjoy seeing me write down what they say as much as lit- talking about how helpful you
tler kids. Sometimes it’s a relief to just think out loud and know that and your writing class was to
those thoughts are being recorded for you. me. When I first started your
class I could barely write one
Earlier I urged you to follow the Growth of a Writer chart in the
page, and it would sound like a
order presented here regardless of the age of your child. Some mothers fourth grader was writing it.
have wondered if it’s really necessary to begin at the beginning with a You have helped me come light
teenager who is not successful in writing. For kids who are reluctant years in English and writing.
For [my college level writing]
writers, or who have had repeated failures in writing, begin with the Jot it
class I made a B in the course
Down phase no matter how old the student. (923 points, that’s 6 point from
I have one student who began working with me at age 16. He hated an A!) There is no possible way
writing and had had little success at it. His mother began in the Jot it I could have passed the course
without your guidance and
Down phase, and wrote what he dictated for a month before they moved
help. I want to thank you for
to the next level. He followed the natural stages of growth through to a not giving up on me.
high school level of writing (Stage IV) all in one year. Just this month,
This quarter I have a 20 page
this same student wrote a twenty-page research paper without any assis- research paper that I have to do
tance from his mother. Because he is older, he made rapid progress. Your in nine weeks! I’m really, really
kids will too. looking forward to it! Thank
you for everything you have
Writing projects for the Jot it Down phase: taught me. I believe that
them.
—Bennett (17)
• Lists
flood and fell;
To slowly trace the forest’s
Kids love to recite lists of information. My six-year-old likes to tell me shady scene,
the names and weaponry of each Lego creation he makes. We write Where things that own not
these down as he describes them and keep them in a special note- man’s dominion dwell,
book. Christmas gift lists, all the Lego kits, American Girl Doll dress- And mortal foot hath ne’er or
es, birds that come to the bird feeder, dinosaurs, the daily tempera- rarely been!
ture on a calendar—these make good lists. To climb the trackless moun-
• Nature notebooks
tain all unseen.
poems like the one in the sidebar. For small children, of course, the
This is not solitude: ‘tis but to
• Letters
and view her stores unrolled.
Email makes this especially easy. Let your kids tell you what to say —Byron
to grandma. Type it into the email and click. Letter writing made
easy and practical.
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• Copywork
For kids who are learning to write, occasionally their own words can
provide copywork. Jot down something your child says and let her
Dan wanted me to leave the copy it over.
Recap
room so he could think about
what to write. He preferred to
• The writer talks and the mother, friend, father, teacher writes it
jot notes down on paper. This
down.
jotting down notes is a new
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• Book reports
them, it's me. The student isn’t
Narrations of stories—Chapter 15
supposed to magically know
how to write well; he’s sup-
• Freewriting
posed to be TAUGHT, but I
Chapter 4
don't know how to do that, so I
wimp out on requiring much at
• Journaling all. It’s so much easier to put
Keeping a diary of science experiments, nature notebooking, special my effort into something I
events, observations of a loved pet’s habits. know how to teach, like math
• Letter writing
or grammar, than to fight both
their apathy and my ignorance.
• Limericks
• Mini-reports
For kids who are in upper elementary or junior high.
• Oral reports
Kids learn how to copy and paraphrase material from books. They
take notes and then deliver an oral version of the report. There is no
need to revise or produce a final written product for oral reports.
• Writing instructions
Directions to the child’s house, baking cookies, building a treehouse,
tying a knot and so on.
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• Interest-led writing
Kids who are beginning to own their words must write about things
they know. Toss any assignment that expects a child to write from a
vacuum.
• Mini-reports
These are a great way to introduce academic writing. Just be sure
that the topic is one you’ve spent lots of time studying. (Chapter 7)
• Advertisements
Kids learn advertising language better than most other writing forms
because of the inundation of commercials. Capitalize on this sixth
The pen is the tongue of the
sense and let your kids turn information into ads. (For instance, my
mind.
kids made a mail order catalog called the “Mesopotamia Mall:
Everything you need for the afterlife.” It featured artifacts used by
—Cervantes
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Depending on the child, some kids find writing fiction far easier than
the things they think other
writing non-fiction. If you think about it, it’s fairly obvious why. They
folks think they think.
What to read
Fiction
• Read lots of it and imitate when possible.
Look for ways to copy the work of good writers. For instance, I love
using Kipling’s Just So Stories as a model for kids.
• Identify the elements that work in novels and stories.
Look for the literary elements that make works of literature great.
(Chapter 1—Reading Aloud)
Non-fiction
• Read good non-fiction (harder to find). Whenever you find a book
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written by an expert who is passionate about his topic and who has
a gift for writing, you’ve found a gem. If there’s money in the check-
ing account, buy it! Many children’s non-fiction books are written by
journeymen writers—those who know how to research and write
copy. Though these are fine for reports and research, they are not
Advice to young writers who
Recap
• The child begins to write without so much help. First drafts gener-
ally come from the child (though the need to talk first is still para-
mount).
• The best writing is interest-led. The child must write about what is
actually in his head—not to an assignment.
• List writing is still popular at this age—records of birds visiting the
bird feeder, weapons used in WWI, records of science experiments,
lists of flowers that bloom in the garden and when, great men of the
Civil War, all the states that Lewis and Clark visited…
• Freewriting is also growing at this stage. The writer begins to find
freedom in getting raw ideas and thoughts down on paper in any old
order.
• Self-editing is introduced.
• Begin to be aware of how the “Great Conversation” is being
brought into your home.
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have innately that non-writers don’t. Just as artists seem to know how to
draw naturally and non-artists consider what they do a mystery, so it is
The most valuable thing I
with writing. Interestingly enough, however, non-artists can be taught to
learned is that it’s okay to direct draw. They simply need instruction in how to see the way an artist sees.
and pull things out of the girls. Writing is similar. Writers perceive reality in special ways that can be
I wasn’t sure how much direc- taught and learned. I’ve developed exercises that help students to think
tion to give them, but the more
direction I gave, the more they
the way a writer thinks, to see the way a writer sees, and to use language
began to think for themselves. the way a writer uses it. These exercises are available through my online
The most valuable thing they class: Kidswrite Intermediate. The written material is substantial enough
learned is that they can write. that it merits its own release date. Stay tuned. The perceptual skills that
—Kim most writers have that our kids need to learn are:
• Keen Observation
• Powerful Association
• Telling the True Truth
• The Power of Musical Language
• Sustained Incubation/Brooding
This is the time to allow for lots of creativity in the writing process.
One of my online students (Gabrielle, 8) wrote about crossing the
Atlantic on the Mayflower in diary form (Chapter 9). She researched all
of the factual elements of the period and even read enough literature to
reproduce a believable dialect in her writing.
Because she has a penchant for fiction, I encouraged her to continue
to write as many of her writing assignments in that format as possible.
She can be taught non-fiction writing forms when she’s much older. For
now, she’s having lots of success and fun writing in the way most com-
fortable to her and that level of ease with writing will carry over to
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The bottom line: your kids don’t know much yet. They are learning
everything from people who know more than they do. Help them to be
honest about this and to enjoy the researching period. A child con-
tributes a bit of himself to his writing when he includes his sense of
humor, his personal and related experiences and his own quirky way of
expressing himself. This is not the time to be rigid or forced. A lot of
research—a little writing. That’s the way to think about it.
Oral Reports
For this reason, I’m a big fan of oral reports. A dear friend here in
Cincinnati shared with me a plan she uses with her kids. She assigns an
oral report topic from the history they study on Monday. The student
has all week to find library books and material on the Internet. The child
takes notes and then delivers a short oral report to the rest of the family
on Friday.
We’ve used this model in our home and I’ve found it very effective.
Oral reports train kids to take notes and to be selective in the informa-
tion they choose to share. Since I select topics for them to research that I
don’t know anything about, they really do have the pleasure of sharing
new material with all of us.
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Recap
with videos Tuesday through
Thursday.
• Child takes notes in any way • Kids become more confident in writing from scratch without help.
• Students can edit their own work on a superficial level. They can
that works for him/her.
find some of their spelling errors, punctuation mistakes and awk-
ward sentences.
• Child reports findings to fam-
ily on Friday.
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Introduction of analysis
Kids start out as “non-members” of the Great Conversation. They
are eavesdropping—that is learning all they can from those who’ve gone
before them. In writing that means that the writer must cop to his sub-
ordinate position. The student writer is still learning the ropes and must
be humble. Writing that explores is preferred to writing that argues.
I’m unable at this time to give help to this stage of development
since most kids at this level are in high school. As I work on the sequel,
Help for High School, I’ll address in greater detail what kinds of writing
forms are most appropriate for this stage of development. For now, the
kinds of writing forms that fit into this level of growth are:
• First: The Exploratory Essay, the limited Research Paper, and
Exposition of Text
• Then: The Expository Essay, the Timed Essay Exam and the full-
fledged Research Paper.
• Non-fiction
• Academic—research papers with multiple sources
• Essays—open and closed form
• Journals/newspapers
• Advertisements
• Reviews of books, plays, movies, ballets, symphonies
• Editorials
• Brochures
• Fiction
• Plays/Screenplays (Shakespeare/Jane Austen)
• Movies
• Short Stories
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Conversation
or “no,” write a letter in reply
and send it to the editor.
The final phase of growing into a writer is to become a confident
adult who writes without anxiety, using that skill in whatever field most
2. Correspond with a long dis-
tance friend. Choose a peer or suits his/her purposes. Some go on to become full-fledged members of
relative (even an older person). the Great Conversation—to become meaningful contributors to their
Email makes this so easy and field of specialization. Not everyone will become a part of his or her area
practical.
of expertise through writing. But some of our kids will. And we need to
prepare them to be able to make that choice if they want to.
3. Join a debate team or class. I Most of us will write for personal use as adults which means that
did more careful writing prepar- proficiency in writing is necessary for all of us—email, Christmas letters,
ing for my debates than I did
instructions, newsletters, photo albums, journals, business memos, pre-
for many of my high school
papers. Why? The pressure to sentations and so on.
Writers in this category are:
perform what I wrote increased
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The right writing materials also support the writing process. Handy
pencils and sharpeners. Clean paper that is unwrinkled, unless of course,
it’s a freewrite in which case the paper can be wrinkled scratch paper. A
clear desk (of clutter) but filled with resources—like a globe, map, book 6. Rewriting is the key to good
with facts, notecards, lists of words... that kind of thing. And then fol- results. Narrow the focus—
low-through. That’s what I mean by discipline. Don’t think about writ- expand the writing.
Exercises
original thought, complex relat-
Products
9. Require writing but not
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• Poetry
• Limericks
• Sonnets
• Open form
• Blank Verse
• Pastoral
• Haiku (Don’t ask me why kids write these!)
• Newspaper articles
• Newsletter articles
• Christmas letters
• Screenplays
• Plays
• Advertisements
• Slogans
• Mission statements
• Debates/speeches
• Speaking notes
• Sermons
• Bible Studies
• Mini-reports
• Commentaries
• Outlines
• Cookbook recipes
• Thank you notes
• Brochures
• Shopping lists
• Email
• Internet forums
• Instructions
• Employment applications
• College entrance essays
• Scholarship essays
• Cartoons
• Comic strips
• Editorials
• Speeches
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See the Appendix 1 for sample schedules from each of the stages of
growth in writing. You may want to take some time to create one of your
own for your kids.
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that they do pass the boredom test. They can be interesting to write and
read.
Report writing is ninety per- What a report is not
cent research and ten percent
The elementary school report is not an exercise in great writing. It
writing.
—jb doesn’t have as its goal creativity and metaphor and flights of imagina-
tion. The report is not important in the broadest sense. In fact, if your
child never did one, don’t panic. You can teach all the skill that this rite
of passage attempts to teach… later. You’ll have ample opportunity to
teach and reteach researching skills, how to write a bibliography and
library use.
So why do it?
The point of introducing the report format is to help your kids get a
handle on how to research a topic thoroughly and how to organize what
is found. That’s it. Of course there may be a secondary goal of actually
teaching your child about the state, planet, movie star or sports figure.
But in almost every case, a little reflection immediately reveals that any
state, planet or celebrity would have done just as well. That realized, you
can admit to your kids that they are using the topic to teach them skills
they will use for the rest of their academic lives.
Once you face this truth, you can relax a little bit. Don’t worry quite
so much about whether they really know lots about Pakistan. Pay less
attention to how perfectly they make transitions in the paper. If the con-
tents fluctuate between confident voice and parroting, that’s normal for
elementary aged kids.
So how do you know they did a good job? Well, if your students
looked up their books on the computer at the library and found them in
the stacks with little help from you, if they wrote notes on notecards and
sorted them according to category, if they found ways to include the
noted information in their paper and remembered to cite their sources,
and finally if they wrote up a readable report and accurate bibliography,
you can say with confidence, “Well done, good and faithful student. Your
report fulfills mother’s requirements.”
There are two points to remember as you begin the odyssey of
preparing your child for a school life of academic writing.
Voice
It takes many years for a child to develop his or her voice as a writer.
In other words, most writing ends up being paraphrased regurgitation of
the brilliance of others. Don’t expect voice; cultivate it. Notice the unique
observations that your child makes. Compliment him on his word choice
or his interesting order of fact presentation. Find one or two evidences
that the report transcends that dull and lifeless construction so common
to report writing. You’ll be surprised at the fragments of emerging voice.
Enjoy them.
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Original Thinking
No one under twenty-five thinks an original thought about anything
previously studied. Don’t let your kids pretend to. Give credit and use the
Steps for writing the Dreaded
thoughts of others to boost your child’s viewpoint.
Elementary Report:
Don’t be bashful about telling your kids this either. When I was at
1. Research the topic.
UCLA for my undergraduate degree in history, I had a controversial pro-
fessor for my upper division lecture on twentieth century American his- 2. Select and organize the
information.
tory. He began the class telling us that he couldn’t be bothered getting us
to write papers. He didn’t care about what we had to say. He also told us 3. Create interest in an other-
wise redundant and inane sub-
that the midterm was optional and that he didn’t like giving one at all ject.
but yielded to the pressure of students who demanded it. He preferred to
4. Include background informa-
give us a final and leave our grades to that last chance effort. tion, other people’s opinions
His reasoning for this strange approach to college education? and the facts.
Professor Dallek didn’t believe that we latter day teens could contribute To make your report stand out:
to the ongoing discussions in the university community. He reminded us
1. Create a clever thesis.
that the university is a place of serious study and dialog among well-edu-
cated peers. Undergraduates were not yet privy to membership in that 2. Lead with an opening hook.
club. We needed to sit, ponder, listen to, read and absorb what we were 3. Take a viewpoint.
being taught and should not be required to produce writing that would 4. Include the many interesting
be hypocritical and pompous based on material with which we had only and little known facts about
formed a shallow acquaintance. your topic.
Our young kids are even more ill-equipped to contribute new find-
ings. Teach your kids to be humble. Their grammar school years are
meant to prepare them to ultimately enter into a field of study where
they will be qualified to make a contribution. In order to do so effective-
ly, they will need some tools in their hip pockets.
That’s what report writing is all about. That’s why your children
must master the expository essay in high school. That’s why they must
make writing their ally instead of their enemy. We want to be able to get
at the profound insights and beliefs of our kids when they finally do have
something to say (Which often isn’t until around 35 years of age).
So, without further ado, here is a guide to help you through the
swamps of report writing with your kids.
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Sort and file your cards accordingly. The last category is really impor-
tant. So many times I have worked on a paper with certain presupposi-
tions only to discover some wonderful bits of information that don’t fit
my predetermined plan. When that occurs, it’s irritating to have nowhere
to put the card. The miscellaneous category holds these until your stu-
dent can decide what to do with them
When my son wrote his state report about Maine, he came across
funny names of cities, the fifty billion toothpicks that are produced there
and the fact that the largest crystal of morganite was found in Maine.
Here’s how Noah chose to use these seemingly unrelated facts in his
report:
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What state makes fifty billion toothpicks a year? What state has town
names like Baldhead, Christmas Cove, Robinhood, Owl’s Head, and
Bingo? The largest morganite crystal was found in what state in
1989? Maine!
Instead of weaving these into the body, he started with the most
interesting discoveries he made while researching Maine. These act as
the opening hook and also tell us something about Maine (hopefully
things you, the reader, had not known before Noah’s paper).
These same facts did not fit in well with his other categories, but he
still found a way to use them.
The high school research paper uses a similar, though a bit more
sophisticated, notecard system for research. If you teach your upper ele-
mentary and junior high students how to research, note and file in this
manner, the leap to a high school research paper will be much smaller
and the process will feel familiar.
Create interest in an otherwise redundant and inane subject
This is my own goal, but I wish it were the goal of more reports.
Help your child develop his voice by engaging his sense of discretion.
What about this topic or subject is provocative?
Here are some key questions to ask your son or daughter:
• What grosses you out about this subject?
• Or makes you mad, sad or glad?
• What surprised you?
• Did anything give you chills?
• What little known facts did you discover?
• What do you want to tell Dad about your subject when he gets
home tonight?
• Why would anyone else want to study this subject?
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Integrate the thoughts of others and give them credit: Spruce up your report by taking
Too often, young writers try to pass off the words of the books they a viewpoint:
read as their own, or they “borrow” the expressions of their resource writ- • reporter
ers and forget to cite. All teachers, professors and decent parents can rec- • travel guide
ognize when the child stops speaking and the bookish authority begins. • naturalist
Kids are insecure in their abilities to hold forth on topics they know little
about. On the other hand, they are afraid that if they give credit to the
authors they use, they will not be writing the paper.
Don’t let this happen. It’s perfectly all right—in fact it’s good writ-
ing—to use an authority. The goal is to make the authority say what you
want to say.
Take a viewpoint
When writing about a state or country, it can be helpful for your kids
to think of themselves as reporters, travel guides or naturalists. For exam-
ple, if Jessica decides to write about Colorado as a naturalist, her empha-
sis in research will be on the wildlife, the mountains and their special
features, the environment, the weather and the times of year when other
naturalists might visit.
As a reporter, she might focus on the state of the economy, the gross
annual product, celebrities that live there, famous law cases (like Jon
Benet Ramsey and the Columbine High School shooting), the trend of
Christian companies to relocate to Colorado springs, and so forth.
As a travel agent, she might emphasize the places of interest, the
types of sports that are available to tourists, sites of historic importance
to visit and so on.
The point here is that taking a position will help your student to
select information. Most of writing for the rest of life is about informa-
tion selection based on the purpose of the paper.
Have fun and include the many truly unique or interesting facts that
there are about your topic:
It’s interesting that thousands of people died and were buried while
building the Great Wall of China. It’s interesting that snails are her-
maphrodites—neither male nor female, but both. Don’t forget these
kinds of details.
By the same token, ignore the boring and uninspiring aspects of your
topic. Most people won’t notice if you leave out the rainfall averages in
Montana. The fact that wood is the major resource in Maine is a lot less
interesting than the fact that Maine produces fifty billion toothpicks per
year. Who really cares how the state legislature is run in Idaho?
However, if Idaho had an interesting bill that got held up in the legisla-
ture, I might be interested... Get it?
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their kids churn out at the end of the school year in report form.
Let me comfort those of you who can’t get your kids to write even
three paragraphs without threatening to take away their Nintendo for six
weeks. Length in a report is not critical. Repeat: success is not deter-
mined by the length of the report.
I identify success by how well the child researched his topic, took
notes, organized them and finally wrote out his findings. My son’s first
report in fifth grade took an entire school year to research and write and
the final paper was one typewritten page in length. It was single spaced,
but we had two pictures on it and a sidebar listing the state bird, motto,
flower, tree and other details.
When he turned it in to a homeschooling class where each child had
written a report, his was by far the thinnest. Yet in the reading, it was
among the most engaging. He received quite a bit of praise and I was
completely satisfied with his results.
The point isn’t to write a short paper either. If your daughter is flying
through the pages, is engaged and enjoying the work, don’t stop her, for
heaven’s sake. The point is that writing at this level is not about length
nearly as much as it is about demonstrating certain skills. The skills that
I have determined to be the most valuable are those relating to research,
notation and organization. So that’s what I look for and that’s what I
focus on. I save other goals for other projects. You can too.
Lastly, remember my motto: If you’re bored reading it, your kid was
bored writing it!
Or as one of my young students transposed this sentiment to apply
to himself, “If I’m bored writing it, mom’ll be bored reading it.” Indeed.
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What state makes 50 billion toothpicks a year? What state has town
names like Bald head, Christmas Cove, Robinhood, Owl’s head, and
Bingo? The largest crystal of morganite was found in what state in 1989?
Maine!
Those were some little known facts about Maine. Here are some well
known facts.
Maine is famous for lobsters, clams, and blueberries. Its capital is
Augusta. Augusta has been the capital since 1832. Portland was the capi-
tal before Augusta. The state motto is “Dirigo” which translated means “I
Lead.” Nicknames like “Down East” and “The Pine Tree State” are what
Mainers sometimes call their state.
Farming is a big part of the economy in Maine. Many farmers plant
potatoes one year and oats the next. That’s because potatoes use up much
of the soil’s nutrients and oats put nutrients back into the soil.
Alternating these two crops helps keep the soil fertile.
Matinicus Rock Light is a famous lighthouse because of a little girl
who ran the lighthouse for four weeks while her mother was sick in bed
and her father was away getting supplies in town. Her name was Abbie
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Burgess. This lighthouse is found on one of the nearly 2,000 islands off
the coast.
Three famous writers are from Maine. Henry Wadsworth
Longfellow is well-known for his poems. One of his most famous poems
was “Paul Revere’s Ride.” Another writer is Stephen King. Stephen King
writes horror stories and some of his stories became movies. Harriet
Beecher Stowe is probably the most famous writer. She wrote Uncle
Tom’s Cabin, the book that created bad feelings toward slavery. This
book pushed the country toward the Civil War.
Great wildlife and forests can be found in the more than twenty-five
national parks. Acadia National Park is the only one on the eastern
seaboard. Moose, black bears, bobcats, lynxes, and coyotes live there.
“Tall mountains tower and stretch over Maine’s middle and western
parts.” (From Sea to Shining Sea, 8) More than 100 peaks rise at least
3,000 feet above sea level. Mount Katahdin is its tallest peak. It rises
5,267 feet above sea level.
The 6,000 ponds help keep the wildlife alive. Maine also has 32,000
miles of rivers and streams. The Androscoggin, Kennebec, Penobscot
and St. Croix rivers were used in the early days of Maine for trade.
Today fishing and hunting are very popular year round.
It’s no wonder people from all over America (maybe even the world)
come to see Maine’s lush green forests, hike it’s high mountains, swim in
its salty ocean, and eat its delicious lobsters, clams and blueberries.
Sidebar
State Song: “State of Maine Song” by Roger Vinton Snow
State Seal: Adopted in 1820
State Flag: Adopted in 1909
State flower: White Pine Cone and tassel
State bird: Chickadee
State tree: White Pine
State animal: Moose
State cat: Maine Coon Cat
State fish: Landlocked Salmon
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Chapter 17
ow that you’ve finished this course and are beginning to think dif-
N ferently about teaching your kids to write, I have an assignment for
you. Many of us entered homeschooling with a sincere desire to give our
children a better education than could be had in the public schools. We
didn’t anticipate one of the greatest benefits of home teaching: self-edu-
cation. Isn’t it amazing to think that we spent twelve years in grammar
school and still feel as though we are learning about world history, frac-
tions and basic biology for the first time?
In the same way that you’ve begun to fill in the gaps of your own We cannot get away from the
education in other subjects, you can do the same for yourself in the arena great books of the world,
because they preserve and inter-
of writing. pret the life of the world; they
There’s no reason why writing can’t become your friend and ally. are inexhaustible, because, being
Follow many of the steps to good writing in this book (particularly the vitally conceived, they need the
free-writing exercises) and make opportunities for writing in your life. commentary of that wide expe-
rience which we call history to
Beyond these obvious ideas, I want to recommend that you become a bring out the full meaning of
reader. I know many of you feel like reading is the last luxury you can the text; they are our perceptual
afford (with nursing babies, toddlers that follow you into the bathroom teachers, because they are the
and older kids who see you as the taxi service for all their activities). I most complete expressions, in
that concrete form which we
want to stand that thought on its head and say, “You can’t afford not to call art, of the thoughts, acts,
read.” dispositions, and passions of
Reading as an adult is unparalleled in pleasure. If you remember humanity.
being a child who found the books assigned in English class to be com- —Hamilton Wright
plicated and unrewarding, you’ll be amazed to discover that many of Books and Culture
those same works now are not only easier to understand, but provide
wonderful entertainment and insight. You’re in your adult years and have
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matured. Those books read with much greater impact than they did
when you were a pimply faced adolescent.
As you spend time reading good literature, or books that stir you,
All good books are alike in that you’ll enrich your sense of good writing, your insight into literary ele-
they are truer than if they had ments, your sensitivity to the universal questions and themes that authors
really happened and after you
raise, and you’ll become an interesting person.
are finished reading one you
will feel that all that happened The benefits to your children are also great (I know that’s usually the
to you and afterwards it all motivation that works best for homeschooling mothers). If you read
belongs to you; the good and widely and well, your kids will have a living model of what it is to be a
the bad, the ecstasy, the
life-long learner. They’ll look forward to reading what’s beyond their
remorse, and sorrow, the people
and the places and how the reach now as kids. They’ll hear you making allusions and comparisons
weather was. when you discuss with them their current field of study.
—source unknown Your kids benefit in other ways too. As a person who commits to
reading for pleasure, your ability to steer your children’s writing will
grow. You’ll have models before you (rather than that feeling of “How do
I know if he’s writing well?”). You’ll see different kinds of writing and
those forms will teach you what to teach.
So far, this chapter feels very theoretical to me. How can a pregnant
mother with a nursing toddler and three older kids find time to read a
soccer brochure let alone an entire novel by Hemingway? Great question.
1. Start small. Read short stories. I started with Eudora Welty and
Ernest Hemingway. Others strongly favor Flannery O’Connor. There is a
series called the Greatest American Short Stories of each year (2000, 1999,
1998, 1997 and so forth). These are excellent books for reading contem-
porary works. I also like to find short stories in old high school English
text books. Sometimes you can find these at garage sales or as discards
from local high schools when they are upgrading their curricula. If you
are intimidated by the famous writers of other centuries, feel free to start
with those modern story compendiums such as the Chicken Soup series.
The point is to start reading.
2. Keep a book in your purse or car. So often we are caught in the
dentist’s waiting room, the doctor’s office or at soccer practice with noth-
ing to do but chat. Chatting is good, but it isn’t necessary at every set-
ting. Allocate some of those waiting times to reading. If you have a book
going and you’re carrying it with you, you’re more likely to read it in
snatches of time than waiting for long undistracted sessions.
3. Read the entire first chapter in one sitting. Many books go
unread because we don’t get into them sufficiently to hook us. Most of
reading is a trick on the part of the author. Once the author has set the
course of the book, she tries to keep you interested by creating surprises
and suspense that ultimately can not be resolved until you have done
with the book. As a result, once we’re hooked, we create opportunities to
read because we simply must know what will happen next.
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Still, the hardest chapter of any new book is the first one. The author
has to lay down the tracks for the rest of the story and that usually means
background information. Chapter two is always an improvement on
chapter one, so stick with it all the way through one chapter so that you Learn as much by writing as by
get a clear picture of what the book is going to be about. That way you reading.
won’t keep wondering, Who is the main character again? And where are —Lord Acton
we?
4. Listen to books on tape. For those who find the act of reading to
be tedious or difficult, or for those who never sit down, yet still want to
read, books on tape are the answer. I have “read” more books making
dinner than I can in a chair. I pop the tape into my little cassette recorder
on the kitchen counter and listen to Jane Austen being read aloud to me.
The readers change voices for the various characters and are wonderful at
acting out emotions and attitudes. Making dinner has become an oasis of
peace to me since I can escape the day’s pressures by occupying my hands
and nourishing my mind with a book. Libraries are the best source of
books on tape since they are free. Driving with a book is also completely
wonderful.
5. Read with a friend. The worst thing about reading a good book is
that you read it alone and then have no one to talk to about it afterward.
You can fix this problem. Ask someone to read with you. A group of my
friends in California met monthly to talk about books. We didn’t have a
particular agenda, but we loved discussing what we had been reading.
I also have a friend on the Internet that reads with me. We suggest a
book or story and then read it. We can write back and forth about what
we’ve learned or what touched, inspired or horrified us.
My husband and I have read countless books aloud to each other. I
know other couples do the same. By reading right before bed, we get the
same benefit as watching a video, but instead we are reading. Try it;
you’ll like it. Women are incredibly social creatures and reading appears
solitary. It doesn’t have to be.
6. Read what interests you. Sometimes I fall into the trap of trying
to “re-educate” myself by setting up school-ish expectations. (“I must
read The Odyssey because it’s a classic, and I’ve never read it.”) There’s
nothing wrong with attempting challenging books, but I’m finding that I
don’t have time to press into books that don’t engage my interest. That
season may come after my kids are grown. For now, I like to let one book
lead me to the next. Sometimes I’ll be reading a work by one author (let’s
say C.S. Lewis) who will mention another writer (George MacDonald)
and that will send me to the library in search of that writer. And so it
goes.
I believe in allowing books to lead to books. Take off the shackles of
school-style learning and follow your interests. Suddenly, at some point,
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you’ll have a list of more books to enjoy than you can possibly read in a
lifetime.
7. Read both fiction and non-fiction. Don’t feel obligated to read all
I didn’t know how much I
of the great classic works of fiction if you are in a period of learning
would enjoy freewriting. Once I
got going I couldn’t stop. It’s about physics or theology or gardening. Non-fiction is just as interesting
like someone opened a door for and useful for learning about writing as fiction. I like to read the newspa-
me into the world of writing. per lifestyle section, movie and play reviews and an editorial per week to
—Julie keep up with the modern non-fiction writing styles. I also enjoy non-fic-
tion books that cover a range of topics from art history to my prayer life.
How will reading affect your ability to teach writing? You’ll begin to
acquire a taste for the sound of words and the magic they make when
placed together well. You’ll also come to appreciate writing as an art
form, not simply a necessary duty in the schoolroom. And you’ll find that
good books elevate the value you put on good writing in the homeschool.
The subliminal message of reading quality writing is that writing is
important and transcendent—an art to be appreciated, valued and
learned.
Following is a “par course” for growing as a reader. I start you out
with some easy reading—the flat part of the course. Then I gradually get
you moving uphill and then to a steeper incline. Start where you feel
comfortable or scrap my suggestions altogether. The most important
thing to do, however, is to read.
At the end of this chapter, I’ve included a reading list compiled by
other homeschooling moms. Enjoy.
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Parting thoughts
Teaching your kids to write is not a job that ever feels like it’s done.
Just as your fifth grader gains confidence in narrating a story, you’ll
immediately think to yourself, “But can he analyze the contents?” Right
when you seventh grader finishes his first long report, you’ll wonder if he
can write an expository essay.
These thoughts are normal. Here are some suggestions for getting
through them. Don’t forget to celebrate any writing milestone. The best
celebration I can think of is to read what was written, share it with
someone else (usually dad), and then take a break from writing.
Before you plunge forward into new writing territory, be sure that
you’re prepared with the proper guidelines, sufficient data for the coming
project and a good frame of mind. If you are resenting the new assign-
ment before you begin, that is a recipe for disaster in the homeschool.
Don’t be afraid to scale down to some easy writing tasks in between the
more challenging and intense ones.
Writing is an art form. It’s not an exact science. It’s the most won-
derful way to preserve the actual thoughts, ideas and impressions of your
homeschooled students, though, and I hope that you will find after using
this course, your writing journey becomes comfortable and pleasing.
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Non-fiction:
Paul Tournier Adventure of Living
Thomas Moore The Care of the Soul
Edward Hirsch How to Read a Poem and Fall in Love with Poetry
Grace Llwelleyn The Teenage Liberation Handbook—This book will
help you to understand what it means to pursue your own education
in all new terms—even if the target audience is teens.
C.S. Lewis The Great Divorce, Surprised by Joy, Till We Have Faces
Deitrich Bonhoeffer Letters and Papers from Prison
Level Three: Weights, aerobics and running. Okay, these are tough
for me too. But after you are a bit more seasoned, you might enjoy read-
ing the classics. This list has good entertainment value but requires more
conscious thoughtfulness while reading.
Victor Hugo Les Miserables
Chaucer’s Canterbury Tales
Shakespeare in the original, esp. Hamlet, Romeo and Juliet and
Midsummer’s Night’s Dream
Homer Iliad and The Odyssey
Hemingway short stories “The Snows of Kilamanjaro”
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Level Other: (These are works that are well-written but may con-
tain objectionable elements such as language, violence or sexuality.)
James Clavell Asia series starting with Shogun
Martin Cruz Smith Gorky Park, Polar Star, Red Square, and Rose
M.M. Kaye Far Pavillions and Shadow of the Moon
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Appendix I
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is and what they are known for. You can continue to make this book
over the course of an entire school year as you read fairy tales.
• Animal book—older kids enjoy "unusual animal facts" books.
Younger kids like to include all the facts about their animal of choice.
• Number book—Cut out pictures to demonstrate a numeral at the
top of each page.
• Copy a storybook—Sometimes it’s fun to take a book your child
loves (Goodnight Moon) and make your own version—can be identi-
cal but in the child’s own words and illustrations.
• Nature book—A traditional nature notebook (ala Charlotte Mason)
means that the child observes the environment near his home week-
ly or daily and records his/her observations. These can be drawings
or short captions or a record of the changing temperatures, or visit-
ing birds to the bird feeder. Or take pictures of one season and
encourage them to write one sentence under each photo. Do this
each season.
• Animal book—Choose an animal to enjoy and study. Then write a
page for each of the animal’s attributes.
• Phonics book—Some kids really enjoy learning the sounds one at
a time. These books include a page for each letter with cut out pic-
tures to illustrate the sound of the letter. In our home, it didn’t quite
work like this. We cut out pictures (randomly—mostly of animals)
and stuck them in any old order inside of a small booklet. I then
wrote in big outlined letters, the initial consonant sounds of each
animal. We didn’t cover the entire alphabet, but my kids stayed
much more interested in the phonetic system when they were relat-
ing the sounds to animals they knew and loved.
• My house book—Illustrate each room. Identify the number of win-
dows, doors, beds, and drawers in the dresser with numerals. Write
a caption to go with each room (for example, what is done in that
room, what they’d like to do in that room that isn’t allowed, what
they imagine happened in the room before living there…)
For kids who struggle to draw well, cut out photos out of magazines
and catalogs. These can be cut and applied to a handmade book
with paste.
• Letters
Dictated to mom while written via email or overland post.
Keen Observation
Do this exercise orally. I listed possible items to observe in the exer-
cise in Chapter 3. Choose an item that is easily observed with the
majority of the senses. Nature walks provide lots of opportunities to
encourage the habit of keenly observing.
Oral Narration
Look for narrations in the fullness of life. Don’t expect to drum them
out of your kids. Stay alert to occasions that lend themselves to narra-
tions (especially dinner time when dad is at home and can listen to a
rehash of the things the child learned or did during the day).
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Language Arts:
•Choose a routine for copywork and dictation that suits your stu-
dent’s needs. I recommend doing copywork some days and dicta-
tion others.
• Dictation ought to be offered once or twice weekly and not more
than three to five sentences at this stage of development.
• Continue to use handwriting books but alternate with copywork.
• Grammar should be introduced one year during the elementary
years (I recommend Grammar Songs).
Writing:
The following is a sample of one student’s writing assignments for
each month of the year (just as an idea to consider—vary according
to the studies/interests of your child).
September
Tongue Twisters and Limericks
One week--read and write some.
Keen Observation Exercise
Student doesn’t have to do anything but the observing. No need to
make it into a paragraph unless the student is motivated to do it.
Lists
Start notebook with lists of ideas for computer games, favorite web-
sites, books, Legos. Keep this going all year. As it grows, it will sup-
ply the student with material for writing too. (At our house, we used
tab dividers in notebooks so that my kids could keep track of birds,
poetry they wrote, weapons from WWII, books read and so on.)
October
Thank You Letter for Birthday
Emphasize one writing element in the letter. It’s especially pleasing
to the reader to read anecdotes about the gift that was given. Even
bits of dialog are also very entertaining. Be melodramatic!
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Assign the TinTin books and Calvin and Hobbes if you like for ideas.
January
Summaries of Fables
Read fables and then summarize the morals of several. Since fables
are short and the morals are clear, it’s easy to start rudimentary writ-
ten narration using fables.
February
Oral Reports
Do one per week based upon the current section of history or sci-
ence being studied.
March
Free Write or Word Collage
Freewriting is explained in Chapter 4. A word collage is an attempt
to describe or express the images of a chosen topic using words.
These words can be written artistically on a piece of paper alternat-
ing with images (if you have an artistic student). Usually adjectives
and vibrant verbs at the best choices for collages. Topics can range
from the personal and concrete (like self, home, family, faith) to aca-
demic (historical events, scientific breakthroughs, literary charac-
ters).
April
Historical Scene as a Radio Drama
Using Adventures in Odyssey as a model (or another radio drama),
write a dialog that develops a historical scenario.
May
Student’s Choice
May is a good time to allow the student to pick a writing project—
particularly at this stage of development. It’s a help to look ahead to
the next level of writing—faltering ownership.
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Writing:
September
Lists
Give your student her own notebook for keeping lists of what mat-
ters to her. She can have a section for her copywork, dictation and
written narrations too. Then one of the sections should be for lists of
things she cares to record.
October
How to take care of a Hedgehog (or pet of your choice)
This is an instructional paragraph but it doesn’t mean it has to be
dull. Let her sense of humor and personal experiences with her pet
be her guide.
November
Illustrated story
Choose a famous fairy tale and do a reversal on who the narrator is,
along the lines of "The True Story of the 3 Little Pigs." (By A. Wolf—
as told to Jon Scieszka). This book is available in the library.
Perhaps she can write a story from the viewpoint of the step-mother
in Cinderella or the wolf in Little Red Riding Hood.
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After she answers these questions, it’ll become clear what else she
needs to do to prepare for the drafting phase of writing the report.
She can use the rest of the week to do more notetaking or research.
Week Two: Put the cards in order and write out first draft of the
report. Let your student edit her work by looking for weaknesses
and mistakes.
Week Three: Add an opening hook, a side bar (of information/facts
that she doesn’t want to write into the body of the report) and a con-
clusion.
Week Four: Write up last draft. Check it for mistakes and weak-
nesses again. Then type up the final version. Put it in the report
holder and have an ice cream.
February
Mini-Report
Make sure that the topic is narrow. Perhaps she can write a brief
report on Laura Ingalls Wilder (A one page biography) or some
other author she is reading. Check out the library for children’s
biographies about her.
March
Book Report
After writing about the author of choice, how about a book report for
one of the books? She can use this list of ideas to help her think of
how she wants to write it:
1. Draw a picture or map of the place in which the story took place
(setting). Label to show what happened in each place.
2. Describe the most exciting part of the story. (Usually this is the
climax).
3. Could this be a true story? Why or why not?
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Writing:
September
Perceptual Skills Exercises
These exercises are available in Brave Writer course called
Kidswrite Intermediate. I will release them for separate purchase in
2002.
Oral Narrations Leading to Written Narrations
For students at this level, it’s important to emphasize coherent
retelling and then to expect some of it in writing. One way to work
toward this goal is to choose one novel to narrate chapter by chap-
ter. After each one is read (whether from a book being read aloud,
or read privately by the student) ask for a chapter narration/summa-
ry. This discipline helps a child to learn how to write in a concise
way the essential elements of a story.
October
Writing Elements
Use the Top Ten Writing Elements and ask the student to find as
many examples of any of the top ten as she can in one month while
reading the writing of others. Here are the rules:
1. She can look in the newspaper, any of her textbooks, novels,
magazines (including the ones like “The National Enquirer,” “People”
and “Glamour”) or Internet sites.
2. She should write out the quote that goes with the element.
3. Ask her to include a short (very short) explanation of why she
thinks it works and why it’s representative of that writing element.
November
Compare and Contrast Exercise
Choose two books from her list to compare and contrast. Create a
chart with compare on one side and contrast on the other. List the
items that are similar and dissimilar from the two stories. This is
most effective if the books are related in some way—either they are
written about the same period of history or they tell stories of similar
issues.
Oral Reports
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Let her take notes from whatever history text or books she is study-
ing and do one oral report per week.
December
Book Report
More sophisticated version:
1. Write out a short screenplay for one of the scenes in the book.
Include set notations, acting instructions (like “He inquires pensively
with a furrowed brow while looking stage right.”).
2. Pretend to be one of the characters and write a journal as that
person experiencing the events of the book.
3. Describe each of the main characters:
—What he looks like
—What his moral framework is in the book
—What he contributes to the plot
—Why you admire him or not
4. Describe the setting and its importance to the story. (Time, place,
mood)
5. Can you examine the author's purpose in writing the book? What
was his motivation (personal experience, to send a message, to
give information--combination of the three)?
6. Write an alternate ending to this story.
7. Fictionalize the story (if non-fiction) or write it as a newspaper
article (if from fiction—as though it happened).
8. Make a book jacket for this book—design a cover, then write a
story summary on the front inside flap, then write an author bio
blurb on the inside back flap and finally write some "pretend"
reviews on the back of the cover. Don't forget the title, author and
publisher on the spine of the book.
9. Compare this book to another one that is similar in content or
similar in time period—describing related events—like two books
from the Civil War or two books written by Fitzgerald.
10. Write a poem that summarizes the themes or that expresses the
feelings of a character from the book.
11. Write a letter to or from one of the characters in the book.
12. Pretend you are the author of the book. Write a short article
explaining why you wrote it, what your intentions were and what you
hoped the reader would do after reading this story.
13. Imagine you are the main character—tell what you thought of
the other characters in the story and why.
14. Write ten well-crafted questions that you would ask a reader of
this book to test his comprehension.
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Boo Radley. His cryptic presence intrigues the children. Only when
Jem and Scout started receiving presents in the knothole of the tree
did Jem realize Boo’s attempt at friendship with them. When Nathan
Radley cemented the hole in the tree, it symbolized his control over
Boo. Jem’s reaction to the experience when it took place demon-
strates his approaching adolescence.
Tiffany is a good writer for her age. I don’t expect that this be a
model to be copied but rather as an illustration of the kind of reflec-
tion that I am talking about when reading. Though Tiffany tells us
about the story, she does so to illustrate deeper points.
November
Expository Essay Class
Writing Compass
December
Research Paper begins
Choose topic and begin gathering books.
January
Shakespeare
Watch Shakespeare performed first, then read it.
Rent these movies:
Much Ado About Nothing (Kenneth Branagh production starring
Kenneth Branagh, Emma Thompson, Denzel Washington, Keanu
Reeves and Michael Keaton in a bit role)—This one is really funny
and might be the best to start with!
Hamlet (Zeffereli version starring Mel Gibson and Helena Bonham-
Carter)
Romeo and Juliet (Zeferreli version starring Olivia deHussey)
Midsummer Night’s Dream (1999 version starring Michelle Pfeiffer—
a smidge of nudity from the back view)
Taming of the Shrew (Zeferreli version with Elizabeth Taylor and
Richard Burton—a classic)
Looking For Richard (Produced by and starring Robert DeNiro is
also an interesting look at how Shakespeare is performed)
Shakespeare in Love is more enjoyable if the student already has
some exposure to Shakespeare since the whole movie is an inside
joke for Shakespeare lovers. (It does have some adult material in it).
These films would be much better introductions to the charms of
Shakespeare than reading the dry text.
Shakespeare’s sonnets.
Memorize one.
Begin research paper.
Turn in notecards weekly
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February
Kidswrite Intermediate Online course
March
Fiction
Learn the elements of plot and story writing. (Online class)
April
Vacation
May
Complete Research Paper
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Appendix II
I’ve discovered that as long as we pick a topic David’s interested in, he has
no problems with writing. What happens when he gets into college though, and
they aren’t so willing to let him pick the topic all the time?
Most people (not just children) dislike assigned topics/ideas for writ-
ing. Assignments feel like external pressure to live up to someone’s
expectations. If the topic is unfamiliar or is not interesting, it’s even more
challenging to tackle in writing.
Still, there will be times when a writer’s choices are limited.
Assignments in college are not always right in line with our natural incli-
nations or interests.
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I’m also a people person. I write better about relationships and peo-
ple than technology and discoveries. I like ideas, not concrete details. So
as a history major I wrote about trends, whenever possible, rather than
battle strategies, government structures or economics.
Our kids can be taught how to use their particular way of approach-
ing life to determine how to convert a writing assignment into some-
thing for which they have passion and keen interest.
Ask your children these questions to help them find an angle that
helps them write about a less interesting topic.
1. Do you prefer understanding people or ideas? Do you enjoy the
“story” or the facts? Are you motivated to research trends and
cause/effect relationships or the interpersonal dynamics? Or are you more
interested in technical information and scientific processes? Do you have
a field of interest that can be used in that particular assignment?
If you are motivated by the way people think and make decisions,
then WWII is far more interesting to write about if you focus on the
psychology of Hitler than the specifics of the German battle with Russia.
If you’re interested in science and technologies, then perhaps your paper
could focus on the development of tanks or air bombers.
2. What’s your favorite writing genre? Use it for your first draft. If
you write better narrative (story) than analysis, start by writing the ideas
out as a dialog between the major players in the subject. If you like
reporting, write as a news journalist. Give yourself permission to write
the way you like to write at first. Then you can change the style later to
fit a more academic format, if need be. The facts, quotes, details and
transitions are secondary to getting down your first thoughts.
3. What do you already know about this subject (even before you
research it)? Write it all out. Allow yourself to be emphatic, dramatic and
problematic (asking questions, raising issues and taking both sides of an
issue back and forth). Put no restraints on yourself and let your mind
run. Once you start this way, you’ll give your mind a jump start (like a
jumper cable) that will launch you into more interesting research. And
you’ll often discover that you already know more than you thought!
You write a lot about “writer’s voice.” How far should we take this? My
kids can get pretty silly when they write. I want them to learn when to flaunt
their quirky senses of humor and when to cool their jets.
I’m currently reading a hilarious and very educational book to my
kids about geography. It’s called, Where on Earth: A Geografunny Guide to
the Globe. Two brothers wrote and illustrated it and used their sense of
humor to make all these otherwise difficult and sometimes boring topics
really relevant to kids. For instance, these brothers wrote:
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How can I take the time needed for writing when MATH (I had to write
it in all caps) is always haunting me? What I want to do is take a whole
morning, a whole day, a whole life, just to sit with my kids and talk about
things, to take as long as it takes to connect, whether it’s about writing or dic-
tation or science or history. It’s heaven to just hang around and learn together.
But it doesn’t move us any farther along the syllabus and it doesn’t get the
schedule of the day completed. Writing always gets short-shrift.
Why can’t you take the needed time for writing? This is a noble and
worthy goal. What would happen if for a week or a month, you gave up
trying to control the learning you did into neat compartments of math,
English, science and spelling each day? Instead, imagine absorbing the
material from one subject thoroughly until a level of satisfaction and
some mastery were achieved before moving on.
What if you don’t have time for math today? Can’t you do math
tomorrow and tomorrow and tomorrow? Who told all of us that writing
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and math had to be done everyday? Don’t mothers always feel like what-
ever their kids are doing, they should do something else?
I remember my friend saying, “When my kids are outside playing, I
think, ‘They ought to be indoors doing a project or using their minds.’
When they’re indoors reading and drawing I think, ‘They should be out-
side getting fresh air playing with their friends.’”
Writing is a process. It isn’t a neat formula; it’s not a prescription; it’s
not a school subject. It’s a means for communicating. Teaching writing
means gently encouraging your kids to discover that their thoughts have
merit. Writing makes thought-life concrete. Writing is the place for valu-
able thoughts.
The problem with programmatic writing plans is that they empha-
size the product as the goal. What I’m trying to stimulate is a willingness
to enter into a lengthy process of discovery. The product is merely a sign-
post on the way to a bigger goal: a free mind at play.
What are some of the discoveries you’re likely to make if you give
writing enough time?
• Your kids are interesting people.
• You don’t communicate all that well yourself.
• Being interested in a subject often leads to passion which then
produces learning, which then produces writing.
• Writing well takes a lifetime to master so we can go slowly and
savor the learning process.
• This is a journey taken by mother and child. Most moms realize
that they have a distorted view of writing too and begin to uncover
new applications of writing in their own lives.
• Writing takes more time and involvement than many of us have
been willing to commit. Conversely, the time put in produces better
independent work in the end.
Since many of you feel tied to your lesson plans, I urge you to plan
one day a month where writing is the only thing you do that day. Lead
up to it with the exercises in this book. But feel free to take one day to
read, discuss, watch a video, discuss some more and then freewrite. Let
that be the entire day. See what happens over the span of a year follow-
ing that practice. I think you’ll be surprised.
child in finding topics and assignments that encourage that level of writ-
ing freedom and participation.
How much grammar do you recommend? And what’s the best grammar
program?
I’m not a grammar expert. However, I have a strong sense of gram-
mar from my years of working as an editor. Even more helpful were the
three foreign languages I’ve learned.
Ruth Beechik explains the role of grammar better than anyone I’ve
read does. You Can Teach Your Child Successfully is a tremendous book for
understanding how to teach language arts naturally without lots of
prepackaged workbook programs. Her chapter on grammar is unparal-
leled in my opinion.
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The program that I like and use is Winston Grammar. If your kids
visit grammar three times in their lives, they will have done enough. Hit
it once in elementary school, once in junior high and once in high
school. What they don’t get there they’ll learn when they study a foreign
language.
I don’t feel confident about my writing abilities. I’m afraid that I’ll leave
something out if I go it alone. How do I know that I won’t damage my child’s
writing abilities?
The best thing to do if you lack confidence in writing yourself is to
learn to write. Start with freewriting and do it once a week with your
kids. Show them that you can learn right alongside them. One mom
started a “Writing Group” with her kids. They scheduled weekly
freewrites together and took turns sharing their writing outloud. They
kept a jar of topic ideas and selected a new one each week.
Once you engage in the writing process, you’ll discover that you
know more than you think. You’ve been reading for years, you’re no
longer under the harsh glare of the educator’s scrutiny (no grades hang-
ing in the balance) and you may even discover that you enjoy getting
your thoughts down on paper.
The second thing to do is to enroll your kids in some kind of writing
course once in awhile. This may sound self-serving since I offer online
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writing courses, but let me clarify why I mention this. I started offering
classes for one reason only. I couldn’t believe how often my friends sunk
lots of money into the latest writing manual fad only to give up halfway
through the year. I kept thinking that if they could only talk with the
curriculum writer and get immediate feedback, they’d do so much better.
As a result, I decided that before I ever wrote a curriculum, I would
offer online support in the form of classes. Classes help in several ways.
First of all, there’s someone to keep you accountable to the deadlines.
Secondly, you learn to see what another reader sees in your child’s writ-
ing. As you read alongside an instructor, you learn what to look for and
what to do once you see it. Thirdly, online classes give you a glimpse of
other kids’ writing. You discover quickly that lots of sixth graders can’t
spell worth a hill of beans and that lots of eighth graders don’t have
organized writing.
If classes aren’t an option, meet with another homeschooling mom
once a month and bring your kids’ writing with you. Trade papers and
read what the other kids wrote. Talk about what you see and ways you
broke through with a reluctant writer. The biggest problem in teaching
your kids in your kitchen is that it’s a lonely job. Get out of the house
and order some café au lait. Read and chat. It’ll be worth more than all
those reference books combined.
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I have a sixteen-year-old who really can’t spell. What have I done wrong?
It could be that you’ve done nothing wrong. The issue here is not
one of blame but how to get the most help to that child. Though I’m a
big believer in allowing children to write without thought to spelling in
the initial phase of writing, I think we need to be equally rigorous in the
polishing phase. Kids must learn that their spelling has to be 100% cor-
rect by the final draft.
For kids who really aren’t spelling well at sixteen, there are a couple
of things to check:
• Eyesight. Be sure that you don’t have a son or daughter who is sim-
ply not seeing well.
• Spot check the troublesome words. If when orally quizzed your son
can spell the words he misses in writing, then chances are that he hasn’t
yet taken responsibility for checking his work. He may need the freedom
first but then needs to be ruthless in his double-checking.
• Check for a learning disability. One thing I’ve noticed with kids
who persist in spelling problems is that they often have trouble with
writing itself. Their sentences are awkward and lack the natural voice
that is present with speaking. So don’t hesitate to go to a specialist to see
if there is another issue at work here.
By sixteen, your kids should be able to spell 80% of their words cor-
rectly on the first pass. They may have some “hangers-on” that still need
work, but by and large, their spelling ought to reflect a growing level of
fluency.
I have a gifted writer. I don’t know how to help her to grow to her poten-
tial. What do I do?
First of all, I want everyone to know that gifted writers come in both
genders. And the one thing to do for a gifted writer is to let him or her
write. It almost doesn’t matter if you teach these kids at all. They need
lots of pens, notebooks, and privacy to work. Some need computers (of
their own)!
Keep her reading. Allow her to write. And as she hits high school,
check out books from the library by professional writers who teach the
craft. There are books that specify the writing requirements for children’s
books, mysteries, romance novels, short stories, poetry, technical manuals,
and advertising. Treat your child like the budding author that she is and
in no time, you’ll see great improvement.
By the way, it’s also very helpful if she can find an outlet for her
writing—some meaningful audience. Our local library hosts a teen poet-
ry night where kids share their poems with their peers. My two oldest
kids were so moved by what they heard that night that they came home
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and wrote the most moving and profound poems of their lives.
Hearing the writing of peers does a lot to stimulate new ideas and
styles of writing. My online classes provide a similar safe place for shar-
ing written work.
I’ve tried to let my daughter’s creativity have sway. I allow her to turn
reports into stories. But what do I do when she misses the point of the assign-
ment and ends up with nothing more than a little tale about the topic without
any of the facts we studied?
Girls especially, love to write, it seems. They are usually more verbal
and relational. Writing is a vehicle for both things—communication and
relationship (readers)!
For those creative kids who write poetry, stories, new endings for
books, character sketches, lists of rhyming words, captions for their art-
work, you’d think their mothers would be happy. Surprise! They aren’t.
Why? Because those same wonderfully free writers fidget, resist and
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complain about having to write mini-reports about clipper ships and silk
worms. They ask, “Can I write a story of Silkie the Silk Worm? Why
does it have to be a report?”
The mother might even capitulate to the idea only to find that Silkie
never makes a cocoon or eats mulberry leaves. Instead he plays on the
playground with his other insect friends. And then that half-baked story
sits half-done for weeks and the daughter never comes back to it. Ugh!
When will she make the transition to an essay? Mom wonders.
Reasonable thoughts. One way to combat this tendency is to help
your daughter brainstorm a list of required facts to include in the story.
As I’ve already shared, Gabrielle researched the life of a Puritan on the
Mayflower before writing about one. Then she made use of that informa-
tion in her fictional diary. Help your child to understand the purpose of
the assignment before turning her loose. And then let her find a mean-
ingful way to incorporate your expectations.
What about high school? Are you going to leave us high and dry?
The three essential writing forms that need mastery in high school
are the five-paragraph expository essay, the 50 minute timed essay and
the full-length research paper (12-15 pages). The first of the three (the
five paragraph essay) comes in a variety of styles—the argumentative
essay, the exposition of literature and the exploratory essay that examines
a topic without drawing a firm conclusion, to name a few.
I believe the timed essay to be the most overlooked skill in home-
schools. By the end of high school, students need to be able to write a
coherent essay within a time frame without the opportunity to revise.
This is what an essay exam is. I recommend six weeks of timed essays at
home during the final year of high school. If your student has mastered
the basic essay format, the timed essay will not be too difficult.
The research paper is completely intimidating to everyone—you, and
your kids… Don’t feel badly about it. The way to think of research
papers is to think of three expository essays that relate to each other
under one umbrella. The introduction to a research paper will introduce a
broad enough topic that three different areas can be explored in essay
length.
Help for Highschool is available on the Brave Writer website. As Brave
Writer grows, I plan to offer more and more high school level classes
including the study of literature, poetry, plays, Shakespeare, and the writ-
ing of research papers and essays.
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