A FAVOURITE PHOTO

My favorite photo is the one I take with my grandmother.

It’s 10 years ago when I was 5 years old.
It was taken on my grandmother's birthday. In that photo
my grandmother sit in the middle of the photo and I stand
next to her, she look very kind.
I very very like it because it's the last photo I can take
with my grandmother because she has been gone when I
go to primary school. So now I like it best because I can
see my grandmother in that photo when I miss her.

- Repeated : very (Leslie); because (Tiffany)

- Spelling : the one (Vivian)
- Grammar :
+ I take, It’s 10 years ago (Aurora).
+ in my grandmother’s birthday, I very very like it,
Stand, It’s the last photo, I can take (Tiffany).
+ Sit, when I go to... (Vivian).
+ she look (Alice).