Essay 2 Feedback

First Draft Feedback

● The thesis is incomplete. What are other perspectives about gun control? Or, what

aspect of gun control are you writing about?

Second Draft Feedback

● What are the other perspectives?

● This should be mentioned in your thesis statement.

● You cannot end a paragraph with a citation. Remember that every paragraph has a topic

sentence, as well as a closing sentence.

Final Draft Feedback

● What are the multiple perspectives that you were able to discover through your research?

● Wouldn't this citation go with your last perspective?

● Never end your paragraph with a citation.

● What needs to be done in order to further the research process on this topic?